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Posted: 17 years ago
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i know payal yudi is too much bechan but this is going to be end of his all becheni
the next part15 actually i wanted to give very short like only with few important detail but when i was editing i end up with this as i felt without them it will look very abrupt.

i hope i am not stretching it too much though i am feeling somehow it is happening so i am trying to move fast 😆 😆 please tell me your opinion
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Posted: 17 years ago
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part 15


She was bhavi. She was trying to wake him up from his deep sleep.

When he heard her voice he was startled. Where was he? He was in a state of deep shock and fear was visible on his face and was feeling that somebody has caught him redhanded. He could not understand that bhavi was asking him something.

Bhavi: bhaiya aapko kya hua ? apki tabiyat to theek hain na? Ham kabse darvaja knock
kar rahe the lekin apne koi avaj na di to hum dar gaye isliye hum andar aa gaye. aap badi gaheri neend me kuchh kah rahe the to hame laga apki tabiyat thik nahi he.

Yudi who was still trying to get to his senses, was looking around. He was thinking about what he just felt in his dream. It was painful for him to believe that wantever he experience was only dream. He was still trying make his heart believe that she really came to meet him and for that he was trying to give proof by looking around. Maybe she is hiding somewhere. He even looked at the side table where he kept bowl but it was not there. His eyes return empty from there also. The only person who was present in the room except him was bhavi who was looking at him a trifle surprised.

Bhavi: bhaiya aap kaha kho gaye or idhar udhar kya dekh rahe he? koi bura sapna dekha ya apki tabiyat thik nahi lag rahi he? ham mataji or pitaji ko bulaye?


Hearing rajaji and CR's name yudi become more alert

Yudi: nahi nahi wo to ham kam karte karte rat ko deri se soye isliye subha ankhe nahi khuli. ham thik hain.
Bhavi: ham to dar hi gaye the. Koi bat nahi, niche naste ke table per sab aapka wait kar rahe hain, is liye hamne socha apko pitaji ki daant pade, usse pehle hi bula laye. Ham jake pitaji ko bata dete hain ki woh apko kuchh thik nahi lag raha tha is liye deri ho gayi. aap jaldi se niche taiyar ho ke aa jaiye.
as soon as bhavi left his room yudi tried to remember and the moment he realized that it was only a dream that he saw, it hurt him a lot, but on other hand, he felt that his plan may actually work out in his favour. And that feeling filled his heart with unbound happiness.
After getting ready he went to thedining room, where everybody was waiting for him and as bhavi has told them that he was not feeling well all were concerned about him.
So inpretence of getting some fresh air he and saksh decided to go to club.
Before going to club yudi decided to take blessing from his mom so he told saksh to come with him .
In the BR's room
Yudi: pranam ma
BR was surprised to see him at this odd time. but she can sense that something was bothering her son. She was asking him why is he here at this time?
Yudi: aaj ham apne kam ki nayi shuruaat karne ja rahe he to socha apke ashirvad lele.

Though he was telling about his work but BR can sence the contradiction between his words and the expressions on his face, but than she stopped. She wanted to pursue her sixth sense further and thought about prodding a bit further but then quickly gave up the idea. It is natural for mothers to be worried but there are times when one ought to leave the children to solve their own problems. Yudi is old enough anyway. So she just gave yudi her blessing that whatever you do I will always be with you as I know you will always do right thing.

On their way to club:

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Utsah aur darr…dono saath saath feel ho rahe the. Plan agar kaamyaab nahin hua to?? But instead of worrying they decided to concentrate on positive outcomes.

