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Posted: 9 years ago
shruti again a great work by u...👏👏 updating in index now..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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hola guys... just want to tell you to check the index once.. if I have missed updating anybody's work till now please PM me... 😊😊 and any suggestion to make the thread look better is always welcome...

Another important thing, the readers who are not writing(bcoz of lack of time or other problems) but have ideas in their mind abt a story or drabble can post it here in this thread... any of the writers if they like the idea can write on it if they want... well this is just a suggestion to make the thread more interactive...
anybody like my idea??😊😊(thora ajeeb idea hai I know)

Edited by tuna_star - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Good idea tuna. If readers give us suggestions it will be really good.
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Posted: 9 years ago
yes tuna that is a great thing. If people want something, they can post it here.
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Posted: 9 years ago
great work shruti👏 loved it
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Posted: 9 years ago
guys me back with a story. Did so much mehnat for this one,typing for 3 days. its long so had to post in parts. next part maybe tomorrow or tonight.😊names it an os bcoz it's long altogether around 1500 words...

A mother's acceptance.

part 1

"I can understand but what about my bharat,lakshman and shratugna",said kaikeyi," we all know that sita is the perfect match for our ram but what about mandavi, urmila and shrutkriti , just because they are sita's sister doesnot mean they are suitable brides for raghuvansh". "But I have promised rajrishi janak that my three other sons will marry the other rajkumari s only", said dashrat. "Why did u promise without consulting anyone?", said kaikeyi. Bharat said," ma it's alright, if father has promised then we will marry and the other rajkumari's has to be perfect brides for raghuvansh as they are bhabhi's sisters". Lakshman and shratugna nodded in unison. "If everything is decided then what is my use of saying anything" saying kaikeyi stomped her feet angrily and went towards the exit of the room followed her calling "didi listen". "there is nothing to here sumitra", saying she left and sumitra followed her thinking that maybe she could make kaikeyi understand the situation but she knew that kaikeyi is not totally wrong.

Ram said, " father it is not wrong of kaikeyi ma to be worried about her sons. There is still a few days left for marriage and ma will understand that princess mandavi,urmila and shrutkriti are not good just because they are sita's sisters but they have their own virtue". Kaushalya nodded and smiled weakly and prayed silently that this happens soon.

Next day.

"Where is this girl going in the afternoon?" said shratugna as he tried to see the girl from the balcony, but she was covered in veil going somewhere in a hurry, she was trying her best to go unnoticed. Bharat said "maybe she is a maid". Lakshman followed the trail of his eyes and said, "This has to be a rajkumari look at her clothes and jewellery". "What?" shrieked kaikeyi "a rajkumari going out alone in this hour of the day. What upbringing did they give her?" Ram said," ma, we should not judge anyone without knowing the reasons." Bharat said,"ma if u really have this much doubt then why don't u follow her". Kaikeyi said,"bharat is correct. We have to do this". Bharat said,"ma I was not saying seriously,I have no doubts in my mind about this family and their upbringing". Ram said," bharat is right ma. Following somebody without their permission is a very disagreeable task". Kaikeyi said," I will ensure she doesn't come to know. Moreover ram do you want that the marriage completes without my happiness being in it. Ram,bharat,lakshman and shratrugna will u accompany me or let me go alone behind her, as I will definitely go". Ram said," thik hai ma,if your happiness lies in it then I will definitely accompany but when you are satisfied then you will allow us to say sorry to her. Promise me". "I promise but I doubt whether I will be satisfied or not as I cannot see any reason why a girl should be out of her house in the afternoon, especially a rajkumari"

Ps: cliffy ending.. nah its not that cliffy... but tell me if it was boring,I didnt cut it short bcoz i wanted u guys to picturize the scene.. i didnt proof read so sorry for mistakes... I dedicate this part to shilpa(she-lo-sharun), as she was waiting for the update yesterday and i coulddnt post. love all my readers and friends..🤗

Edited by tuna_star - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: tuna_star

guys me back with a story. Did so much mehnat for this one,typing for 3 days. its long so had to post in parts. next part maybe tomorrow or tonight.😊names it an os bcoz it's long altogether around 1500 words...


A mother's acceptance.

part 1

"I can understand but what about my bharat,lakshman and shratugna",said kaikeyi," we all know that sita is the perfect match for our ram but what about mandavi, urmila and shrutkriti , just because they are sita's sister doesnot mean they are suitable brides for raghuvansh". "But I have promised rajrishi janak that my three other sons will marry the other rajkumari s only", said dashrat. "Why did u promise without consulting anyone?", said kaikeyi. Bharat said," ma it's alright, if father has promised then we will marry and the other rajkumari's has to be perfect brides for raghuvansh as they are bhabhi's sisters". Lakshman and shratugna nodded in unison. "If everything is decided then what is my use of saying anything" saying kaikeyi stomped her feet angrily and went towards the exit of the room followed her calling "didi listen". "there is nothing to here sumitra", saying she left and sumitra followed her thinking that maybe she could make kaikeyi understand the situation but she knew that kaikeyi is not totally wrong.

Ram said, " father it is not wrong of kaikeyi ma to be worried about her sons. There is still a few days left for marriage and ma will understand that princess mandavi,urmila and shrutkriti are not good just because they are sita's sisters but they have their own virtue". Kaushalya nodded and smiled weakly and prayed silently that this happens soon.

Next day.

"Where is this girl going in the afternoon?" said shratugna as he tried to see the girl from the balcony, but she was covered in veil going somewhere in a hurry, she was trying her best to go unnoticed. Bharat said "maybe she is a maid". Lakshman followed the trail of his eyes and said, "This has to be a rajkumari look at her clothes and jewellery". "What?" shrieked kaikeyi "a rajkumari going out alone in this hour of the day. What upbringing did they give her?" Ram said," ma, we should not judge anyone without knowing the reasons." Bharat said,"ma if u really have this much doubt then why don't u follow her". Kaikeyi said,"bharat is correct. We have to do this". Bharat said,"ma I was not saying seriously,I have no doubts in my mind about this family and their upbringing". Ram said," bharat is right ma. Following somebody without their permission is a very disagreeable task". Kaikeyi said," I will ensure she doesn't come to know. Moreover ram do you want that the marriage completes without my happiness being in it. Ram,bharat,lakshman and shratrugna will u accompany me or let me go alone behind her, as I will definitely go". Ram said," thik hai ma,if your happiness lies in it then I will definitely accompany but when you are satisfied then you will allow us to say sorry to her. Promise me". "I promise but I doubt whether I will be satisfied or not as I cannot see any reason why a girl should be out of her house in the afternoon, especially a rajkumari"

Ps: cliffy ending.. nah its not that cliffy... but tell me if it was boring,I didnt cut it short bcoz i wanted u guys to picturize the scene.. i didnt proof read so sorry for mistakes... I dedicate this part to shilpa(she-lo-sharun), as she was waiting for the update yesterday and i coulddnt post. love all my readers and friends..🤗




Awesome OS !!!!!Loved it 😛
Hope we get some Lakshman and Urmila scenes also 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
@Anne its not completed yet... I will complete as soon as i can... :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
hey tuna its amazing...
complete it soon...

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