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Fatejo os - the first move


This is a continuation from fatejo honeymoon

Tq to marathi mulgi for giving me the idea for this os

Its approx 11pm here in kuala lumpur , malaysia

Beautiful weather and the mood to pen this down

Before going to bed

Well time constraints takes away the leisure to write



Ahhh

fateh felt a relief in his aching back and joints as he laid his exhausted body on the fibre made mattress of his precious bed .

He turned to look at the bully sleeping soundly next to him. The innocent looking from the outside but a demon inside which was no one else but his own newly wedded wife .

Tejo fateh singh virk


Shimla memories were still fresh in his mind. Never thought for once that the fear of losing her to someone in the neighbourhood will terrorize him to an extend of bowing to her cruelties for the 3 days 2 nites honeymoon which he declared as the most disastrous trip of his life .

Sleeping on the hard marble floor ..

Carrying her overloaded shopping bags

And whats not

Relieved it was over and swore never to go with her on any trip in future, he finally sighed and closed his heavy eye lids to surrender to his sweet slumbers of jasmin his first love

Oh no ! He opened his eyes and frowned

Remembering how irritatedly he spoke to her panicking on the fact that tejo was going to leave him in the near future. He planned to ring her the next day to apologise.


The aroma of a very pleasant perfume sprayed interfered with his sense of smell and woke him up

Tejo was getting dressed up in a blue salwar kemeez with her hair locked up into a pony tail design which made him smile

Oh ! She looks cute

Fateh smiled : kehin ja rehi ho kya subah subah sej sej key

Tejo smiled bsck : ha na boyfriend ko mil ney ja rehi hun

Fateh shocked almost fell from his bed

Oh no ! Grandpa 's prophecy about her being taken away by the padosi is coming true

Fateh angry : mezak met karo merey sath

Tejo giggled : college ja rehi hun

Then fateh remembered few days ago she had submitted application to rejoin her college

Fateh was relieved

Wait a minute what if she meets someone at the college perhaps a good looking professor and decided to settle down with him


Fateh was puzzled . He already said it out at the do vela time at the hotel during room reservation that padosi usey legeya honeymoon mey apney sath and cant take back his words now He looked around and realised that tejo has left


He jumped out of his bed, ran into the shower almost slipping on the wet floor

A quick shower of 5 minutes including tooth brush and without soap which is well known as the buffalo shower

Dressed up in a cotton yellow collar t shirt and blue jeans he ran out of his room towards the hallway to catch up with tejo who had just eaten her breakfast and was walking towards the innova parked outside at the spacious porch

Kushbeer had arranged his driver to send and pick her up for her work trips

Tejoji ko mey chod deta hun ap rehney do .

He instructed the driver as tejo was about to sit in the car

Tejo giggled and said aap mujhey chodo gey

Fateh smiled : nehin chodunga isliye toh sath mey jaa raha hun.Kya peta bhella tel jaye

Bhella referred to padosi . The fear of losing her has overpowered his senses that now he is obssessed with the puzzling thoughts of the yet to come padosi who will eventually take his precious wife away from him some day in the near future.


Tejo was confused with his actions . There was a change in his behaviour during their honeymoon which he never revealed to her even upon her asking about it.


She waved to him as she walked towards the entrance of the college . He was still watching her . Why isnt he going . She thought as she moved towards the crowds of pupils ahead of her .


There she was finally

sitting at a corner near the entrance staircase with her friends

Jasmin her estranged sister who distanced herself after forcing her to get married to replace her bridal position.

A lost and found item who seems to be bouncing back into her married life eventually

Could he be watching her. After all his first love who seemed to pop out of nowhere . He must be excited to see her as usual

Tejo turned to look back . Surprisingly his eyes was set still on her . He was not at all looking at jasmin when she is clearly visible in front of him. Tejo was confused. Why was he not looking at her sister ? For the first time tejo smiled to herself

Legta hai jasu ka bhoot utar chuka hai


Little did she know that it was not jasu ka bhoot but padosi ka bhoot jo ched chuka hai sir key uper jo uski biwi ko usey dur lejayega. Thanks to dadaji for scaring him


Fateh !

