Sequel FF: Sameer 'sang' Naina (Section V Part 2 updated- Pg 107) - Page 73

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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Mayashika

Hi Sur Di,

Coming to the latest chapter...one thing I have to say, you are killing it as a writer with effective dialogues! The confrontation was filled with anger and unpleasant but was so pleasing to read all those good dialogues! When I was just a reader, I used to never notice such things because, well, I didn't care! 😆 But, now as I write too, it feels good to read such good writing and stories because that strives us to do better and provide inspiration! Loads of love to you, Di! ❤️

Wow Shreya!! Thank you dear...your words mean so much to me❤️...am happy you could relate my dialogues to the ones by the characters in the show...yes, we tend to think about the intricacies of portraying a story through writing that we get to know about various technicalities...but we are learning 😳 you guys are my inspiration too...for every one of your stories teaches me something😳

The beginning of a change; you are going to give us Sameer Jaiprakash Maheshwari!
Yes!! 😃

The whole confrontation was necessary if my anger towards Vivek Somani is kept aside. This whole event have challenged him and hopefully, he will use the josh productively! But, all those words do hurt and I want Vishaka to provide some comfort to in this tense atmosphere.
In some stories, he is kept as dead, death due to accidents. In some though, Vishaka is a divorcee. But, here- Shravan enters. You are going to explore the past and I may say you just turned an already interesting story into more interesting. 👏 He commited suicide and glimpses of the past was provided! I wish I could get all the chapters to read now because I am actually very curious.

I know...this instigation was necessary for the spark inside Sameer to become a raging fire. I'm happy that you liked that I have tried to add a twist to Sameer's past in thr form of his dad..I was so sure of a story there, but was disappointed when CVs did not explore that angle. Hence, I took it upon myself to write it. Hope you like the way the story progresses...I'm kind of stuck right now...n hence the much delayed update is still pending😕...I have the story in mind...just need to resolve a roadblock in between...Hope I get upto speed on this by this weekend. 😳
Loads of love,
Shreya

Thanks for the wonderful comments dear...my replies in bold.
Love,
Sur di
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Mayashika

Happy Century, Sur Di! 🥳🤗

Reviews in the previous page! 😳

Thank you so much Shreya!!🤗
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Posted: 6 years ago
Hello friends!
Lo main aa gayi is story ka update lekar! Finally! I was actually going to pause this till I finish EU..but then got in a mood to write, so updating it!
Please give in your feedback! I know it's been ages since I updated this one. Many of you might have forgotten this! 😆
This one's for you Aarti aka Anjali33! ❤️ Thank you for motivating me not to give up on this one! Love you! ❤️

Section V:

The Beginnings of the Struggle

Part 1: A Friend in Need is a Friend Indeed

Saturday, 1st October, 1994, 3.30 am:

All through the night, when Vishakha left, Sameer lay down on his bed thinking- about Rakesh's words, about what Somani had said about him and his father. Could it be really true? Could his dad actually have been responsible for that financial bungling? His heart said no, but his mind argued that he couldn't know. And Nanu himself had confided in Sameer that his father had actually been the culprit. With a deep, sickening feeling, he rolled around, remembering how it had felt when he'd been labeled a thief back in school, that too for no fault of his. He'd begged people to listen to him, tried to prove his innocence, yet had failed. No one had listened to him. Not even Naina. Even she had chosen to trust her brother over him. He didn't blame her. All evidences were against him. And Naina didn't know him well enough. To be honest, he'd for a brief inkling actually contemplated the theft, when Nanu had chipped in his advice about following the right path everytime. And then, he remembered what had happened to his own father in retaliation to his alleged dishonesty and had immediately decided against it.

The relief he'd felt when Arjun had admitted to his folly was cathartic. Naina had prodded Arjun into accepting his crime and that Naina knew of his sincerity meant the world to him. It had been solely his decision to let the blame rest on him, rather than mar the image of Arjun and Rakesh sir only a few days before he'd left for college. But even when the ban on him was lifted, he saw doubt in many of the students' eyes. It was as if they thought that maybe the principal was under pressure from the school's trustee or maybe his riches and influence had worked to forgive Sameer despite the outrageous act.

