SUKOR OS - Sharaab ke side iphekt

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi friends,

Here is small & short OS of what I'm imagining since last friday.
It has been one month I have joined Udaan family & I'm happy to be part of It!

What can be Chakor's answer for Suraj's quest "Kya hum sach mein alag ho jayenge?"

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The silence in the air was percing Suraj's heart in pieces until he heard her voice, one which he would like to hear all his life.

"Surajjj...Surajjj"
"Hmm" with full of patience and attention to hear what his Dharam Patni will say
"Surajj, hume tum..."
"Hum?"
"Surajj, tum hume..."
"Bolo Chakor!"

Their eyes are still starring at each other as if they only have eyes for their nakli partner, the term they still use whenever they have to be part of each other's need.

Suraj holding Chakor by her shoulder with his left hand, took his right hand up to her face, taking those stands of hair and tucking them behind her ear to get a full glance of her beautiful eyes.

"Surajjj.." calling once again his name, she fell asleep on his shoulder. Her head on him made him feel like rose petals falling on him.

Even if he didn't got any answer from her, he smiled at her for multiple reasons she has given him.

He lifted her taking care of not waking her up, brought her to the room, their room and put her on their bed with all the care and affection in the world which can be seen on his face with his eyes only for her.

Arranging the pillow and putting bed sheet over her, he started to move from there when she took hold of his right hand and said in her sleepy voice "Mujhe akela mat chodo Suraj! Raho mere sath!"

He tried to free his hand from her grip without affecting her sleep but he was unsuccessfully held by the strongest women he has seen in his life, his Jagaat Maata.

He tried his best but nothing can be done, so he decided to sit by her side.

Looking her sleeping peacefully after all the fiasco that had happened since the sports commission accusation, he wished for her happiness and calm. It's when it stroken to him all that he has done for her and what he got in return!

All that has happened since the first time he met her has stated to flash in front of him : screaming over the little Chakor, mocking her, scaring her, tortuing her after her come back to Azaadgunj, forcing her to accept his order after marriage, blackmailing her for his needs and hurting her again and again.

His face turned from sad to sadness and then with determination he spoke out to a sleeping Chakor :
"Chakor, I will bring back the energetic Chakor I know, who never bow her head, always smiling and defeating her enemies. You had done a lot for others to get a peaceful life, even for me but nothing for you. I will bring back the peace and happy smile back to you. I don't know if I lucky or not for getting you in my life as it will not remain so long." saying his last line, he caressed her cheek and stopped hearing her call him "Surajj" feeling his touch while sleeping.

He had a smile on his face hearing her calling him even in her sleep. He thought to wait few more minutes to free himself but tiredness overtook him, pulling him to sleep nearby her.

The rays of light entered their room, he felt someone calling his name, the familiar voice asking him to wake up and smooth hands over his arms tapping and pulling him.

He opened his eyes to find Chakor, arms crossed, fiering at him with her eyes. He tried to smile at her which went to be of no use as she started to fire with words.

"What is this Suraj? I asked you to not drink and what did you do, you made me drink wine! How can You be like this?"
"Woh mein"
"Wok kya Suraj? What you did is wrong!"
"Chakor, It was for you"
"For me? If It's the case, you wouldn't have made me drink!" Suraj sat down without no idea of what to speak or how to convince her.
She continued "Last night you were asking me If we are going to seperate for real. My answer is : I don't want to be part of your life. So yes, we will seperate!"

He wanted to scream and say "No" but he didn't. That's when he opened his eyes to find out that he was dreaming.

He saw Chakor so close to him, hugging in her peaceful sleep with a cute smile on her face which made him smile, at the same time admire her beauty.

Slowly and steadly he got free from her before leaving his JM alone all smiley smiley.

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Thanks for reading!
Let me know how you find it!
If this OS is not worth it, let me know also!

- Maithili

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Its was amazing loved it dear
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Originally posted by: Kavyabenerjee

Its was amazing loved it dear

Glad u liked it!
Thank u!😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I wanted to slap the dream Chakor!!
Good OS Maithili.
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Wonderful OS... Love it 😊
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Originally posted by: _Namita_

I wanted to slap the dream Chakor!!
Good OS Maithili.


Sorry di If it has hurt you.

I wanted to write what will happen If she didn't answer his question and the next day what will be her reaction If she in not ok with the wine matter(in case she remembers eveything) : fully my imagination and I don't want it to happen on screen.


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: SofiaIshVeer

Wonderful OS... Love it 😊

Thank u dear!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Welcome to the forum😳
You're writing is superb 👏waiting for more😉
Can we have a part 2 maybe🥱
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Beautiful story , Maithu!! The dream did freak me out a little..😲
I have a lot of respect for writers here..I know it takes time, patience and creativity to pen down these stories..Thankyou !
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Short and sweet os...loved it. ..😳

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