Jasmin screamed

Fateh turned towards jasmin. Jasmin smiled and waved

He didnt respond.

Jssmin walked towards him sitting in the car

As she was about to reach his door he drove away quickly


Jasmin was annoyed and shouted fateh !

Fateh was lost in his thoughts that he didnt realised jasmin was walking towards him.

He has even forgotten that he was supposed to spologise to her. His mind was fully occupied by tejo and the padosi

Parking the vehicle at a dabba nearby he stopped for a delicious breakfast of spicy moolie parotha with desi chai pure punjabi style.

The invisible padosi in his wife's life lured him to eat the spicy parotha . He was also munching the stuffed green chillies perhaps to cover his frustration or anger or clearly definable word

jealousy


At 2 pm tejo was waiting to be fetched home . He came finally . He smiled and asked how was her day ?

Instead of replying she asked him about jasmin

Why did he ignore her ?

He was puzzled and replied he didnt notice her in the first place

Now it was tejos turn to be taken into his similar situation

Fateh singh virk didnt notice jasmin sandhu!

Thats a big wow over that exclamation


Little did she know that it was the padosi in his mind with whom she is going to run with in the near future that is blocking his vision so much so that he could not see the jasmin sandhu whom he once adored from the bottom of his heart.

He thought of doing some interrogation

Fateh anxious : irŕrk college main kitney humarey padosi pedhtey hain ya pedhatey hain

Tejo confused : matlab

Fateh smiled : meri biwi itni pyari hai kya peta koi male padosi aas pas ghum raha hoga

Tejo grinned never expected him to say that

This one is acting like a real husband

She thought of playing a trick on him and replied

Hai na aek smart professor aaya hai delhi sey as a guest lecturer for 3 months

Fateh stopped the car immediately

Emergency break to indicate the breakthrough of the invisible neighbour finally into his marriage life

Kya !! He freaked out

She laughed at his reaction

Then he realised she was joking and sighed


After dinner lying on her bed, jasmin was sobbing

Fateh ignored her today and decided to call him.

Fateh forgot to charge his phone since afternoon

His mind pre occupied with tejo and the padosi

Jasmin was annoyed as his phone was switched off


The next day in the morning he dropped her once again.

Jasmin was eagerly waiting to speak to him

As he dropped tejo she opened the door practically pushing her aside to give her way and sat at the front seat facing fateh demanding for an explanation for his rudeness during the honeymoon and for present.

Fateh was silent throughout and finally uttered sharply

If u dont mind jasmin mey ab shadi shuda hun

She tried to answer him but he told her to leave and drove off

Tejo was shocked with fateh's reaction and so was jasmin

Jasmin lashed at her sister accusing what she has done on her beloved fateh . Little did she know that fateh was now more obssessed with the invisible padosi and she was his past delusion

Tejo ignored her and walked away

Mey fateh ko apney pas wapas laungi tum deklena !

She screamed but tejo didnt respond at all


At 1 pm fateh received a call from tejo that he doesnt need to pick her up as she is having a meeting with a guest lecturer an anglo indian from new delhi and she will be late .

Fateh asked for the time he should pick her up and she replied

Aaj lunch ka appointment bhi hai aur phir vo mujhey drop kardega

Line disconnected and about the same goes to fateh who was lost in his connections to the padosi who will take his wife away from him.


Tejo grinned to herself for the trick she just played on fateh . There was a guest lecturer but no lunch only meeting

After all he is behaving like a husband lately since their honeymoon and the fact that he has started to ignore jasmin pleased her

Little did she know that the trick is gonna come real hard on her

Fateh was nervous sitting in his room. Grandpa prophecy played in his mind so much so that he was having sleepless nites and feeling restless with each passing day to add tejo making excuses of coming late .

Little did he know that she wss playing a trick on him


A week passed by

There were so many missed calls from jasmin as he switched on the phone

Ignoring the call log he called up his grandfather who

was visiting a relative in haryana

Before he returned from his shimla trip grandpa was already away taking his grandmother along

So didnt get the chance to speak to his love guru


Babuji picked up at the third ring and asked about him and tejo

He replied he was feeling restless after the shimla trip

Asked about the prophecy relating to the do vela and the padosi if it will really come true

Will tejo ji leave me for someone else ?

