RiKara OS - || Hum Tum ||

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OS-||Hum Tum||

He sat on the sofa of the living room, trying to keep himself busy. He sat scrolling through the paintings on his phone trying hard to keep his mind occupied at what he was doing and keep his thoughts off her, but he failed miserably. He screwed his eyes shut, and punched the soft armrest. Why?

He was brought out of his thoughts bya man's voice. He looked up at him.
Man-"Good Morning Sir.. Wo actually Shivaay Sir se milna thaa...!
Om-"Hmm...regarding..? "
Man-"Wo actually Kaali Thaakur ke case ke baare mein.!
Om looked thoughtfulbas that name echoed in his ears-"What about him?"
Man-"Shivaay sir had asked me to find about Kaali Thaakur, his past, his biodata, and everything, he dint want any complications after what happened that day in Bareli!"
Om remembers that day , how Kaali Thaakur had been killed."Bareli!" He sighed. What was about that place? Ever since his first visit, that place had left a permanent mark in his life.
No. There is no point getting into the mess again. Its better to let Shivaay deal.He had, had enough. Gaining composure he spoke up-"Wo Shivaay is out for two days, you can meet him when he is here, after two days.!"
Man-"Sir...I won't be here...this pendrive has all the details, please give this to Shivaay sir. And O will brief you about this, Sir had asked me to give this to either of his brothers. So you can keep this, and let me just quickly brief you.
Omkara looked aside and sighed-"Okay!"
As he went thorough the presentation, he stopped and paid extra attention to one particular presentation.
Not Again.!
It was her picture.!!!
Omkara-"What is this picture got to do with these important stuff?"
Man-"Oh it is important sir, she is a victim of Kaali Thakur's bad deeds.!"
Omkara shocked-"What..? Victim...ye ladki...?"
Man-"Yes...poora gain jaanta hai iske baare mein...
Omkara clenches his jaw as he remembers about the Thakurain and Gauri's engagement with Kaali Thakur.
Man-"Sad story she has...
Omkara looks at the guyvin anger. Did he just say sad.? Damn she brought sadness into people's lives. Liar, A Bare-faced Liar. A home braker. She dint deserve any sympathy.
The Man continued-"She was kidnapped by Kaali Thaakur and forced by him to marry her. He threatened to kill her mother, and black mailed her. Poor her, and recently her mother was diagnosed with some serious disease and lies in the hospital, though weird enough I did not meet her in Bareli..! She was much appreciated by all people there, all pity her fate..! Apparently some man from the city had married her and left her there.
Omkara was taken aback by his version of the story-"Are You Sure...ye sab sach hai...she was forced by Kaali Thaakur!??"
Man-"Yes. ...at first the Kalli Thakur had asked her to marry him, but she had rejected as he was already married and was known for his crimes, this angered the Thakur and he forced her. She apparently was sold off by her uncle and aunt to the guy. This is what almost every villager has told me. I also met her friend who takes care of her mother. She told me that the girl has been away to some big city to earn so that she can manage the cost of treatment.!
Omkara looked blankly at space as the man went on to explain the other deeds of the Notorious Man!
He dint even know when the man had finished. The man left. While Omkara was lost in flashbacks of the previous day, of what had happened after the JagRaata..!

Gauri was determined to tell the truth, she was ready to face the consequences of what was to come. She had taken the decision keeping a stone on her heart. She knew ChulBul was important for Omkara, but she also knew that Truth was equally important to him. The fact remained, He was important to her and she could lie no longer. Lost in her thoughts she walked through the corridor towards the garden where she had seen him go a while back. The night was windy as the white translucent curtains of the corridor danced wildly in air, and let in the light of the full moon night. Suddenly she felt herself bump into something, something hard and yet soft. She let out a ouch as her feet sprained in trying to keep the balance. Expecting to hit the floor she screwed her eyes shut involuntarily. But she dint l. A strong arm held her waist while another hand held on to her left palm.She slowly opened her doe-shaped eyes and they met his. She had banged into him!!!
He looked at her in shock, as the moonlight fell on her face perfectly presenting her face to him. The one he had never forgotten. The one he just could not forget, no matter how hard he tried.
She looked into his eyes and contentment filled her soul. Finally after what seemed eternity to her, he straightened her up, at the right moment a gushing wind bles her white net dupatta on her face. He slowly removed the dupatta off her face.
"Tum?"
He said as his blood started boiling. She saw his expressions change.
Gulping-"Haan Humm...hummein aapse kuch kehna hai!"
Omkara trembling in anger raises his voice-"Tumhaar him at kaise hui mere saamne aane kii..!"
Her eyes moistened-"Yun samjiye hum gustaaki kar baithe, Bas ek aakhri baar aapse kuch kehna hai...phir him chale jaayenge...
Omkara-"Mujhe kuch nahi sunaa...leave...!"
Gauri-"Ek baar sun toh lijiye ki him kehna kya chaate hain!" Her eyes pleading as she spoke.
Omkara-"Tumse milna meri zindagi ki sabse Badi bhul thii...waapas Kabhi nahi milna..!" He turns to leave.
Gauri wiping her tears speaks in ChulBul's Voice. He stopped and turned looking shocked. He just heard ChulBul's voice.
She walked up to him-"Him hi Chulbul hain...Hummein Chulbul baana padaa...lekin him aapse aur jhoit nahi bol sakte...issliye...

