Originally posted by: Samaina_1990
May!!
I know I'm super duper late and one of your most lethargic readers, but I promise you I'm one huge fan of your story.
Especially this chapter -45! Wow May! I actually read it a week or so back and typed out a review on my phone as soon as I read it, but it so happened that it was somehow lost. And then I wanted to sit down properly and reread this marvelous piece of writing before I reviewed it again.
May! Hats off to you! Who said you find it difficult to write about intimacy! The description was so real, so beautiful- never for a moment, it felt explicit. The words that you chose, the emotions accompanying it were perfectly done! I loved it!
Especially the part where Naina is inspecting herself post the love making in a new light. His sweet caresses spoken then in the moment of urgency, his confessions- she remembered it all, as I feel any woman would. The heat of the moment did not let her dwell on them right then, but now as she remembered his words about the til and her blouses and the badla...I mean it felt so natural, showed Sameer's pent-up desires for long...
Then the idea of introducing Naina to the concept of intimacy! Wow! A book was a fantastic way. I liked how Naina here did not have the full knowledge, yet realized that she was missing something. And being the studious girl she was, she procured the knowledge through books.
Her reactions as to the girl talk in the loo, the way couples were wrapping themselves around each other, Sameer's laughter when she spoke about condoms and of it being related with the kiss, build up her curiosity.
I even liked how while strolling through the market, Naina and Sameer were constantly blushing and giving each other the know-it-all looks. It's natural right!
Lovely! The anticipation to the moment was build up really well and the execution was fantastic!
This update was a milestone for RGAB- because Sameer and Naina of this story started as complete strangers being forced into a wedlock, to slowly getting to know each other, falling in love with each other, and finally with their physical union, they became one in the truest sense- mind, body and soul!
The entire honeymoon sequence is done beautifully May! I could imagine each and every thing they did, the conversations they had with people around seemed so natural. I was almost at the hotel with them walking around, exploring Mt. Abu. I must also commend your detailed study on the place, especially on the temples, the fort, the distances. I'm not sure if you've visited Mt. Abu and that too recently, but it seemed as if you know the place in and out.
Naina sulking in a typical wifey mood, and Sameer at a loss of what to say to her to appease her had me in splits. The scene where he puts his arm around her and she shrugs it off citing the presence of others in the cab, but in reality, because she was irked at him!
Their first kiss was also depicted beautifully- it expressed their need for each other and their desire to experience more, even though being unaware of what lay ahead. I'm reading a young adult novel right now, and could see how mature your writing seems compared to so many books in the market.
The revelation of the kangan incident was also a loop finally closed. I'm glad you touched upon that too, because it was important for both of them to realize how their feelings for each other had developed even before they realized it themselves.
Overall, a beautiful update to a beautiful story! I know, I blabbered here! Forgive me for that May! I'll read the next chapter pretty soon and hopefully be on time from now on!
Loads of love!
Sur
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