Babuji was smiling happily

Seemed like it has gotten into his head so badly that he is not able to think straight

Babuji said to himself

Haalat garam hai hathoda marta hun

He planned to take advantagd of his grandson's situation by saying

There is a way to break the prophecy

Fateh excited what is it ? She wont leave me ?

Babuji replied

A drastic step .

Fateh replied he will do anything

Babuji excitedly said

Then make the first move as a husband

Fateh shocked and eventually refused that tejo is his friend

Babuji continued harshly

Shes ur wife god dammit not a friend

Come out of the comfort of the friendship and look upon her as ur wife

Then he hung up


She was sleeping soundly next to him . Try to look at her as ur wife

Grandpas words ringing in his ears

He turned to look at her exploring with his vision watching her body

Sweet innocent face .curvy waist a slim slender body

Suddenly the need to touch her came instantly .

The first move

grandpas words

For the first time he looked upon her as his wife and moved forward taking up the challenge finally

He removed the pillows between them and slowly laid close to her

Put his hands on hers and felt her touch and then explored his fingers on her waist

She opened her eyes suddenly

He pretended to be punishing mosquitos around her saying

Bahut ziada machar hai

She was sleepy and didnt respond. He closed his eye lids and pressurised his husbandly desires to settle down


After dropping her the next day he consulted a very close friend about his situation

The same was mentioned

start behaving more like a husband now

Remove the friendship bsnter

Fateh asked how to behave like a husband

The friend said very simple and offered him a few intimate videos to watch and advised to do the deed only in the nite before sleeping so his lust antennas will start working

Fateh wss excited he couldnt wait for evening

By doing this if i can stop my wife from leaving me then why not watch it now

At 1pm after lunch he explored the three lustful visions handed over to hin and felt thr urge of performing the deed

The first move

the words his babuji said was crawling up in his mind and after checking into details of the lustful vision he surrenders to it and decided to give it a try

Maybe if i am a husband to her then she will never leave me for any padosi

At 3 pm he went to pick her up despite saying she will return home by herself

She saw him and smiled

Her trick was working

Ageya lafandar mujhey lene key liye

Becoming the peti dev ji

Little did she know the friend to be turned into husband was actually exploring the journey to be a lustful husband to hold her from parting ways with him

And her tricks are going to be bhari on her soon

Shes putting herself in danger

Beware of ur husband

The signboard was not visible to her at that moment


An hour later she was at home and went to the room to freshen up

He followed ftom behind thinking no one is at home

The mansion was empty

She came out of the washroom and was wiping her hands and face with a towel when he stood shirtless standing inches away right in front of her

Shocked and asked nervously

What are u doing ?

No answer

He moved forward with a strange smile on his handsome face placed his right arm behind her back to move her closer and pressed his lips against hers

Her eyes widely open felt the pressure of his lips over hers the sweet warm kiss the heat which tremendously shook her body and she stood still allowing him to perform the deed that lasted for at least twenty seconds


She gasped for a deep breath as he pulled away and immediately pushed him

Tum pagal ho kya ?

She screamed angrily

He was smiling

Peti ben ney ki koshish kar raha hun

Aek aur kiss chahiyeh kya

Mey ready hun bas tu mujhey us padosi key liye mat chod key jana

She ran to the corner of the room and replied still in a shock

Kaun sa padosi

He continued smiling

Vo padosi jo tujhey honeymoon pey lekey jaiga

She was annoyed like hell

Idiot humara honeymoon ho chuka hai

He continued smiling

Lekin phir hoga uskey sath

Hearing his words tejo fall to the ground unconscious


After a while her eyes were wandering around for that lunatic husband

He was nowhere to be seen

She turned to face khusbeers voice asking how she was

And asked for fateh

Khusbeer smiled and said

Just think he ran away a little while from u

Tejo asked why

Then kushbeer explained to her about babujis self made prophecy on the padosi so fateh will treat her nicely on their honeymoon and how he took it too seriously that the fear of losing her overpowered his senses

Tejo understood now

Thats why he ignored jasmin the other day

And was upset with the fact that she played a trick on him and made things worse for herself

