Tujhe kitna chahne lage hum|Prayansh ss - Page 8

Posted: 3 years ago

I love the way you construct this simple moments between the three/two.

That walk question was so sweet and natural!! Your writing brings me joy because it's so simple yet so new because you never get to see such scenes in ITV!!

Posted: 3 years ago

Happy Reading!


Episode 18


Next Morning Pranati was running after jugnu to prepare her for school. 


Pranati: Jugnu yar tie toh pehn, school hai.


Jugs: Mujhe nhi pehna, mera gala dabbta hai


Pranati:Main firse nhi kahungi, main neeche tumhara breakfast lene jaa rhi hoon. Jaldi se taiyaar ho jao.


She walked out and bumped into Reyansh. 


Rey: Oye bhag kyun rhi hai?


Pranati: Tumhari beti tumse bhi zada irritating hai. Usse taiyar krna mtlb mahabharat ladna. Sunti hi nhi hai kisi ki.


 Rey: Shaant mata rani shaant. Tu breakfast lene ja rhi hai?


Pranati: Haan


Rey: Toh tu aram se laa. Jab tak laygi tab tak Jugnu tujhe ready milegi. I promise.


Pranati: Thanks, aur suno uski...


Rey: uski maths ki copy dhyan se rakh doonga. Tension mt le


Pranati: Okay


She walked downstairs and Reyansh walked inside the room. 


Rey: Chal ninja phata phat ready ho ja.


Jugs: Bandar papa mujhe samajh nhi ata ki log school kyun jaate hain? Aur agar jaate hai toh yeh uniform kyun pehnte hai? Woh bhi itni boring si.


He scoffed on her cute questions. He remembered asking the same things when he was a kid. His mother would have probably given him a lecture about importance of education and how uniform raises a sense of discipline in oneself. But a twisted kind of father he was, he did the total opposite.


Rey: Dekh main toh school masti krne jaata tha. Mere wahan achhe dost the toh main toh unke saath pura din khelta tha. Sirf Maa ko dikhane ke liye marks le ata tha. (He made her wear shoes). Aur uniform ne toh mujhe sabse zada bachaya hai. Ab tujhe toh pta hi hai main kitne pranks krta tha, kyunki uniform mein saare bache ek jaise dikhte the toh ma'am ko kabhi pta hi nhi chalta tha ki kisne kya kra hai (He made her wear tie). Aur jahan tak boring uniform ki baat hai, tu toh khushnaseeb hai tujhe aisi uniform mili, meri toh brown colour ki gandi si thi. (he kept her maths notebook in her bag and checked if all the books were there or not)


Jugs: Sachi? Aap toh bohot funny lagte honge na. Aapke paas koi photo hai?


He brought a comb and starting making her two ponytails. 


Rey: Hai na,per abhi tu school ja, bohot masti kr aur padhai bhi. Jab ghar aayegi na main photos nikal ke rakhoonga.


Jugs: Promise?


Rey: Promise. Achha sunn teri maa abhi khana laegi, chup chap kha lena okay?


Pranati brought her breakfast in a tray and was surprised that Jugnu was indeed ready and her bag was packed too. She smiled and placed the breakfast on bed, She was again surprised to see that Jugnu was having it without any argument. 


Jugs: Okay bye nai maa 


She gave her a quick hug and ran down to driver so he could drop her school. 


Pranati: Isse achank se kya ho gaya? Tumne isse firse club toh nhi bheja na? 


Rey: Nhi, bas yeh samajh le ki club ko main school le aya.


Pranati: Tumne usse Prank ke baad bachne ka tareeka btaya haina. Tum bhi na Reyansh, kyun aisi cheezein usse sikhate rehte ho. Zada shararat ki toh school se nikal denge usse.


Rey: Arre yaar chill mar. Jab pakdi hi nhi jayegi toh school se kaise nikalenge.


Pranati: Reyansh tum...


Rey: achha achha jab vapus aayegi toh samjha dunga ki kuchh na kre. Thheek hai?


Pranati: haa...


