Krishna-Jambavati SS:My Love(Updated Chap-3 pg7) - Page 5

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Posted: 8 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: SenAnu

BEAUTY!!!! BEAUTY !!! BEAUTY !!! 🤗


Jambavati - Krishna ❤️❤️❤️❤️
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The way you described their meetings 👏 It was so wonderful 👏👏

All the characters were so beautifully represented ! 😃😊😳
And I loved the inital edit, never thought of Rubina and Saurabh as Jambavati and Krishna, but they look so apt !!! 😃😆😳

I have always said, and I am a huge fan of your writing ! 😳
Keep the awesome work up! ❤️

Thank you so much Anu.🤗
The wonderful edit was made by our very own Ramya.😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: Nonie12345

Fantastic chapter Ramya and Ayesha😃

The conversation between Lord krishna and Jambavati was so beautiful

Thanks a ton Nonie.🤗It's our pleasure that you enjoyed it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever


Lol sorry, I want to erase that promise of mine. Nevertheless, I'm here to unress!

That was so sweet! Adorable indeed (limited vocab problem)

The comparisons were heavenly, whoever thought of them, I take a bow! And the honesty in Jambu's feelings really touched me. She's so straightforward! Loved that aspect.

That was a mind blowing chapter. A great relief to those who feel inferior, you two taught a lesson si easily!

PS : That Parth bit was written by Ramya di naa? :p

Hey Mahi!!! It feels great to see you after a long time.🤗
Well sometimes people feel that they are not good enough or someone else is better than them.However they forget that every person is special in his own way and ultimately everyone is equal in the eyes of God.

Thanks a lot for liking it.😳Nope!! Parth bit was written by me.😉😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#44

Originally posted by: KrishnaPriyaa

UnresWaa 😆😆
Rammy, Aish 🤗🤗
This was a fantastic part :)
I loved how you weaved in Jambu's love for Swami even as she reflected on the past few days, where He got married to Bhama.
Her blushiness when Krishna comes makes her so endearing. It is insanely adorable
She always looks at His worries before hers; The hallmark of a true wife.
And His love for her soothes her so beautifully that she was able to let go of her inhibitions and talk to Him. He showed her the right path as well!
Atma Paramatma Milan is also here, in a subtle form!

Great job you guys :) Update ASAP :D

Thank you sooo much Sru.🤗
Krishna is everyone's friend,philosopher and guide.We just have to let him inside our heart.And even if we don't He will find a way somehow.😳 And once He is inside our heart,he will erase all our sorrows and problems.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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And we are back with another update! Also,we have good news for you guys,we are turning this into an SS!! Why you ask? Because we are getting too many ideas that we just couldn't contain! So instead of 3 parts,now you will get at least 6-7 parts! Did we hear hurray! Yes, yes we are as excited as you are and we want to thank you for loving our writing, loving our Jambavati and extending your support to us throughout. And most importantly from now on, expect an update on weekends. Moving on straight to the update.



CHAPTER-3

Jambavati's palm quivered as the tiny,miniature personification of life rested in her arms,carefree. Trying to feel the little one's hands, she realized that they were no larger than her thumb. Amazement began to bewilder her as smile lightened up her face. Cuddling his delicate cheeks and admiring his miniscule eyes for which the perception of vision still remained to be experienced, the eyes separated from the lower eyelashes in mutual agreement and she saw in them a glimpse of dwindling mischief. His soft lips that were a simile to rose-petals curled up in a subtle grin that was undistinguishable from his, her swami's and she glanced in awe. This was something out of the world, an embodiment of life, an ethereal emotion of priceless thronging in her heart.

"Rukmini jiji! She cried in all astonishment "Rukmini jiji,just look at him!" The further words refused to spell as she stood utterly surprised at him,losing herself in his deep,dark eyes.

Rukmini held the section of her soul now and she was almost pressurized to break into a smile as the striking resemblance got known to her. An identical reflection of her lord's,she would invariably agree.

