MaNanFS:Coz Mama am In Love With a Criminal..!Chp5(Last)/PG116/12-JAN - Page 40

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Posted: 10 years ago
Beautiful beautiful update..
that kiss mannn took my heart❤️

u wrote each emotion so beautifully..

from their kasam to

jealousy to

Possessiveness to

carving for each other awesome...

finally both are together not exactly but..phir b

thanx to alcohol...

uuuiii

manik is guilty no yaaa

poor... i don't want another heartbreak for nandu..

she is so happy after his confession n ofcourse after their beautiful night

keep smilng.. n take care


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Posted: 10 years ago
Hawww..sharab pi kar sab kch bol b dia or kar b dia...now if manik leaves nandini na I'll be very upset...seriously...but he is right on his part for not being with her...
Nandini's outburst is obvious...aryamann chippad...
Both of them have confessed...may be kch achha ho jae...
Very good update
Waiting for more
Love tanvi
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awsum update...
Manan kiss each other...beautiful...
Manik gv her kasam...omg...she cried so much...manik also sad...but he z correct on his place...who z d boss?
Arayamman z her cousin? I hate him...manik possessive fr nandini n he cnt see her with any1... Manik drank n confess tht he loves her n they did everythg...sharab ke nashe mein...nandini is happy n Manik feelg guilty.
Keep smiling
Tk cr
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome update
And jealous manik was superb

And then manan update was amazing

Superb update

Fab update

Waiting for the next part

Update the next part soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
AwesAwesome update
Wow yaar how do u manage to coverup very part in one update
Finally manik jealus joke nanrini ko apna bana liya
But does he really remember ki hua kya tha
What if he don't except nandini again
Ya Allah such a nail bitting suspense
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Posted: 10 years ago
Hiii dear.. ...Amazing awsm concept & update...Very beautifully written... Yaar tum Manik ko kya kya bana deti ho kabhi caring, romantic & manju to kabhi army officer & monster aur ab gangster Wowww... Nandini really love him alot... Manik kissed her with full passion...But sadly give her his kasam...Both were in pain...But jealousy bring out everything from the heart...Ohhh i just love jealous Manik... . He just can't see her with anyone... Finally like finally he confessed his love... Both slept together...Beautiful moments for Nandni...And guilty moments for Manik... Why the hell i mean what on earth make him feel guilty like seriously... I know he is right on his place he just don't want to loose her but still why guilty... Haaaye this suspense is killing me already I know u will kill but still again nail bitting moments... Looking forward to seeing more soon...Please gayab mat ho jana... Update soon can't wait to read...
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Posted: 10 years ago
Wow...wat an awesome update
Its really amazing
Finally Manik confessed his love fr Nandu
Bt u left it on cliff hanger
Plzzz update the nxt part soon
M loving it
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Posted: 10 years ago
holaaa😊 merrryy christmas😛 hav fun n njoy..stay blessed..
nd aysha frse se late h..m shollyyy...bt jaisa ki maine kaha i'l b late bt surely cmmnt...bht tensn h yr pdhai ki...uff mai nanhi si jaan...heheee😆 ok chlo nw abt d 2 most amazing updates..
1st one...waaahhh bhai nandu to bdi fst nikli direct kisss...hayyeee...strting frm manik n his frnz sitting nd nandu suddnly shouted tm bach ni skte mjhse...hahaaa manik to gir hi jata...nd den he tricked her n sent her home...haww nd nandu she as always ws hurt..nd her mom is so cool ha..bt ws so worried fr her..bt ws helpless...pyar ho gya h to ab kya kr skte h...kash manik ki boss nandu ki mum hi ho..hahaaa maze aaenge...flt bad fr both manan..manik ws also ryt in his place..he cnt risk her lyf..she is precious fr him..so mch pain nd nandu she is so mch in love bt nvr loose hope..dts gud..nd der frst meetng...omg aisa shocking meetng...hahaaa..nd frm den she always stalk him n also bring food fr him n his frnds...awww damn cute she is...love her...bt manik as usual trying to ignore hr..bt cnt..bt pretends to b...helpless...nd nandu lft crying..awww...nd nxt tym she decided 2 clear out fr final tym...n wen she ws asking fr manik den onlyyy he saved her..awwwiiieee so lovelyy😉 hero ne bcha lia n uske frnz wer fyting nd nandu asked him sch ques dt he ws speechless n suddnly she kissed himmm😃 nd askd him to do d same...bt he nodded no...bt she said she'l go aftr dat...bs or kya tha manik kised her so passionatelyyy...waaahhh😛...nd den askd her to leave him nd dat with kasam..haww😭.. aisa koi krta h kya... nd nandu bechari in a momnt she ws living her best momnt nd in d nxt one sb khtm...very bad monkey malhotra..😡...nd hw she cam crying 2 home nd her mumma ws so wrried fr her..bt she nvr went bck 2 manik bcz kasam de di na..nd days passed bt nandu bcm pale n always crying...nd cabir der ws also wrried n askd manik abt it bt cudnt say mch cz smwhere he ws ryt..he lost his mum n nw dont wanna loose nandu...nd here cumes aryamann uff sch a irritating n flirt typ..jerk ws luking at nandu in sch a bad way...manik ne punch dena chahie tha😡.. nd here also a kasam n nandu went 2 same pub n manik too..waahhh...nd bs manik ne dkha apni heroine ko kisi or k sth n strtd drinking n lost d control n went 2 stage n engulfed nandu in his arms n nandu ws so mch relieved n hw cutely she nodded no on aryamn's statmnt...hahaaa nd manik said nowshe is min...waaahhh maza aagya yrrr...nd nandu n arya bth shockd...heheee nd den he tuk nandu 2 his home n finally on nandu's anger n outburst..he confesssed finallyyy😳.. nd she ws so happyyy...nd he also said dt he tried 2 cntrl bt cnt...ohooo nd den der hot n naughty romance strtd n itta kch ho gya😳...ab kya hoga...n in mrning wen manik woke up he ws lyk shit..bt nandu ws smiling n happy..n wishd him gud mrning too...awww...bt manik said sorryyy...ab aage kya?? hw wil he react??so mch confusion...mjhse to wait hi ni hoga...jldi jldi update krna plllzzz...m so eagr 2 knw...'l b wwwaaaiiitttiiinnnggg vryyy desperatly yr... nd thnx a lot fr making it atleast 3 prts...m sooo happpyyy bht saarraaa...😃 luv u loadsss...u r my bestest n fav...😛... update sooon ha nd thnx fr so many links of updates..dheere dheere i'l read..wait fr me haaa...ok till den c yaaa...tc...keep smiling..stay blessed..spread love...n be happy alwayss dearie...waiting fr dis one vry eagrly ha...update jldi se...gyb hone ka schna v ni ok...ne byee byeee bht bolti hu mai yrrr...😆

