Love flourished in college{Akshan FF- Chapter 17 Pg 35 01/07/2019) - Page 26

Tum nahi yaar ek madam ko hot wala update chahiye 🤣

Originally posted by: Akshananju

Tum nahi yaar ek madam ko hot wala update chahiye 🤣

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

Ha ha Seedhe seedhe bhi OS chahiye ye bol sakte the itna ghumane ki kya zaroorat thi?

As aapko aur mujhe hum 2 on ko pata hai itni jaldi toh 2 on stories main aisa koi scene aane se raha toh Os is far an better option.

Hey bhagwaan who night in Uncle's house se man nahi bhara kyaa apka?

Zyaada nahi karwaungi.

Will try asap

Nahi I really mean that I want this chocholate Romance in further updates only & for that I can wait for months too, 3-4 months bhi chalega.

But if you feel it wouldn't be possible to include or it won't fit in ongoing stories then only I want you to go for it as an OS.

Mujhe koi jaldi nahi hain...

Originally posted by: Akshananju

Tum nahi yaar ek madam ko hot wala update chahiye 🤣

Kuch galat keh diya kya?

Arre me toh mazak kar rahi thi tumne seriously lee liya😒

Originally posted by: kavya1994

Nahi I really mean that I want this chocholate Romance in further updates only & for that I can wait for months too, 3-4 months bhi chalega.

But if you feel it wouldn't be possible to include or it won't fit in ongoing stories then only I want you to go for it as an OS.

Mujhe koi jaldi nahi hain...

Donon jagaah nahi chalega.

Include ka I guess koi problem nahi hoga but about fitting not sure.

fir toh aur bhi achhi baat itminan se karenge hum .

Originally posted by: kavya1994

Kuch galat keh diya kya?

Commenting about your OS here only, bcoz post has been locked.

Just For Me:

The start was ok but from Akshan getting ready for party, the OS took another pace, which gets better & more better as the OS progresses👍🏼👏

I liked that you showed Mr & Mrs Datta +ve here. Sometimes it feels good to read a different portrayal of a known character😛❤️

Loved the bits- Akshat heart stuck, him removing her hairstick his staring session in party❤️ his realization of being Guddan hot & sexy, Akshan dance😛, her remembering their dance before sleeping.

Liked the choice of song👍🏼❤️

Best dialogue was Mr Datta's comment on Akshan Dance. Those lines are one of my fav in JS ghazals.

Last Akshan scene was the highlight- Guddan not getting fair chance to protest,😒 & his possessiveness for her made him to change her wardrobe completely🤣which shows he wants her just for himself. The title is apt.

In case if you want to refer that os for replying to my comment

/forum/guddan/5055684/just-for-me-os

Originally posted by: kavya1994

Commenting about your OS here only, bcoz post has been locked.

Locked? Ab yeh kya naya maanjra hai.

Just For Me:

The start was ok but from Akshan getting ready for party, the OS took another pace, which gets better & more better as the OS progresses👍🏼👏

Thank god as ascending is good but decline nahi hona chahiye

I liked that you showed Mr & Mrs Datta +ve here. Sometimes it feels good to read a different portrayal of a known character😛❤️

True

Loved the bits- Akshat heart stuck, him removing her hairstick his staring session in party❤️ his realization of being Guddan hot & sexy, Akshan dance😛, her remembering their dance before sleeping.

Hehe thanks! but that scene was not planned one who toh type karte karte dimaag main aaya and daal diya,Original scene while writing this oS was just that 2 men blabbering about Guddu and Akshat changing her whole wardrobe Isiliye toh shuru ka pace you felt slow as I just had one scene in my mind and uspe pura Os pen karna tha.

Liked the choice of song👍🏼❤️

Thankyou! I guess your and mine choice of songs are quite similar

Best dialogue was Mr Datta's comment on Akshan Dance. Those lines are one of my fav in JS ghazals.

Hey😲 ghazal is it phir toh main shayar ban gayi,honestly speaking tab maine khud likha tha yah kahin se chappa tha yaad nahi aa raha,but as this Os was purely mine toh there are more possibilities ki yeh meri hi bakwaas ho.

Last Akshan scene was the highlight- Guddan not getting fair chance to protest,😒 & his possessiveness for her made him to change her wardrobe completely🤣which shows he wants her just for himself. The title is apt.

Waise bhi Akshat is so authoritive uske saamne waise bhi kisiki nahi chalti,so isme galat kya hai.At that moment mere dimaag main story se wahi title yaad aaya so Maine wo hi rakh diya.

Thanks!

In case if you want to refer that os for replying to my comment

/forum/guddan/5055684/just-for-me-os

Actually who gazal waali baat sun ke maine padh liya

Hussh! I tried to reply you yesterday but yeh mobile aur laptop ke nakhre

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

Locked? Ab yeh kya naya maanjra hai.

This post has become very old in this forum, maybe that's why it has been locked by IF.

Thank god as ascending is good but decline nahi hona chahiye

There was no downfall in pace till last👍🏼

OS means that only dear, you have to build whole story based on single shot only, what scenes lead to that shot & how it ends.

Thankyou! I guess your and mine choice of songs are quite similar

Maybe, you are right about choice of songs

Hey ghazal😲is it phir toh main shayar ban gayi,honestly speaking tab maine khud likha tha yah kahin se chappa tha yaad nahi aa raha,but as this Os was purely mine toh there are more possibilities ki yeh meri hi bakwaas

I think, you have read or heard somewhere bcoz those lines of Jagjit Singh ghazals are very famous.

It can be equally possible that it's your minds creation as you have slightly changed it. The actual lines are-

Hussh! I tried to reply you yesterday but yeh mobile aur laptop ke nakhre

Koi nahi you can reply me whenever you get time.

Waise Mobile or lappy see zyaada nakhre toh Jawaan IF dikhata hain😡Check your PM.

Remaining 2 OS, I will comment here only.