Kushbeer blessed her resting his palm on her forehead

May the almighty bless u for returning to me the once upon lost son


She was sitting in her room alone thinking about the unforeseen incident that swept her feet away emotions unexplained assuming that now onwards she is the wife as in a way she has surrendered to his first move as a husband and slowly fall a sleep


He lied beside her. Found her in a deep slumber as he entered the room

Felt embarrased after coming to know his grandpa played a joke which has turned his life towards a new dimension of accepting the fact of being a husband after the first move he was told to make

He closed his eyes felt the sensation of the first kiss and the warmth beneath and still surprised with the step he has taken unknowingly which will change the man in him forever moving away from his past to a new present with the person lying beside him.

His precious wife




































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Originally posted by: Aniash

Fatejo os - the first move


This is a continuation from fatejo honeymoon

Tq to marathi mulgi for giving me the idea for this os

Its approx 11pm here in kuala lumpur , malaysia

Beautiful weather and the mood to pen this down

Before going to bed

Well time constraints takes away the leisure to write



Ahhh

fateh felt a relief in his aching back and joints as he laid his exhausted body on the fibre made mattress of his precious bed .

He turned to look at the bully sleeping soundly next to him. The innocent looking from the outside but a demon inside which was no one else but his own newly wedded wife .

Tejo fateh singh virk


Shimla memories were still fresh in his mind. Never thought for once that the fear of losing her to someone in the neighbourhood will terrorize him to an extend of bowing to her cruelties for the 3 days 2 nites honeymoon which he declared as the most disastrous trip of his life .

Sleeping on the hard marble floor ..

Carrying her overloaded shopping bags

And whats not

Relieved it was over and swore never to go with her on any trip in future, he finally sighed and closed his heavy eye lids to surrender to his sweet slumbers of jasmin his first love

Oh no ! He opened his eyes and frowned

Remembering how irritatedly he spoke to her panicking on the fact that tejo was going to leave him in the near future. He planned to ring her the next day to apologise.


The aroma of a very pleasant perfume sprayed interfered with his sense of smell and woke him up

Tejo was getting dressed up in a blue salwar kemeez with her hair locked up into a pony tail design which made him smile

Oh ! She looks cute

Fateh smiled : kehin ja rehi ho kya subah subah sej sej key

Tejo smiled bsck : ha na boyfriend ko mil ney ja rehi hun

Fateh shocked almost fell from his bed

Oh no ! Grandpa 's prophecy about her being taken away by the padosi is coming true

Fateh angry : mezak met karo merey sath

Tejo giggled : college ja rehi hun

Then fateh remembered few days ago she had submitted application to rejoin her college

Fateh was relieved

Wait a minute what if she meets someone at the college perhaps a good looking professor and decided to settle down with him


Fateh was puzzled . He already said it out at the do vela time at the hotel during room reservation that padosi usey legeya honeymoon mey apney sath and cant take back his words now He looked around and realised that tejo has left


He jumped out of his bed, ran into the shower almost slipping on the wet floor

A quick shower of 5 minutes including tooth brush and without soap which is well known as the buffalo shower

Dressed up in a cotton yellow collar t shirt and blue jeans he ran out of his room towards the hallway to catch up with tejo who had just eaten her breakfast and was walking towards the innova parked outside at the spacious porch

Kushbeer had arranged his driver to send and pick her up for her work trips

Tejoji ko mey chod deta hun ap rehney do .

He instructed the driver as tejo was about to sit in the car

Tejo giggled and said aap mujhey chodo gey

Fateh smiled : nehin chodunga isliye toh sath mey jaa raha hun.Kya peta bhella tel jaye

Bhella referred to padosi . The fear of losing her has overpowered his senses that now he is obssessed with the puzzling thoughts of the yet to come padosi who will eventually take his precious wife away from him some day in the near future.


Tejo was confused with his actions . There was a change in his behaviour during their honeymoon which he never revealed to her even upon her asking about it.


She waved to him as she walked towards the entrance of the college . He was still watching her . Why isnt he going . She thought as she moved towards the crowds of pupils ahead of her .


There she was finally

sitting at a corner near the entrance staircase with her friends

Jasmin her estranged sister who distanced herself after forcing her to get married to replace her bridal position.

