Alfaaz - A ShraMan FF - Now Moved to Wattpad - Page 56

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reshmanair356 thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hey Zoya,
This must perhaps be the most delayed comment of mine on your story..blame it on vacation and meeting parents after long 😃

Lehja was beautiful really...Be it Sumo's outburst or Shravan's knock out reply to that. .you gave us a scene we loved. Shravan didn't slam the phone in anger or he didn't sulk in despair..he answered, for once we saw a Shravan who spoke and not just reacted.

I laughed when Eric spoke in Hindi, and like I already stated earlier Alfaaz would always be credited for creating Eric..the most loved character of mine after the razor sharp Shravan of yours. Then Alfaaz gave us this Nanu who not only plays chess with finesse but also justifies the brain required for it. His scene with Ramnath was an overload of rationality.

This story of yours has people speaking their mind, thoughtful or gibberish, they speak it out. Rare feature in a story, but then it's you who is typing. .so no surprise whatsoever😛

Sumo had a classic foot in mouth scene. .oh how she must be drowning in guilt now!! It would be interesting to see how she finds a way out of this self created mess. Her plan of action with a garnish of Zoyaness should see her safe😃

Take a bow for the reply you made Shravan give Sumo, crisp,sassy and sensible. Maza aa gaya.. Wolf whistle there😆

The title reminds me of a line one of my teachers always used to say while emphasizing on the importance of words and the way we utter them 'Lafz nahi Lehja maar deti hai'

Awesomeness as usual was served here..and applause you deserve is just as thundering 👏
Edited by reshmanair356 - 8 years ago
Nik03 thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
i miss saying, Hey Zo di!😭
but now actually, hi Zo di😛
how and where have you been?
on the Chapter
actually bolun i thought Lehja, the title was meant for only wrong pronunciation, jab tak i did not read your A/N at the last. they make things do much more understandable..😃
your story is so freaking realistic chapter by chapter,,
eric getting that indian accent and picking on words is so adorable,,, literally even i love it when some of my trip mates spoke in thick British accent hindi.
Suman riled up being big time...maybe youth brings more of insecurities in the young brains and atleast ab voh gadhi pyaar pehchaan payegi..
but suman was right on her prospective, i guess, partially right beacause usne puri baat suna hi nahi
that saaf-saaf dialogue fumed jealousy😉
Nanu-ramanth convo was 🥱
nanu is a man of words indeed..i wish he could knock some sense into his fellow student
that shravan and suman emotional talk was like cherry on top...banda is getting more expressive😛

gawd ! this chapter wasn't any lovey-dovey but looks kind of progressive as Suman is on her way to realizing her feelings..
may be i am correct maybe i'm not
until next time

love
kiddo😳
Namiksfan thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
Can't wait anymore...
Update soon..please??
I don't remember if i told you or not...just loved this chap👏
orion23 thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
This part is now on Wattpad and the link for it can be found on the main page of this thread.

Cheers!
Edited by orion23 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
Res
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Unres
Zo 🤗


Arey Shravan snapped at Eric 😲
Poor boy is so upset cause of Sumo
Eric is a darling ❤️.


A true friend indeed .
#Friendship goals

It looks more like you are summoning the evil forces to destroy dance from the face of the earth."
🤣🤣
Ramnath travelled all way to london to meet him ❤️
And the hug

Too adorable i must say .
So that's the reason Eric was gayab for too long 😆
Itna sara khana !!!
Sumo is impulsive , her insecurities make her do a lot of things she never intend to but I love that she always takes the initiative to mend their relationship unlike the Sumo we have known in the show.
Sending him letter and home cooked food was one step in that direction.
I expected him to open the letter as soon as his father handed it to him but he didn't. I was surprised but I guess it's for the best . Their relationship really needs a lot of sorting. I know they'll do it soonish .
Another amazing update from you 👏 👏 👏
I forgot to tell i loved the title ❤️ and your messenger too 😳
Update real soon .
Loads of love

Ps- I missed this place ❤️
Your post feels like home sachi dil se ❤️
Edited by sapphire3 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Zealous si Zoya🤗
Finally am here too!!
Missed you here.

Now coming to upi...
I Love your titles...One word but gives a review of the whole upi.❤️
Learned a new word too.

First of all I wanna say something bud.
I Feel attached to your Sumo.I know she always hurts Shravan and as much as flawed she is, I love her.
For me, There is that depth in her character that always make me feel closer to her.

