RiKara SS - Everything I Do - Pt22, 23 pg67 (18/7/17) - Page 37

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

God Sakura,

Your TWIST literally blew me away. This is so brilliant.
Actually, Indian serials use this plot to colour the villainous woman trying to force the hero into marriage, black.
But here you twisted the whole thing so beautifully...I don't have any words to express.
Waiting for the next.

NIKI

I know Niki, that's why I said they don't employ this twist (I mean they don't the way I did.) But you see, it makes no one a vamp really - people do make mistakes in love.
I'm glad you liked it, means a lot. Thank you!
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: AYUSHIVISHU

awesome...its tooo emotional yar...i am feeling bad for om that it's a torture yar he is going through...he is falling for her but he knows that she loves someone else ...that Adi may be he loves gauri but it's not as strong as her love for him...its good that mallika decided to talk with shivaay

Thank you dear!
I agree, it's kind of hard on Omkara but it will pass eventually.
You're right about Adi he might have feelings but they don't run as deep as Ri's.
Keep reading!
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ar97

Wonderful story Sakura! I've turned into a huge, HUGE fan of your writing, you're really talented and I hope you continue to churn out such beautiful stories!

The way you've portrayed Rikara's journey, their sheer helplessness at their situation, Gauri's acceptance in the end, and now suddenly this twist! Amazing!
Aww! Thank you so much, I'm proud to have you as a fan!🤗

Just one thing, did Aditya know Gauri was pregnant?
Because that makes his betrayal all the more worse. But if he didn't then was Gauri planning on telling him only after they had eloped?
No Adi doesn't know. Ri was planning on telling him after they eloped and since it never happened and then she was sort of scared someone might hurt him, she never told him.
Or wasn't he planning on running with her at all? Did he ultimately not come to their meeting point?
It was Ri who didn't go, Adi might have come. She met that person he first introduced her as his dad and all that, remember?
If he did wait for her, when he found out that someone had masqueraded as his dad, why wouldn't he have told Gauri the truth?
There's a bit more we are yet to know about that, which we eventually will as the story unfolds.

Thank you so much for this lovely comment dear, I replied in red above.
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: dazzles

Dear Sakura...
I think I am a coward to switch off my phone and hide my face into my dearest pillow... The one who saw my tears...

Why you done this? Yesterday night when you said you are going to update ... I wanted to read and comment but...something hold me back from reading...
Maybe because I know you are tear my heart without any humanity...
Now when I gathered the courage to read
Do you want me to cry over the fate of that little girl ...
I love omkara easily forgetting the truth that he is already married to gauri...
I want him...

If sidharth will again step into gauri's life... Then it was a grave mistake... I hope she will woke up soon... Enough to realize om is there for her... She is not alone in this fight...
Why I feel that om let her go once she knows that sidharth still loves her...


Waiting for your next update with a crying heart...

I'm so sorry for making you cry dearest, but this dark hour shall pass😳 Just keep reading and your faith in me. Sometimes pain can bloom into beautiful things.
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

Awesome update

I hope this agony which gauri has been going through will end. Om and gauri are both so lonely.
Looking forward to read next chapter.

Thank you!
I will update soon!😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: twerping

😭

Just speechless...this poignant story that you are weaving is simply taking angst to a whole new level.
I caught up on the last three chapters today and things took such a sudden and unexpected turn in these chapters that I am still.reeling from the shock and will probably need a lot more time to recover.
Reading this story has been like opening those chinese boxes or Russian dolls where you think you know what is coming next only to realize how wrong you were..and accordingly then you have to go back and revisit the earlier scenes because they tale on new meaning with the present revelations. Seriously, you are a master craftsman!
I have witnessed someone close to me go through a miscarriage and your description of the incident really touched something within. It truly brought out the pain and the helplessness of the onlooker without taking away from.what Ri has to go through.
That scene between Shivay and Om was incredible. Seriously,these days I find it very difficult to read anything on Shivay but every single time you have written on him, I have been taken back to those initial IB days where they really delved into the relationship between the brothers.
And then the Aditya Rana revelation! Oh lord! I seriously so did not see that coming and the way you explained it was perfect! So Om did something that would make it even more difficult for him to forgive himself.
I loved the description of Om trying to hold himself back fromRi and also wanting to protect and comfort her through this moment of agony and also feeling this intense desire for her love. Oufff! I really am so high after reading this!
And thank you so much for the PM!