"Give him to me!" Satyabhama demanded as a gush of excruciating sensations just flew past her.

And satyabhama, the Leeladhar's accomplice in all his wayward ventures was instantly able to mouth their thoughts off late.

"Arya!" She exclaimed "How much is he like you! I'm sure he would make a perfect substitute to all the fun we have together, possibly perfectly complimenting it!" She settled at a wink.

Jambavati shifted her stare to kanha ,who was by now , smiling as ever. He neither attempted to broaden it and it would surely have revolted against narrowing down. It was the very same smile she had gotten used to, the very same smile she had fallen in love with, the very same one she opined was her life elixir and she was fully capable of gazing at it like that forever and ever without wanting to let her exhausted eyelids relax even for a second just because they wouldn't feel tired at all.

As the tiny tot shifted to his arms, his mystical eyes stayed for a long time within his as he grabbed the infant's hands and clasped them together echoing whispered claps as the father in him tittered, another residual wonder for Jambavati as she hadn't possibly seen him giggle like that before.

"Jambavati!" His radiance this time meant pride"How fortunate you are to have held him first after his mother!"

Now,that was something that hadn't occurred to her yet! In the ecstasy that the baby had left her in, she had probably never bothered to divert herself to that line of thought and it was all fascinating. Her curiosity touched an entirely new note and and she was fascinated as disbelief created room for itself as well.

"Jambavati! What is going on in your mind? Tell us too!" Satyabhama questioned in an innocence that was far from being hers.

"Ermm,nothing!" She answered at last "My lord,what will we call him? "

"Pradyumna!" Two persons uttered together,a frequency that was cordially tuned in flawless resemblance and there was no doubt whatsoever that they were her swami and Rukmini jiji.

Rukmini got herself coloured in a nibble of crimson as the lord hurled words in explanation "That's a name we decided upon together!

"Why,that's beautiful! Concluded Satyabhama "Jiji, your son Pradyumna,our Pradyumna!"

"Jambavati,don't you have anything to say?" Krishna knew well how he had to coax her always to get words out on occasions as that. He knew she was someone whose words were priced as much as gold mines.

"I am just elated my lord, just feeling loved as ever!" And she stopped at that having nothing else to say,letting herself drift into the world that was his son,their son,her son. And all she could feel was love, a love that would make a mother do anything for her son. She could sacrifice herself if need be to see him smile, glance at his face displaying happiness as the only known horomonal outburst. All her love was now his, her care,her affection, her fear.her tension, all now had him for a focal point as they converged, befalling him until eternity. And there was nothing to be said ever more,neither in fancy words, nor sober ones because a mother's love stood inexplicable in any language the lord invented because he knew, well.


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Edited by --Elara-- - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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A wonderful display of those maternal feelings of overwhelming love , fierce protectiveness , and tender care displayed by the baby's [ Pradyumna ]mothers ! You simply presented an excellent illustration in front of our eyes with your amazing word power .

And there was nothing to be said ever more, neither in fancy words nor sober ones because a mother's love stood inexplicable in any language the lord invented because he knew, well.

For me --Its so hard to put that feeling into words but you did it in an admirable way. It's like the most beautiful heart felt feeling that reaches all the way to your reader's soul in a laudable manner! Awesome chapter Ramya .😊

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Posted: 8 years ago
#47
This was just divine! The way Kanha welcomes the newest member of his adorable family is just soo beautiful! Loved the update to the core! <3
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Posted: 8 years ago
#48
Amazing chapter Ramya and Ayesha😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#49
Such a cute-sy chapter !!!! ❤️
It is wonderfully written, crafted and made with so much love that it pours out into every readers' mind 😃😳

Inexplicably beautifully written !! 😃

And my favourite was the part where all the queens say Pradyummna is THEIR son, so lucky he must have been to have the love of all the goddesses at once 😆😃

Wonderful Ayesha and Rammy ! ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#50
Ohh I read all the three parts and they are beautiful. Can we get another update?

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