AvNeil OS (On Recent Track 22/9/2017)

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hello guys,
I am not back with update of my old stories but I am here with a New one.
I was thinking about the recent track and all and then this idea came into my mind. So I just penned it down.
I hope you all will like it.
Nahi toh jute chappal hai hi fenk k maarne ko... Hahahaha..

But if you like it, then please like and give your valuable comment..

Love you all...

Now coming back to story...


Neil finally get into the Rang Mahal as he has promised Raghu Pandit or say Ragini Pandit. It was Dashami. The day when Ram kills Ravan and Maa Durga kills Mahishasur and this day shows the great win of Good over Evil. An evil person try and get small success that doesn't mean that evil has won the war because it's not the great war. The great war was, is and will be always win by good.

The small win when Amol gave the information about Neil's investigation to Dayawanti who further conveyed it to Ragini Pandit may made them think that evil has won. But the master plan of Neil, Neela Maa and DD including others worked. And now Neil was in Rang Mahal, exposed Ragini Pandit and she was being handcuffed.

"Neil, you are really just a young boy who is just energetic to win this small war because you are still not aware of me. You don't know what else I can do." RP mockingly said this to Neil.

"Aye Pandit, You have lost this war. And remember today is Vijay Dashmi. And I have told you that I will catch you before getting this over. And see you are getting your punishment. And I will make sure you are kept in that cell from where you will not even see the sunlight." Neil said glaring RP..

"Hahahaha.. I think you are forgetting something? Did you find your Sita?" RP said and then laughed menacingly.

And then only Neil realized that Avni is nowhere to be seen..

"No, no, no... I can't let it happen.. I can't let Avni go away or let anything to happen to her. Oh God! Where is she? Nooo... I have to find her." Neil was panicking from inside.

"Take her to the jail and be careful." Neil ordered DD and the other officials...

He went to search Avni. DD sent RP with other officials and went behind his Neil Sir.

Both were searching for Avni frantically..

"Avni! Avni! Where are you? Avni! Avniii!" Neil was shouting at the top of his voice.

He heard some movement and went behind it and then he saw Her.
Juhi was trying to get out of the room.
All the memories with Juhi came flooding back in Neil's mind. He ran to her and helped her out of the room. It was the moment of weakness for Neil as he forget about Avni and was totally concerned about Juhi.

And then Juhi hugged him, tightly.
And he hugged her back. He started crying and apologizing that he was not able to know about the fraudulently and believed that she was dead and all. He started blaming him and was crying in her nape.
And then it hit him hard.

AVNI...

He abruptly broke the hug and shook Juhi and asked, "Where is Avni? Juhi tell me? Where is MY AVNI?"

And that's when Juhi realized that he was not Her Neil the man who is standing in front of her is Avni ka Neil..

"Wo.. wo..wo.. Avni..." Juhi was stammering and trying to tell him.

"Wo kya wo?? Damn it Juhi... Please tell me where is Avni?" Neil shouted. Because he was loosing his patience. And he will not get it back until he finds Avni safe and sound.

He can't loose her. He can't even imagine a life without Avni. He will die if anything happens to her Avni.

"Dayawanti Mehta took Avni." Juhi revealed.

Neil stumbled back.
"Nahi, Avni ko kuchh nahi ho sakta. Main use kuchh nahi hone doonga. Nahi.. Mujhe Avni ko khojna hi hoga. I have to find her. I can't let anything happen to her. No.. no.. no... I have to find her." Neil was mumbling and crying and just wiping his face with both his hand. (One he does whenever he is tensed)

And then he started running.

"Neil! wait.." Juhi cried and ran behind him.

"Sir! Sir!" DD also ran behind him.

Neil saw DM forcing Avni to get into the car. Avni's hands were tied and her mouth was taped.

"Avniii!" Neil shouted.

Both DM and Avni turned around to see Neil running towards them.

"Now, Neil will also see you die in front of his eyes. Aaj main iss paap k beej ka vinash kr k rahungi" DM laughed and pushed Avni in the car and drove it from there.

Neil was still far behind. He just took out his car keys and started following that car with full speed.
DD also went in another car behind Neil. Juhi was with DD.

DM stopped the car near the cliff and forcefully grabbed Avni towards the cliff..

"Today you will die for good. Uss manhoos ghadi mein tu bach gyi thi lekin aaj, aaj maa ka aashirwad mere saath hai. Aaj tu nahi bachegi." DM said and pulled out the tape from Avni's mouth.

