Fanfiction ViShi "wo jo adhori si baat baki hai" last chaptr - Page 4

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: sita11

wow superb ...scenes sugu...
such an awesome heart felt scenes at the back side of temple ..where shivika meets shakti ...in tht serene landscape...her hiding her fance in his tough chest and he looking at her serene naive beauty...too good...lastly shakti numb to know tht she is his enemies daughter...now wonder how he will control hisemotions for shivika...for the first time he saw an angelic beauty...



thanku sita i luv to read ur commnt 😊 d way u define wat u feel aftr reading made me to write it mre sersly thank you so much
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Posted: 8 years ago
#32
ur story is really good..plz cont. soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
#33
hey awesome story bt shivika is lookalike of poonam ryt?
so shakti dont know of poonam or wat?? nd i m eagrly waiting for family's reaction after seeing shivika...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#34
u r a great writer ..so perfectly u written everything πŸ‘
shakti soo helpless ohhh same will go wid shivika too when she cmes to know abut shaktiπŸ’”
update next soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
#35
sorry for delay...

Well I thought for a quick update but aap jo plan karte ho wo hota kaha hai. Hope you people are enjoying this story. I am writing this with only hope may be not today but some day we will get our ViShi back. As I promise now a mutual type romance will start.

Disclaimer:  I only own shivika and her family rest characters are owned by swastika production.

"Any resemblance to living or dead person is just coincidence"

Chapter 4 "birthday surprise"

 It was 2 days now but Shakti condition was still the same shocked sad heart broken , Shakti was confused on his condition he never thought a girl can affect  him this much.

Shakti tried very hard to forget about shivika but every night when Shakti tries to sleep her images came to his mind. 2 days back Shakti was feeling like happiest man on this earth always smiling with no reason  but now he avoid everything even the fun time with his brothers too don't talk much with anyone every time in his room struggling with the inner turmoil.

Shakti mind ask him to forget about that girl but his heart giving him all possible reasons to be with her.

 Everyone in family was wondering what was wrong with Shakti but Shakti just gave an excuse he was not feeling well but badi amma in her mind was sure there was something else which was bothering Shakti.

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It was afternoon suddenly badi amma felt a pain in her chest.

 adarsh and his brothers took badi amma to hospital where doctor inform it was just a minor pain nothing serious.

In hospital room,

"tum log ko kya laga hum itni jaldi mar jaynge?"

"hum itni jaldi marne walo mein se nahi hai hum to abhi apne per per poto (great grandson) ka muhh dekhe bina kahin nahi jaane wale" badi amma said in sarcastic tone.

"arre to pehle bataa deti hum apne itne saare bte hai patna mein le aate " garv jokingly replied.

Everyone laughs.

"hum aap ko aise jane bhi nahi denge amma" bindiya said.

After some time bindiya garv and amar went back to home only Shakti samar and adarsh stay.

"hum doctor se baat kar k aate hai aap ko kab ghar le jana hai" adarsh said and went to meet doctor.

After sometime half an hour

"itni daer lag gayi bhaiya ko hum dekh kar aate hai kaha hai wo" Shakti said and was on the door he saw shivika walking in hospital corridor Shakti felt a puff in his chest he was suffocated he open his mouth to take the breath his legs freeze he hold door so tightly as if he was going to fall.

In his heart he was sure he wants this girl but in his mind he knew this was not possible at the end uday was his mother's biggest enemy.

Badi amma was watching and she understands what was wrong with Shakti.

Before he can move any further adarsh came back

 "hum log ghar ja sakte hain" adarsh said and they went home.

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After dinner everyone was sitting together suddenly power went

"abb iss light ko kya hua" amar cried.

"ro kahe rahe ho andhere se darte ho kya chotta bachha" garv tease amar.

