Arshi TS: Predestination; Note & Last part- Page 21; 29th Aug - Page 12

hi, just got to read the 3 chapters. And i was shocked that everyone, even Arnav was defending a jerk. It doesnt matter what Vihan shares with his wife. He cheated on Khushi, in the worst way. If he cudnt share the truth with her. he cudve ateast kept his pants on, before breaking up with her.

Originally posted by: Ssanjinika

Hi,

I just happened to catch both twistergirl's os and your' continuation of the same. While I felt the OS in-itself was beautifully written and complete on its own, I commend you for trying to take it forward.

Your idea is well-written but I wish you had started from where she had left it...Arnav in love with the beautiful girl who fell into his life - serendipity - predestination indeed.

I was disappointed that he forgot meeting the girl who had captured his heart in just a glance.

My sympathies are with Khushi. Though her reaction is childish, what she feels is real and very natural. One may move on, one may find happiness with someone else and in fact, should find happiness with someone else...but that doesn't mean that one can ever forget a betrayal especially since it happened at the hands of the people she had been closest to, when she least expected it...and after the way she came to know about Vihaan and Lavanya, I highly doubt if she ever would. I hated Arnav for sounding like the pompous prick that he came across as. Especially when he went on about the 'true love' Vivan and Lavanya had for each other. Really??

Forget Vihaan...Payal, her betrayal was much worse because she is the 'best' friend. There is nothing, nothing that can excuse her. I would expect any friend of Khushi to be angered on her behalf...

I guess what I am trying to say is betrayal even if comes from a person you were not close to hurts and would take a long time to forget. This betrayal came from her childhood friend who was later engaged to her - at least, that what she had thought they were and her 'best' friend who should have been looking out for her. It would be a scar that would never fade in her life.

Arnav has no clue about women and even less about relationships and feelings. He needs to redeem himself and big time! I hope in the next update you shown Arnav feeling like if not love for Khushi and is more sympathetic to her pain. It has to be with his love that she finds the strength to forgive her betrayers...forget will take a long time and years of love.

Sorry for ranting...but I was so angry on Khushi's behalf 😳

perfect anaysis 👏

I agree

As much as I wanted to say that I liked the practical approach of this story...I just can't!!! It's not practical to scold someone who got hurt by extremely selfish ppl at the same time defend those jerks ...a real friend would rather say " hey just kick their ass or if you can't just move on make a happy life for yourself forget them"""




Arnav needs a real time lesson on friends and relationships !!!!!!!! More than those jerks it's Arnav and her friends stand towards the whole catastrophic event has hurts me...

Originally posted by: TwisterGirl

Hey Jayeeta, first of all, thank you for continuing this story. Honestly, when I had conceptualized this story, I had in mind, a beautiful love at first sight story, wherein two strangers meet... and then they meet again and again and again...!😳

Well, you have taken this story to a different tangent all together. I had wanted Arnav to pick up the snippets from Khushi's panic talk in the lift and use it to bring laughter and annoyance in Khushi's life. I had also thought of showing a very apologizing Payal who would have earned her forgiveness later on. Ahh well, about Vihan, I had thought of him as a jerk who had simply had a fling with Lavanya and was out of Khushi's life for good.

All in all, a very light hearted and feel good story.⭐️

Well anyway, now since I am not continuing this, lets forget about all I said above. I had to tell you this, because you asked for it.

Usually, showing reality in stories is a really tough thing to do (which is more because there is enough reality in our real lives to deal with 😆), so I have to applaud you for turning this into an out and out practical stories. Whatever you showed in Khushi's life, regarding her job and love life... its all very practical. Not everyone lands with a handsome job at the beginning of their career and they struggle and struggle to find like-minded people and a worthy career.

I dont really want to comment about the characters because I believe it is difficult to shape them in 2-3 chapters. But honestly, I dont see any difference in Shreya, sujata or even Anjali. So far, I dont feel there is enough chemistry between Arnav and Khushi... as they have even forgotten their first meeting (which made me feel like crying!!! 😭😭😭). Arnav, I feel, talks more like an acquaintance, which is probably what he is at this point, for having Payal as his family and literally no connection with Khushi at all. I had imagined Khushi to be a chatterbox, a girl who speaks without filtering, as she did in the first shot. Hence, I found it very strange that Khushi sacrificed her feelings by hiding Vihan's truth from their families. It seemed a little hard to digest that her parents didnt know the truth as she had screamed it out loud in front of everyone during Payal's wedding... well well well... let me stop here and take shelter before you come after me with a sword and a chappal.

