SS- Manav's younger brother (Part 30 on pg 76)

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey everyone!! This is my first FF(now SS) and it's about a character I created because I just felt a need for someone who could support Manav. So I created his little brother-"Kush" cuz I couldn't come up with a name other than similar to mine😉.

First of all Kush is an eleven year old, intelligent kid, but lands everyone in trouble.

Index
Part-1 pg 1
Part-2 pg 2
Part-3 pg 3
Part-4 pg 5
Part-5 pg 7
Part-6 pg 9
Part-7 pg 11
Part-8 pg 12
Part-9 pg 13
(Extra) Kush's POV pg 15
Part-10 pg 16
Story by far pg 16
Additional Characters pg 17
Part-11 pg 20
Part-12 pg 22
Part-13 pg 24
Part-14 pg 26
Part-15 pg 28
Part-16 pg 30
Part-17 pg 32
Part-18 pg 34
Additional Characters pg 35
Part-19 pg 44
Part-20 pg 47
Part-21 pg 50
Additional Character pg 52
Part-22 pg 55
Part-23 pg 59
Part-24 pg 62
Part-25 pg 64
Part-26 pg 66
New Entries pg 68
Part-27 pg 70
Part-28&29 pg 72
Part-30 pg 76

Part 1 Manav meets Kush after a long time

When Manav was in army his little brother was kidnapped.
After not being found after a v.v.v. long time the "colonywasis" thought he was dead. But his family- Lajjo, Murli and Manav, never lost hope. In the kidnapper's hideout--

Kidnapper to his chamchas - Chalo, iski yadaash kamzor karne ki davaa khatam ho gai hai jaldi se leke aao. Tab tak mai apne ghar jaa raha hu.

Chamchas- Ok boss!!

Actually they wanted to make Kush lose his memories so that he would never remember that 9 2 11( actually Vasant) had given him superpower to dissapear, while they could find his family and ask for money, which they never could cuz Kush couldn't remember even that. Now...

Kush- Mai kuch to zaruri bhul raha hu, pata nahi kya. Mai aaya kaha se tha?? Um.. Sunshades colony? Nahi nahi Sunshine colony, haan.

He tried to shake off the rope but , in an attempt to do so he disappeared and reappeared on the chair he was tied.

Kush- Oh my god!! Ab to mai yaha se jaa sakta hu magar in logo ne to bahar se darwaaza band kiya hai.. Oho! Mai to gaayab ho ke baahar ja sakta hu, mai bhi na!(disappeares)
Ab mai colony kaise jaun? (Sees the kidnapper coming his way) Are, jaise bhi jaun, abhi ke liye bhag nikal ta hun.

Saying this, he dissapears into a nearby market, there he sees something he can't believe...

Anna- Oh my god, I don't believe this! Idiot, tumne ye sab niche kyu pheka?!

Sharad- Anna tumne hi to kaha tha ki tamatar bahut zyaada ho rahe hain to maine tumhaari madad karne ke liye phek diye.

Anna- tum kya Bhairavi ho? Tumhe...

Manav- Anna jaane do na ab galti kard...

Before he could complete he heard a sound very dear to him.

Kush- Manav bhia, Anna didi! Idhar dekho mai Kush! (Runs towards them)

Anna and Manav together - Kush!

Saying this they both hug him.

Anna- Kush, tum kaha the, pata hai ham sabko laga ki tum mar gaye the.

Manav- Vo sab chodo! Kush tum thik to ho naa chot to nahi lagi?

Kush- nahi Manav bhia!

Anna- chalo colony chalo. Sab log tumhe dekh kar khush ho jaayenge.

Kush- Anna didi pehle ye jaadu dekho (disappears and reappears)

Manav- ye sab kya he Kush?

Kush- pata nhi Manav bhia mujhe bhi nhi pata ki ye sab maine kaise kiya.

Sharad thinking- kahi ye vo bacha to nhi jise bhaiya ne apni superpower di thi jab ye musibat me tha?