"Teri himmat kaise hui?" They heard someone shouting downstairs. They gave a look to each other and ran down. There they saw Armaan and Maan fighting like dogs. Reyansh jumped in between and stopped them.


Rey:kya kr rahe ho tum log? Pagal ho gaye ho kya?


Armaan: yeh pagal ho gaya hai, keh raha hai Navya se pyaar krta hai. (Looking towards Maan) Abe tujhe wahan jaane ko kaha kisne tha 


Rey: Maine kaha tha


Armaan: bhai tu...


Rey:Haan Maine bheja tha. Kyunki tu toh raita phaila ke chala gaya apni happily married life jeene, sab sametna toh hamein pada na


Armaan: arre bhai toh raita sametne gaya tha ya ashiqui krne. 


Rey: Haan toh kya galat hai ismein? Pyaar hi toh krta hai


Armaan: yeh tu bol raha hai? Abe apne khud ke bhai ki ex se pyaar krta hai. Bro code naam ki koi cheez hai ya nhi?


Rey: Abe oye yeh bro code wala lecture mujhe na de samjha?. Bhai ki ex se pyaar krna galat hai per ek ladki ko pregnant krke, shaadi ke waade krke chhod dena sahi hai? Bro bnne se pehle insaan bnna seekh


Armaan: Tu aise baat kr raha ki tune toh kabhi kuchh Kiya hi nhi. Tere kaand toh abhi tak iss ghar mein ghoom rahe hain


Rey: Armaan apni limit mein reh. Kamse kam mujhmein himmat toh accept krne ki main galat hoon, tujhmein toh woh bhi nhi hai.


Armaan's anger rose up and he almost punched Reyansh when daadi shouted.


Dadi: O bas kro. Pta nhi kaise kanjaron ko paal rakha hai maine. Kya hua hai?


Everyone turned silent 


Dadi: Khoton kuchh bolo


Armaan: Dadi Maan ko Navya se pyaar ho gaya hai.


Dadi(smiling sarcastically): oye hoye hoye, mujhe toh pehle hi samjh jana chahiye tha. Iss ghar mein Jhagde hote hi bin bihai maa'on ki wajah se hai. (She eyed Pranati and then looked towards maan) Mere paas kya kam problems hai ki tu ek aur siyappa mere sarr per daalne ke liye le aya? 


Maan: Dadi main sach mein usse bohot pyaar krta hoon


Dadi: yeh pyaar na apni jeb mein rakh. Maine yahan koi aashram nhi khola hua ki koi bhi maa bache ke saath yahan settle ho jaye. 


Mallika(entered): haww dadi yeh main kya Sun rhi hoon? Aapke saath bohot bura hua. Ab ek aur bin bihayi maa yahan aayegi?

Edited by sanakhan240201 - 3 years ago
Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by aquaHP


I love the way you construct this simple moments between the three/two.

That walk question was so sweet and natural!! Your writing brings me joy because it's so simple yet so new because you never get to see such scenes in ITV!!

It's funny how you like simple things whereas I try to think how I can make this more complicated like the real show. I'll try not to think too much now😂😂

Thankyou for such a beautiful response

Posted: 3 years ago

Happy reading!


Episode 19


Mallika(entered): haww dadi yeh main kya Sun rhi hoon? Aapke saath bohot bura hua. Ab ek aur bin bihayi maa yahan aayegi?


Rey(in mind): Yeh fir aa gai


Mallika: Dadi maine toh kaha hi tha. Ab gandagi, gandagi ko kheech toh leti hi hai na


She tried to make a innocent face eyeing Pranati


Rey: Yeh toh tune sahi kaha Mallika, achha tujhe kaun kheech laya?


Everyone tried to hold their laughter listening to Reyansh's on point sarcasm.


Dadi: Bas bas. Bohot jhagda mazak ho gaya. Sun oye Maan, jitni nautanki karni thi tune kar li, ab mera phaisla sun. Navya aur uska bacha iss ghar ke aas paas bhi nhi aayenge. Arre janti hoon main aisi ladkiyon ko. Pehle Armaan ko phasaya aur uske bache ke saath pregnant ho gai, ab kyunki Armaan haath se nikal gaya toh usne tujhe phasaya. 


