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Posted: 6 years ago
To be honest I love sad ending stories. But not many people like it. So if you have the many ending which differs from one another you should right it.

I had once done that with my one of the story in another forum. That story had one version of sad ending nd another of happy ending

But in the end its your decision to make.
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Posted: 6 years ago
you could write more than one version... I mean even I haven't seen anything like that yet but you know what they say... there's a first time for everything๐Ÿ˜‰.  Personally speaking I really wouldn't mind reading more versions.
Though I would prefer that if you have a sad version then post that first and then the happier one, I'd like the happier note to be end of the story.
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Posted: 6 years ago
Waiting for the update di...
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Posted: 6 years ago
Note:-

Hi everyone..here I m posting the epilogue which I feel is defining the story concept n title..

Hope u like it..

So iss story ka end mein Waise hi Kar rahi hu jaisa meine first time socha tha when I started the story..

N about my other thoughts on epilogue n end of this story,I may write os series on it..so plz mention in Ur comment wheather u will like to read such os series..if I get positive response then only I will think writing about the os series..

Thanks to all for ur lovely suggestions..
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Posted: 6 years ago


Part 12(Epilogue):-
                                                                                     

riya(yell):-jeet..

arjun(sr):-abhi..??

here taking advantage of this situation sikandar run away with his 2 men..but chotu caught hold of wounded altaf..

all rest of them(including the undercover officer with little arjun) rush to abhi..

riya(while crying):-jeet..??

sam:-abhi..

riya:-ye kya kiya jeet..??

abhi(smiles with pain):-arjun..apna wada nibahya meine..kaha tha na mere hote hue maut riya ko chu nahi sakhti..

arjun get teary..

riya:-jeet..plz...tum aise muze chod ke nahi ja sakhte..

abhi:-ritz..(he cup her face with blooded hand)I love u..

riya:- I love u too..

this bring smile on abhis face/..n next second the smile freezes..

riya(yell horrified):-jeet..??

she started crying uncontrolablly..arjun slowly close abhis lifeless body..

one one is in condition to do or say anything..

undercover officer:-sir..sikandar jayda dur nahi gaya hoga..hame usse pakdna hoga..abhi sir ki shahadat aise jaya nahi jane de sakhte ham..

sam:-u r right..guys come on..aaj uss sikandar ki khair nahi..

all started walking..only the undercover officer n arjun remain to riya..

arjun look to abhi n riya once..wipe his tears n then turn to leave..

riya(with determination):-rukiye..mein bhi chalugi..

all stop n look her..

riya(with anger):-uss sikandar ko mein apne hathose marugi..

all realize she is burning in revenge,anger n pain..

riya(to undercover officer):-u take care of arjun(jr)..

riya look to body of abhi once..make her mind as strong as she can do it..she wipe her tears n rush out with team..

after almost of half hour painful chess,finally they caught sikandars car..again firing starts from both end..

arjun(firing to sikandar):-sikandar..ab teri zindagi khatam..aaj tum nahi bachoge..
sikandar(firing to arjun):-mere sari musibato ki jad toh tum hi ho arjun rawte..woh tum hi the jisane sabse pehale mera naam iss duniya ke samne laya..mein rahu ya na rahu par aaj tum nahi rahoge..tumhare sath ye khel mein aaj khatam kar dunga..

arjun fire bullet n it hits to sikandars stomatch..sikandar fall on ground on his knees..

riya fire bullet in his chest..sikandar fall on ground lying..

seeing sikandars defeat his men surrender..chotu caught hold of them..

but sikandar had not died yet..he took gun fallen nearby him n fire towards arjun..

riya saw this she come in between..n fire to sikandar directly to his head falling him dead..but the bullet fired by him is hit to riya..

arjun:riyyaaa..

riya fell on ground..

arjun hold her near him..

arjun(with tears):-riya...ye kya kiya tumne..??aisa kyo kiya..??

riya(with pain):-arjun sir..?

arjun:-tod diya na apna wada..u said u will keep urself safe..lekin mere liye..mere liye..

riya:-arjun sir..sorry mein wada toda..par..par aapko woh wada dene se pehale khud se ek wada kiya tha..ke aapke aur aapke maut ke bich mein khadi rahugi..

arjun:-riya..plz..tumhe kuch nahi hoga..

riya:-nahi arjun sir..ab waqt nahi bacha..promise me..aap khudko blame nahi karege inn sabke liye..

arjun:-i..i ..promise..

riya took out chain from around her neck..n give in arjuns hand..its the same chain of roshni which arjun gifted her..

riya:-ye chain aapko hamesha meri aur iss promise ki yaad dilate rahegi..

arjun:-no riya..plz..

riya:-mein dono arjun ko khush aur hamesha smile karte dekhna chahti hu..aap..aap..arjun sir..

her eyes become lifeless..

arjun(yell):-riya..

he started crying miserably..


After 3 more years..

A beautiful banglow ..not a big one..small yet spacious..

One man is standing infront of photos..

He is staring 2 photos..both photos having garland around it..

Photos are of first roshni..n another one of Abhi n riya..

The man who is looking the photos is none other than arjun(sr)

He come out of his thoughts..when someone put hand on his shoulder..he knows who is he..??