Deciding this they went to club and after spending time here and there they came back but pretending yudi has fallen down and had injured himself. And as he was in great pain. He was walking with saksh's support. Seeing him like this servant went to inform CR. she came running and asked how did this happen?
Saksh told them while they were out horse-riding, one kid suddenly sprang out in front of them and in the process to avoid trampling over him, yudi lost his balance. The child is safe but yudi fell off and injured himself. Yudi is very great to show his kindness. yudi was agonizing over pain that did not exist.
CR: kunvarji ko kamare mein le jao or doctor ko bulao
Yudi and saksh got perturbed to listen doctor's name
Yudi : nahi CR ham theek hain , thodi der ham aaram karenge to achha feel karenge
CR: aap ye kya kah rahe he. agar kuchh jyada hua to.
Saksh: agar doctor nahi to kunvarji kuchh kadha ya lape lagva dijiye (trying to be very innocent)
CR: ha saksham theek kah rahe hain , aise bina kuchh kiye kaise aap thik honge. Subha bhi aap thik nahi feel kar rahe the ab dekhiye ye kya hua
Yudi(as he was giving up infront of her): theek hain chhoti ma, aap sabko hamari kitni chinta hain to hame lape lagane aur kadha peene mein koi harj nahi hain.
Saksh gave help to yudi to take him to his room both were jubiliant on progress of their plan.
CR to bhanu: aap jaldi se lape aur kadha taiyar karvake kunvarji ke room me bheje. Or unke liye pine ka sharbat bhi bhee.
Bhanu went to give instruction in kitchen, and CR went to yudi 's room to see how he is?
He was lying on his bed.
CR: aab aap kaisa mahesoos kar rahe hain.
Yudi: ham theek hain CR.
CR: aabhi koi naukar lape or kadha leke aata hi hoga, saksh aap kunvarji ko lape lagane me madad karana
Saksh: ji CR.
CR: agar aap theek hain to hame bahar jana hai , koi bhi bat ho to hame turant bata dijiyega. aur poori tarah se aaram kijiyega.
Yudi : jaisi aapki agya .

When rani heard about kunvaji's fall she was disturbed. She wanted to see him, rub the lape all over his wounds aur apne haathon se kunvar ko kadha pilaye, but there was no way she can go and see him now. She was angry with herself as according to her she was to be blamed for whatever is happening to yudi. She was very well aware that after this heartbreak yudi must be sunk with sorrow and that must be reason for his fall . somehow she wanted to know about his haalat.
she went to kitchen where bhanu was all hyper giving instructions about lape and kadha. rani asked if she can help. Hearing that
Bhanu: maharani tumhe kya alag se nyaota dena hain ki agar lape banana aata hain to banado.
Rani made lape and kadha for him with all her love, but she was having a strange predicament about going to his room alone. Seeing her rooted to one place bhanu shouted at her
Bhanu: kya aab yahi se khadi khadi ye lape kunvarji ko lagaogi. jake deke aao vaha sakshamji honge wo unhe laga denge
Rani had no other option but to follow bhanu's instruction. She proceeded towards yudi's room with lape and kadha on a tray, and that's what yudi and saksh were expecting. And that's why they were eagerly waiting for the knock on the door so they can see who that person is and they were hoping that she will come.
Some body knocked on the door and they were happy. yudi was also desperate to see who is there, saksh proceed towards the door and opened it. he was delighted to see the person……………

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Oh man Beena.....that was extremely romantic!!! And is it really true or are you going to make it a dream??? I am confused now!!!
And you used very emotional vocabulary and it was beautifully written 👏 👏

Jaldi post karo, next part! 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
#74
thanks prag part 14 was dream and part 15 is reality
i think you read part 14.
i am happy about that perticular part is because my husband also tried his hinglish on my original writing 😆 😆
he volunteer himself to correct my error as i know i have many 😆 😳 errors so he was very excited doing that and i am happy you all liked it.
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Beena finally they make effect on their plan..rani made with love..who's in the door?tum bhi right time pe part khatam karti ho..agla part jaldi se post karo..

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Posted: 17 years ago
#76
ya at last they progress and now it's not too far from their destination 😉

who is on door 😳 but who ever it is will have some lead 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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I read part 14 and 15 together. Both are very nice dear. Good plan to trace Rani. When are you posting the next part?
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Posted: 17 years ago
#78

Hey Beena ..Just finished with all parts ....Every part very well written 👏

14 part meh jo dream hai mujhe bilkul sach laga 😆...usse read karte huye main happy aur shock thi 😆...happy isliye ki YuRa Mil gaye 😳😆...aur shock isliye ki Yudi apne pehle plan meh hi safal ho gaya 😆

ab dekhte hai ki Door par kaun hai 😉..kahi phir se tum toh humhe jhatka nahi de rahi 😆

Very beautiful FF dear 😳Thanku for lovely FF🤗

So jaldi se Next part likho ..dekhe kaun aa aay hai Marham le kar 😉😆

Manpreet

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Posted: 17 years ago
#79
thank you all
mannu marham le kar koi apna hi aaya he ab dekh te he darwaaja khol ke 😆 😆

thanks for liking my lovely language prag after staying overseas my langauge ko thodi dhool lag gayi thi to " this way i am refreashing it and feeling very happy that all not lost"
in few minutes i am posting new part
and i know you all will enjoy it
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Part:16


