Take off your shirt and show me your heart! FF

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey guys, this is me Ratika, I was off for quite sometime now as I wasn't enjoying the show much but am back to watch it as am expecting a little more this time, I hope I get what am expecting.
Anyway here is my small fiction, I hope you all will like it and I would like to thank you all for appreciating my previous efforts.

This fiction is after the break up and Dev is shocked to come to a realization of trueself of his mother although he hasn't seen much but whatever he saw is heartbreaking.

Part 1

Its a thunder storm outside and this awakens Dev. He is disturbed. He is not getting nice, peaceful sleeps these days, yes the reason is Sonakshi "it's Dr. Bose for you" his broken heart reminds him her last words to him. He gets up from his bed and goes to check his mother but he couldn't find her in her room.
"Where is she" he thinks and runs down to check if she is in kitchen for something but stops in midway as hears his mami speaking something non sense to his mother.

With her usual batters, Mami tells Ishwari " Jiji, yeh pehla pyar bhulaye nahi bhoola jata, yeh toh acha hua ke Dev aur WO dactorni alag ho gaye par jiji Dev ka ab samjhana aasan nahi hoga ke Sonakshi ko bhola de"
To this Ishwari replies " Aap sahi key rahi ho Bhabhi, merit iss halat se wo Dino alag toh hogaye par ab mein Dev ke dil se Sonakshi ko puri tarah se hatana chahti hun."


This breaks Dev totally " what is Ma speaking, she has come under Mami's influence " he cries his heart out while going back to his room, his disoriention leads him unfocus and restless to his bed and he faints in disbelief.

In the morning, before anyone gets up, he reaches to Sona's house but couldn't get the strength to get out of his car and explains her what's happening. He is lost to an unknown world, he takes his car anywhere as he sees the way, he us not thinking, his mind and heart is not ready to take in what happened with him. He is driving like mad. In his way, he stops car somewhere where he finds u myself alone. He gets out and shouts loud her name..."SONAKSHI".
"I need you" he cries and cries more.
A vegetable vendor hits him hard and he falls.
"Aare bhaiya ji, bhaiya ji...Aare mat karo" aapko dekha nahi" he takes his hand and helps him to get up. As soon as he sees him fine and stable, the vendor recollects his fallen vegetables.
After that he looks at Dev again and found him lost, like a stone, he wasn't moving at all but standing in full senses.
"Bhaiya ji aapke dil se khoon nikal raha hai" a shocked face hof vendor forces him to his car and he helps him to drive to a hospital.

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Ferdous_69 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
#2
So nice nd tauchy dear...I could imagine it while reading this..
My poor DevAkshi 😭 😭 ...
Beautifully written dear... Keep it up..
Nd do continue...
Manasi90 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
#3
Started writing again ratika... Sucha different concept...
Great start...
Continue soon
shilpa_akki thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
#4
U made mata completely villain from mental...gud..
I liked ur ff always...
Do continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#5
Great job
Plzzz update nxt part soon
Prizi thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#6
haha villain mata
luvd it
cont soon

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