Omkara's eyes were red, with hurt with anger , he held her by the arm, -"Ye kya bakwaas kar rahi ho...!"
Once again her eyes flooded-"Him sach keh rahe hain..zindagi ne himmein ek baar phir aapke saamne aane khada kar Dia...warna hum aapke saamne Kabhi nahi aate...aur iss baar, ChulBul ke room mein...Lekin ab nahi hota him se ye Chirota-Chiraiya kaa khel...nahi kar sakte aur ye...um..
Omkara's hurt was now slowly replacing with rage he loosened the grip over her hand-"Chulbul...Tumhe bada shauka hain naa doosron ko todne kaa...doosron ko chot phauchaane mein bada mazza aata hai naa!! Haan? "
She nodded in a NO. As she saw his eyes glistening with rage with hurt.
"Ek baar humaari baat toh suniye..humne aisa kyin kiya kin haalat mein kiya wo toh suniye...!"
She was cutoff by him-"Enough...!"
He held her tightly by the arm and shook her-"Bas ...aur kitne jhoot bolne hain...bahut acche se kaan gaya hoon main tumhe ab...tum jaisi aurat bahut dekha thii...lekin tum unnn sab se unn sab see...khudgarz nikli...! I trusted you damn it..! You know what you don't deserve it...you don't deserve pity also...into giri hui ho tum..! Yahan se dafaa ho jaayo...ek haisaan kar dena...apna chehra mujhe Kabhi nahi dikhana...kabhi nahi...apne Khaatir hi Zara ye ek ehsaan kar dena..! "
He pushed her with that!
She looked at him her eyes pleading.
"Omkara...wo sab sach thaa..humaari dosti sachi thii..!!!"
Omkara-"Mujhe bhi lagtaa thaa...
"Tum jaise logon ki wajah se,
Dosti kaa naam barbaad hai!"
Gauri wipes her tears,-"Aap Jo bhi bole...hum ne ab tak ye shaadi nibhaai hai aage bhi nibhayenge, aur ab hum ye dosti bhi nibhaayenge..!"
Omkara gives her a disgusting look-"Rishton ki baat naa hi karo ...to baithar...
Jo insaan kisi doosre insaan ko sirf chot deta hai usse toh rishton ki baatein bilkul nahi karne chaiye..!
Jab se zindagi mein aayi hoo...sirf aur sirf chot dii hai...
Ye ghaav zindagi bhar rahenge...!
Bas ab jitni zindagi Baaki hai,
uss mein dard ke saath hi jeene do,
Kabhi apni shakap mat dikhaana,
Kabhi nahi!
Tears flow down her eyes as those words from him Pierce her heart. She slowly starts stepping backward.
"Bolti Rahi Aakhein Meri,
Inhe Jo padta tu agar..."
My eyes kept saying, what lay in my heart,
If, If only you read what they said...

Omkara walks up and stands by the window peeping outside at the gate. He feels the unusual silence at home, maybe the silence of his heart made him feel the house was silent. Maybe her absence.

She slowly turns as tears flow, he continues to see her leave, he wanted to make sure she left, left for ever. Or maybe a part of him anted to stop her and tell her that he needed her, he needed his friend!!
With every step she looks around remembering those happy moments this place and its people gave her.
"Hota nahii, yun bekhabar,
Hota tu mera ,Humsafar..!"

If you weren't this oblivious,
You would have been my soulmate!!"