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Posted: 10 years ago

Chapter 3 (It's not the last part)(Plz Do Long Comments Plz)


Merry Christmas :)


The next morning the sun rays fall on Manik's face and he tried to hide his face in something..! But suddenly his eyes shoot open..! And BOOOM..! He found Nandini sleeping cuddling to him and he look at themselves..! CRAP..! What he had done to the little soul..! No..! He got up with a jerk and jumped off the bed he immediately wore his discarded pants but this all caused Nandini's sleep to get disturbed..! He was looking at her total horrified and she smiled at him..!


"Good morning..!"She said sleepily and sat up holding the blanket near her chest..!


"Am sorry..!"That's only Manik was able to utter as he sank on the floor in guilt and embarrassment...! Nandini immediately got up wrapping the blanket around her and rushed towards Manik..! "No..! Please stay away from me...! I don't wanna hurt you..!"He shouted between his tears and crawled back to the corner...


"Manik..! I am not hurt..!"Nandini too was crying..! As she tried to move towards Manik again..


"Please..! Please..! Stay away from me...!"He again shouted like a kid and Nandini felt so helpless..! Manik was looking like a kid who was so afraid of Devils and curses..! He was crying hiding his face in his palms..! "Oh God what I have done..! I shouldn't have...! Please don't hate me..! Please..! GOD..! I am such an opportunist..! I was trying to save you from others and what I myself did to you..!"Manik was constantly ranting between his never ending cries while Nandini too was crying..! It was the most beautiful night of her life..! She didn't believed that THE MANIK MALHOTRA was crying like a baby in front of her..! He loved her so much.


"Manik..!"She again called him he look at her with teary eyes and again moved towards him..


"I said stay away from me..! You will get hurt..!"He yelled again and crawled more back but this time Nandini didn't stopped..! Until she reached him..! She knelt in front of him..!