"hum dekh kar aate hai" Shakti said he was about to go out badi amma stops him

"ruko light pehli baar nahi gayi hai jo sab aise ro rahe ho chalo sab chath(terrace) per chalte hai" badi said.

badi amma and All 5 brothers were on terrace

Garv was teasing samar, adarsh and amar were busy watching something in mobile. And sahkti was sitting on boundary gazing the stars.

Badi amma look at shakti's lonely face an idea came to her mind and she said "kya sab apne mein lage ho idhar aao aaj hum tum log ko kahani sunate hai"

"hum log koi bachhe hai jo khanai sunogi aap" garv said

"humare liye to bachhe hi ho ab sab chup chap se humare pass aao" badi amma said in strict tone

Everyone sit around badi amma, Shakti ley down his head in badi amma's lap.

"kahi koi shaer chuhe ki kahani to nahi hai?" samra asked

"nahi ye ek prem kahani hai" badi amma replied calmly.

"wahhh badi amma bahut shmart ho gai ho prem kahani wahh" garv replied mockingly.

"abb chup ho sab aur khanai suno" adarsh asked everyone to keep quite.

"ek baar ek bahut shaktishali aur nyay priy raja tha uske rajay ka har admi usko pyar aur samman karta tha uss raja k 4 bete the. Ek baar ek yudh mein raja ka sena pati apni jaan per khel kar uski jaan bachata hai isse raja bahut khush ho jata hai aur sena pati se kehta hai usko jo bhi inam chahiye wo maang le per sena pati kehta hai hum to aap k sevak hai aap ki jaan ki raksha humara kartavya tha humko kuch nahi chaiye raja sena pati ki imaandari se khush ho kar kehta hai hum tumko inam mein apni rishtedari dete hai aaj se tumahri beti ki shadi hum apne 2 bete se taiyy kate hai jab ye dono  bade honge hum inki shadi karwa denge. Raja ka doosra beta bahut cum bolta tha aur bahut gusse wala tha per jab uss ne sena pati ki beti ko dekha to uss ko uss ladki se pyar ho gya ussne apne pita ki baat mann li aur shadi k liye haan kar di. Saal bitete gaye aur wo dono bade ho gaye raja ka beta uss ladki ka har waqt khayal rakhta usski raksha karta wo uss ladki se bahut pyar karta tha per ladki uss raja k bte k gusse se bahut darti thi aur wo samjhti thi ki raja ka beta sirf uss per apna haq jamata hai uski feelings ki kadar nahi karta na hi uss se pyar karta hai. Jab wo dono bade ho jate hai ek din raja ka beta gusse mein ladki ko kisi baat per thappad mar deta hai jo raja dekh lete haii unko bahut gussa aata hai aur wo apne bte aur uss ladki ki shadi todd dete hai. Apni shadi toot jane se raja k bte ko bahut bura lagta hai uss ne jis ladki ko sabse jada pyar kiya uss k pita ne uss ladki ko uss se door kar diya ye soch kar raja ka beta baagi ho jata hai aur wo apne pita k khilaf khada ho jata hai. Ek taraf raja aur usska poora rajay aur ek taraf raja ka beta ek dum akela abb batao kaun jeetega?" badi asked

"raja jetega iss mein kya hai?" amar replied.

"achha aba age suno...   Uss ladki ko le kar raja aur uss k bte mein bahut buri ladai hoti hai lekin apne pyar k liye wo raja ka beta kuch bhi karne ko taiyar bina hare ladta hai aur jeet jata hai aur uss ladki se shadi kar leta hai... shadi k baad uss ladki ko pta chalta hai wo rajkumar uss se kitna pyar karta hai aur wo ladki bhi usse se bahut pyar karne lagti hai aur ek din apne pyar se wo ladki uss raja k bte ka gussa khatam kar deti hai aur wo ek doosre k sath pyar se rehte hai"

Iss kahani ka matlab samjh aaya" badi amma asked.

