Bitter Kisses (PriVeer FF) [Ch 14 Updated Pg 34] - Page 12

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: sosweetsumi

nice story..

please do continue
bye sumi


Thank you! Hope you like the next update.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dimaag

Twerps that was so much needed. I really liked reading about Ranveer's history. I don't know why the writers didn't even put a proper history of his character. I don't come to the forum due to the sudden demolition of PriVeer story. But when I got ur PM, I was so happy. Thanks Twerps πŸ˜ƒ. Do update soon.



Hullooo!!!! I am so glad I sent you a pm in that case! I was afraid all PriVeer fans, like myself, would have left the forum by now and so no one would even read the story anymore.
There is more of his story to come but for now the next update is ready. Hope you like it! πŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 9 years ago

Thanks! πŸ˜ƒ
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Chapter 7
The first time Priyanka saw a corpse was when she was five years of age. Daadaji passed away suddenly and she remembers the house being full of people, with solemn faces, speaking in soft whispers. She had seen him lie on the floor, wrapped in white. He had looked like he was sleeping. She had only caught a glimpse. Ma had made her, along with the rest of the kids, stay in the nursery. There, they had played games, celebrating this sudden holiday atmosphere that pervaded the house. They had played at pirates seeking treasure. Shivay Bhaiya had designated roles for each of them. Priyanka remembers vividly the irritation she had felt on being told to be the shipmate who is eaten by cannibals. She remembered a lot less what Dadaji had looked like as they prepared him for the funeral pyre.

There had been deaths in the family since. When Nanaji passed away, Priyanka was away at her boarding school. She came down for the funeral service. Roop Bua lost her husband while the two of them were on a trip in Singapore. Bua had returned alone, a widow, and full of resentment for the family. In her brief insignificant life, death had not been a stranger.

And yet.

Nothing in her life had prepared her for that bloodied writhing body she had to come face to face with on that fateful night she turned eighteen. Returning home from the club, where her friends had thrown her a surprise birthday party, Priyanka had been feeling so lightheaded, as if she could simply fly away if she so wanted. She remembers O Bhaiya laughing as she laid her head against the window and let the night breeze waft through her hair. Dylan was on the radio.

I'm not sleepy and there is no place I'm going to...

It had seemed like a night that dreams were made of. The laughter from the party had still bubbled within her. The petty arguments that made up the cacophony that she heard daily at home seemed to belong to another world. The night had made her feel like a different person. Looking at the empty road before them, she had felt like taking the wheels. She had been learning driving for a while and that night, she had wanted to let the car fly and have the controls in her grasp.

At first, O Bhaiya had shaken his head with a smile and continued to drive. But then she had asked again. And again. She had clapped her hands when he finally had relented and stopped the car. Scooting into the driver's seat, Priyanka had felt like a king. She had felt such confidence flow through her as she had rarely experienced in her life.

The car had purred like a great gentle beast and off they had gone, down that smooth winding empty road. Priyanka had been glad that it was so late in the night. The thicket of trees on both sides of the road appeared like a jungle and she pretended to herself that they were driving through a dense forest. Dylan's words had woven itself into the magic of the night.

Take me on a trip upon your magic swirling ship...

When the yellow figure had suddenly appeared as the car rounded a corner, she was driving too fast to do much. She had pressed down on the brake and closed her eyes with a scream. She had barely heard O Bhaiya's shout. Dylan had continued to sing as Priyanka remained seated with eyes closed, hands tightly clutched around the steering wheel.

...to dance beneath the diamond sky
with one hand waving free
silhouetted by the sea
circled by the circus sands
with all memory and fate
driven deep within the waves
Let me forget about today until tomorrow...

She had heard the door slam shut as O Bhaiya had stepped out. And so she had finally opened her eyes, detached her frozen fingers from the wheels and stepped out. And there on the leafy road, covered in blood and dried leaves, she had met her nightmare.

The body had twitched. Long hair hid the face but it was clear that it was a woman that Priyanka had hit.

"O Bhaiya..." she had managed to stutter out.