I was waiting to know what your thoughts were and while letting me know you gave a reference that I LOVE! I'm not sure how you always end up giving me a comment I adore, but you do, so thank you for that!
I did plan this twist from the start, so as you say there were hints from the chapter 1 itself, tucked inside seemingly innocent paras. Now in the light of recent discoveries they come to glitter more prominently.
I wanted to explore ShivKara more than OmRu in here for I believe in the line I'm going Shivay has more input than Rudra. He is what Omkara needs in this hour. Glad you loved them.
About Russian dolls - I LOVE THEM! and that concept of you never know what is coming, thank you for reminding me that!
Waiting to hear from you again,
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: writergenie17

That last update tore my heart out Sakura...

I felt pain and helplessness... and every repeat read rekindles those very same emotions.

I don't know who I can or should protect. Gauri, who's been forcibly made the centerpoint of this entire sad tale, lost herself, the lovely new life she was carrying and is now left reaching for her make believe prince charming on the white horse to come and take her away from it all.

Or, Omkara, my fallen angel, who's made a dreadful mistake by trying to be a puppeteer when he himself was not in control of his own life. And he's left feeling everything someone shouldn't be made to.

I must be a masochist because I want more my friend...

Eagerly waiting for more dark awesomeness from you...

p.s. sorry for the super late comment

It seems I've torn out so many hearts, I'm sorry about that but all I can do is ask you to tighten your seat belts and hold on...this dark hour is going to pass.
I know Genie, I felt the same writing it out. Both of them are so vulnerable, in need of protection and poor that you can't help but cry for both. I loved the way you put it all, summed up in a few delicious sentences.
Oh my friend, fear not, you are going to get more very soon!
Thank you so much for being with me through this journey.
Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 8 years ago
Thanks everyone who hit LIKE for chapter 12!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hi,
Without much ado, here we go with the next chapter.
Enjoy!

Chapter 13

Distance

Under the lights of their study, Omkara looked like a ghost. There were dark circles under his reddened eyes and his face was pale. Shivay felt bad for waking him up in the wee hours of the dawn; he had been watching over Gauri the entire night. But the information he had could not wait.

"Aditya Vikram Rana? Omkara repeated emptily, "Sidhdarth's brother? That's why my people couldn't locate him or that dad of his again?

"I didn't believe my detective first, but then Malika called me. Frankly she didn't sound very enthusiastic about the development. Shivay nodded, as Omkara sunk into his leather chair, his hands covering his face.

"Was he playing her Shivay? He asked darkly. "Was it all some kind of a dirty game?

"You know, I wouldn't put it past a Rana especially when you count the famous rivalry between Sharmas and Ranas.

Omkara's rattled intake of breath made him stop.

"The truth will destroy her Shivay, he muttered. "She wouldn't be able to take it.

"She doesn't have to know things that hurts her Om, Shivay suggested slowly. "Tuje sirf uss ki kushi se matlab hai...

"How can I " He couldn't complete his sentence as someone opened the study door loudly. For a moment his heart raced wildly wondering what he would do if Ri was standing there at the threshold. To his relief it was Bua ma, her dark gray dressing gown trailing after her. Both brothers rose from their chairs, exchanging a curious glance.

"Do you need anything Bua ma?

"Omkie? The woman sounded determined and he noticed she had a folder in her hands. "I need your signatures here.

"What is it? He reached out to take the folder unconsciously and flipped it open, his eyes skimming over the content. "Bua ma yeh toh "

"They are divorce papers, she completed his sentence and pursed her lips. "Sign them Omkie and free yourself from this trap.

"Bua ma aap yeh " Shivay tried to intervene but the old lady glared at him.

"I'm doing this right thing Shivay. That girl cannot be our bahu and you know it very well. Her tone was brisk and rough, Omkara winced at her words.

"Kiyun nahi ban sakti? He had to ask.

"You are asking me that Omkie? You know very well what kind of a girl she is, and you want to stay married to her?

"Yes. His answer was short.

Bua Ma lend a hand on his shoulder, giving him an understanding nod.

"You're worrying about your father right? I will take care of him. He will not say a word against it chal sign kar de! Omkara didn't move, he simply placed the file on the table and folded his hands. "You won't sign?

"No.

"Omkie wo ladki tere liye sahi nahi hai. Wo bina shaadi ke maa banne wali thi can't you see how they've been trapping you?