Kush- please pehle Police station chalo, mujhe un kidnappers ko pakad vaana hai.

As he said, he helped the police solve many kidnapping cases, cuz that kidnapper had kidnapped many kids.
Kush, Manav, Anna and Sharad return to the colony. Everyone is happy to see Kush...
To be continued...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey GK.. u r a writer... wow..👏👏
forum is hving lots of writers..😃
so excited to read this new story...😃

wow even cvs wont think of this...
Manav has a younger brother... who wasnt found & was declared dead..😲😲
who did that...?tel me.. i wil shoot him...😡
Kush.. nice name.. so he already met ghotalas.. vasant gvng his superpower of disappearing & reappearing to him...
Kush just as intelligent as his brother & also helpful...
loved sharad's logic... wajan badh gaya to tamatar phek diye... hemant chacha kahin ka...😆😆
anna-manav happy to meet kush.. but shocked on seeing kush's superpower , they dont understand hw it happened...
sharad understands he is same kid whom they met before...
Kush makes police arrest d kidnappers & also saves some more kids...
continue soon..
thnks 4 d pm..
Edited by coolhi1988 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Heya kunsh Congo on ur first ff..
It's good ff do continue soon ..acha hai..thoda variety wala ekdum naya story hai.. Will love to read further and ho sake toh plz give character sketch and prolouge so that readers ko confusion na ho...

Overall I like it

Do continue
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Krish58

Heya kunsh Congo on ur first ff..

It's good ff do continue soon ..acha hai..thoda variety wala ekdum naya story hai.. Will love to read further and ho sake toh plz give character sketch and prolouge so that readers ko confusion na ho...

Overall I like it

Do continue

Thanks! Ok as u say, will take your tip.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Good going dekhte hai aage Kush kya kya kaatne mein karta hai .. His bonding with hemant and shishir and ghotala family..
Continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Welcome to the forum dear🤗
It is nice to see new members joining the forum.
I love your story. Aww so sweet manav ka chota Bhai😳
Happy to see you. Update your story soon.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome update Bhai
continue soon
thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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wow beautiful ff
plzz do continue
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congo 4 ur 1st ff 👏
lovely update!😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey guys! Time for Part-2!!
Part-2 Kush learns about the Ghotala secret

Ojha and Lajjo hug Kush as soon as they see him.
Vasant, Varsha and Hemant recognize him.

Liza- Chalo man abhi apne apne ghar chalne ko mangta hai. Bahut kam pada hai ghar pe.

Kush(pointing towards Ghotalas)- Vaise ye log kaun hain? Jaane pehchaane se lag rahe hain!

Lajjo- Ye to Ghotale hain. Magar tu inko kaise jaanta hai? Boiye Vasant bhia aap ise jaante hain?

Vasant- Vooo...

Hemant- Haa haa Lajjo aunty! Hamne to ise superpower bhi di thi!

Ojha- Ke ke ke ke ke bol raha hai tu jhallar?

Kush (understands what they mean to say)- Papa, inka matlab kuch aur hoga aap jaane do.

Ojha- thik he!

Afterwards in Ghotalanagri--

Vasant- Gende!! Ab mai tujhe nahi chodunga! Vo to achcha hai Kush ne apne bhaai ki tarah bacha liya.

Kush- Bhaai ki tarah? Matlab unhe bhi pata hai ki aap...

Varsha- Ham kkk... Kya?

Kush- Badi dooor se aaye ho!! Ab aap log mujhse chupa kar kya karoge? Anyways 9211 uncle apni superpower lo.

Vasant- Vo to thik hai magar colony walo ko mat batana pls, khaaskar man ke bhole Pritesh ko! Aur haan, hame Vasant, Varsha, Sharad, Hemant aur Shishir hi bulaana, huu?

Kush- Huu!(returns to his home, as if hiding something)

Varsha- Vasant, kahin ye...?

To be continued...

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