Her Prince Will Come (21 Parts, Complete Including Epilogue )

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It was a cold evening when the nurses walked through the asylum checking off names.

A woman sat at her windowsill, watching the rain fall, she pushed her hand out allowing the rain to fall on her hand.

Giggling, she stuck her face out of the window, closing her eyes she felt the rain fall on her face.

Pushing her wet hand through her long black locks she shook her hair and laughed again.

Grasping a doll in her hand, she rocked it backwards and forwards "Dont cry baby, look at the rain"

Frowning she patted the dolls head, closing her eyes she sang "Aa leke chalun tujhko
Ek aise desh mein
Milti hain jahan khushiyan
Pariyon ke bhes mein
Milti hain jahan khushiyan
Pariyon ke bhes mein
Pariyon ke bhes mein"

The nurse arrived at her room "Hey look shes singing that song again"
The other nurse laughed "Just leave her to it, shes been with us for years, dont think anyone cares for her"

"Avni Ayesha, have you finished your food" asked the nurse

"Thats not my name, I told you that isnt my name" yanking on her hair she began to sob
"Okay, okay calm down what is your name then"

"I, I dont know" Avni cried

Biting her lip she wiped her tears "Avni something"
The nurse stood up to walk away

Standing up she banged on the now closed door "My prince will come for me just you watch"

The nurse shook her head, the same drama every night but no one ever came



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Neil picked up the pink teddy bear, pulling it to his chest he looked at the sonogram on the wall.

Closing his eyes he remembered the day he got the news that made him the happiest man in the world.

*FLASHBACK*

"Guess who" Avni smiled as she put her hands over Neil's eyes
"Hm, DD"

Slapping him on the shoulder she turned him around
Wrapping his arms around her waist he tugged her forward

"Yes my darling wife"
Pouting she looked away
Grabbing her chin, he pressed a kiss to her lips

Smiling she pulled back and tugged him with her to the spare room
Showing him the cot

He looked over at her "Really"
Nodding he picked her up, spinning her around

Putting her down he grabbed her cheeks and kissed her forehead "You have made me the happiest man"

"Do you want a girl or boy" she asked
"I want a little Avni"
Pouting she shook her head "I want a little Neil"

*FLASHBACK OVER*

In the end Neil had got his wish, she was pregnant with a girl

But then Vidyut snatched away his chance at happiness, killing the woman he loved and his first child

He had called it revenge, but in which world was revenge killing an innocent unborn child and a woman with a soul as beautiful as his Avni

Looking into the mirror, his eyes shun red
Anger consumed him as he smashed the mirror with his hand

He had failed Avni, he couldnt keep her safe.
But he would get his revenge and then he would join his Avni and his baby.

In heaven.

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"ACP Khanna, I need you to go to Rosenox Asylum and meet the head doctor there tomorrow"
Neil looked at his senior "What would you like me to do there sir"

"Theres been claims of abuse there, just interview him"
Neil nodded, walking away he stopped

"Neil, you havent took your medication yet"
Blinking fast he stepped forward

"Avni"
She laughed, a tinkling laugh "Of course, who else would it be"
Resting her hand on the bottom of his back she led him towards his desk

"Take your tablets or no kisses for hmm a year" poking her tounge out she smiled
Neil listened straight away, amazed at this rare moment

As he downed his water to wash away his tablet he looked up to see she was gone
Slamming his hand over the glass his eyes teared up

Picking up the photograph, the blood on his hand ran over her face in the photo
Scrubbing it, he let out a broken sob

Avni sat on the floor behind another patient, plaiting her hair she hummed

"You know my prince is going to come get me soon, rescue me from here"
The girl smiled "Whats his name"

Avni shook her head "I dont know, but I know hes coming , my prince will never leave me here alone"

"Avni Ayesha room now" the warden shouted
Avni stopped frozen, standing up slowly she followed the warden to the room

"What did I say about talking about this prince"
The warden raised his hand, slapping her across the face she fell to the floor

Lifting his keys he pushed it down her arm
"Tell me who owns you"

