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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Tahiti-1

I love how you sketched Tia's character here; I think sometimes shows have a way of dehumanizing humans including the villains. In this story, even the villain has been gives shades and layers AND emotions; not a one dimensional portrait. Shows forget to show that villains are actually people too and this story has showed how humans are flawed. I love how you sketch the characters - you bring them to life, you treat them like they are actual people and not mere puppets. In reality, humans have layers - we are complexed creatures and your stories never fail to show that.

That being said, I LOVE this story. *virtual hug*
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!! ❤️

P.S: THANK you for the PM 😊



Thanks Tahiti! Thank you for being such a wonderful source of encouragement and support.❤️
The nuanced characterisation is exactly what I thought IB would do as well in its early days. Tia had such normal eccentricities...but then they just lost the thread of logic in terms of character development somewhere along the line.

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: preity_d

Omg Our KhaTia ❤️ 😆 & Khanna literally blushed sensing Tia looking at her ! ❤️ Aww ! 😆

That is the exact reaction I wanted when Shivay helped Sahil in admission in big school, not the gratitude they shown in the show ! Loving it ! ❤️

Wonder what Anika saw in Prinku's room !


Oh my god! YESS! @Sahil's admission
The more I wanted Anika to become independent after the marriage, the more the show rendered her a puppet in the hands of Shivay. As if it is only by being financially and socially dependent on Shivay, Anika can fall in love with him or he fall for her. It is ridiculous.
Deliberately choosing to give up one's independence out of the trust for the someone you love is the sign of true love for me. Not being stripped off of all independence and being forced by circumstances to be together.


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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: bworm

Tia and khanna 😲..that 2as unexpected.

Loved the pic of both girls.
Very very interesting. ...need shivays pic too.

Eagerly waiting for more raita😆

Thanks for the pm


Thank you! Glad you liked this insight into Tia. I am a devoted KhaTia shipper and so did not want to waste such a golden opportunity. 😆
Hope to come to Shivay as well some time soon. 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago

Hello girl!! Do drop by at the storycircle some time! I remember you had wished to participate as a writer. 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: emerald39

Twerps🤗

First of all, regarding your reply to my previous comment: you know I will never be disappointed. I know this story is a PriVeer FF, but the insight you give to each character is what drives the plot forth, and I enjoy reading them. No chapter is a filler for me. Besides, you write so well, that I visualise every little action in my head, so it's sort of like the IB episodes I'd prefer to watch 😆

Moving on to the latest update. Thank you for writing such a fantastic insight to Anika and Sahil. I love that she didn't have to accept Shivaay's charity, and our brilliant little boy is excelling on his own without any help from anyone else. Sure, I really enjoy a good Shivaay-Sahil bond, but at this point in your story, it's fitting that all help from Shivaay is rejected. He has not redeemed himself yet, and Anika having the right to reject whatever 'help' he is willing to give at this point is completely justified. In fact, I enjoyed what you wrote on how Sahil, even being miles away, was keeping the dignity she has left in her intact. And the way you describe her being trapped in the mansion, it breaks my heart Haunting, Twerps.

And then, the plot twist that totally made my week. KHANNA AND TIA! Twerps, I did not see that coming at all!! Whaaat! And the best part is, it's not comical at all? Which is quite a feat, because Khanna is always sort of a comic relief on the show! Also, because I am a sucker for star-crossed lovers; their small exchange in the car tugged at my heartstrings. Haiyeee. Tia and Khanna. That's a ship I can climb aboard! Also, I love that Tia isn't portrayed as a vamp here. She had amazing potential to be grey on the show, and like you have shown her, to be a victim as well instead of a terrorizing ex-fiancee.

All in all, another chapter I absolutely loved reading. Keep them coming, Twerps!! It's really, really hard to disappoint me, especially when the characters written here are so true to what was initially shown on the show and the plot is as exciting as always.

Edit: I forgot. You left us at a cliffhanger! I. Need. Answers. ASAP.

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Anu!! 🤗
Thank you for being such a generous reader! This story is really becoming the IB that the PH took away from me and so am really over the moon to hear that you think of this series in a similar light! 😳
I hope to develop more on both Anika-Shivay as well as Tia-Khanna track in the story. Even Om-Ishaana are claiming some attention. Hopefully will be able to retain the focus on PriVeer amidst all this. The next chapter, I think, suffered a bit because of my wavering focus. Hopefully you'll find some redeeming quality in it.
Wet Ayush turned out a trickier customer than I thought he would be.

