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Eatifi

@Eatifi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#41

Oh ho...so Suraj is not the "achha bachha",cool it is...😎

This one is surely an arrange marriage concept(something that we all are destined)..

I also wonder why is sari considered a traditional costume,when it can be draped to make any man wild😉(poor men)😆

The second sp is interesting,I am only wondering about the connection between the title and story🤔

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: meshmesh
Loved SP2, it's amazing!
It seems Suraj can't keep his hands off his wife.
There is a big contrast between the awkwardness in the first scene and the romantic tone of the second one.
I'm looking forward to see how their relationship will evolve.

Thanks a lot dear!

What to do dear! Poor men can't keep their limits when their wife is half clothed with sari!

I'm too concentrating on this! How to make their relationship move on!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: katheriene
Interesting sneak peak
Both scene were contrast to each other
First was akward situation for both& second was romantic
Waiting for first part

Thanks a lot yaar!

Will try to back soon with the 1st part!

Just trying to do things they do in films' trailers where we get head and tail and we need to link it!

Hope I got 10% of my trial successful! LOL

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: Charaju
Nice SP
Romantic suraj
Waiting for next update

Thank you!

You can say that Suraj is Romantic! But have to wait to confirm it dear!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: KUTUR
Oh ho...so Suraj is not the "achha bachha",cool it is...😎
This one is surely an arrange marriage concept(something that we all are destined)..

I also wonder why is sari considered a traditional costume,when it can be draped to make any man wild😉(poor men)😆

The second sp is interesting,I am only wondering about the connection between the title and story🤔

I can't say anything about Suraj's character, else the story wouldn't be interesting!

I was smiling while reading your comments!

Hope the surprises I have planned works!

I know you all like surprises and cliffhangers, so trying it here too but in a small level compared to CAY!

You see! We should write a petition saying Saree must be considered modern and not traditional.

Agree with you dear! Poor Men! Pity them!

The title goes for Chakor!

And I'm glad you reminded me of a MIB session I have planned about titles! LOL

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#46

Hello everyone!

Thank you for waiting!

Finally finished sketching!

Started to write the 1st part!

It will be posted on 01/08!

For those who follows TTW!

It will be updated by tomorrow evening or Wednesday morning!

And Orenda will be out tomorrow morning!

See you guys!

-Maithili

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#47

Hey!

Finally I'm here with the 1st part of WWW (3000+ words)!
A bit of introduction and story in this part!

Thanks a lot for waiting!
Hope you all like it!
Happy reading!

*******

Part 1

"Bring water for everyone!" the old lady in her 40s addressed the girl who was standing by the entrance of the kitchen.
The girl nodded and went inside before appearing with a tray of several glasses of water and served a old man in his 50s and another lady in 40s who asked her how she is doing, for which she smiled and nodded before proceeding with the man in late 20s or earlier 30 and the priest who was alone in a different seat as on the other side, another old couple which included the commanding old lady and a girl in her mid 20s, by her side.

When the young girl turned to the commanding lady's side, she was ordered "You can go Chakor!"
"Ji Chachi(Aunt)!" and she left from there to conquer her old place.

"There is an auspicious day in 1 month. Else you have to wait for 2 years and 4 months to find another auspicious day!" the priest announced.
"I think we can fix the date for the next month!" the man next to Chachi reacted after she pinched him on his hand without anyone's knowing.
"I have my final exams in 2 months!" the girl in her mid 20s said as calm as possible.
"They aren't against your studies Imli beta(dear/daughter)!" Chachi said putting her arm around her daughter.
"Don't worry dear! You can stay with us here until you finish your exams!" the other lady from the groom side spoke.
"Tejaswini Ji is correct, I don't think Suraj will have a problem with this!" the older man said as he asked his son through his eyes, for which Suraj shook his head and simply smiled.

"We are really lucky to give our daughter to your family!" Chachi said.
"Yes Kamal Ji! We are very very happy with this rishta(relation)!" Chacha added.
"We too!" Kamal said.

After confirming the date, the groom family left from there to get the preparations to start.

Days started to move and preparation started to get deeper and deeper.

"Maa! Why are you not understanding my plight?" the bride to be to in less than few days entered the kitchen with an interesting question.
"Can't you see that we are preparing lunch!" her mother said with an eye pointed towards Chakor.
Without taking care of what her mother wanted to say, she continued "He is 6 years elder to me Maa! And Alphonse is just 2 years"

"Chakor!" Chachi interrupted her daughter's talk to cut the young lady attention in their talk.
"Ji Chachiji!"
"Go and dry the clothes in the machine! I will call you later!"
"Ji!"