Even her brother had seemed to be frozen in horror. But at the sound of her voice, he had jumped to action.

"We need to take her to a hospital", he had said and then lifting the bleeding body, he had placed the woman on the backseat.

And then he had waited for Priyanka to get into the car before driving like the very hounds of hell were after them.

They had gone to Nirmala Nursing Home. It was Daadi's latest charity project and they knew most of the doctors there.

They had placed the woman in the care of the emergency unit there and had sat in the corridor, covered in blood.

Around midnight, a doctor had come to them and told them to go home. He had insisted that the hospital would inform them in case the patient improves. The phone calls from home had also been getting more insistent and finally they had gone to their car and driven home in silence. Neither had said anything about the fact that Priyanka had no driving licence.

Next morning after breakfast, the two had made up excuses and rushed back to the hospital. They had ran all the way from the car park to the reception. There, a nurse had taken them to another chamber where a doctor they were familiar with waited for them.

With mounting dread they had stood before the man who studied them closely. And then he told them the patient had died towards the early hours of dawn.

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Omkara sat at his work table, a lump of clay sitting before him. Rudra had left him alone only a while back. Outside, the rain poured down like there was no tomorrow. Reaching his hand out, Omkara took the clay and pressed hard, flattening the grey brown mess.

His family had betrayed him once again. And this time the blow had come from a corner he had least expected! Daadi! Today he finally knew what it was to be an Oberoi. He now knew that each and every one of his blood relations would throw the rest under the bus as long as it meant the family honour remained intact. Omkara watched the clay slip out between his fingers. The betrayals were piling up too fast.

Shivay, the one he had trusted with his life, had turned out to be as cruel and heartless as Mr. Oberoi. Omkara could barely bring himself to face the hollow shell of a person that Anika had become. He had seen her listlessly roaming the corridors of the mansion last night when everyone else had gone to bed. The look in those eyes had made him want to tear apart all his paintings. Like a careless child who tore away a butterfly's wings, his brother had, with utter unconcern, destroyed the very spirit that could have breathed life into his own. Om knew, deep in his heart, Shivay was affected by Anika and felt the influence of her presence in his life keenly. And yet, with that foolhardiness that was as much a part of him as his over-protective love for his brothers, Shivay was fighting desperately against that influence. And in a final effort to win, Shivay had tried to turn Anika into a tool for him to use and manipulate. Only in doing so he had broken that very precious soul that had moved him, that had challenged him.

Om tore himself away from the clay. His eyes fell on the drawer within which lay that cursed painting which had arrived in the mail. His thoughts turned away from Shivay. Priyanka was to be married to Randhawa. The very man who, Om knew, was blackmailing her! What Randhawa's motives behind this cruel game was, Om didn't know but he knew that the man would ruin his sister if he got the chance.

He wiped his hands on a piece of cloth and pulled out the sheet of paper. What had happened that night was something Om couldn't forgive himself for. Priyanka was a child but he should have known better. He had been the one who had allowed her to drive, knowing fully well, that she had no licence. He was the one who was the cause for the death of that unknown woman.

"Om, are you busy?"

With a start, Om looked up. Shivay stood outside. Quickly, he placed the paper back in the drawer, Om got up from his stool.

"Yes" he said shortly.

He walked to the wardrobe and pulled out a jacket.

"Going out?" Shivay asked. He had come in and was lingering near the empty canvas next to the couch.

Om didn't reply.

With a sigh, Shivay went on. "How long are you going to avoid me, Om?" he asked.

At first Om thought of not replying but the memory of Anika's eyes was too vivid. "As long as you continue to be a bas***d." he said roughly before storming out.

Shivay left soon after. Before leaving, he checked all the drawers and cupboards for drugs.

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Edited by twerping - 9 years ago


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Posted: 9 years ago
I wonder why aren't YOU the writer and the producer. I wish you could make spin off with Priyabka and Ranveer! Thank you SO much for writing this phenomenal story! 😊 *happy tears*


P.S: Thank you for the PM!!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
I like the fact I'm feels for Anni
But is he going to do something about it?