"Manik..! Shhh..! Listen to me..!"Nandini said softly and cupped his cheeks. He was staring at her horrified. "Manik..! I am not hurt..! Ab main boloon ge aur tum suno gay..! Last night was beautiful Manik...! I am very thankful to you for last night..! The pleasure and happiness I felt last night was the best feelings ever..! Don't call it a mistake..! Don't hurt me more by pushing me away..!"Nandini spoke softly and Manik was staring at her without blinking his eyes. Nandini pecked his forehead and gently made him hide his face in her neck..! He too clinged to her like a baby..! His whole body was shivering..! He was panting like an infant..!


"Shh..! Just relax..!"Nandini lovingly whispered in his ear and he snuggled more in her hair..! She kept tracing her fingers in his hair and they kept sitting on the floor God knows for how long with Manik's face in her hair and she constantly caressing his hair..! Nandini didn't knew why he was behaving like this but she was with him always..


"Ma-main..! Bo-bohat akela hoon Nan-nandini..!"After a long pause he stammered against her neck and she pressed her lips on his hair..


"You are not alone now..! I am with you..!"She whispered rubbing his back and he exhaled a sharp breath..


"You don't hate me na? For last night?"He again spoke he was behaving like a baby...


"No..! I love you..! I can't hate you and last night was beautiful..!"She again spoke caressing his hair and his arms grip around her waist became more tight..!


"I have hurt you a lot na?"Again a question..


"I am ok Manik..! As long as you are with me..!"She didn't wanted him to feel any kind of guilty as his condition was already going worse...


"I wanted you to be happy..!"He whispered sadly and again a tear fell on Nandini's neck..


"My happiness is with you..!"She said softly and caressed his hair more...


"Why you want to be with me?? You know na who am I?"He again spoke..


"Because I love you so much..! Manik leave all this na..! We will go away from all this far away..!"Nandini said softly and he slowly broke the hug..


"No..! I can't..! Main bohat door aa chuka hon..!"He said softly and got up from the floor..! Nandini too followed him and held his hand..! She made him turned towards her..


"Mjy aisa q lagta hai k jo tum dekhaty ho wo ho nahi..! Are you really a gangster?"She asked holding his hand and he turned his face..!


"You don't have clothes Nandini..!"He changed the topic and she sighed.. He was hiding a lots of stuff.. Nandini smiled on his concern and picked up his discarded shirt from the floor..!


"It's ok..! You can borrow me your shirt..!"She said softly. He nodded and left the room to get something to eat..! She washed her face and came out of the bathroom..! She saw Manik placing the breakfast tray on terrace table..! She smiled and walked towards him..! She back hugged him he was still shirtless..! She kissed his lavish tattoo it was the first time she saw his tattoo and he smiled a little..!


"Your tattoo..! It's so fascinating..!"She whispered against his bare back..


"I have it since years..!"He replied softly and dragged her in a side hug..! He sat on one of the chair and she sat in his lap..! "I don't know you and me being together is right or wrong but still I am glad that you are on my side..!"He said softly and fed her the first morsel..


"Tum mery liye kabhi galat ho he nahi skty Manik..!"She replied munching the morsel and pecked his lips..!

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"Manik..!"Nandini whispered his name as they both were lying on the terrace over a mattress..! Nandini's head was on his chest and she was doodling over his chest..! While his hand was wrapped around her waist and other was under his head..


"Hmm..!"He just hummed staring at the sky birds..


"Why were you so afraid of losing me? Who wants to kill me?"She asked looking at his face and he pecked her forehead..!


"Don't stress yourself..!"He whispered back..!


"Please tell me..!"She pleaded..


"Nandini..! I have loads of enemies..! Anyone can use you if they will come to know that you are my weakness..! I never wanted someone to cry after me..! After my death..!"He was spitting out the cruel words and Nandini palmed his lips..


"No..! Please..! Aisy mat bolo..!"She said hell horrified and he unpalmed his lips..


"It's the reality..! You have to face it..! Aik normal girl aik gangster say pyaar nahi kr skti..!"Manik said sadly..


"Don't be so cruel Manik..! Jo pyaar karty hain na wo darty nahi aur jo darty hain wo pyaar nahi krty..!"She said hugging him tightly as tears ran down her cheeks..!


"These hickeys? Are they hurting?"He asked lovingly as he saw red purplish hickeys all over her neck and shoulders..!


"No these are the signs of your love..! I am loving those..!"She whispered between her tears and smiled a little..


He calmed her down but the thing which was bothering him was..


"Nandini..! Your mother will never agree to our relation..!"Manik's instincts were alarming him..


"Manik she knows that I love you..!"Nandini was tension free...


"I doesn't matter..! Your Mom will never tolerate us being together..! I am sure..!"He again said in a serious tone..!