Avni sobbed "You"
"And whats my name" he growled

"Karan" she screamed as he grabbed her hair

Pushing his shoe into her face, he walked away as she sobbed on the floor

"Guriya" she shouted
Grabbing her doll he threw it out of the room as she crawled to grab it he slammed her fingers in the door

Opening the door she held her fingers to chest


Karan bit into his apple, leaning against the wall he winked at the nurse "She dies tomorrow, the paperwork is ready to make it look like a suicide "
Anjali high fived him as she went on her break
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"Avni come and dance with us" shouted a patient
Avni looked around to ensure Karan wasnt there, then stood up and walked to the centre of the room

Hey dhin tadaak dhin tadaak
Aa jaa ud ke saraat
Pairon se bedi zaraa khol
Nagaade sang dhol baaje, dhol baaje
Dhaayn dhaayn dham dham dhaayn


Avni knocked her ankles together, holding a girls hand she span around as she laughed

Neil pushed the car door open, walking up to the gates, he buzzed to be let in
Lifting his foot he stepped forward

Re khat-khat, haan khat-khat
Baaje dastak wo naa ab tak aaya
Re tab se, haan tab se
Haan dekhi raahein
Ki ab tu khol baahein aaja
Umad-ghumad ghoome,
re machle re mora mann
Goonje re baalam ke bol


Neil signed in at reception, after being directed to the office, he walked slowly over
Lifting his hand he knocked on the door

Avni ran to a crying girl on the floor, pulling the girl in for a hug she stroked her hair
"Your prince will come to " she whispered as she rocked the girl

Lili limbudi re, leelo nagarvel no chhod
Parbhu parodh na re
Maar gher uttaara karta jaao
Utaaro nahi karun re
Maar gher Sita juve vaat
Sita ekla re
Juve ram-lakhan ni vaat


Avni sighed heavily, resting an elbow on the window sill she looked out to the sky
Putting her hands together she closed her eyes, praying for her prince to save her

Neil sat on the chair in the office, his fingers drumming on the table
Looking at the idol of Ram and Sita he smiled
Closing his eyes he remembered a time when his coupling with Avni was compared to that of Ram and Sita

"Shall we look around first" asked Leo
Neil stood up, shaking his hand and followed him out of the room

O pal-pal re pal-pal beet'ta jal-jal
Naach ab chal aaja
Re thar-thar thar-thar haan kaanpe thar-thar
Haan dar dar jee se darr ab na na
Baaghon mein bola, bola re bola mor,
badla re dil ka bhoogol


Avni span around to the music, the white on her clothes blurring as she spun around
Her hair fell from its hold ontop of her hair

Neil stopped by the room, his hand now a fist as he breathed in the air
He watched as a woman span around fast, the Doctor's voice a distant sound as he focused on the girl as she fell to the ground facing away from him

Nagaade sang dhol baaje, dhol baaje
Dhaayn dhaayn dham dham dhaayn


Avni looked up to see Karan looking down at her
Pressing his shoe onto her already broken fingers he put his finger to his lips "shh"

Neil walked along the corridor, so close to his beloved, yet so far away

Hi! So I had another thought for a story, im not sure wether to keep it as a short story or a long one
So any comments will be really helpful x
Edited by Mayakhan12 - 8 years ago
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So basically Neil thinks that Avni is dead whereas she is not. Great concept but I wanted Avni to be a strong woman and not a damsel in distress. Intrigued to ur story.. continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Btw I'm glad that you are posting so many ffs but one request: don't leave any ffs in between..All the best
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Originally posted by: Zara_Imam

So basically Neil thinks that Avni is dead whereas she is not. Great concept but I wanted Avni to be a strong woman and not a damsel in distress. Intrigued to ur story.. continue soon

Thank you, dont worry she will have her moment I promise, im not a fan of the damsel in distress either x
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Originally posted by: Zara_Imam

Btw I'm glad that you are posting so many ffs but one request: don't leave any ffs in between..All the best

Dont worry I wont ever leave a story unfinished , thank you!:)
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Thank you x

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