Her insecurities and fear of being left alone is what making her the way she is.Every person expresses it in his/her own way.Where some take a step back and shut themselves out, she is letting it all out with her anger overpowering her with sensible side taking back seat.
In this way, she is not only hurting Shravan but herself equally. Guilty is what she feels after and thats the worst feeling.She needed to keep calm and lil control over her feelings.Give some time for things to settle in their place in their own pace.
But its not going to be easy for her too.When you are alone, when you know you are almost a burden, an unwanted , when you know you have a loan to repay on your own...All of that that in such a young age is too much for a person.
In that situation, you cant afford to lose the one and only person who is closest to you in any way.The feeling is terrifying.
I cant say she is all wrong...But she needs a change and control.

As for Shravan...he was, is, and will always be the most lovable one.❤️

Really loved Shravan-Eric convo!
Eric is a friend for life.
The bond that these two shares is beyond beautiful.He way Eric understands and handles Shravan not even Sumo can at this point of time.

Sumo did rule you Shravan.But you both need to sort your differences out.Or it'll consume you both as well as the beautiful relation that you shares.

Pretty Preeti...What can we expect from her!
Sumo...you always feel this way but only after the damage is being done by you.
Now need to sort yourself out.

Again and again...am gonna say this again Zoya.
I so damn love how in simple and normal gestures , you show the love, respect and care.Its beautiful!❤️
Ramnath's hug...so gentle...the love and care. ❤️
Shravan seeing Ramnath huddled up in bed as far as possible from him...the love and care.❤️ ❤️
Loved them!!

Ramnath Malhotra...the J3!!😆
Shravan-Eric...These two are just love.

Seeing his son happy and being loved and cherished...nothing can beat that feeling for a father.
Felt happy for Ramnath here.
I love it when someone says baccha.❤️

Shravan and Eric's excuse to not to work.😆
#Moments

Shravan not reading the letter...well this is Sumo after all.
Sumo hurted him when he least expected.She was always a puzzle to him in this regard.
So its not wrong of him here. He knew Sumo have much more power over him than he let on.Her words can make or break him .His tormentor his comforter!!

Now am more than excited for the next part.To know how things will take turn...How ShraMan interact...Things will fall in its place or situation will worsen...How ShraMan deal with each other as well as themselves...and how will they deal with their mixed feelings.
Am more than excited.

Zoya...am saying it again.
The way you deal with emotions...always took my heart away.❤️
Very subtly and deeply at the same time.
You are able to bring out the innermost feelings of a being...the inner war he/she deals with in everyday life.My magician writer❤️

I know ...its too long...again!
Cant help it!
So deal with it like always!!😆

Cont soonish...waiting eagerly!
Lots of Love and 🤗
Nikka sa Nik (It feels too good signing as this after so long)

P.S. I have written an essay on Sumo today.
I dont know if am right or wrong but its what I think. so expressed it coz I wanted to and know I can.

P.P.S. This reader of yours wont leave.
I'll be there...Always!
With my never ending comments😆.



Edited by Nik03 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
Amazing story do...waiting fr the next update
vimikrao thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
Ramnath sudden visit to London.
Sumo is very sweet this is her way of apology seeking from Shravan & letter she sent through Ramnath. but Shravan is very hurt so he is taking time to read the letter.
Eric is good friend he informed Ramnath about Shravan.
Thanks for PM Zoya


Vinu
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Posted: 7 years ago
Trust me sumo !!!!!
This Sumoness is harmful for his sanity !!😆
Plz clear the air soon! ! 😳
For them the situation is so difficult... fear/fury of losing a friend coupled with fear/fury of losing that special someone !! Plus their vulnerabilities and tender age !! Hence,,such extreme reactions! !
Dealing with package deal is difficult! !😆

Eric is one fine character! !👏
He zoned off for a moment...🤗

Pretty preety is her usual self! !

Love is in the air somewhere! !😳
Bekhayali main bhi khayal aapka hai !!😛

Ramu kaka u better behave yourself this time! ! Be a facilitator not a roda! !😲

Chandu halwai 🤣 Chandu ji airline pack bhi karte hain! !

Lol...Huddled in a corner. .. poor Papa! !
Pout... Food...Eric...Guilt...I can very well relate !! #ItsAHostelerThing !! ❤️

Shravan didn't read the letter... why so !?!
Jahan dil ke taar jude hain,,koi taar kya pade! ! #WishfulThinking! !😆

Fate altering..but wait for destiny to take its course! !... such lines !!

Qasid ke haath unhone paigham bheja hai,
Kuch chupake Kuch sar-e-aam bheja hai !!

Dekh bhi lo ke koi sharmsaar hai bahut ,
Band karke lifafe main ek ehsaas bheja hai! !

#Food #Khat #RamuKaka #Sumo #Sad #Guilt #Shravan #Envelope #Ehsaas #GenericWord !!
Bata bhi do ke lifafe main kya bheja hai! !😛 #cliffs! !

Lovely chapter! !

Edited by CarpeDiem_ - 7 years ago

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