Originally posted by: lashy
first let me take three bows
one - for having done your bidding and written the story the very next day
two - for having written one so passionately
three - an apologetic one... me taking my time to reply (but i think you would understand with all the halla happening in my house, i am finding it difficult to come to IF at all) plus me wanted to make sure i type something worthwhile enough to befit your story... and not a dashing note of thanks.. hence the wait.. π³ Lashyyyy...don't apologise to me..I am feelin soo guilty yaar...I can very well understand how busy u must be...with so much work and all..Its completely fine dat u read it a bit late...π
BTW I will never kill you for your choice of hero... am i glad you penned this beautiful story.. it is so lovely to see your passion... the whole story reflects and exudes how much of a dreamer you are and how you would like to get tucked away once in a while into your small corner of fantasian paradise.. away from the madding crowd...Hmmm..at times its good to be in ur world of dreams...π
this story did remind me of a couple of movies i have seen - not for any particular reason.. but just that it brought back memories.. one was pirates of the caribbean and the other was Harry potter... Ohh..acha...gr88!!!π
but it is no secret to say i preferred yours more as i am a die-hard romantic myself..
you could feel the heat and intensity of the romance in this story and everything was more the language of eyes and expressions than actual dialogues themselves... i have a question though.. i am guessing that it is probably the first time you are writing a romantic story on yourself.. how did it feel describing yourself in all those eloquent words.. did it bring a smile to your face.. did it make you blush..? Okieess...I ma caught...while writing the romantic part..I was blushing and dreaming and all..It definitely did bring a smile on my faceee...π well, this is my 1st time in writitng a full fledeged romantic storryyy...full on fairy tale like romance...βΊοΈ
your choice of words... detailed descriptions of the scenes around the protagonists... posh adjectives all were absolutely scintillating... these are definitely your strongest points and you must develop on them in future... π Thanksss sooo much for ur wise words..Will make sure I Develop them...
it is nice to be able to write such stories.. one can always live their fantasies through imagination.. π³ i can imagine how you must have hoped and sighed for the scenes below to have actually happened/to happen in reality.. Yaaa...wish these things were reality...π³ I did always hope for this to come true sum dayyy....π³
His eyes met hers. He basked in her glorious presence, completely memerised by her beauty. the moment that seemed more than an eternity for him he wondered to himself..." truly, the one sitting up There is the greatest Sculptor,for His best Masterpeice stands here, right in front of my own eyes." he gazed at her intently...His gaze so powerful that it peirced through Ashi's eyes n her cheeks turned a faint hue of Scarlett.
Rajat took her hands in his n tenderly acressed them. He held her in his strong arms, protecting her from every ounce of harm n from every cruel being alive on Planet. They came closer....so close dat they could reach deep within each other's eyes. Time stood still. All things stood motionless around them. Both were enveloped in a blanket of undying Love. The gentle Winds of Love blew around them. She rested her head on his chest, never before had she experienced such true feelings of love, tenderness, calm n kindness...feelings, so genuine n pure dat could only be felt but never described. A pride smile flashed across Rajat's face, for his Lady love was truly His, n now in his arms.
i know that a lot of your thinking has been influenced by the romance found in shakespearan works and hints of that can be found here too.. I loveee Shakespeare...its only dat the spelling of his name is a bit too difficult to rememeber...π
i loved the following phrase ->
She was imprssed by his fair complexion and well built torso dat was the standing proof of the abttles dat Rajat had fought. Rajat spoke up, " Beautiful lady, May I have the privilege to know your name?" Thanks a lottt...π
i would have killed you if you killed both of them.. but since you decided to show a lovely ending i spare you with a big hugggg.π€ Hehehe...I thought i wud kill one n then the other...but I was in a Happy mood...so this one is nice happy..fairy tale like endingg...π
kudos to you aashi... loved your story.. loved your fervour.. love you.. π€ Thanks sooo much...I am truly truly delightedd....Love yaaa sooo muchh...u mad emy day Lashyyy...π€ π€ π€