Mallika: Bilkul sahi kaha dadi aapne. Iss ghar mein ek najyaz bachi kafi hai.


Rey: MALLIKA!!!!!!!


Everyone startled hearing Reyansh's loud voice. His eyes were blood red due to excessive anger.


Rey: Tu meri beti ke baare mein baat kr rhi hai, soch samajh ke bol. Meri beti hai woh, Reyansh Khurrana ki beti. Najayaz nhi hai. Sabko pata hai ki tu yahan kyun aati hai. Tujhe yahan sirf isiliye aane dete hai kyunki tu Riya ki behn hai. Toh Riya ki behn bnke hi reh, meri beti ke baare mein kuchh bhi bolne ka hakk tujhe nhi hai. (He took a pause). Aur dadi yeh kya aap 19th century ki baatein kr rhi hai. Kya bin bihayi ma, kya najayaz bache. Aankhein kholke dekhiye, iss saare phassad ki jadd apka yeh pota hai. Hamesha ek aurat ki galti nhi hoti. Galti hum jaise raheezadon ki hoti hai, jinko sirf maze krne aate hai. Aur jab responsibility ki baat aati hai, peethh dikha ke bhag jaate hai. Apne surname ko itni bhi importance mt dijiye dadi ki aap bhool jayein insaniyat kya hoti hai. Bohot ho gaya ab. Ab hum apne kaand, apne siyape khud solve kreinge. Ab hum sahi karein ya galat, izzat bade ya kam ho woh hamari zimedaari hogi. Ab koi bhi iss ghar ke logon ki galti ka ilsaam kisi aur per nhi lagayega. Khasker ke ek ladki per.


He gave a last look to everyone and stomped back to his room in full swag. There was a silence in the room and after a few seconds everyone dispersed to their respective places.


Reyansh was sitting on his bed tapping his feet on the floor aggressively. His fingers fidgeting without even him knowing. Pranati entered through the door and saw him in this state. She cleared her throat to grab his attention. His eyes diverted towards her.


Pranati: Mere paas tumhare mood ko thhik krne ka ek tareeka hai. Alcohol se bhi better.


Rey: aisa kya hai tere paas?


She took out a bottle of coconut oil from her behind and showed it to him. She grinned seeing him. Scene shifts to Reyansh sitting on floor and Pranati sitting on bed. She was massaging his head with oil. His eyes were closed and he looked really relaxed just like she said.


Rey: Ab mera mood thheek hai toh tu mujhe bta sakti hai ki maine neeche kya galti kri


Pranati: Tumhein kaise pta main yeh kehne wali thi?


Rey: Kyunki tu mujhe kabhi kuchh nhi samjhayegi jab main gusse mein hoon. Chal bata ab...


Pranati: Tumhein Armaan se chilla kr baat nhi krni chahiye thi


Rey: Really Pranati? Tumhein pta hai na usne kya kiya hai. Usse toh apni galti ka pachhtava bhi nhi hai. Maine toh Maan se pehle hi kaha tha ki Armaan se baat krne ka koi fayeda nhi hai. 


Pranati: Tum aur tumhari family ka gussa bilkul ek jaisa hai. Zara samjho Reyansh, Armaan ke liye yeh sab kitna awkward hoga. Uska khud ka bhai uske bache ka step father bnne ki baat kr raha hai. Agar Navya iss ghar mein aayi toh usse, Maan, Armaan, Riya aur Navya ke bache ko saath mein rehna padega. Woh itni saari cheezein ek saath handle nhi kr paya. Aur gusse mein kuchh bhi bol diya.


Rey: Toh tu kya chahti hai, main Maan ko kahun ki apne pyaar ko bhool jaye?


Pranati: Nhi, tum Armaan ko samjhao ki sabse pehle iss baat ko accept kre. He has to let go of Navya. Usse yaad dilao ki Maan uska bhai hai, apni selfishness mein  woh uski khushiyan toh nhi chheen sakta na. Aur sabse important baat, usse Riya ko sach batana padega, woh yeh sach deserve krti hai. Uska gussa shaant hone do aur aram se maturely baat krne jao. Time lagega per woh samjh jayega.