He shuddered to think how his dad would have borne the burden of being called a cheat, if he had been indeed innocent. Shouldn't his mother at least have known the truth about him? She's still convinced though about his chicanery though. He had to find out and rest the matter once and for all. If his dad was innocent, he'll clear his name and if he wasn't, well, he'll live with it and try his best all his life not to let anyone taunt him for following his footsteps. He'll prove himself- he can work hard. He can fend for himself and Naina. He may not have all the riches his Nanu could amass, but he decided that from now on, each and every penny that he spent would come from his own hard work.

As the rays of the dawn broke out, Sameer freshened up and bathed. He lit a diya in the pujaghar for the first time in his life and prayed to God to bless him with success in the journey he was about to embark upon.

He reached the factory at dot 8. Munshiji, elated to see Sameer so prompt to work, immediately began briefing him on the supplies that'd just arrived from Surat. Since that day, Sameer worked day in and out at the factory, trying to understand the intricacies he hadn't till now. It had been exactly two weeks since he'd spoken to Naina, but he didn't let that deter his focus. She would understand. She would sustain. Deep down, he however feared if her family was searching for prospective grooms for her already. He sent a note to her explaining the circumstances in detail through Munna and Pandit, who in turn relayed the message to Swati and finally it reached Naina. Naina held onto the note like her life depended upon it. In a way, it actually did. She spent her many of her waking hours in prayers for him to succeed and for them to be united for life.

***

Thursday, 20th October, 1994, 5.30 pm:

Rohan was striding on his bike, when he caught sight of the woman who'd smitten him at first sight. He noticed her almond eyes, her shapely physique, the luscious lips and the way her long ravenous hair swayed in the wind. Her expression was forlorn as she walked behind her sister and aunt, clutching the vegetable bag. He knew she was lost in thoughts of Sameer, but not for long. Soon, she would be his and he would see to it that she never remains sad in life. He'd buy her the luxuries of the world, anything and everything her heart desires. He'd shower her with his love abound and then she would forget Sameer and love him. Love Rohan! He blushed to himself at these thoughts and parked his bike to a side.

As Bela and Preeti haggled for the vegetables, Rohan whispered out to her from a corner. Naina looked around and as soon as she saw Rohan, her eyes lit up with surprise. Sameer's brother! He must have come with a message from him. Have they agreed? Is everything set? Surreptiously, she sneaked over to him and as soon as she came to face him, she uttered, "Rohan bhaiya!

The use of the word Bhaiya' irked Rohan. Steel yourself Rohan. This shall pass.

"Uhh Naina...bhaiya vaiya bolne ki need nahi...I'm your friend! Rohan put on his most winning smile.

Naina smiled back, but the next moment, she barged at him with questions about Sameer, his well-being, the situation in the family as to their marriage. "Main jaanti hun Sameer factory mein acha kar raha hai...mujhe pura yakeen hai wo jaldi hi apne pairon pe khada hoke papa ka dil jeet lega!

Her words hit Rohan hard. How did she know that Sameer was working in the factory these days? Of course! They had mutual friends! And from the likes of it, she seemed positive of his success. Seeing his own chances dampening and her lack of interest in pursuing a conversation pertaining him, his life, his likes and aspirations; he took leave of Naina, though not before casting her another lovelorn look. Naina didn't notice it though as it was then that she was called upon by Bela and Preeti. Upon questioning her whereabouts, she lied that she was looking at the jhumkas on the stall nearby.

As Rohan sped away on his bike, he decided to speak to his father. Mr. Somani sat across from him in the evening and listened to his son's ramblings.

"Toh agar Sameer business mein acha karne laga to use kaun rokega dad...wo to easily Naina se shaadi kar lega na? Aur Naina to abhi tak flat hai uspe..mujhe bhi parso wapis jana hai...main uske saath waqt nahi bita sakta...already vacations extend kar li hain maine...pata chale is beech yeh dono premi firse mil jayein...fir mera kya hoga dad?

Mr. Somani nodded and then gestured him to sit still as he contemplated on the future course of actions for a while.

"Rohan...tum tension mat lo...kal se Sameer factory nahi jayega...aur tumhari maa aur hum bhi Dilli wapis jayenge...dekhte hain Sameer kaise jeetata hai Naina ko!

Rohan looked astounded at his father's declaration. He began with a string of whats and hows and whens but Mr. Somani quietnened him with a you'll see and left the room.