A lost and found item who seems to be bouncing back into her married life eventually

Could he be watching her. After all his first love who seemed to pop out of nowhere . He must be excited to see her as usual

Tejo turned to look back . Surprisingly his eyes was set still on her . He was not at all looking at jasmin when she is clearly visible in front of him. Tejo was confused. Why was he not looking at her sister ? For the first time tejo smiled to herself

Legta hai jasu ka bhoot utar chuka hai


Little did she know that it was not jasu ka bhoot but padosi ka bhoot jo ched chuka hai sir key uper jo uski biwi ko usey dur lejayega. Thanks to dadaji for scaring him


Fateh !

Jasmin screamed

Fateh turned towards jasmin. Jasmin smiled and waved

He didnt respond.

Jssmin walked towards him sitting in the car

As she was about to reach his door he drove away quickly


Jasmin was annoyed and shouted fateh !

Fateh was lost in his thoughts that he didnt realised jasmin was walking towards him.

He has even forgotten that he was supposed to spologise to her. His mind was fully occupied by tejo and the padosi

Parking the vehicle at a dabba nearby he stopped for a delicious breakfast of spicy moolie parotha with desi chai pure punjabi style.

The invisible padosi in his wife's life lured him to eat the spicy parotha . He was also munching the stuffed green chillies perhaps to cover his frustration or anger or clearly definable word

jealousy


At 2 pm tejo was waiting to be fetched home . He came finally . He smiled and asked how was her day ?

Instead of replying she asked him about jasmin

Why did he ignore her ?

He was puzzled and replied he didnt notice her in the first place

Now it was tejos turn to be taken into his similar situation

Fateh singh virk didnt notice jasmin sandhu!

Thats a big wow over that exclamation


Little did she know that it was the padosi in his mind with whom she is going to run with in the near future that is blocking his vision so much so that he could not see the jasmin sandhu whom he once adored from the bottom of his heart.

He thought of doing some interrogation

Fateh anxious : irŕrk college main kitney humarey padosi pedhtey hain ya pedhatey hain

Tejo confused : matlab

Fateh smiled : meri biwi itni pyari hai kya peta koi male padosi aas pas ghum raha hoga

Tejo grinned never expected him to say that

This one is acting like a real husband

She thought of playing a trick on him and replied

Hai na aek smart professor aaya hai delhi sey as a guest lecturer for 3 months

Fateh stopped the car immediately

Emergency break to indicate the breakthrough of the invisible neighbour finally into his marriage life

Kya !! He freaked out

She laughed at his reaction

Then he realised she was joking and sighed


After dinner lying on her bed, jasmin was sobbing

Fateh ignored her today and decided to call him.

Fateh forgot to charge his phone since afternoon

His mind pre occupied with tejo and the padosi

Jasmin was annoyed as his phone was switched off


The next day in the morning he dropped her once again.

Jasmin was eagerly waiting to speak to him

As he dropped tejo she opened the door practically pushing her aside to give her way and sat at the front seat facing fateh demanding for an explanation for his rudeness during the honeymoon and for present.

Fateh was silent throughout and finally uttered sharply

If u dont mind jasmin mey ab shadi shuda hun

She tried to answer him but he told her to leave and drove off

Tejo was shocked with fateh's reaction and so was jasmin

Jasmin lashed at her sister accusing what she has done on her beloved fateh . Little did she know that fateh was now more obssessed with the invisible padosi and she was his past delusion

Tejo ignored her and walked away

Mey fateh ko apney pas wapas laungi tum deklena !

She screamed but tejo didnt respond at all


At 1 pm fateh received a call from tejo that he doesnt need to pick her up as she is having a meeting with a guest lecturer an anglo indian from new delhi and she will be late .

Fateh asked for the time he should pick her up and she replied

Aaj lunch ka appointment bhi hai aur phir vo mujhey drop kardega

Line disconnected and about the same goes to fateh who was lost in his connections to the padosi who will take his wife away from him.