Everyone nodded their head in no

"aise kaise ek akela ladka jeet gya" samar asked

Badi aama replied " pyar mein bahut takat hoti hai wo kisi bhi musibat se bacha sakta hai aur agar pyar sachha ho to koi usse rok nahi sakta raja k bte ka pyar sachha tha tabhi wo jeet gya uss ladke ne kabhi kisi musibat ki parvaah nahi ki bus apne pyar ko pane ki koshish ki. Aur uss ladki ne bhi apne pyar se raja k bte ko badal diya uss ka gussa humesha k liye shant kar diya"

Suddenly power came garv shout in excitment "light aa gayi hum to chale" and he run towards his room.

Adarsh held badi amma hand and help her to walk towards her room.

"badi amma ye kahani to lakhan chacha aur poonam chichi ki kahani thi na?" adarsh asked

Badi amma gave him a smile and nodded her head.

Shakti was listening badi amma and adarsh conversation suddenly he ran towards samar room.

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In Shakti's room

"bhaiya appne ye laptop kyo mangaya?" samar asked with confused tone.

"abbe tum se jo bol rahe hai wo karo darwaja band kar do aur apne laptop per humko kuch dhoondh kar batao" Shakti ordered samar.

Samar in his mind thought "inko kya ho gya abhi tak itne dukhi the abhi achank se itna khush kahi saddma dimag mein to nahi lag gya"

"khade kya ho jaldi search karo" Shakti shout.

"kisko search karna hai?" samar asked looking in his laptop.

"shivika singh" Shakti replied with a smile.

Samar gave a horrified look to Shakti "bhaiya aap theek to ho jaante ho na wo uday pratap singh ki behan hai sochha bhi hai uss k bhai ya humari maa ko pta chala to kya hoga" samar asked in panic tone.

"jo keh rahe hai wo karo" Shakti said in angry tone.

"bhaiya kya fayda koi nahi manega na maa aur na uss ladki ka parivar" samar replied.

"tumne badi amma ki kahani nahi suni pyar sachha ho to koi bhi usse rok nahi sakta" Shakti replied with a determine look on his face.

"bhaiya wo sirf kahani thi aisa asliyat mein nahi hota" samar tried to convince Shakti.

"aisa asliyat mein hua hai wo bhi humare ghar mein aur humara khoon bhi humare baap ka hai hum bhi kisi se nahi darte hum bhi ladenge" Shakti replied.

Samar looked at shakti who was so determined "aap maroge humko bhi marwaoge" samar replied and start searching shivika on facebook.

"mil gayi bhaiya" samar shout.

"abbe dheeme bolo poore ghar ko bataoge kya?" Shakti said giving angry look to samar.

Samar and Shakti check her profile and her pictures "wahh ladki to sundar hai" samar said.

"saale ladki nahi bhabhi bolo" Shakti said.

"haan ofcourse bhabhi, bhabhiji bahut sundar hai" samar replied

And they both laugh.

Reading her profile samar said "arre bahiya ye dekho kal to bhabhi ka bday hai."

Shakti with a devil look replied "kal ka bday shandar hoga uska".

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Next day in evening samar and Shakti standing outside shivika's house

"bhahiya aur you sure?" samar asked

"kya be sure -sure darr rahe ho kya?" Shakti replied in irritated tone.

"nahi darr nahi rahe per soch lo pakad liye gaye to seedhe goli maar di jayegi hum log ko" samar said with scared look.

"abbe Thakur hai hum Thakur goli khane se nahi darte" Shakti said in proud tone.

"theek abb marna to hai hi lao aap k gale mil le, ye yaad rakhna bhaiya hum aap sabse bahut pyar karte hai" samar said

"abbe nautanki mat karo andar chalo" Shakti replied . and they walk inside her house dressed like waiters Shakti and samar put moustaches and beard so that no one can identify them.

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A grand party for shivika's bday was planned. There were lots of guest in the party Shakti took a tray and walks between people to find out where shivika was.