***

Sunday, 23th October, 1994, 9.30 pm:

The chilly October winds greeted Sameer and he shivered. He'd decided against taking his pullover with him. The only thing he had with him were the clothes he was wearing. He walked and walked, towards Naina's society, shivering in the cold. There he waited under the balcony for a glimpse of her, but she didn't come out. He cast a dejected look at the PCO, knowing it was no use trying to call her now as the family had got the phone disconnected to Anand's house. Jaded with the events of the past few days, Sameer took shelter near a small bonfire that had been lighted by some labourers a while back and rubbed his palms together for warmth.

The next morning, Sameer found that he'd dozed off on the street where the bonfire had been, and people were now bustling about on the roads. He rubbed his eyes open and saw that the labourers who were sleeping besides him were already off to their day's work. He walked aimlessly, figuring out what to do. He then crossed a restaurant and the enticing smell of brewing tea and hot pakoras greeted his nostrils. Inadvertently, Sameer's hands fished inside his pockets, but they came out empty as expected. He was broke now. He entered the restaurant nevertheless and spotted the rest room, deciding to at least freshen himself up.

He emerged a few minutes later and saw that in addition to the pakoras and jalebis, a new batch of samosas were being fried. The man at the stall noticed him and asked, "bolo sahab...kya loge...garma garam samosa hai...jalebi...khakra...fafda...bhajji!

Sameer tried to quell the pangs of hunger in his stomach. He hadn't even eaten last night. Slowly, he shook his head politely and walked off. Throughout the day, he walked around the locality, searching for a job, in shops and more importantly, for a place to spend the coming night in. He hadn't showered all day today and he felt extremely uncomfortable. He didn't even have money to buy a bottle of water. It was already half past four, when Sameer plopped himself on the bench dismally, wondering if Somani was indeed right and if he should return home and beg him for a job to win Naina, when he heard some familiar voices. He looked up and for the first time in the day, his eyes lit up.

"Munna? Pandit? Tum log yahan kya kar rahe ho?

"Yeh sawaal to humein tujhse puchna chahiye!

They quickly scrambled besides him on the bench and started bombarding him with questions. They were blabbering how they'd been calling him all night and when they went to his house in morning, Ramdhari was in tears that he'd left the house.

Sameer narrated the entire incident to his friends and they listened astonished. How could all this have happened?

"Aur Vishakha mausi kahan gayi...unhone tujhe nahi roka?

Sameer shook his head and snorted. "Unhe bhi bharosa nahi raha apne bete pe!

When they heard that Sameer had spent the entire night outside in biting cold, they were taken aback. "Bhai kamse kam hume phone to kar deta...hamare ghar aa jata! "Tune kuch khaya piya hai ke nahi? They started when Sameer interjected, "yaar tum dono jao...yeh meri ladai hai khud ko saabit karne ki...tum log already mere liye bahot kuch kar chuke ho!

"Haan to sab akele hi karna hai tune? Kal ko humein zarurat hogi to kya tu hamein akela chod dega? Tujhe jaan se zyada pyaar karte hain hum! Aur tu hai ki...ek hi pal mein paraya kar diya...main, mera kabse karne laga tu Sameer? Munna uttered.

Pandit nodded his head, "iska dimag fir gyaa hai...wo Safari suit ko ignore maar yaar...hum Naina bhabhi ko le aayenge...bhaga lenge re...tum dono ki shaadi karayenge...fir dekhte hain kya bolta hai wo khadus!

"Acha...bhaga bhi laaye...fir kya? Kya khilaunga use...kya pehnaunga use...kis chatt ke niche rakhunga jab mere pass kuch hoga hi nahi? Sameer exclaimed bitterly.

Munna and Pandit turned silent at his words.

"Sach kadwa hota hai...kya galat kehte hain log...maine aaj tak kuch karke dikhaya thodi hai jo kisi ko meri qabiliyat pe bharosa ho, ki Sameer sach mein imaandari se kaam kar sakta hai...sahi to kaha Mr. Somani ne- Rohan sach mein bahot talented hai aur main uske muqable mein kuch nahi.

"Sameer...yaar tu.., Munna started, but Sameer cut him off. "Nahi yaar! Abhi mujhe filhaal ek naukri chahiye...aur raat bitane ke liye ek jagah!

Munna quickly proposed, "raat tu mere ghar bitayega jab tak kuch thikana nahi mil jata...bhai khud se jung achi baat hai...lekin jung jeetne ke liye sirf jasba hi nahi...dimag ki bhi zarurat hoti hai...

"Par Munna...ab mujhe kisi ka ehsaan nahi chahiye!