"Dayawanti! Mera Neil mujhe bachane aa rha hai. Achhai ki burayi pe Jeet ho k rahegi. Ram k haatho Raavan ka vadh likha h. Chahe wo satyug ho chahe kalyug." Avni replied.

And then Neil's car came to a scratching halt.
He came out of the car and ran towards Avni.

"Aage aane ki koshish bhi mat karna Neil. Warna iss ladki ho yahan se neeche fenk dungi wo bhi tumhare aankhon k saamne." DM said and then she just held Avni right along the cliff..

"Nahi.. Dayawanti, dekho aisa krne ki koshish bhi mat krna. Use baad tum bach k kahin nahi jaa paogi. Avni ko chhod do. Tm kanoon k haatho se nahi bach sakti." Neil tried to threaten DM.

"Main agar ise maar dungi fir bhi police mujhe pakdegi or agar chhod dungi fir bhi. To q na iss paap k beej ka vinash kr k Bhagwan ka kaam aasan kar doon." DM said laughing menacingly.

"Dekho Dayawanti, Avni ko jaane do. Please use kuchh mat karo. Tum jo kahogi main wo karne ko taiyar hoon." Neil tried to pacify her.

"Hahhahahahaha. Neil Khanna! Ye mujhe bhi pata hai or tumhe bhi ki tum Mera peechha nahi chhodoge. Toh main iss ladki ko q zinda rehne doon" DM said putting the fact.

Neil took out his gun and start moving towards them.
He was looking directly into Avni's eyes as trying to convey some message to her. And she was getting the message.

"Aage aane ki koshish bhi mat karna, warna main iss ladki ko yahan se neeche fenk dungi." DM tried to scare Neil.

"Tum toh waise bhi Avni ko zinda nahi chhodne wali. So, go ahead. Do your work. And I will do mine." Neil said coming forward.

DM brings Avni as a shield in front of her.

"Now, go ahead. Shoot me." DM tried to enrage Neil.

Neil just nodded his head and Avni elbowed DM and falls on the ground and then the gun shot was heard.

DM falls on the ground with bullet near her heart and then Neil shoots her again just to confirm she dies.

Then he dropped the gun their only and ran towards Avni.
He opened the rope and took her in his embrace, tightly.
No words were spoken. Just their heartbeat were heard and both their clothes were getting wet due to each other's tears.

And that's how the chapter of Dayawanti Mehta and Raghu Pandit ended from the life of AvNeil.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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I am the first..
An OS from the Shailu.. It was so awesome.. Specially all the dialogues.
Did you find your Sita? I just loved this one.
Neil asking Juhi about Avni.. Yaar I am so excited to see Juhi's expression at that time.
I wish RP gets some good blow from Avni and all the gurls at Rang Mahal before going back to her personal room.. Ie jail.
Neil saving Avni.. Nice scene.. But I wish Juhi could witness his eternal love for Mrs Tillu..
Hope you're comfortable at the new place.. Keep writing more if you get time.. Your writing has a different flavour. I feel like someone is narrating me the scenes..

Edited by vu1998 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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shallu u rocked it again.me the 2nd...yay..hehe😆 .arre yaar voh dialogues toh aise lag rahe thai jaise tune mujhe story narrate kari hai.mai toh juhi ko neil ke avni ke eternal love feelings ko completely dekhna chaati hoon.even i want that juhi and dd dshouldave seen the scenario..aur dm ka kaam khatam.gm ko toh umarkaid milni chahiye.poor juhi.show mai prostitute .kaash usko justice mil jaaye.aur gm aka rp ki band juhi aur avni ke haato ho toh maja aa jaye.ohhh mai apne crazy thoughts ko post mai kaise likhna band karoon.shallu epilogue aur 2 updates are necessary for this story.it should be an fs or 4 -5 shots.did u find ur sita?i just loved it..aur rp ka personal room,uska jail.hahah..neil saving avni was nice..teri writing,uska kya flavour hai,kya tadk hai yaar.keep writing when u have time...and thx again for this awesome os
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Superb Dear
Finally acchai ki Jeet hui
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Posted: 7 years ago
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nice
loved the end of DM
Neil rocks 😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Intriguing os
The whole drama ends with dayawanti' death
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Amazing. I hope we see the end of Dayavanti soon in the show too.

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