Rey: Tu paida hi aisi hui thi ya tune Khurrana khandan per koi PHD kri hai?


Pranati: Tumhare pariwar ko samjhne ke liye mujhe koi PHD ki zaroorat nhi hai. Ek insaan ko samjh liya mtlb poore pariwar ko samjh liya. 


Rey: Toh iss khandan ke ek aur insaan ki bhi madad kr de


Pranati: Kiski?


Rey: Meri. Jugnu ko mere bachpan ki photo dekhni hai aur album store room mein hain. Dhoondne mein help kr de.


Pranati: Thheek hai, per usse pehle Hashtag coffee ho jaye?


Rey: Tu baithh main tere liye banata hoon, Hashtag yun gaya aur yun aya.


He stood up and ran to kitchen to make coffee for both of them

Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by sanakhan240201


It's funny how you like simple things whereas I try to think how I can make this more complicated like the real show. I'll try not to think too much now😂😂

Thankyou for such a beautiful response

I watch Balaji shows only for those simple moments in between the drama because that is the actual story. They add the drama to grab the viewers attention.

But back to your story, I genuinely love the way you construct the scenes because it feels like I am reading about someone real.

Loved the champi scene in the last chapter! 

Posted: 3 years ago

Do continue soon.... It's awesome... 

Posted: 3 years ago

I can actually see this scene in the show.....so good it was...please continue...it's like Oxygen..till we get them back

Posted: 3 years ago

Thank you for continuing this!


It's going really well!


Excited for what comes next!

Posted: 3 years ago

Happy Reading!


Episode 20


Reyansh coughed as he entered the store room.


Rey: Kitni mitti hai yahan


Pranati: Haan toh tumhe kya laga, khazana hoga?


Rey: Lele, tu bhi maze lele


Pranati: Yeh sab chhodo, tumhe kuchh bhi pta hai pics kahan hongi.


Rey: Kisi ek carton mein bohot saari albums aur loose photos hongi. Chal, ninja ko promise kiya hai, poora toh krna padega.


They started searching for the box in different directions.


Pranati: Waise aaj tumne jo jugnu ke baare mein Mallika ko bola woh sunke mujhe bohot achha laga


Rey: Main bas thak gaya tha najayaz sun sun ke. Jugnu itni chhoti hai yaar aur usne yeh kitna suna hoga. I wish main kuchh kr pata.


Pranati: Tum kar toh rahe ho, tum apne bachpan ka hissa uska saath share kr rahe ho. 


She suddenly started laughing like maniac.  Rey turned around to see her. 


Rey: Dimag ka koi screw dheela ho gaya hai kya?


Pranati: W-woh....hahahahahah


Reyansh wondered why she was laughing. He went near her looked in the direction she was looking. His eyes became wide and suddenly covered the box she was looking at.


Pranati: 'Rey ka saman hai, agar chhua toh REYzor maar dunga' hahahahahah


She repeated what was written on the front of the box in a weird accent and Reyansh looked embarrassed at her.


Rey: Yaar bacha tha main jab yeh likha tha. 


She kept laughing. Reyansh was offended for a bit but then smiled seeing her laughing whole heartedly. He hasn't scene her laughing this openly in a long time. He really wished that she be this happy all the time. He shook his head in amusement and lifted up the box. They both sat on the floor and took the support of the wall. He took out a few photos of him and his brothers and reminisced of old days. Pranati looked for good stuff too. And she did find something amazing.


Pranati: Yeh tumne abhi tak bcha ke rakhin hai?


Rey(smiling): Dance competition ki pictures? Yaad hai main kitna nervous tha?


Pranati: Haan, pehli baar Mr Reyansh confident Khurrana ko nervous hota hua dekha tha. 


Rey: Aur teri hassi nhi ruk rhi thi.


Pranati: Woh one hand wala lift tumse tab tak nhi hua jab tak...