Tejo grinned to herself for the trick she just played on fateh . There was a guest lecturer but no lunch only meeting

After all he is behaving like a husband lately since their honeymoon and the fact that he has started to ignore jasmin pleased her

Little did she know that the trick is gonna come real hard on her

Fateh was nervous sitting in his room. Grandpa prophecy played in his mind so much so that he was having sleepless nites and feeling restless with each passing day to add tejo making excuses of coming late .

Little did he know that she wss playing a trick on him


A week passed by

There were so many missed calls from jasmin as he switched on the phone

Ignoring the call log he called up his grandfather who

was visiting a relative in haryana

Before he returned from his shimla trip grandpa was already away taking his grandmother along

So didnt get the chance to speak to his love guru


Babuji picked up at the third ring and asked about him and tejo

He replied he was feeling restless after the shimla trip

Asked about the prophecy relating to the do vela and the padosi if it will really come true

Will tejo ji leave me for someone else ?

Babuji was smiling happily

Seemed like it has gotten into his head so badly that he is not able to think straight

Babuji said to himself

Haalat garam hai hathoda marta hun

He planned to take advantagd of his grandson's situation by saying

There is a way to break the prophecy

Fateh excited what is it ? She wont leave me ?

Babuji replied

A drastic step .

Fateh replied he will do anything

Babuji excitedly said

Then make the first move as a husband

Fateh shocked and eventually refused that tejo is his friend

Babuji continued harshly

Shes ur wife god dammit not a friend

Come out of the comfort of the friendship and look upon her as ur wife

Then he hung up


She was sleeping soundly next to him . Try to look at her as ur wife

Grandpas words ringing in his ears

He turned to look at her exploring with his vision watching her body

Sweet innocent face .curvy waist a slim slender body

Suddenly the need to touch her came instantly .

The first move

grandpas words

For the first time he looked upon her as his wife and moved forward taking up the challenge finally

He removed the pillows between them and slowly laid close to her

Put his hands on hers and felt her touch and then explored his fingers on her waist

She opened her eyes suddenly

He pretended to be punishing mosquitos around her saying

Bahut ziada machar hai

She was sleepy and didnt respond. He closed his eye lids and pressurised his husbandly desires to settle down


After dropping her the next day he consulted a very close friend about his situation

The same was mentioned

start behaving more like a husband now

Remove the friendship bsnter

Fateh asked how to behave like a husband

The friend said very simple and offered him a few intimate videos to watch and advised to do the deed only in the nite before sleeping so his lust antennas will start working

Fateh wss excited he couldnt wait for evening

By doing this if i can stop my wife from leaving me then why not watch it now

At 1pm after lunch he explored the three lustful visions handed over to hin and felt thr urge of performing the deed

The first move

the words his babuji said was crawling up in his mind and after checking into details of the lustful vision he surrenders to it and decided to give it a try

Maybe if i am a husband to her then she will never leave me for any padosi

At 3 pm he went to pick her up despite saying she will return home by herself

She saw him and smiled

Her trick was working

Ageya lafandar mujhey lene key liye

Becoming the peti dev ji

Little did she know the friend to be turned into husband was actually exploring the journey to be a lustful husband to hold her from parting ways with him

And her tricks are going to be bhari on her soon

Shes putting herself in danger

Beware of ur husband

The signboard was not visible to her at that moment


An hour later she was at home and went to the room to freshen up

He followed ftom behind thinking no one is at home

The mansion was empty

She came out of the washroom and was wiping her hands and face with a towel when he stood shirtless standing inches away right in front of her

Shocked and asked nervously

What are u doing ?

No answer

He moved forward with a strange smile on his handsome face placed his right arm behind her back to move her closer and pressed his lips against hers

Her eyes widely open felt the pressure of his lips over hers the sweet warm kiss the heat which tremendously shook her body and she stood still allowing him to perform the deed that lasted for at least twenty seconds


She gasped for a deep breath as he pulled away and immediately pushed him

Tum pagal ho kya ?