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: dimaag

Okay that was me after reading the POV of Tia. Girl that was so sad. The way she was forced to take the life by her cruel and mad Mom and the way Vicky being Khanna around her was just so ... 😭 😭. I like Anika's POV about her marriage and etc but today the limelight was completely on Tia and Vicky. I never really felt the pain both of them had gone through but today u made me realise that. Also the way Tia was being subjects to Shivaay's expressionless life where she had to fit in was so ... 😭. No seriously that was so emotional. U r amazing Twerps! Even without PriVeer u managed to make me like ur update and not just any part,this Tia and Vicky part. I loved it 😊. Sorry for replying late.Update soon!! 😃 Thanks for the PM. *khushi k aasoon 😭 *


Awww!!!! Sorry for making you cry!!! 🤗
Your words are a huge boost for me! I used to be one of those KhaTia shippers so simply couldn't resist putting this bit in my story! Really means a lot to hear that I could portray them as characters that one can relate to. I promise though that I will not make a habit of such PriVeer-less chapters.
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: SRKian

twer,twet,twer!!! 🤗

thq sooo much 4 writing on our unusal ship,KhaTia🤗
at 1st i skipped anika stuffs nd went directly 2 khatia tbh 😆 den re-read it wid anika bit😆

just imagine,hw awesome it'd 've bn if KhaTia were 2 happen 4 real send dis 2 harneet no🤣

awesome as always,coz ur stories r always a treat 2 read.
Keep up da good work nd keep writing more on khatia nd tnx 4 telling me abt dis 1 else aro late hoto porteh😆



i miss our fangirling sessions so much





Aniii!!!!! Hullo, my fellow KhaTia shipper! Glad you dropped by. This was a dhamaakedaar ship though the CVs would never have thought of it. 😆
Oh, and I also have that KhaTia OS coming up... 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago

Thanks! 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

CHAPTER 14

Priyanka's eyes trail over the puddles of water he leaves in his wake on the gleaming floor. He has taken off his shoes which now stand drying on the balcony. Barefoot, he pads in and barely meets her eyes when she hands him a towel.

Quickly she retires behind the finely filigreed wooden panelled partition that serves as a changing room for her. Taking off the dupatta that she had laid her hands on first thing after entering her room, she proceeds to change into a set of dry clothes. When she comes out, hair turbaned in a towel, he is rubbing his hair dry. The wet shirt sticks to his back and Priyanka's eyes are inadvertently drawn to the ripple of his muscles as his hands move. It has a hypnotic pull to it and when she looks up again, she finds the ACP looking at her.

"You n-need to change into s-something dry," she mumbles before heading to the wardrobe. She tries to ignore how his eyes follow her or that she senses his gaze on her quite so keenly. She finds an over sized fading grey T-shirt belonging to O Bhaiya that she had stolen long back. It is made of the softest material and she often wears it to bed. This has to do for now. He doesn't speak when she thrusts it into his hands but his eyes narrow for a second before he accepts it.

She is unprepared for the lightness in the pit of her stomach that hits her when he takes the shirt off and the wide expanse of brown skin of his chest meets her eye. He is all muscle, with not an ounce of fat to be seen anywhere. All hard angles and planes, there is something wild about him. She sees a scar or two and can't help but wonder what had caused the wounds. He lets the wet shirt fall to the floor and puts on the dry one without ceremony. He gives a shake of his hair almost reflexively and wet droplets scatter, some landing on her face. She flinches and he looks momentarily embarrassed.

"I should leave now," he says.

She notices a piece of weed stuck in his hair.

"You've got something..." She tries to point out. He fishes around in his hair, missing the offending tuft of green.

She lifts her hand and plucks it out. Anika chooses that moment to stumble against the door.

Priyanka and Ranveer look up at the noise. Anika wishes she was anywhere at that moment but here. Not again! Not again would she be pulled into another Oberoi mess and then be blamed and punished for it!

"Sorry...I'll come back later," she stutters out before turning to leave.

"Anika, don't go," her friend calls her back. Ranveer watches Anika, his eyes revealing nothing.

Anika tries to leave but Priyanka runs up to her and hauls her in.
"Stay here please!" she whispers to Anika.

"Does she live here?" Ranveer asks finally. The question hangs in the air.

Anika's nose flares slightly but she remains silent and instead looks at Priyanka.
"How does it matter to you?" Priyanka asks him, irritated.

Ranveer cocks an eye brow at this but does not push.

"OK. I am leaving," he says as he puts on the wet shoes.

With the shirt bundled in his hand, he walks towards the French window that opens out into the balcony.

"Let me come with you!" Priyanka runs after him. "You'll run into a guard and get found out!"

Ranveer is annoyed now. The air of mystery and half-truths that fills this mansion is suffocating.

"Why can't I just leave by the front door then?" he asks, stopping suddenly. Priyanka almost bumps into him.

She looks at him distraught as he rounds on the two women.

"Enough hiding! We are supposed to be getting married! Why hide? I could have been just visiting you for a little chat between prospective husband and wife!"

As he speaks, he steps out of the room and strides down the corridor. Priyanka and Anika hurry in his wake.

"Was he?" Anika hisses at Priyanka, mid-trot.

"What?!" Priyanka hisses back, distracted by the sudden unwelcome turn of events.

"Was he visiting you for a bit of chat between husband and wife!?!" Anika grits out.

Priyanka stops, startled by her friend's question.

"Of course not!" she exclaims, indignant at the assumption.

Somewhere ahead Ranveer has stumbled into O Bhaiya's studio.

"Wow!" comes his exclamation.