Rey: Jab tak humne competition mein perform nhi kiya tha. Usse pehle mujhe bohot darr lagta tha. Kitni baar giraya tha maine tujhe. Kitni baar tujhe chot lagte lagte bachi thi. 


Pranati: Per mujhe tum per pura bharosa tha ki tum mujhe kabhi chot nhi lagne doge. Waise tum kitna bhi stud bnne ki koshish krlo, tumhein logon ki parwah bohot hai.


He saw her and gave a sad smile to her


Rey: Kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki main aisa kyun hoon? Main jiski bhi care krta hoon end mein jaake usse hi sabse zada dukh deta hoon.


Pranati: tum future ko sochke apna aaj toh decide nhi kr sakte na. Achha tumhein yaad hai na ki tumhe dance competition mein kabhi part lena hi nhi tha. Aur jab main tumhe sikha rhi tab tumne kitni baar kaha ki hum mazak bnke reh jayeinge. Agar main tumhari baat maanke Decide kr leti ki hum bohot bura perform krne waale hain, toh hammare paas itni achhi memory hoti kya? Jab tak tum apne aapko bura samjhoge tab tak tumhari achhai kaun dekhega?


Rey: Tune toh dekhi na


Pranati(grinning): Ab tumhein toh pta hi hai, main hoon hi ajeeb...


Rey(giggling): Baat toh sahi hai, duniya ki sabse ajeeb ladki hone ka award jata hai Pranati Mishra ko. 


He took out a trophy from the box and gave to her. She bowed down and took it like an actual award. It was then she finally saw what trophy it was. It was the one they both won after the dance competition. She admired the trophy for a while.


Pranati: Yahan toh sach mein khazana mil gaya


He smiled on her statement. They picked up the box and went back to Reyansh's room to keep it safe. Except some photos of his and his brothers that he knew would help Armaan remind what his brother meant to him. He took them went down to his room and knocked on the door.


Rey: Aram se baithh kr baat krien?


Armaan nodded and sat down with him. They had a long conversation and Reyansh tried his best to be a good elder brother and guide him to do the right thing. At the end Armaan said nothing and stood up. He walked to Maan's room and Rey got scared that he is gonna fight with him again. He ran behind him to stop him but it was too late as he was already face to face with Maan


Armaan: Tu pyaar krta hai Navya se?


He asked in a heavy tone. Maan nodded nervously as he though he is gonna get punched in the face again.


Armaan: Woh bhi tujhse pyaar krti hai?


Maan: Ha..na..pta nhi


Armaan: Pta nhi? Aise kaise nhi pta?


Maan: w-woh maine abhi tak usse i-iss baare mein ba-baat nhi kri hai


Armaan: Yeh lo Rey bhai, isne abhi tak propose hi nhi kiya. 


Maan and Reyansh were shocked seeing his reaction. They couldn't believe that this was happening. 


Armaan: Kya ghoor ghoor ke dekh rahe ho mujhe? Shaadi krni hai toh propose toh krna padega na.


Maan's smile grew wider and wider and hugged Armaan tightly. 


Maan: Thanks bhai, thanks


Armaan: Yeh thanks na Rey bhai ko bol. Unhone mujhe yaad dilaya ki hum dadi ki wishes puri karne mein itne busy ho gaye the ki hum bhool gaye hum bhai hai. Aur bhai ke liye toh jaan hazir hai


Maan: Fir toh mujhe Prabhi ko thanks bolna chahiye, kyunki aajkal Rey bhai ke badle badle behaviour ke peechhe toh Prabhi ka hi haath hai na.


Rey: Tu meri taang baad mein kheech lio, pehle yeh bta Navya ko kab propose kr raha hai?


Maan: Jab Riya bhabhi allow krein tab. (He turned towards Armaan) Unhe batana toh padega na


Armaan: Hmmm...tu tension mt le, main usse sab sach bta dunga. Waise Rey bhai, itni achhai hazam nhi ho rhi


Rey: Ab jab healthy khana seekh liya hai, toh hazam bhi krna seekh jayeinge.


They all laughed gave each other a group hug. 



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