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I've only read the first chapter (and decided to post a comment before I could forget . . . or get bored), and it's a pretty good start.
The title is called Cliche Attempt and you absolutely deliver right from the first paragraph. What could possibly be more cliche than a hopeless romantic in a coffee shop?
Also, I really liked that Nandini was in the coffee shop (drinking something she didn't even like) with ulterior motives which aren't really ulterior at all. She's out looking for Manik (not that she knows it yet), and she is absolutely upfront about it. Most stories don't let their leads be so honest, and so your characterization is different. I like it.
Another thing I would like to point out is that you're really good dialogue. When I was reading the dialogue, it just seemed to flow - and the back and forth banter was fun. On the other hand, the paragraphs just seemed a little bit flat.
So overall, yeah, nice start. 😆
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