She had reached the door, she looks down,one more step and she would leave this place. She remembered the day she first came in here, the day she first met Omkara..! She screwed her eyes shut as tears flowed down. Why did life have to bring him so close to her, Only to separate them? She turned to see him for one last time, on hope that he would stop her. He looked at her wearing a stone face, and looked aside the moment she turned. Why was his heart beating so hard.!? It was best she left him...Then why somwhere down a part of him don't want her to leave?
"Ruk jaa, ek baar, kehta tu agar
Tanha naa guzartaa yun apna ye safar...

If, only if once you had said " Stop" ,
Maybe the journey of our life wouldn't have been this lonely...

She finally stepped out. He let out a sigh. The reason of that sigh wasn't known to him as well. He closed his eyes as he digested all that had happened and turned to leave for his room, only after glancing back at the door once...he himself din't know why he did that..!
For oncle last time she looked at the house from outside the huge gates that were now closed on her, just like the gates of his heart! Finally she turned away looking at the empty road ahead, as she took slow steps and walked away.
Lamhon ki Guzaarish Thii Ye...
Paas aa jaayein...
Hum...Hum ...Tum...
Tum...Hum...Tum...!

The time HAD wished, we came close...!

He sighed as the flashbacks ended, suddenly he felt droplets on his face. He looked up at the sky, which had now turned slightly grey , as though trying to beat his life at the greyness! He smiled ironically.
He shut the window, those droplets could not reach him. He would never get wet again.

Somwhere away, the sky had shown mercy on her as well. She smiled at the sky as though challenging it. She kept aside the grocery bag, and twirled under the sky with open arms. She looked up at the sky smiling, "Wet Me As Much As You Can"
As though accepting the defeat the rain turned to drizzles as the sky cleared and the sunshine appeared again.
As he past the door to the garden on his way back to his room, out of curiosity he peeped out, and walked out amazed to see the sunshine on droplets of water on the leaves making them shine as diamonds. While he stood appreciating the diamonds the weather changed and a finally the rain soaked him. He looked up at the unpredictable sky, looking at it intently questioning it of its plans. Finally chuckling to himself he went in. If only he knew then what Life was trying to hint at!!

Kabhi Kabhi Sirf Ek Mulaaqat Kaafi Hoti Hai,
Aur Kabhi Kabhi Kayi Mulaqaat Lag Jaati Hain..!

P.S
Hope you all liked it.
Was hearing the song when this idea struck me...
The lyrics and the last dialogue are from the movie Hum Tum..!
I wonder how many of you actually could fanthom the symbolism in the last part.
Hope you all enjoyed reading this one as much as I enjoyed writing it.
Would love to read your feedback.



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AparnaChinnu thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome Anniii...
I loved it...
I dnt know wat exactly you hint at last...
I think now the condition will change..that again a new begging is waiting for gauri while om had lost a precious thing he had by his own judgement...
Ya you are right sometimes one meeting is enough to understand a person...but in some cases even if he meet them for so many times we will fail to understand them
anyway it was an awesome work
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: AYUSHIVISHU

awesome Anniii...

I loved it...
I dnt know wat exactly you hint at last...
I think now the condition will change..that again a new begging is waiting for gauri while om had lost a precious thing he had by his own judgement...
Ya you are right sometimes one meeting is enough to understand a person...but in some cases even if he meet them for so many times we will fail to understand them
anyway it was an awesome work


Thanks Aparna..!
As for the end...well its more up to the view of the reader...

But my POV during writing it was...
The Baarish is Love...
Omkara isn't letting Love wet him ..
Him closing the window signifies shutting his heart...
But alas ..there is not a single opening to the heart..beside Jo dil mein Pehle hi bassa hai usse koi farak nahi padega...

In Gauri's case Rain was Situations Of Life... They will never let her atop loving Life..Loving Love...she will love ...
N as Omkara sees the way clear...
He forgets that Love will strike back..!!! And wo aisa bheege gaa..!!
And finally Om surrenders to the rain and smiles at the sky...Sky signifies Life...
After falling in Love...he realises its LIFE...!
It has its ways...!!

And hence the last dialogue...hints to future...
Gauri will come back to his life...!
How only Destiny knows...

And she may leave again...
But wo phir milenge...jab tak...they realise its LOVE..!

Ufff hope u understoodπŸ˜†
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: annikaa


Thanks Aparna..!
As for the end...well its more up to the view of the reader...

But my POV during writing it was...
The Baarish is Love...
Omkara isn't letting Love wet him ..
Him closing the window signifies shutting his heart...
But alas ..there is not a single opening to the heart..beside Jo dil mein Pehle hi bassa hai usse koi farak nahi padega...