Shakti saw a woman in green saree, she was the same lady who was helping shivika in selecting the necklace in jewellery shop. Shakti walks towards her in hope he will find out where shivika was.

The woman was telling other woman that shivika was in her room upstairs with her friends.

Shakti smile how easily he find out where shivika is.

Upstairs Shakti was confused which one was shivika's room suddenly a loud sound ask him to stop "ruko, tum yaha kya kar rahe ho?" uday pratap asked.

Shakti froze and turned "woo woo " searching for some reason

"wow wo kya" uday asked in his heavy tone.

"woo neeche madam ne kaha upper room mein cold drink dene k liye" Shakti said after a deliberate pause  afraid he will be caught.

"achha, idhar left side ka 2nd room hai waha shivika ki friends hai unko cold drink de do" uday replied and went.

Aaj to bachh gaye Shakti thought in his mind.

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In room there were 6-7 girls but shivika was missing

Suddenly a girl knock wash room door "kitna time lagaogi?" she asked

From inside shivika replied "bus 5 min"

Shakti got an idea and he told girls uday asked everyone to get down right now.

"per shivika" one girl asked

"wo apni behn k sath aayngi" Shakti replied. All girls went downstairs.

After 5 min shivika came out she was a beauty to watch in pink and silver colour lehnga she was looking stunning she tied a curl bun. Her alluring beauty made Shakti to gaze her forever so poised so innocent just like a fresh flower.

 Shivika find nobody in her room she murmured "sab humko akele choddh kar chale gaye had ho gayi".

And as she was about to open her room door she felt some heavy hard muscular hands on her shoulder afraid she almost jumped off.

shivika was about to scream but Shakti cover her mouth

"shhh chilana mat hum hain" Shakti said and he take off his beard and moustaches.

Horrified shivika look at his face with wide eyes. Blinking her velvet eye lashes. Shakti takes off his hand from her mouth.

Shivika start scolding him "pagal ho kya abhi hum heart attack se marr jate, aur tum yaha kya kar rahe ho? yaha aaye kaise? Koi tumko dekh leta to? Tumko superman kya keh diya tumne to seriously le liya apne aapko asli ka superman samajh rahe ho... tumko koi ne dekh liya to seedhe goli maarenge...

"Shhh..." Shakti said and put his finger on her lips to shut her mouth.

"abb humari bhi sunn lo"

"sabse pehle happy bday hum tumko bday wish karne aaye hai aur superman samjh nahi liya hum superman hai tabhi to inte log ki bheed mein hum tumhare kamre mein aa gaye aur koi humko pakdd bhi nahi paya" Shakti replied. And he gave her a small golden colour box as a gift.

"thank you" shivika blushed.

"abb hum party mein ja rahe" and she walks towards door Shakti held her hand.

"humko neeche jana hai" shivika protest

Shakti pull her close and pin her in wall his hands around her. He was just an inch away from her. She can easily feel his hot breath around her face.

They get an eye lock Shakti felt how beautiful she was he was mesmerized.

Suddenly somebody knock on the door "shivika kaha ho tum kitni daer lagegi" a woman from outside shout.

Shakti's presence making her hypnotized. She was lost in shakti's eyes and she didn't reply.

"shivika sunn rahi ho na kitni daer lagegi bolo" sound from outside increased.

Shakti brought his lips near to her ears she closed her eyes and he whispered "bahar koi kuch pooch raha hai jawab do"

Shakti words brought back shivika in real world again she open her mouth to reply but no sound came. Shakti smile on shivika's condition. Teasingly he raised his eyebrows telling her to reply

After giving an effort shivika replied "haan wo... wo hum abhi 5 min mein aa rahe"

Shivika looked at him her heart was beating fast in this much years it was first time when a boy was so near to her she was confused why she was fumbling and behaving absurd.

She gather her all senses and asked "abb to bday wish kar diya abb to humko jaane do"

Shakti looked at her innocent face "humne tumko bday wish kiya gift diya humko bhi return gift chahiye"

Shivika felt nervous thinking about what he want in return gift. She could hardly breathe.

