ashlok ss'past is knocking on my door' pt 4 - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ashimamm91

a new ashlok story! wow thats wndrful . 1st i thought it 2 b an os. i didnt see its prologue. the updates r so butiful. r u gonna make it an ff. it really looks like one. sorry 4 cmndng so late. i was not well.nyway thanks 4 d update dear . nw waiting 4 ur nxt update.


Next update is on the way
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Will update soon.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Part 3

He walks through the soil soaked old paths...it's all familer to him...the path he starts to dreamt of a world where he and astha live peacefully...the path where he learned what is life through her eyes...

When he just enters to the church he found vinayak sir on the corridor..he walks up to him...
"I knows you will come..."
"sir,father...?"
"come,he is waiting for you"
He walls along the corridor to his father's room...he enters to the room through the narrow room.it is full of darkness...the candles that lighten infront of the Jesus Christ never helps to give lights to the life his father led now...he looks at his father's face who lay there on the bed...they look at each other...their eyes convey the message that they wanted to share the years all along...his legs take two steps towards him ...tears are flowing from his eyes...he just hug him...and poured his all sadness and the good father absorbed his sons tears...
"shlok,my son..."
He felt it as a prayer...
"father,I am sorry for leaving you all...if you can plz forgive me..."
"shlok,water...my last wish...plz fulfill it..I can rest in peace..."
He give him the last drop of water...hug him...like the old shlok...who hug his father...
"shlok..,"
Vinayak sir called out for him...he just went out to see..him..
"do you want to see her?"
He looks around for the memories...
"hmmm" he noded ...then walks ahead .he just turn around and said...
"how can I leave from here without seeing her...""



DO COMMENT SORRY FOR MAKING YOU ALL WAIT...STUDY CALLS...
Edited by dazzles - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14
superb update...
liked it...
shlok gng to meet his father...
he fulfills his last wish..
continue soon..

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice one but please dont test my patience bring out Aastha wat happened to her hope u post one tom
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Waiting to know what happened to astha
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17
nice update dear. meetng of shlok nd father is very emotional. nw waitng 2 knw what happnd 2 astha. why i have a feelng that it is headng 2 a sad endng. nyway waitng 4 ur update. thanks 4 d update.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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part 4

he walks through the empty door...a wind just touch his faces ...he feels her...he just close his eyes...to absorb her unique presence...
he rememeberd the last phone conversation...between them...he was in hostel on that time



"shlok...happy birthday,,,,,"
"thank u asthu..
"when will you come shlok?"
"after exams...then we will chat a lot road side panipuri and ofcourse your favourite vadapav..."
"oh shlok how sweet of you..love you."
"love you tooo"
"bye shlok come soon i will wait for you...miss you"
"only few days more asthu..."


he rememberd she has the talent in writings...and he is the prince in her stories.its always like that if she is the flower then he is the wind...her every writings was about her dreams she wanted to fulfill in her life...and he is more than willing to do for her...if he can...

she stoped midway when lot of children playing on the courtyard...it takes him back to his chidhood...where he spend his life there like this children...but there is a difference in it...shlok niranjan agnihothri has his astha...near to to him...he passes the kids and walks the side way path which leads to an empty secluded space...



He opened the old gate and walks to the center...there a lots of roses blossomed and spread its aroma...he realized it's her smell ...he knelt down there...and place a heart shaped locket on marble piece which is cemented on the ground...on the center of the marble piece...it's write...


"OUR ANGEL SLEEPS HERE."
ASTHA KIRSLOKAR
{1994-2014}





He sit there like for hours...wathcing her grave...until asound a sweet sound disturbed him...
he heard someone say,not some one it's his astha"shlok i know you will come...for me..."
he looked around but he didn't find anyone...a drop of tear falls from his eyes and absorbed by the soil...where her soul rest...




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he again get down the steps of that orphange...not to run away from his responsibilites...for fulfilling his astha dreams and a becomes the supporter of lots of shloks'...he will come back soonnn...




thanks to every one who follow this story ...i appolagie to everyone...for my mistakesand my bad english...

AND SORRY FOR KILLING ASTHA...







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Posted: 9 years ago
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sad one but nicely written keep on writing dont stop thank u for update
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Posted: 9 years ago
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oh dear, u broke my heart. i knew it was cmng. still it hurts. its so emotional. wndrful update. thanks

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