*** 6 years difference, that means he is 30. He looks more like 25 or 26.
6 years is not a big deal, why Di is making a big issue about that? ***

As Chakor started climbing the stairs, her Chachi glared her daughter saying "Listen! We aren't in city or in some other country to let you marry with a Christian guy! If you forget where you are and what you are doing, let me remind you that you will have no food and you will be locked in your room." analysing her daughter's reactions, she continues "Seeing your reaction, I think you got the answer you wanted."

On the other side, Chakor was pulling the bedsheets as her train of thoughts were running in a jet speed.

*** Is marriage a difficult task? I mean Maa and Papa were happy and Maa always talked about Rajkumar for her princess! ***

She smiled as she picked the last pillow cover from the bucket.

*** Waiting for my Rajkumar(Prince Charming) to come and sweep my feet from ground and get me to his kingdom where I can get my happily ever after.
What can I ask for?
Him to be understanding, lovely, caring, make me always smile and a lot of things. ***

Her list of wishes couldn't have been extended as her aunt called her.

"When will you come to take me from here, my Rajkumar?" she asked seeing the blue and white coordinated sky before getting back to kitchen and continue her work of helping her Chachi to cook food.

Days passed and only few days remained for the D-Day.

DING DONG

Chakor who was in her small room which is also a kind of store room, came out and went to open the door to find Suraj standing in his full form.
She immediately bent her head down and said "Chacha and Chachi went for Jeweller shopping and Di went with them too."

He smiled to see her to be timid.
"I will come some other time!" and he started to turn around when his actions were interrupted by her voice.
"Ji! Please come in! If Chacha and Chachi get to know that you came and went without coming inside, they will feel bad."
"It's okay Chakor! I will talk with them!"
"Please!" still her head bent as she moved from the door to give him space to enter.

- I don't know if they will take it bad that I entered their house when they weren't here or when they will come to know that I went without getting in!
Anyway, she seemed to be frightened by the thoughts of her Chacha and Chachi, even if I don't know what is going on in their family, she is liked by Maa, so accepting her please is better than nothing. -

He entered and took a seat at her request.
She excused herself and went to bring him water.
As she passed him the glass, and as he was about to take it from her, the glass slipped but he caught it and she caught it with her hand over his, in other words, their hands touched and current passed through her body while for him it was nothing.

*** Will he think bad about me to not be able to pass correctly a glass?
Will he tell Chachi or Chacha about me being clumsy? ***

Worry was visible in her face.
So to hide it, she asked him what he would like to drink and he refused saying he is here just to give the marriage invitations, so it's better if he goes now.
But she with other round of Chacha - Chachi rules, got him to agree for a tea.

She went back to kitchen asking him to wait, so she can make tea for him.
As the tea was in process, she got a cup which slipped and landed on the floor shattering in zillion pieces.
Hearing the shattering sound, he entered the kitchen to find her removing it with her hands.
As she was distracted by the sound of foot steps, she cut her palm and blood started to ooze.
He ran towards her, and took her hand in his, making her stand as they moved towards the pipe to let the cut under the clod water, to ease the pain.

"I told you there was no need for tea and coffee!"
"It's just"
"Chup! You could have had a bigger cut!"
"I was just trying to remove the pieces!" she said as he turned down the water and took the kerchief out of his pocket.
"You could have used a dust-bane!"
"It slipped out of my mind!" she said scared of his words.

"Sorry! I didn't mean to scare you! You are also becoming my family, so"
She nodded understanding what he wanted to say.
"Band-aid?"
She took her hand from his with the cloth on it and went to the side of a cupboard and took a box from where she got a band-aid.
He took it from her and put it on her, saying "Take care of what you are doing next time!"
She nodded!

*** He is really a nice person!
Imli Di is lucky.
I just wish them to be happy. ***

- She is really a scared person!
Just with the raise of voice, she gets scared.
Innocent girl. -

He helps her remove the ceramic pieces of the cup and she serves him tea with his help too.
"Thanks for the aromatic tea and take care of yourself!" saying this he leaves from there.

The day of the engagement came which was just one week before the marriage, it was held in a simple way, outside the groom's mansion which is joined with their farms.
As the girl's family arrived, everyone was welcomed one by one. And when it was Chakor's turn, Suraj smiled and nodded as she reciprocated the same while his mother asked her well-being as she entered the place.