Please forgive me in advance if I went a notch above while sharing my thoughts... but then I would only say that... reality is hard to digest and not to mention a little sad 😲Overall, you have done a very good job with the story, since it takes place six months after Payal's wedding. I could not imagine myself doing it any better... so keep writing :)

And a bada wala thank you for completing this👏👏👏

The childish yet mature 'foot in the mouth' Khushi and the laughing, yet stable 'in-love' Arnav who teasingly drags Khushi into forgetting her pain and falling for him is what I would have loved to see

Khusi has found true friendship n now she should move on bcoz her friends are right you can't love a person by force it just happens n same was the case with vihaan so n also she should forgive payal n move on in true sense.

Originally posted by: Arilip

As much as I wanted to say that I liked the practical approach of this story...I just can't!!! It's not practical to scold someone who got hurt by extremely selfish ppl at the same time defend those jerks ...a real friend would rather say " hey just kick their ass or if you can't just move on make a happy life for yourself forget them"""

True khushi needs to move on and be happy in her life but she didn't need such insensitivity by her own friends...n Arnav!!!! " sorry to burst your bubble " really!!!! the whole update felt like the ppl who healed her just thought of having fun with knife and salt 🥱

Vihan is a third class jerk who betrayed khushi in worst possible way...it's not like she caught her high school boyfriend making out with some girl...they were childhood friends and were engaged to be married...and Arnav and her friends tried to justify that he fell in love with lavanya...like really!!! It's alright to move on from a relationship if you are not sure when you come across the one you are reall sure...but no way it's justified to cheat on the person who trusted you...I agree with Arnav that vihan did momentary error by saying khushi those things...but that jerk happily moved on !!! forget apologies he didn't even try to make things clear with the families and khushi had to take all the brunt...and she is being childish!!!! I agree that khushi needed to let go of anger towards those ppl and Arnav and her Friends had all the rights to scold her and make her see the truth...but all they did was rubbed salt on her wounds by defending Payal and that jerk...

Don't start me on Payal...no friend can do what she did to her best friend...and then she got busy like really and Arnav is justifying that!!!! So according to Arnav backstabbing your best friend without any regrets ( yes no regrets otherwise there are many ways to say a simple sorry if one is really regretful) is justified just because you are in love with your spouse 😆 ...yes we do move on and priorities change but not when we did something which hurt someone whom we feared to loose ( isn't that the reason Payal didn't tell khushi about vihan) I can't justify a person who on the face was a bestie of a girl and on back enjoying double date with a guy who is cheating her!!!! If I don't have the guts to come clean with my friend atleast I would cut the guy off my acquaintance!!!!!

Arnav needs a real time lesson on friends and relationships !!!!!!!! More than those jerks it's Arnav and her friends stand towards the whole catastrophic event has hurts me...

another good comment. I just hope now Khushi doesnt go and say sorry to Paya. She shud have ateast that much sef respect.

Can I hit Arnav on the head? Like really! Sorry to burst your bubble it seems.

Agreed Khushi needs to move on and not wallow in self pity but the way Arnav put it out there was t insensitive. He praised Lavanya and made it look like it was ok for Vihaan to cheat on her . Vihaan didn't apologize for cheating on her , he didn't break up with her if he was falling out of love plus Payal hid these things from khushi. And PayAl didn't have the courtesy to reach out to her . So much for being her bestie... Also, Arnav siding with payal and asking khushi y she didn't reach out to her also is pretty lame considering it's payal who needs to apologize and not the other way round..They all did backstab her and it was not khushi's fault to feel depressed . Arnav comes across as an insensitive person here as he actually goes on and tells her how vihaan truly loves La and how La is really nice and beautiful. Even if arnav was khushi's friend all this time, it shows that he didn't really care bcos of the way he lectured her about her shortcomings regarding the whole thing . All in all, this chapter was a hard pill to swallow considering Arnav's whole outlook on the situation. A depressed person might not need a reality check to show the ' truth' but some selfless love and care ..I hope khushi won't reach out and call payal , Vihaan etc and apologize for cutting them all off ... bcos they don't deserve her friendship ..they are all jerks ...I just don't like this Arnav..I didn't expect him to fall for her or anything but knowing her story , his way of dealing with her is just not done .

Khushi does need to come out of her past and move on. Payal and Vihan do share some blame here. They didn't handle things in a mature way.