Shakti realised how innocent look of her was changed and she was looking nervous and scared Shakti ease her "poochogi nahi humko kya chahiye?" Shakti asked in husky tone.

"kya?" shivika asked in same husky voice.

"hum tumse kal milna chahte hai wahi devi k mandir k peeche jaha uss din mile the" Shakti replied.

Shivika got her breath back when she heard what he wants.

"theek hai hum kal milenge" shivika replied with a mischievous shyness.

"per abb humko jane do sab humara intezaar kar rahe hai".

Shakti moves back giving her way to go.

Shivika was about to open her door Shakti again held her hand she turn around and asked "abb kya?"

Shakti came close to her she gulped her heart racing fast.

He leaned forward and open the clip in her hairs her long hairs were freely hanging at her back he smile and said "tumhare baal khule acche lagte hai" shivika blushed and walked out of room.

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Outside shivika's house samar was already there waiting for Shakti

"kya bhaiya itna time lga diya humko to lga aap ko pakdd liya unn log ne" samar said

"pagal ho bola than a hum Thakur hai itni asani se kisi k hath nahi aa sakte" Shakti replied.

"kaisa raha sab?" samar asked.

But a big grin splitting on shakti's face was enough to tell how it was.

"ye lo chabhi bike chalo" Shakti gave his bike keys to samar.

Samar was shocked he can't believe on his ears in his life time this was first time when Shakti laid anyone else to ride his bike.

Shakti sitting at the back of bike thought about shivika remembering how he kept his hand on her mouth he kissed his palm.

After party shivika was sitting combing her hair she remember Shakti's word he love her hair wide open lost in her thoughts blushing

"dii ye kisne diya?" priya asked pointing a golden box in her hand.

Shivika in no second snatch that box from her hand and scold her "tumse matlab"

Shivika open that box and saw a gold chain with S pendulum in that she smile.

"ohhh to ye app k superman ne diya hai wo yaha aaya tha?" priya asked in exciting tone.

Shivika blushed and nodded her head.

"wahhh dii waise ye S ka matlab kya hai?" priya asked looking curiously at pendulum.

Shivika in her mind replied Shakti.

"arre hum bhi kitne pagal hai S ka matlab shivika" priya replied talking to herself only.

Shivika in her mind thought arre haan S ka matlab to shivika bhi hota hai and she laugh on her silly mind who forgot shivika in front of Shakti.

 

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Posted: 8 years ago
#36
Fabulous fantastic , how beautifully u portrayed lakham story πŸ‘ and rest of the part shivika and shakti meeting was so heart soothing , it was beautiful but I have 1 complain why u write so short update pls next time long one and asap pls pls
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Posted: 8 years ago
#37
awww
haayeee ... kya bolun mai... ☺️

 yun hi re song  describes this  scene 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#38
Love it like it
need more of it...
Thanks suggy
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Posted: 8 years ago
#39
Inu wt is rhis itna short 😭
Itni achi story sunai ba ne mza a gya ... πŸ‘


Shakti thakur apne baap pe gya h ekdam sharif launda πŸ˜‰


Inu ab mai tera ff nahi padhne wali tu bahut buri h itna late update deti h wo bhi itna jra sa 😭
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Lakhanchamach

Inu wt is rhis itna short 😭
Itni achi story sunai ba ne mza a gya ... πŸ‘


Shakti thakur apne baap pe gya h ekdam sharif launda πŸ˜‰


Inu ab mai tera ff nahi padhne wali tu bahut buri h itna late update deti h wo bhi itna jra sa 😭



aare plz aisa na bolo tum log k liye hi to likh rahi hoon tum nahi padhoge to kya fayda yaar likha to naine bda hi tha tm log ko chota kyo lag rha hai...

nxt tym jaldi update doongi fr sure