*** I think I can have my first good friend in him. May be then Imli Di will be nice with me. ***

The event was precipitated which resulted in making the bride and groom to not have their personal time to speak.
Always surrounded by guests, and bride's mother made Suraj wish of getting to know his future wife just a dream.

- It would have been better if they could have let us speak alone.
I know her for almost 2 months and never ever exchanged a word. Just smiles and nods!
Life is just not that.
Understanding is the important part of a successful marriage.
I can say that thanks to my lovely parents.
I trusted them always, I trust them in this marriage too. -

They exchanged rings and had a simple dinner before bride's family went away from there.
One week passed with the speed of lights and the D-Day arrived.

All the arrangements are going in full swing in the mandap(Altar) and around too.
Groom is ready and bride's make-up is done with Chakor being the assistant for everyone in there including her cousin sister's friends.
The ornaments wore by the bride are pure gold and a special gift of new sets waited for her as presents by her parents.

"Let me use the wash-room!" Imli said as she made her way there.
Everyone including her friends waited for almost 10 minutes before starting to bang on the door.
No response came from the other side and Chakor's serial mind kicked.

*** Oh god! Why Di isn't answering? Did she elope? What will Chacha and Chachi do? Why didn't she do this when she was at home? Yeah may be she was house arrested without my knowledge! What is the fault of groom and his family in this. ***

She ran towards her Chacha who was discussing about the food to the cook with all her thoughts running in her mind.
With heavy breath, she tells him the event of previous minutes and he made his way to bride's room in tension.
Seeing him in tension, her Chachi followed them.

After all the banging, the door was opened broken to find a piece of paper with her phone over it and the window above in the wash-room, wide open.

Chakor's Chacha takes the paper and finds it to be the last word from their daughter who is going away from them with her lover, the person they discarded due to religion cause.

It's was pulled by Chachi as her rage exploded with the thought of humiliation she is going to face along with her husband.
When the groom's parents appeared at the foot step of the room's door, she hide the letter as there were no mention of a sorry to the groom or his family as she has never considered him.

"Can I know what is happening here?" Kamal asked.
Both the parents of Imli bent their head as they don't know what to say.
The runaway bride's friends left from there and the only persons there were Chakor and her Chacha and Chachi along with Groom's parents as Groom was in his room, joking with his friends, not knowing the turning of events in his life.

Few words got exchanged and sometimes heated words too.
Kamal asks about his family's prestige being the leader of his village, he affronts them for making his bend his head in front of society, he will loose the respect and the status he has in the society which he gained with time, which is not gained by money or their position in this world. They are a normal farmer family with needed class in society.
Even if society isn't a big matter, what will they say to their son who is waiting to go back from here with his wife.
"We went along with all your demands as we really liked your daughter. But never thought this is what you have educated your daughter with. Disrespect the elders and run away."

*** Di! Why did you do this? What if Chacha or Chachi do as in drams? What if they try to end their life due to your mistake? ***

Her train of thoughts were interrupted with her Chachi's strong confident voice that she didn't expect at this moment.

"Please give me 5 minutes! I will try my best to save our families' name."
Chacha saw her with a questioning look while Kamal and Teju were still in dilemma of how to face their son.

Taking their silence as an answer, she gets Chakor by her hand and takes her to the store room, which is next to the bride's room, where they have kept their gifts for their daughter.

Second by second goes and the tension in groom's family and in Chacha's mind didn't decrease.
Chachi comes back along with Chakor whose face is with millions of expressions which are reflecting her thoughts, with her head bent.
"If you accept, our second daughter, Chakor is ready for this marriage." Chachi announced.

"She is a lot younger to Suraj!" Teju said.
"Are you willingly ready for this marriage?" Kamal asked the young lady.
She nodded as an answer.

"We will get back to you!" Kamal said and exited the room along with his wife to have a talk with his son.

Chacha asked Chachi through eyes 'the matter' and she asked him to follow her after giving Chakor the order to get ready as she is now confident with her idea seeing Kamal's reaction.

Chachi convinced Chacha with just 2 words "Family respect!"

On the other side, the parents entered his room and asked his friends to wait outside.
They smoothly explained the situation to their son which resulted with his reactions to be similar to his mother.

