TwiNj OS:Hamari Adhuri Kahani 9/3/2016 for ZawraMalik

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Posted: 10 years ago
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First of all this OS is for Zawra and good news is that with this OS I complete 25000 posts on IF.



Okay so before you guyz proceed to read this OS I would just like to tell all of you I Got to write this OS,The moment the song hamari adhuri played yesterday in the show A sudden kind of uneasyness was triggered in me and I had to get it out,I have a very bad habit of associating with Fictiinal charcters very soon,be it a 3 hours movie or be it a TV show,My heart gets connected to fictional characters very easily and then the emotions in me are triggered,I easily relate myself to Movies/Shows and the effect issuch that many times I end up cryin watching Movies,I am not an emotionally strong person same thing happened with me yesterday I was on the verge of crying when I heard this song,Maybe because I have associated this song to an incomplete love story story which is left incomplete due to death and this movie made me cry alot The love story of Arav and vasudha is so depressing and tragic and i have for lifetime associated this song to such a love story,There haev been movies and shows that have left an emtionsl impression on me,This OS does not intend to tell who is right or who is wrong,WHo is hurt more or less,this OS is just a reflection of how I feel about this song and what it is for me.

I dont know if you guyz get me or not but that is what I would have to say.

Hamari Adhuri Kahani

Paas aaye..

Dooriyaan phir bhi kam naa hui
Ek adhuri si hamari kahani rahi
Aasmaan ko zameen, ye zaroori nahi
Jaa mile.. jaa mile..
Ishq saccha wahi
Jisko milti nahi manzilein.. manzilein..

She is leaving The place where he brought her back with all the respect she deserved,her heart longed for him she wanted him to just say a word just call out her name but his silence broke her and she walked out of the house.

He closed his eyes in order to avoid the tears coming out of his eyes,he felt helpless,he wanted to stop her wanted to take her in his arms and embrace her in a tight saying he didny wanted her to go but he was just not able to bring himself to words,His fists were clenched,he did not wanted to see her go so he closed her eyes.

Rang thhe, noor tha
Jab kareeb tu tha
Ek jannat sa tha, yeh jahaan
Waqt ki ret pe kuch mere naam sa
Likh ke chhod gaya tu kahaan
Hamari adhuri kahani..
Hamari adhuri kahani..

Entering the room he threw the first thing that came in his hand,"Kyu kyu chali gayi tu ruk jaati naa" he said No matter what he felt no matter how hurt he was by her ot telling the truth,but her leaving just broke him,he should have stopped her leaning against the door,he slumped down to the floor,his face burried in his hands.

She was walking on the road aimlessly,she felt hurt,her heart ached,she just wanted something from him just a reaction and she would do anything to make everything right,life changed in a matter of few hours her world was shattered,just like a glass was broken into pieces and there was no way of mending it.

Khushbuon se teri yunhi takra gaye
Chalte chalte dekho na hum kahaan aa gaye.

Her fragence was still in the room,he felt her presence in the room he needs her with him right now he will get her back,no matter what happens,there is no way he will let her go.
In the meantime mahi called leela and informed her of everything that happened and told her to inform whenever twinkle comes home.

Jannatein agar yahin
Tu dikhe kyon nahin
Chaand suraj sabhi hai yahaan
Intezar tera sadiyon se kar raha
Pyaasi baithi hai kab se yahaan

"Twinkle" she heard him call her name and she turned around to see him standing,A smile came on her face,the moment she moved towards him he dissapeared,the hurt the pain can back,she moved few steps backwards and turned around running on the deserted roads,tears flowing down of her eyes,he let her go the thought in itself broke her,she lost the track of time she sat leaning against the tree,althought she was not much far from her house she had no power left in her to walk back again to the place.

Humari adhoori kahaani
Humari adhoori kahaani..

Hours passed but twinkle didnt came back,leela's panic increased she took her cell phone and called twinkle,her trail of thoughts was broken by the call,she saw it was her mother,she knew what her mother will say,putting her phone on the silent mode she got up and started walking again,to where she deosn't know.

Getting up from the couch leela straight went to sarna mansion calling out for kunj,the first person to come out was mahi,
Maa kya hua app yahan sab theek toh hai naa asked mahi.
Mahi twinkle abhi tak ghar nahi ayi hai,itna time ho gaya tera phone aye hoye,woh mera phone bhi nahi utha rahi hai subah ke 4 baj rahe hai said leela sending mahi into a state of panic.

Slowly slowly everyone came down,and the last person to come was kunj,"Maa what happened,twinkle theek toh hai naa?" Was his first question to her.

Kunj woh wapas nahi ayi hai abhi tak mera phone bhi nahi utha rahi mujhe bahut ghabrahat ho rahi hai kunj tu kich karna puttar said leela her worry increasing by every passing moment.

In the mean time twinkle took a turn and started walking towards her home but which one she wasnt sure,she cannot go back to kunj and she cannot afford to be away from him.

Some thoughts occupied his mind ,but shrugging them off he took out his phone,dailing her number he waited for her to pick up his call,on the 12th ring she picked up his call.

Twinkle tu kahan hai? Was the very first question he asked.
Soch rahi hun kahan jao,ab toh rasta bhi nahi samajh aa raha kunj she said monotonously,her words conveyed the hurt she was going through.
Twinkle tell me where are you,I am coming to pick you he said.
Ek duhrahe par khadi hun kunj kuch samjh nahi a raha kahan jaon she said.

Standing in the middle of the road,she ignored the honking of the truck coming from behind,and the next thing kunj heard was a shout of his name from her "Kuuunnnjjj".