Arjun(sr):-sam..??

Sam:-yaha akele kya kar raha he..??kis soch me dube hue ho..?

Arjun(sr):-kabhi kabhi dil me ek sawal aata he sam..iss jung me meine kya hasil kiya..?sab kuch toh kho diya..roshni ko kho diya..abhi jaise dost ko kho diya..aur riya ke roop me firse ek baar apni zindagi kho di..

Sam smile..

Sam:-kya hasil kiya..??udhar dekh..woh mila he tuze..woh hasil kiya he tune..

A 8 years boy playing football with shree n chotu..

Arjun (sr) look him lovingly..he slowly caresses the chain around his neck..yes the same chain riya give him back..

Yes the boy is none other than arjun(jr)..

Arjun(jr) run to arjun(sr) ..

Arjun(jr):-daddy..dekha..meine aaj bhi shree n chotu chachu ko haraya..sabse jyada gol kiye..

Arjun(sr) smiles..

(riya ke parents abhi n riya ke shadi ke kuch months baad he mar chuke he..n abhi ke parents abhi aur riya ki aise ek sath maut seh nahi pate..they also get died after some months..after then arjun legally adopt arjun(jr))


Aayesha:-ab tum logo ka match khatam ho gaya ho toh cake cut kare arjun(jr)..

Arjun(jr) smiles..he cut the cake..all wish him happy birthday..he feed cake to his daddy..

Arjun(jr):-daddy..mera gift..??

Arjun(sr) give him a football which having a famous football players autograph..

Arjun(jr):-wow..thank u daddy..

Arjun(sr):-anything for u dear..ek aur bhi he..

Saying this he make ware arjun(jr) the same chain..

Arjun(sr):-ye bahot special he..mere liye bhi aur tumhare mamma ke liye bhi..

Arjun(jr) smiles..

Arjun(jr):-but I want something more..

Arjun(sr) raised eyebrow..

Arjun(jr):-I want to hear a song from u..come on daddy..

Arjun (sr) smiles..n started singing..

Akele ham..akele tum..

Jo ham tum sang he toh fir kya gam..

Tu mera dil..tu meri jaan..

(Arjun(jr) sings)
                                                                                                         Oh I love u daddy..

(Arjun(sr) sings)                                                                                

Tu masoom ..tu shaitan..

(Arjun(jr) sings)

But u love me daddy..


(arjun(sr) sings)
Yun toh he tu nanhasa..

He magar guru sabka..

Aur issi shararat se dil jigar tu he sabka..

Kehne ko he yun toh hazar..

Koi magar tuzsa kaha..

Akele ham akele tum..

Jo ham tum sang he toh fir kya gam..

Tu mera dil ..tu meri jaan..

(arjun(jr) sings)

Oh I love u daddy..

(Arjun(sr)sings)

Tu masoosm tu shaitan..

(arjun(jr) sings)

But u love me daddy..


(arjun(sr) sings)

Maan lo kal ye sari duniya..

Sath mera nahi degi..

Kyon he meri mazil ka hamsafar..

(arjun(jr) sings)

Mein hu daddy..

(arjun(sr) sings)

Aaj lage kitna hasi..

Apna jaha apna sama..

Akele ham akele tum..

Jo ham tum sang he toh fir kya gam..

Tu mera dil ..tu meri jaan..

(arjun(jr) sings)

Oh I love u daddy..

(Arjun(sr)sings)

Tu masoosm tu shaitan..

(arjun(jr) sings)

But u love me daddy..



Song finishes n all clap for arjuns..

Arjun (sr) hug arjun(jr)..n both smiles..


THE END...          


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Posted: 6 years ago
Awesome update Sonu
Extremely emotional and I really loved it
It's good to see that ki tumne Ariya nahi rakha
It would be bit unjustified to the title
Arjun and Arjun Junior were really good ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Abhi and Riya sacrifice their lives for their country
Hmmm good to see Arjun and Arjun happy with each other
Epilogue doogi na ?
Well I am in for OS series
Thanks for the PM
Continue soon ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 6 years ago
Awesome ending
n emotional too
Dii maine kaha tha na k
aap jo bhi likhenge wo to
hame psand aayega hi
Aapne story k sath n title k
saath pura justice kiya hai
N I m reddy to read your
Os seris n thanx for the pm
n countinue soon
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: LOVE.GOLD

Awesome update Sonu
Extremely emotional and I really loved it
It's good to see that ki tumne Ariya nahi rakha
It would be bit unjustified to the title
Arjun and Arjun Junior were really good ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Abhi and Riya sacrifice their lives for their country
Hmmm good to see Arjun and Arjun happy with each other
Epilogue doogi na ?
Well I am in for OS series
Thanks for the PM
Continue soon ๐Ÿ˜Š



Thanks dear..

Glad u like it..

I feel this is the proper end for this story..

It's the epilogue dear..now the story ends here..

Well i m waiting for readers response for os series..thanks for supporting me..

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Posted: 6 years ago
Sad ending congrats dear for completed ur story Edited by sheetal1979 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Wow dear its really emotional and heart touching but riya aur abhi ne apni life sacrifice kardi
Arjun jr and sr are t gud
Pls os compulsory series dena
Thanks for pm
Bye take care