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Posted: 8 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: Gotohelldil

Wowww

Supeeb awesome Anni
This one was a great treat
And totally different take
Guess there was anika's fault here
Update soon
BTW if it's not too much for asking when are you going to update your TS I don't remember it's name but it involves Mallika and her wedding and all


Thank You Shivy..!⭐️
O my that TS -My Best Friend's Wedding is stretching...n I actually got blocked...but hope will be soon back with part 2.!
Sry for keeping u waiting.!
I have taken to much than I can eat.!😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: Nohsin10

Wow it's interesting

Shivaay is really angry at Anika😭
Poor Annika she was not wrong
She was just trying to help.
I hope Shivaay will understand her


Well even I don't know how it will turn out..
But the thing is that Shivaay is hurt.!
Updating soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: AYUSHIVISHU

Finally someone showed Annika is doing something other than being mahan...I am not saying I want grey Annika because we can't fully accept it now because we already loved the Annika which we saw in the show

but wat i dnt like about her is she is sometimes behaving like a jagatmata...she should take a stand for herself when someone insult her even if it is her husbands mom...
coming to your story it's something different anniii
and I am loving this...
so Annika had met gayathri and now shivaay misunderstood her...Ya mistakes happen...let's see how Annika is going to correct it
shivaay is angry and hurt...I hope Annika will make him understand...will be waiting for the next update


Thank you so much Aparna... I m glad u like this take as well.!
⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#24

Originally posted by: farinaks

Awww it was awesome anni
Different ...interesting... I was spell bound


Thank You!😊

Originally posted by: Shaina744

Khidkitod starting... Love it a lot...
Lots of misunderstanding...
And he left her... Anika s now all alone and is recalling the promises which was given by Shivay...
Can't wait for next part... Update soon...


Thank you Shaina.!
Yup updating..!

Originally posted by: prabhata

Wow... Interestingly different start. 👏

Waiting for next update.


Thanks!!

Originally posted by: monmon95

Eyyy nice one! continue soon!


Ahann..people r liking.. It..! Thanks⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#25

Originally posted by: moon99

Hey! 😊

So I was excepting a sweet little story, but BANG! This was totally unexpected! But I like it.

Poor Anika. I have no idea if this will lead to a happy ending or positive ending, but *fingers, legs, arms, and if possible, toes crossed* 😆 hopefully it will be a happy ending 😳 b/c I get the michmichis when I read something sad or full of pain.

But Amazing Start!!!!!

EAGERLY WAITING FOR THE NEXT PART!

It feels like I haven't read your work in ages. 😭 but whene I found this, I was very very happy! 😃 😃

Loads of Love,
- Sims 🤗


Haha...
Yaa I try sticking to comedy n romance...
But yeah..kuch ideas likhne hi paste hai.!

Note-All my stories will have positive end.!

Pain well might be there... !
But I will compensate with the end pakka.!

My Work...lol...
Its all under construction..! Sry to keep all my readers waiting..!
And this story grew to a SS from TS.!
Thank you Simmy.!⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#26
Author's Note:-
This was supposed to be Two/three shot. But I got tangled and now its going to be a short story. Slightly different.
It will be more of the Angst-Emo genre !
Also, I think I will update this at an average of weekly once. Well , I can't be sure about it.
And this will have a khidkitod Happy End.!










Shot 2: Pained.
He entered the room. His heart paining more than ever. Omkara followed him inside.Without looking at him-"Please leave me alone for some time! he said, his eyes reflecting hurt.
Omkara din't bulge, he went and placed a hand on his shoulder.
"Om please...!
Omkara looked at him, Shivaay finally turned to him-"Please!
Om sighed, he knew Shivaay dint break in front of them. He nodded-"Take care of my brother!" Tapping his shoulder he left taking Rudra along who was reluctant to leave his elder brother alone. He shut the door behind.
As soon as he heard the door click shut he took the nearest vase and broke it.

Rudra heard the crashing sound and turned to Om scared-"O, bhaiya needs us...how can we leave him alone like that!? He turned to go back.

Omkara held his brother's hand "No..Rudra, he will be fine...trust him to that! He needs to vent it out and he wont be able to do it with us around, Main baat karoonga usse lekin abhi nahi...

"Chot aaayi hai, Dard Bhi Hoga,
Aur Bura Bhi Lagega, Gussa Bhi aaayega...!

Rudra nodded. His phone rang and he nodded and said a "thank You!"

Omkara looked at him with questioning eyes-"Wo Bhabhi, ghar pahunch gayi...Maine Khanna ko bola thaa..nazar rakhne ke liye...aur security bhi!"
Omkara nodded. Rudra looking at blank space-"Bhabhi ne sahi nahi kiya..."

Omkara sighed and sat by the pool-"Shivaay ne bhi sahi nahi kiya thaa...Infact zyaada bura kiya thaa..."
Rudra-"Lekin Bhaiya ne regret bhi kiya ...Aur abhi karte hain..!" Rudra's heart pained to see his brother , his superhero broken.