She screamed angrily

He was smiling

Peti ben ney ki koshish kar raha hun

Aek aur kiss chahiyeh kya

Mey ready hun bas tu mujhey us padosi key liye mat chod key jana

She ran to the corner of the room and replied still in a shock

Kaun sa padosi

He continued smiling

Vo padosi jo tujhey honeymoon pey lekey jaiga

She was annoyed like hell

Idiot humara honeymoon ho chuka hai

He continued smiling

Lekin phir hoga uskey sath

Hearing his words tejo fall to the ground unconscious


After a while her eyes were wandering around for that lunatic husband

He was nowhere to be seen

She turned to face khusbeers voice asking how she was

And asked for fateh

Khusbeer smiled and said

Just think he ran away a little while from u

Tejo asked why

Then kushbeer explained to her about babujis self made prophecy on the padosi so fateh will treat her nicely on their honeymoon and how he took it too seriously that the fear of losing her overpowered his senses

Tejo understood now

Thats why he ignored jasmin the other day

And was upset with the fact that she played a trick on him and made things worse for herself

Kushbeer blessed her resting his palm on her forehead

May the almighty bless u for returning to me the once upon lost son


She was sitting in her room alone thinking about the unforeseen incident that swept her feet away emotions unexplained assuming that now onwards she is the wife as in a way she has surrendered to his first move as a husband and slowly fall a sleep


He lied beside her. Found her in a deep slumber as he entered the room

Felt embarrased after coming to know his grandpa played a joke which has turned his life towards a new dimension of accepting the fact of being a husband after the first move he was told to make

He closed his eyes felt the sensation of the first kiss and the warmth beneath and still surprised with the step he has taken unknowingly which will change the man in him forever moving away from his past to a new present with the person lying beside him.

His precious wife




































.









Gur

Wonderful os..do write more👏👏

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Originally posted by: Loveexists

Wonderful os..do write more👏👏


Td dear for appreciating my work

It took 4 hrs to make this os

Marathi mulgi said u should have had someone with tejo in her suite when she was reading the magazine relating to the honeymoon os

Then an idea came a jealous husband plot

So decided to continue from the padosi running away with his wife

Fateh will never take a step towards tejo knowingly coz of his delusions for jasmin

So the jealous husband takes the first step towards her UNKNOWINGLY

Thats the main plot of this os

And the deed taken changed their relationship from friendship moving on to husband wife journey gradually

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Aniash


Td dear for appreciating my work

It took 4 hrs to make this os

Marathi mulgi said u should have had someone with tejo in her suite when she was reading the magazine relating to the honeymoon os

Then an idea came a jealous husband plot

So decided to continue from the padosi running away with his wife

Fateh will never take a step towards tejo knowingly coz of his delusions for jasmin

So the jealous husband takes the first step towards her UNKNOWINGLY

Thats the main plot of this os

And the deed taken changed their relationship from friendship moving on to husband wife journey gradually

Well u did a good job...u deserve the appreciation...try to write more of these it's stress busters

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Posted: 4 years ago
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I can see a significant improvement in your writing style ani, this was by far the best one of your os...

Its always a treat to read anything you write..

Hope you have got a sequel planned for this one..

I want to know what tejo's next step would be after learning the truth about her husband's obsession with padosi...😆

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sparklle801

I can see a significant improvement in your writing style ani, this was by far the best one of your os...

Its always a treat to read anything you write..

Hope you have got a sequel planned for this one..

I want to know what tejo's next step would be after learning the truth about her husband's obsession with padosi...😆


Tq for reading

For the writing part i used different style coz of time constraints

U wantt to put up our ideas u can do it two ways

Either go the simple kids style or a little complicated adult style

I choose mostly kudos styld coz easier to write and less time consuming

So u find them all simple straightforward


There were only two os which i took the adult route and thats this one and bare back pt 1

Thats why u saw the difference

the novelist type adult versions are not easy to write

The flowely language the characters the flow the emotions need to plan carefully

So they are time consuming

This os the first move is to show how fatejo is slowing moving from friendship to marital relaionship

So need to place proper tone of writing emotions etcs to bring out the potential in each character wtitten

It took me apprpx 5 hrs

Started at 11pm completed at 4 am

So the main issue here is the time taken

Thats why u find difference in writing for this one

Well no plans for 2nd sequel as yet coz its exhausting

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Posted: 4 years ago
#7

That was really funny Aniash! (You have a knack for comedy!) but also so sweet at the end

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Oh gosh, how cute! I smiled throughout the story. Do write more!❤️

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