"Ehsaan nahi ise udhar samajh...ekdum dhandhe wali baat kar raha hai yeh ek Marwari dusre se...jab kamane layak bane to ise chuka dena...abhi chal please! Varna hum dono raat bhar tere saath yahin rahenge! Munna exclaimed.

Sameer argued with the duo for sometime, before he gave in. The duo treated him to some tea, water and snacks and then they hired the rickshaw and made way towards Munna's home.


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Posted: 6 years ago

The one thing I loved was Naina calling Rohan Bhaiyya! That made me laugh out loud. But, on a serious note can't he just get the hint?! Ugh, he will ruin three lives due to his stubbornness.


Sameer is going through a bad time right now. On one side, all the doubts about his father's innocence and on anther side, he is left to fend for himself. Naina is also away from him though their hearts remains close. Their love is strong enough to emerge out as the winner in the battlefield.


Munna and Pandit, time and again prove they are Sameer's brothers. Their love and care for him is unconditional. He is blessed to have them.


Update soon, Sur Di! 😊

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Posted: 6 years ago
Waiting for this one sooo long!!! Is story pe rohan ke character dynamics thode alag hai but I really loved this( preedit supporter ) !!! Aur ye somani aur vishakha!! Inse aur expect hi kya kiya ja sakta hai. Ab sameer khudh kuch karke dikhayega aur aur aur naina ko aapna banayega!!! Aur wo naina ka rohan bhaiya bulana😆😆 itna dil ko sukoon mila ki kya batao, naina to sirf sameer ki hi hoga😳 !!! Hope sameer ko jaldi job mil jaaye aur mundit hai to hum e tension lene ki zaroorat nahi!! Aise dost to har kisiko milna chahiye😃 Rah dekhungi next update ki, jaldi de diyo Sur di!! aur thanku for pm!!

With love,Suparna
Edited by Suparna13 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Rohan bhaiya 🤣 It cracked me up! Somani chahe kuch bhi karle sameer will win his naina. Kash sameer naina se thodi der mil pata toh sameer ko thoda himmat milti. And this rohan is such a dumbo 😆 Mundit r love! How can they leave their brother in his bad time! They will be always by his side.
Edited by Rph09 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Yeh somani😡
Ab Sameer mehnat krke bada Banega 😳


Thanks for PM
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Posted: 6 years ago
This was too short sur
yeh toh start hote hi khtm hogya
ab I am upset
lekin main upset hone ke bawajud bta deti hu kaisa laga

Sameer is obviously in a dilemma that whether his father was the culprit or not
and I think anyone will be because you would never imagine your father your role model doing something wrong..I really wish that his father is proved innocent and it is proved that somani was involed in that embezzlement as well..

Naina ne unintentionally Rohan ko bhaiya bulakar bhut shi kia.
Is rohan ko toh main itna maaru ki sir phod du
but I am sure that jb sameer ko pta chlega what is this Rohan voh usse sach main jaan se maar dega.
Rohan is dudh pita hua bacha khud hoga nhi kuch
ro ro kar apne papa ke pass phuch jaata hain
mujhe naina chahiye
shadi bhi khud kr lega kya ya uske liye bhi papa baith jaye.

What has this somani done that Sameer is out of his own house and business something similar that happened with his father
Yeh vish ko toh nag log bhej do
this woman is an idiot
Bilkul sameer ki maa kehlane ke layak nhi hain
she trusts every body expect him.
Mundit the all time savior are there for him
voh sameer ko kbhi akela chor hi nhi skte chahe duniya idhar ki udhar ho jaye.
Now I am really awaiting that how a fallen Sameer will stand up
and stand soo tall
that Rohan Somani and that Rakesh will all feel very tiny in front of his that he can pick them with his little finger..

Continue soon
Edited by munchkinland - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Hi .Finally you updated the story .I was waiting for this story for so long.
Coming to the update. It was a sweet update.I loved samundit's bonding and how they care for each other.I hope Sameer will find a job soon and he will win.
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Posted: 6 years ago
Awesome update. Somani to bada hi bura hai. Aisa kya hua ki Sameer sadak pe Aa gaya? But finally we are very excited to see the enthralling struggle story of sameer to win his lady love. Show me to Rohan bahut accha laga tha but madam se yaha to much tod dene ka Mann ho raha hai😡 .Di Desperate👏 to read next update

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