Omkara-"Anika bhi kar rahi hai!"He has seen her pain in those eyes. Alas his brother, her husband had been too clouded by hurt to see those eyes which cried , and expressed the pain in her heart.

Rudra was clearly unable to understand the complexity, everything was crystal clear, they both loved each other and yet .."Why is all this so complicated..!?"

Omkara smiled and simply hugged his brother, "don't worry sab theek ho jaayega!" Rudra smiled faintly.




"Why ? Why!?" he screamed. Everything in there room reminded him about her.
He looked at the mirror and he saw them smiling at each other while she blushed.
He picked up the metallic statue and threw it on the mirror...!
"It was all a lie!??" his eyes were red with anger and hurt, as he saw the mirror break into pieces.


Main dhoondne ko zamane me jab wafa nikla
Pata chala ki ghalat leke main pata nikla

When I started out to look for love in the world,
I found out that I had begun with the wrong address with me.


He remebered those happy moments he had spent with her.
Their first meet, where she broke the windshield of his car. His hear felt like that windshield now. He took a step, lost in those memories.

The way she ran behind him for her chaand.
The way she made him laugh.
The way she made him crazy with her.
The way she fell on him and made him fall for her.
The way she made him feel complete.
He smiled though the pang in his heart grew.


Jis ke aane se muqammal ho gayi thi zindagi
Dastakein khushiyon ne di thi,
Mit gayi thi har kami
The one with whose arrival life had become complete,
and joys had knocked [at my door]
every lack was fulfilled.



His smile soon disappeared. As the happenings of the evening came back. He din't see where he walked, he stepped on glass and his foot was hurt. He winced in the sharp pain, but it was nothing compared to the one she had given him. The one she had given him by breaking his TRUST, the anchor of their relationship.


Kyun bewajah di ye sazaa
Kyun khwaab de ke wo le gayaa
Jiyein jo hum lage sitam
Azaab aise wo de gayaa
why did (she) gave me such a punishment,
why did (she) give me dreams and then took them away,
if I live, it feels like a torture,
such pains (she) gave me.

He removed the glass piece from his foot and threw it away. He walked towards the bed and stumbled on th carpet breaking down. He trusted her. He trusted her more than himself!!
"Kyun Anika!" he cried, unable to take the pain rising in his chest.
"Abhi Abhi toh pyaar hua thaa tumse...
Abhi Abhi toh I had started seeing my world in you...
Abhi Abhi toh...

I trusted you Anika, why did you break my trust...!' he cried as those tears dried. She was his world, she was everything. He felt as though his world was made of glass, it came crashing down. Was he wrong!? To love her..

Main dhoondhne ko uske dil me jo Khuda nikla
Pataa chala ke galat leke main pata nikla

When I started out to find god in her heart,
I found out that I had begun with the wrong address with me.

"I hate you Anika!" he swore and he knew he lied. No matter what he couldn't hate her. Not now when he had fallen for her, when he had made her his world.
He sat away in silence for sometime, he slowly looked up to look at the broken mirror. He saw his broken self. He hated the sight. He pitied himself.It was all his fault. He shouldn't have heard the stupid heart.

But,

He still loved her...

No...

He would now hate her.! Hate her for breaking his trust. Hate her for breaking him! Hate her for coming into his life. Hate ...

His heart sighed.

His heart screamed, that wasnt possible. But his mind now gained control. Shivaay Singh Oberoi won't break. No one could break him.
He composed himself. Shivaay Singh Oberoi din't want anyone's Saahara!(Support)

You need her Saath!(Companionship) his heart whipered.


Shivaay Singh Oberoi doesn't need anyone. His eyes burned. He will undo his mistake, the mistake of taking decisions from heart and not mind. He wiped away his fear his eyes boiling with anger. He will undo it all. He would go back to hating her.
His mind rose to protect his fallen heart.!


If only he knew, there are few things no matter what, can't be undone.
Of them one was falling in love.!
And Shivaay Singh Oberoi had fallen irreversibly in Love with HER. His Anika.!


P.S
Hope you all liked it.
Looking forward to your views.😊
Edited by annikaa - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#27
Om is right, Shivaay's hurt has overpowered him so much that he forgotted he had also broke her trust innumerable times and had hurt her many times.
Don't know what Shivaay is going to do now 😕
Waiting for next update
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Posted: 8 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: KashiTessa

Om is right, Shivaay's hurt has overpowered him so much that he forgotted he had also broke her trust innumerable times and had hurt her many times.
Don't know what Shivaay is going to do now 😕
Waiting for next update


Well...the hint was in Om's words and Shivaay's monologue.!😉

I am with Rudra
"Why is this so complicated!?"😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#29
Beautiful nd emotional full of pain
I agree with omkara thst shivaay is just seeing one side didn't gsve her a chance to explain
Nyc choice of song...It was my wish to read something on this song...it is one of myfavourite song
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Posted: 8 years ago
#30
Awesome update dear
Waiting for next update..
Update soon..

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