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Posted: 9 years ago
Wow. .that was just so amazing.
The guilt ...prinku...Om. ...the change in relationships.. the facts about being an oberoi...whatever age...Shivaay got dadi blood too.

It's getting exciting now.

It was good to see what's in Prinku's head too...with shivika in the background. ..Makin their presence felt.

Exploring the Oberoi family dynamics. ...it's like Pandoras box.


Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
First of all, thank you so much for this fast update Twerps!! πŸ€— *hugs* I liked that u have just replayed the entire accident scenario. Otherwise in the show it was kind of cut and paste type of scene. And then as we all know no further details were disclosed about the accident just the 'torture' ramblings πŸ˜†. So I really liked this part and also Om's inner turmoil has been greatly portrayed here by you. So amazing update Twerps! And yes I haven't watched the serial after the part where it was revealed by Shivaay in Roka ceremony that Priyanka was pregnant. So leave it. Let's focus here. And yes let's get back to the story circle πŸ˜ƒ. Do update soon 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Tht was one fast update n it was brilliantly written..The way u showed the feelings of each n every character n how they all changed by passing time, was excellent...
N Ur lines r so beautiful. Can i know how do u write it, like Really. I think u should write a book n i will buy it for sure..!! Thank u somuch for this one amazing story. Writers should check out here sometimes..
N yeah..This never bores me, this is much much much better than wht is shown on TV...N Ur writing style makes me attached to it..😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Look who's here! 😎 πŸ˜†

As promised, I caught up with all the updates, and I realised that I had 4 not 2 updates to catch up on. So that was a surprise treat for me. And what fun it was!

Starting from chapter four here... Kalyani, with her twisted notions of ishqbaazi, has never exactly been a favourite, but today I felt like she is really a hypocrite. She was rifling through the society pages hoping that the media had caught a moment between Shivaay and Anika, something that would push them further down the path of ishqbaazi but when an apparently similar moment has been published about her granddaughter, she thinks it'll taint the family name and honour?! How ridiculous!

Unni, his musings about his Boss, his Boss' qualities and the Sir's girlfriend was a treat to read. That boy is a naughty one. πŸ˜†

Your disdain for the Oberois is evident in the way your words flow. 🀣 Be it the way Tej thinks of his son, Om talks to Shivaay or even the way Randhawa, Shinde, et al think of them. πŸ˜† Pinky's reaction to the whole thing was pretty expected but I thought at least Jhanvi would understand her daughter. How conveniently the clan has taken matters of her life in their own hands assuming they know best. Not one single soul bothered to even find out what was the truth of the matter from Prinku herself. What a sorry state of affairs! The only beacon of hope here is Randhawa, assuming the guy will give her a fair chance at things - choices and decisions, once the haze of misunderstandings is cleared. Prinku will definitely be happier with him than she has ever been with her family, in all her years.

Though I can only imagine how horribly pained Randhawa must feel at the sudden utter loss of control over his life. Would he ever have thought that saving a girl's life would throw him in a predicament wherhe would be tied to an Oberoi against all his wishes and lose a case that he had out his sweat and blood into investigating. Who would've thought that shady Shakti would be the mastermind behind the entire plan.

Loved the backstory that you provided to Ranveer's life. What a touching account it was! Though I'm curious to know how did Rajju end up in her present state considering that the girl run over by Prinku and Om's car actually died the next morning. Or is there more to it? Also, what happened to Amal and Oman?

I can't wait for the next update. The build-up to the PriVeer union (albeit forced) is awesome! These two will be going into the relationship with so much hate, pain, hurt and resentment, it will be beautiful to see them find omse common ground to start their life on and one that would eventually lead them to happiness and love! I'm super glad that you didn't give up on this story. Eagerly waiting doe the next part!

Cheers,
Sarce

P.S: I also love the small references to Shivaay's wedding and the way he behaves in exactly similar circumstances when it comes to his loved ones. Please tell me you will update soon?

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