The girls set aside their misunderstandings for the moment and rush ahead.

"Oh god! He'll have us all killed!" Anika mutters as the two girls exchange looks of nervous apprehension at what might lie in store if the ACP was discovered in the house at this time of the night. Priyanka doesn't put her family past calling a shotgun wedding.

They somehow manage to reach the lobby without further and Ranveer is casting looks of exasperation around him, when suddenly they hear a voice call out.

"Who is that with you Prinku?"

Priyanka wheels around in shock to find Daadi standing at the bottom of the staircase. Behind her is Pinky, her eyes gleaming with excitement.

Before Priyanka can say anything, Daadi comes forward.

"Ranveer beta, have you brought the kundli with you? I knew Premji would go out of his way to see to this matter. Such an absolutely charming man! His assurances today have driven away whatever little apprehension we had regarding this match..."

Randhawa stands, momentarily stunned at this onslaught of warm praises for his relative. Daadi continues meanwhile, "You know how it is with us old folk. You two have decided you want to get married but this matching kundli business is only to ease our hearts. Think of it as silly superstitions of the older generation."

"Kundli?!" He finally manages to rasp out. Irritation exudes from him in waves. Such superstition at this day and age!!! And they expected him to be a part of this mumbo-jumbo!! If the pretence of it all wasn't enough, this certainly had to be the last straw!

He opens his mouth, ready to vehemently proclaim his absolute revulsion for all matters concerning astrology. But he is interrupted by Priyanka who deftly takes over the conversation, clutching at the straw that Daadi's misunderstanding had offered them. Ranveer was not as experienced as the Oberoi daughter in getting out of such tight spots with sanity intact.

"D-d-daadi, that's just the p-p-problem!! You s-see Ranveerjee has l-l-lost his k-kundli. C-can't P-p-panditji do something ?"

All that he was going to say are forgotten as her words reach him. Ranveer JEE!?! The word draws forth such a weird rush of emotions in him, that he is suddenly left floundering.

Daadi continues to protest, saying she will convince Premji. Her words fall on deaf ears as a shocked Randhawa is shepherded out of the house by an anxious Priyanka.

As they watch him leave, Pinky wonders aloud, "Was it raining? Why was Damaadji's hair all wet?" Daadi turns around, her eyes questioning. Pinky continues, "And his pants--"

Anika is beside her in a flash. "Can I sleep in the guestroom on the third floor? They have not yet put a bed in my room."

Pinky's eyes narrow in distaste and she sets aside her desire to play detective for the more immediate task at hand-- showing Anika her rightful place. But she has Daadi to contend against and soon Daadi and Pinky are engaging in a duel of sorts on whether Anika will sleep in the guest room or in Shivay's room. Priyanka's eyes shine with silent gratefulness as she meets Anika's eyes. The two of them edge away from the debate and set off in the direction of Priyanka's room, exchanging fleeting smiles that reveal their relief at the calamity averted.

Priyanka's phone buzzes. Both women look down at the screen. A message flashes.

Have an idea. Call me when you can.

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Ishaana glances around the busy lobby as she waits. Around her, patients, family members, doctors and nurses bustle around. The buzz from the many voices create an almost deafening din.

"Girl, you brought this on yourself!" she mutters to herself. She never did get the hang of leading a peaceful life, did she! What was the need to take up Omkara Singh Oberoi on his challenge? Really, sometimes she did act like a headless chicken. Another voice pipes up from within. Answering his challenge had wiped off that smug look off that man's face for sure. And the money offered was good and she could really pay off a lot of that worrisome debt that was making life difficult for them of late.

Shrugging off the thoughts, she stands up with a professional smile. The nurse has returned.

"Okay, we have just received the clearance and you can now start on your research. Here's the identity tag that you must wear for as long as you are within the hospital premises and the clearance only pertains to the Emergency Ward. You need to ask for further permission if you want to cover any other unit."

Ishaana nods solemnly as she quickly puts on the tag that reads "Varuna Upadhyay, Press".

The con woman was on a mission.

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Tej Singh Oberoi looks at the proof.

Shakti!?

Shakti revealed those photos to the press!?

Svetlana stands before him, her face drained of all emotions as always.

" Thanks Svetlana," Tej says hollowly, still shaken by this revelation.

Had he underestimated Shakti all these years?

He had thought that while there was much cause for resentment between them, the reputation of the family came above all such things. But if Shakti was capable of divulging photos to discredit the image of the daughter of the family, he must be capable of much much more!

How many of the past media scandals that had embroiled Tej Singh Oberoi had been made possible by his younger brother?


Tej's hand shakes slightly as he reaches for the cigarette case.

"You may go Svetlana," he mutters. As the door closes, Tej crushes the cigarette in his hand. He does not like being a sitting duck. Counter attacks were more his style.

He picks up the phone and dials a number he was not in much habit of calling.


"Omkara?" he grits out when the line is answered.


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Posted: 8 years ago
👏..wow
This is getting more and more interesting.
Happy to see you back.
Can't wait to know what next.

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