Pyaas ka ye safar khatam ho jayega
Kuch adhura sa jo tha poora ho jayega

His phone dropped from his hands and he ran outside something told him she is nearby,moving out of the sarna mansion he saw her in a pool of blood lying on the road,her eyes looking at him,telling him she needs him,and he was with her,in two long strides he was sitting on his knees on the ground taken her body in his lap,he patted her cheek and urged her to talk to him,others just stood beside them,cherry immediately called the ambulance.

Twinkle tujhe kuch nahi hoga dont close your eyes haan talk to me just talk to me he said again patting her cheeks her eyes gleaming of hope that he has forgiven her.

With the little strength left in her she said "Kunj bahut dard ho raha ,bahut zyada" he wanted to say that everything will be alright all the pain will go away,but words just didnt came out of his mouth,taking his hand in her blood soaked hands she placed his hand on her chest exactly on top of her heart and again said "Bahut dard ho raha hai kunj" he cried tears flowed down his eyes,pulling her more closer to him,he hugged her trying to let all the pain go away.
"Tumhee mujhe par bharosa toh hai naaa" the question in the answer of which he nooded his head,"Mujhe maaf karoge naa", tune galti kari hi kab thi jo mafi man rahi hai,woh toh mera gussa tha he said placing a kiss on her forehead,"
Ab dard kam ho raha hai kunj,kuch dikha bhi nahi raha sahi se she cried hearing her words everyone standing there cried.
Kuch nahi ho raha sab theek ho jayega,mai hoon naa tujhe kuch nahi hoga said kunj again patting her cheeks to keep her awake,and the ambulance was coming he heard the siren,with barely any power left she got up a little to match his level,so that her forehead touched his,placing her other hand on his cheek she said "I love you to the square of infinity"
"I love you too" was his reply and she went limp,her head rested on his shoulder,her hand slipped from his face and hit the ground with a thud,he hugged her form tighter to his pulling her more into him.
The ambulance stopped and a doctor came out immediately moving to twinkle she checked her and looking at kunj she said "I am sorry" and the barrier he was holding up till now broke down and he cried the last thing he did before going silent was shouting her name on the top his lungs "TWINKLE".
Everyone cried he refused to let go off her,holding her lifeless form in his hands he just kept looking at her.

Jhuk gaya aasmaan
Mill gaye do jahaan
Har taraf hai milan ka samaa
Doliya hain saji, khushbuein har kahin
Padhne aaya Khuda khud yahaan..

The sky turned to a darker shade,the rain drops falling on them,the thunder everything conveying the pain they had went through,it was a heartbreaking sie but finally the hospital staff took her body leaving him sitting on the road until bebe hugged him and he cried his heart put,that day everyone broke down the shock of loosing someone so special in thier life left a deep hollow impression on them,life would never be same for them.
Specially for kunj...

Hamari adhuri kahani
Hamari adhuri kahani..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hridey
Me first
Yay!
Ruk padhne de


Okay i am done with the story and yes i have teared up. this was so painful
Visualising this made me cry.
Aisa bhi koi karta hai?
You had to kill her?
The pain u penned down reached me. God i am so emotional right now.
Edited by .Ragini. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Oh my god!
What a beautiful beaituful OS!!
God I'm still crying while writing this!!!
This is one of the best peice that I have read till date!
God the last time I cried was when I recently watched Neerja that too in the theatre!
Wow a wonderful peice.
Will comment more when I gather myself.
But it was seriously wonderful.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: SweetSau

Oh my god!

What a beautiful beaituful OS!!
God I'm still crying while writing this!!!
This is one of the best peice that I have read till date!
God the last time I cried was when I recently watched Neerja that too in the theatre!
Wow a wonderful peice.
Will comment more when I gather myself.
But it was seriously wonderful.


Thank you soo much it means alot,I am glad that you think my story is the best you have came across😳
And I would like to mention I was crying through entire second of Neerja and in first half I was on verge of crying,My tears didnt stopped even for a moment in the fsecond half,it was such a heartbreaking and emotional movie.😭
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I was just wishing if someone could write a os based on this song! You completed my wish and it's so beautiful! Loved it❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This was so heart wrenching
brilliantly penned down 👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I'm speechless
It was beautiful but heart wrenching
And u might get ppl saying why kill her why but I too associate this song to such stories.

I am not fan of sad endings but I love reading them still because such stories leave you thinking deep.
They make u contemplate ant love life and death.
And urs did the same to me
I loved it.
Twinkle's parting words k ab dad nahi ho raha hai and I love you just froze me.
I couldn't read next but I couldn't even stop.

It was very well written.
The sorrow of a love story being incomplete that too due to death,a certainty in itself is so heart breaking and gut wrenchingly painful.
But this oneshot was the highlight of my day till now.
Not having a great day honestly and this should have made me feel worse but the sadness that accompanies reading this its like now i have something to think abt.
Not many written pieces induce such thoughts in me. This one did and hats off to u.
Now I know I said I'm speechless and look kitna likha dia lol
Anyway imma stop now.
Turns out comment is longer than ur os.
I really liked it.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: .Ragini.

Hridey

Me first
Yay!
Ruk padhne de


Okay i am done with the story and yes i have teared up. this was so painful
Visualising this made me cry.
Aisa bhi koi karta hai?
You had to kill her?
The pain u penned down reached me. God i am so emotional right now.


As I said di that I associate this song to an incomplete love story and that to the one involving death.
Its just that I couldnt brought myself to write a happy ending,I was myself soo emotional while writing this OS😳

But I hope you liked it😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I feel like crying now but i have to be strong. Exquisite done
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Very emotional, beautiful and marvellous os. Keep writing such os's. A persons value is realised when the person goes away from the oives.

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