In Gauri's case Rain was Situations Of Life... They will never let her atop loving Life..Loving Love...she will love ...
N as Omkara sees the way clear...
He forgets that Love will strike back..!!! And wo aisa bheege gaa..!!
And finally Om surrenders to the rain and smiles at the sky...Sky signifies Life...
After falling in Love...he realises its LIFE...!
It has its ways...!!

And hence the last dialogue...hints to future...
Gauri will come back to his life...!
How only Destiny knows...

And she may leave again...
But wo phir milenge...jab tak...they realise its LOVE..!

Ufff hope u understoodπŸ˜†

wow superb...
u stunned me again...
you are an awesome writer
i really wish that you will become a script writer...

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice one won't be able to explain in more words

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Posted: 8 years ago
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That was so beautiful! πŸ‘

I don't have words to describe how I'm feeling.

Hopefully in the actual show Omkara will realise soon, but knowing that it's an Indian TV series, I don't have much hope. πŸ˜†

By the way, is everybody just as excited as me when we saw Kaali Thakur again? πŸ₯³ The moment I saw him, I screamed in joy like a lunatic! 🀣 πŸ€ͺ

Anyways, AMAZING OS! πŸ‘

P.S Thanks for the PM

Loads of Love,
-Sims πŸ€—
Edited by moon99 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Lovely.. So Om knows the truth, but he still is mad at her,chalo koina.. I really loved the rain stuff you added one wants to do anything for love and the other is afraid of the concept of love only... The rain reminded me of the bariah song- is dard-e-dil ki sifarish ab krde koi yahan ki mil jaye use voh barish Jo bheega de puri trah ... And thanks a ton for the pm
Edited by ....Anabella... - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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A biggg hug from my side anii...
Beautiful update...can't explain here...just awesome...
Aahhh Hum Tum movie dialogues...amazing I love this movie...kaash omkaara gauri ko samaj pata...
You are a fabulous writer and I know you know that...πŸ˜‰
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb Anni!
❀️ ❀️
Beautifully written! <3
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Posted: 8 years ago
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The OS was Incredible...Just Awesome...πŸ‘πŸ‘
The man who came with the pendrive is such a dear one πŸ˜ƒ...Bcoz of him Om now knows that Gauri was not the villain in Mrs. Janhvi Thakur's life, instead she was the victim of the goon, Kaali Thakur 😊...Thankxxx to Shivaay too for hiring the man to find everything about KT...So the elder brother pretty much acted like a cupid to clear MUs between RiKara...😊⭐️
The RiKara scene was too beautiful ...but yaar Annika, tu ne rula diya...so emotional & heart-breaking...😭
Gauri is a woman symbolising strength...wo apni shaadi kaise v nibhayegi phir chahe jo ho jaaye...3 cheers for Gauri...πŸ‘πŸ‘
The way she descended every step of OM while turning back in slightest expectation to be stopped by Om...that scene totally broke my heart...😭😭
Om was sad yet hurt & rageful ...he lost his friend & he knew he will miss him & so he too kept staring through the window, his heart telling him to stop his friend while his mind telling him to let the woman, who broke his trust, just leave him forever...😭


Originally posted by: annikaa



But my POV during writing it was...
The Baarish is Love...
Omkara isn't letting Love wet him ..
Him closing the window signifies shutting his heart...
But alas ..there is not a single opening to the heart..beside Jo dil mein Pehle hi bassa hai usse koi farak nahi padega...

In Gauri's case Rain was Situations Of Life... They will never let her atop loving Life..Loving Love...she will love ...
N as Omkara sees the way clear...
He forgets that Love will strike back..!!! And wo aisa bheege gaa..!!
And finally Om surrenders to the rain and smiles at the sky...Sky signifies Life...
After falling in Love...he realises its LIFE...!
It has its ways...!!

And hence the last dialogue...hints to future...
Gauri will come back to his life...!
How only Destiny knows...

And she may leave again...
But wo phir milenge...jab tak...they realise its LOVE..!



This explanation & symbolism by you is the most amazing portion I came through in this OS...πŸ‘
Annika, what do I say...my thoughts were almost exactly like yours πŸ˜›πŸ˜ƒ...I was thinking almost the same thing when I read your comment below...Now, I too say that this elaboration is the best for the last part...πŸ˜ŽπŸ‘πŸΌ


P.S.- If you don't mind terribly, then pls change this OS to a TS or 4S, & give us some scenes of RiKara when they meet again & this time Om apologises for his mistake...πŸ˜›πŸ˜‰
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