OS- A piece of the puzzle

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Hello guys !! I tried writing something on the upcoming track.. Do read and give your feedbck please!!😊


A piece of the puzzle

Sometimes people closest to us are the ones we forget to appreciate and acknowledge. Sitting in the darkness of his sanctuary-his study, Anirudh was thinking about his dear friend who had left him forever. Saurabh was like an unseen support to him always there to help him whether he agreed with his ideas or not. And how can he forget that he was alive today and was able to save bondita because of Saurabh. Mini and Saurabh two of his closest childhood friends were taken away from him forever, one by fate and other by her greed and evil heart.

‘Chottisi Bondita’ as she always called herself was standing at the door peeking inside watching her patibabu break down. Being broken herself by the grief of her sister and silent cries of her rakshak babu she just stood there trying to gather strength to console her patibabu. Although Kaka sasurji and sasurji felt bad by the incident they couldn’t understand Anirudh's pain, because for them Saurabh was always a servant first and Anirudh’s friend later. But she had seen firsthand how close Anirudh was to jamaibabu. It was now her turn to shield her rakshak babu from this pain. Her sister had many people to console her and cry with her, but Anirudh was all alone with no shoulder to cry on. Preparing herself she went inside the study with a heavy heart and their special coconut phone.

“Tring tring… tring tring..” She called out to him handing him a shell. As soon as he saw her he wiped his face and tried to hide his broken look from her. Picking up one end he started to say “ Maa...” But to his surprise the reply was” Bondita ki maa nahi, mein bondita bol rahi hoon patibabu..”

“Bondita ??” he asked in a confused voice. “Haa , maa toh abhi sampoorna didi ke paas hain na.. unhe jyaada jarurat hai maa ki. Par main hoon na aapke paas patibabu aap mujhse bol sakte hai apne man ki baat!!” Even in this sad moment she had managed to bring a small smile on his face.

“ Aapko pata hai patibabu mein jab maa se baat karti hoon na hamare taliphoon se.. toh mujhe awaz nahi sunai deti unki.. par maa ne kaha tha ki unhe hamesha sunai deti hai meri awwaz jab bhi yaad karti hoon mein unhe. Waise hi aap bhi baatein kar sakte hai jamibabu se.. who toh sabse pakke wale dost hai na aapke toh kaise nahi sunenge aapki baat? Aapko bhale hi na sunai de unki aawaz par who hamesha paas rahenge aapke, jaise maa rehti hai mere paas.”

Somehow her innocent words broke Anirudhs control and the tears he was trying to control didn’t listen to him anymore.

“ Mujhe pata hai mein toh choti hoon. Aapki dost nahi bansakti jamaibabu ke tarah , par jab mein badi ho jaungi toh apki sabse achi dost banungi.. yeh wada hai mera.. Tab tak aap Taliphoon se baat kariye ga jamaibabu se..”, she tried to console him even tough her own face was a mirror of her sad heart.

He had always found himself vulnerable around her because her innocence and pure heart made it hard for anyone to maintain a wall around their heart. But today her actions had shown him that although his friends were no longer with him, he still had a little angel who will always be there to share his pain and make him smile in worst of the situations. Looking at her he thought that may be not today, but some years down the line he was going to have the best friend anyone could have, in the little girl besides him. The future of their relationship will still be a puzzle but a part of that puzzle was put into place .. A part where he knew that he had a permanent companion, no matter what life threw at him.

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P.S : Typos ke liye sorry !!

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This was soooo amazing 😭

I loved it! Ani's emotions are soo raw and heart wrenching. My heart is heavy💔

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: AK_2010

This was soooo amazing 😭

I loved it! Ani's emotions are soo raw and heart wrenching. My heart is heavy💔


Thank you..

Even I couldnt think of any dialogues for Ani in that situation so sirf monologue hi likh diya .😭

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is so beautifully written dear that i can visualise each and every scene👏.Their pain can be felt by just reading this😭.

This type of scene can be expected in this track.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Very beautifully u depicted aniruddh and bonditas emotions... Very nice update👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Shrads 🤗

You have Beautifully penned Rudi's emotions 😭❤️ and I could feel the pain of ani while reading this 😭

The last part was so emotional ❤️😭

write more 😳His little angel will always be there around him to give her chotu sa hand whenever he needs it ❤️

Keep writing ⭐️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shubhdeepk

This is so beautifully written dear that i can visualise each and every scene👏.Their pain can be felt by just reading this😭.

This type of scene can be expected in this track.


Thank you so much 🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Saavni

Very beautifully u depicted aniruddh and bonditas emotions... Very nice update👍🏼

Thank u saavni !😊

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: --Lalz--

Shrads 🤗

You have Beautifully penned Rudi's emotions 😭❤️ and I could feel the pain of ani while reading this 😭

The last part was so emotional ❤️😭

write more 😳His little angel will always be there around him to give her chotu sa hand whenever he needs it ❤️

Keep writing ⭐️


Hey lalz🤗

Thank u for d tareef and encouragement!!

Ani will be sad for saurabh & we all r sad for ani..

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Posted: 4 years ago
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I loved this OS so so so much! Written so beautifully, and showed Anirudh's pain & feelings perfectly! And Bondita's innocence & support were the perfect balm for her Pati Babu!

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