"Maa! She is 10 years younger than me. Do you see the difference?"
"When she has no problem in this marriage what is yours?" his father asks.
"She doesn't know anything about me? She is so young Maa!"
"After marriage you both will get to know each other and" his mother who tried to explain to his son what her husband told her, was interrupted by his father.
"I want this marriage to happen! And no more arguments!" as he left the son-mother duo alone.

- She is so innocent with what I got to see.
She might have dreams about her life and future.
She doesn't know anything about me.
I need to talk to her to see if she really wants this marriage.
And if she isn't okay, I will try to convince Papa! He will accept for sure as I'm more important than anything else. -

"Maa! I need to talk to her!"
"I tried to" she is again interrupted by her husband who opened the door.
"Get prepared in 10 minutes! She will be a better daughter than Imli, Tejaswini Ji! Trust me! I can see that!" he left from there again to do last minute check up and to inform the bride's side about their decision.

Wedding took place and Chakor's vidhai(sending-off) is done.

*** Never in my dreams I thought of this day to come.
I feel like a character from my favourite soap.

What if he doesn't like me?
What if he tortures me because of Di?

But he seemed nice that day.
And I think he will be nice and caring too.
I need to give respect to him and this marriage.
That's what it's said in 'Pativrata Patni'(a serial she is fan off, you will get to know more about it in future) ! Marriage is auspicious and eternal.

And I think he must be the Prince Charming Maa told about!
So I will be happy if he treats me like one!

Devi Maa(God) Please be with me! ***

- What is she thinking of me?
A pervert who is marrying a girl a lot younger than him?
I need to talk to her but how?
I don't know in what state she is.
May be let her get used to the situation?
Yeah! That will be good!
She is my wife and I need to take care of our relationship. -

As she made her way with her husband, she saw that she is getting all the things her Chacha and Chachi has brought for their daughter.
And becomes a bit emotional as she doesn't know the reality of the event which is that they are giving these things they bought for their lovely daughter to Chakor just to keep their name high.

Chakor enters her new home after few hours of travel and does few rituals like putting her hand print on the entrance and collecting the plates...

*** Doesn't he like me?
Why didn't he talk to me?
I can't go and talk now!
Oh yeah! May be because his parents were there! ***

- How to talk to her and get to know if she is here with her full interest.
If she isn't happy, I'm ready to free her from this relationship and to be her friend if it's possible. -

Teju settles the newly married girl saying "I'm your Maa and you are my daughter! Don't hesitate to talk with me Betha(dear)!"
"Ji" is the only word she could say as she is in her emotional state to get a mother almost after 10 years.

*** She is really nice!
I think Ji(her husband) will also be like her!
Maa was right!
This is the palace and he must be my Price Charming who got me out of that house! ***

As she thought about her previous place, the moments from store room flashed in front of her eyes.

***** STORE ROOM *****

"Chachi! Did I do something wrong?"
"No! You are going to do something correct for the first time!"
The little lady didn't got what she heard, so made a questioning look.
"You are going to get married to Suraj! I don't want my name to be bashed for not being able to have a relationship with the leader's family."
"Chachi" she got interrupted.
"Listen! You are lucky that you are getting married here, with all the privileges! We will be going back there and I will say that you are ready for the marriage. If you say one word against my decision, I will send you to jail."
She didn't got why she will go to jail as she didn't do any crime.
Saying no to a marriage which wasn't planned for her isn't a crime according to her.

"Don't think a lot! I will cut my hand and will say that you theft jewellery. When we caught you, you tried to ran away after hurting me but your Chacha got you."

*** Is this possible? Yeah everything is possible!
I didn't think Di will go like this.
I didn't think I will be treated like a criminal.

I don't know if it's my place to be there.
But I have no choice.

Papa said that bad people only go to jails.
I didn't do anything, I'm not bad, I will not go there.
If that happens, Papa and Maa will not be happy seeing me. ***

Her thoughts were again cut off as she was pulled by her Chachi to go back to the bride's room in order to announce the solution she came with.

***** NOW *****

*** May be this is the place where I will be the princess and he my Prince. Maa! Am I righ ***

Chakor's thoughts were interrupted with slow foot steps entering the room.
As she lifted her head to see, she was the person she thought she could be friend with few days ago, to be here, in front of her, with doors wide open, she finds her husband, the Man who entered her life unannounced.

*****

Thanks a lot for reading buddies!
How was it?
Let me know that through COMMENTS and LIKES

I think you all got to know who the main persons are!
It's going to be fully around our lovely couple only, with some people coming and going!

Next part: Part 2

-Maithili

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago

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