"She was in love Bua ma.

"Don't be a fool Omkie! Bua ma waved her hands. "Pyaar has it's limits you know? Unhe cross nahi karte. Aur jo karte hai unhe characterless kehete hai.

"I've been living in with Riddima for five years, Omkara pointed out calmly. "Toh main bhi chartacterless hua na?

"Omki you're not getting me there's a difference between this and that,

"Mujhe nahi sunna, he shook his head and left, giving her a dark look in parting.

"You have to listen Omkie! Her voice called after him, before the door shut with a snap.

**

Ri woke up to find Omkara gone; his side of bed empty and cold and the pillows arranged around her to cuddle into, filling in his absence. She stretched gradually, her muscles screaming in protest and opened her palm slowly. She had been clutching into a wooden bead all night, she knew where it came from, it's one of those beads he wore around his neck. She had known it was him, the moment her lips had touched him. The pain clouding her senses had not been powerful enough to blind her to that distinct whiff of his cologne, or the husky tone of his voice. But it had touched her deeply that he let her imagine the person she wanted beside her, instead of waking her up to the undeniable realities of their lives. She had never known someone sensitive enough to let down their own egos to share another's pain especially when their wife took another man's name. It was that incredible man she had kissed last night.

The voices outside were getting louder, words being spoken distinct.

"You said it today, but please don't repeat it again. I'm not going to stand here and listen to anyone insulting my wife! Ri had heard her husband sounding furious before, but the fury coating his words had her wincing for a second before another voice replied, this time a higher pitched one of a woman.

"Jo sach hai, wo tujhe sunna padenga Omkie I wonder, kya jadu kiya hai uss ladki ne tuj par?

"I'm not going to sign that, Omkara said after a long breath. "Please take it off my sight right now Shivay " his tone changed. "This conversation is done.

There were some more low toned conversation, in which Omkara took no part. The door opened and closed, bringing him back to her vision. He wasn't looking at her, still under the impression that she was asleep; instead he marched into his work space and pushed the half completed sculpture off the table. Ri bit into her lower lip to stop the shuttering sound from making her jump.

"Hypocritical people! He hissed under his breath. "Sab ko apni naam khoon khandaan ki padi hai. They feel marriage is some kind of a game that you play at leisure time. Bloody Oberois! Some more glassware went flying. Even Ri could not pretend to sleep anymore, she held her breath from groaning as she sat up straight.

"Omkara?

Both of them jumped at the sound of her voice. He turned to her with a guilty expression, finally realizing how loud a noise he had been making, and she marveled at how weak her tone was. He approached her gingerly, his eyes travelling over her face checking for any pain.

"You need something Ri?

She ignored the sudden use of her nick name and looked into his eyes, suddenly finding it hard to concentrate on anything other than the broken expression in them.

"Humein ghar jaana hai, her tone was cold and distanced, he sighed before sitting beside her. She dropped her gaze, fiddling with the end of the duvet covering her and continued. "There's some ritual right pagphera?

"Abhi nahi jaa sakte na, he sounded confused, a little disturbed. "You need to rest.

"I'll rest at home, she still refused to meet his gaze, knowing it might undo her courage. "Waise bhi it's better if I stay out of the discussions.

He closed his eyes and exhaled.

"You heard them? His tone was empty. "Ri you must know I don't "

"Bua Ma was right girls like me, we're not bahu material. You should have listened to her. She slapped away the hand he stretched out to touch her cheek. "Hum teek hai, it's okay. I just need to be alone for a few days.

His large hands cupped her face, forcing her teary gaze to meet his.

"And you'll solve everything on your own? His tone was insistent, forcing her to answer.

"That's what I've been doing.

"Right. But you don't have to do it any more.

"Why? What has changed?

"You've got me now.

"And I don't need you. There was a pause, in which they stared at each other, his hands still cupping her face, her eyes still fixed upon his. Something akin to a disappointment crossed his gaze and she blinked. "This is your guilt talking and I'm not some community service project.

He let her go, getting back to his feet, Omkara turned away from her.

"Fine. He buried his hands in his pockets and shrugged. "Get ready, I'll drop you off.

"Thank you! She said curtly and the silence dropped its curtains.

**

Waiting to hear your take,

Thanks for reading!

Sorry for any disappointments.

Love,

Sakura


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Posted: 8 years ago
This story is on fire, I don't know what else to say.

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