But at same time he also felt hurt 😭 and, that is also the first time he hoped that someone else instead of that person should have been standing with the lape and kadha on the other side of the door. 😭
Holdin g the tray of lape and kadha was Nikki. 😕 Seeing saksh looking at her with a disappointed expression, Nikki was a trifle disturbed. To break the long silence
Nikki: kya aap yahi khade rahenge ki hame ander bhaiya se milne jane denge? 😃
Saksh(disappointed) : haan haan jaroor….. 😕
And when he saw the bowl in her hand he realized that the person they were waiting for will not come. 😭
Yudi also felt disappointed seeing his sister but now it was too late so they had to salvage this situation,. 😭
Saksh: aap yaha is waqt? 😕
Nikki: hamne jab bhaiya ke bare me suna to hamse raha nahi gaya, so milne chale aaye
Yudi looking at the bowl
Yudi: or ye kya layi hain aap?

Nikki : oh hum to bhul hi gaye ye aapke liye lape laye hain.
Yudi was thinking of a way to get more information that will not make nikki suspicious. 😉

Saksh: oh to hame aaj pata chala ke aapko lape banana bhi aata hain 😃
Nikki: lape banana aur Hame?? 😆 kisne kaha aapko? 😕
Saksh: woh aap leke aayi hain isliye.
Nikki: to iska matlab hain ki hamane banaya hain????(she finished his half sentence)
Saksh: nahi to fir kisne banaya hain. 😉
Nikki: aap kyu lape banana wale ke pichhe pade hain? ye lijiye or bhaiya ko laga dijiye 😆
Yudi and saksh both felt that game is about to lost from their hand and they have to do something very quick.
Yudi: nahi hame laga shayad aap lape banana seekh gayi hongi 😉
Nikki: aare aap dono ye kya leke baith gaye hain ….. hame maloom hota ki lape laake lagane se aapko lape banana wale mein jyada dilchaspi hain to ham usey bhi saath mein hi laatey. 😕
Yudi and saksh at same time thinking no doubt we were actually intreseted about the person who made lape and not who brought it……….. 😭 😉
Yudi: kisne banaya???
Nikki: oh god hame rani ko sath me leke aana chahiye tha
Yudi with full of enthusiasm asked again 😲
Yudi: kisko?????????
Nikki: rani ko jisne ye lape banaya hain , woh khud hi aa rahi thi jab ham use mile to unhone hame request ki , ki unhe bahut jaroori kuchh kaam hain or hum aapke pass hi aa rahe the to hamne kaha thik hain, hum hi lape le jaate hain.
😭
Now it was indeed very heart breaking news 😭 for yudi that she herself was coming and if she would have than he would have been able to identify her but now it is too late 😭 . Yudi's disappointment was visible on his face 😭 and saksh can see that. Nikki was upset with all these questions. If she saw this disappointment on yudi's face, then she might get suspicious 😕 , so saksh tried to divert her mind to another topic and wanted to give hint to yudi to control his emotions
😭
Saksh: oh ho to aapko bura laga ki ham logo ne aapki kadar na ki jo aap yaha ayee. dar asal ham log aap se thoda majak kar rahe the. 😆
Nikki: aap log bhi na subha se koi mila nahi to hamara mazak udane lage. 😆 Theek hain hame ab jana hain. aap ye lape bhaiya ko laga de

Once she was gone yudi could not hide his desperation. he was in high spirits that atleast they come to know her name 😉

Saksh: ahhh to unka nam rani hain , so to hoga hi, jis pe hamare kunvar ka dil aaye wo to raniji hi ho sakti hain. 😆
But when he saw that after initiall happiness yudi was deep in thoughts
Saksh: ab kya hua? 😕
Yudi: maana hame naam pata chala lekin kya saboot hain ki woh wahi hain? koi aur bhi ho sakta hain.
😕
Now saksh was also forced to think practically. yudi's argument was valid. now what can they do that can confirm that who yudi was thinking RB was actually rani???? 😭 😕
As if right now they try to meet rani and what if she is not that person than it can create problem so…………what to do? 😕

Yudi now had one other idea that could confirm his doubt. he suggest saksh that they have that girl's hand writing from that they can confirm that she is the one.
😳 😳


PS seeing yudi's haalaat i have one tuka that was actually written for heer to ranja but i could not stopped myself connecting that situation with yudi hope you all will like it

main ranje ko dhundhne chali,
mainu ranja na mila,
khuda mila, muje ranja na mila,
lekin khuda ranje jaisa na mila.

i think it was written by sultan bahu , but i read it in amruta pritam's book as i liked it very much noted itdown.

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