"Tum un ko mana laina na?"She said innocently and got up..! He smiled faintly and simply nodded. She too smiled a cutely..!


"Come here give me a kiss..!"He said softly gesturing with his hand to come close. She smilingly again laid beside him and kissed him with her heart..


"Say those magical words na..!"She pleaded between the kiss as she wanted him to confess in conscious state. He ignored her plea intentionally and kissed her madly..! After they broke gasping for air...


"Your mother must be worried..! Let's get you back home sweetheart..!"He said politely and kissed her cheek..!

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"Hum phir kab milain gay?"She asked as he halted the car in her bungalow's parking..


"I hope soon..!"He himself was unsure..! "Nandini..! One day I lost my mother because of enemies..! I don't want to lose you..! Promise me that you will take care of yourself..!"He said emotionally and held her hands..


"I promise baba..! Tum andar aoa na..! Let's meet Mama..!"She said excitedly and dragged Manik with herself..! Manik was so unsure to meet her mother that to so soon but still she dragged him..! As soon as they entered the lounge they saw Sakshi..


"Where were you last night? Ghar ana yaad aa gya tmhy?"Sakshi yelled furiously and Nandini was shocked on her place..! Manik was expecting this outburst..!


"Aur tum..!"Sakshi shouted looking at Manik..! "Aisa kya hai tum main jo meri lrki itne pagal hai tmhry peechy..! Mjy laga tha kay do chaar din ka bhoot hai utar jye ga..! Laikin nahi..!"She was yelling and yelling..


"Mama please..!"Nandini tried to protest..


"Shut up..! Just shut up Nandini..! Bohat ho gai tmhri manmani..!"Mother again shouted..!


"Aunty ap hamari ba-.."Manik tried to speak and traaakhhh...! Sakshi gave Manik a tight slap and Nandini gasped..! Manik didn't reacted after all she was a mother and he respected mothers a lot..!


"Shut up..! Stay away from my daughter..!"She shouted..


"Mama..! Ap ko kya ho gya hai..! You know I love Manik..!"Nandini said in tears and her grip on Manik's hand became more tight..!


"Fine..! Then..! Lay jaoa is larki ko apny sath Manik..!"Sakshi yelled and was about to leave when..


"Aik minute aunty..!"Manik spoke and Nandini was unable to figure out how to react..! Sakshi stopped and turned to Manik..! Manik dragged Nandini with him and stood in front of Sakshi..! "Kya yai chahti ho tum?"Manik said looking at Nandini tears were floating in Manik's eyes too..! "Nan-Nandini main tmhy apny sath lay jany ko tayyr hoon..! Par kya tum chal paoa ge? Apny Mama ko naraz kar kay? I lost my mother Nandini I know how much it hurts..! Myny tum say kaha tha..! Tum jaise larki aik gunday say pyaar nahi kr skti..!"He was breaking 'their' hearts and Nandini was just crying and crying...! She never knew that her Mother will not accept all this..!


Sansoon say door main ho skta hoon magar..Tujh say na ho sakoon ga juda..


"Ja-jaany do mjy..!"He spoke with a broken heart and freed his hand from hers as she was not letting him go..! She felt like slipping her life off her hands...


Dunya na smjhy ge dil ko meray abhi.. Ehsaas tuny jo diya...


He backed out and Nandini was crying...! Sakshi held her and she cried more...


Haan main hoon hero tera..! Haan main hoon hero tera...


"Aik akhri baat aunty..!"Manik said before leaving..! "Main bhaly Nandini say door ho jaoan..! Par zindagi bhar ise say pyaar karoon ga..! KOI ROOK SAKY TOU ROOK LAY..!"He ended his words and Nandini fell on her knees..! She was seeing him leaving..


"MANIK..!"She shouted his name as he turned his back to her and started leaving again..! He too was crying badly he knew this would happen..! That's why he never wanted her to be with him..! Sakshi held Nandini...


"Don't leave me again please...!"She shouted again and hide her face in Sakshi's neck..! He was leaving again..! Again leaving her alone for not coming back..! "I hate you Mama..! I hate you..!"She shouted hugging Sakshi more tightly..! Manik was hearing her shouts and pleads behind him but he LEFT..! Those pleads took his breath away..!


"I am sorry..! I am so sorry meri jaan..!"Sakshi thought in her mind she never wanted to separate MaNan but 'someone' forced her...!


Pm's on Weekend..


To Be Continue..!

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Ok so story unexpectedly brhti ja rhi hai..! Let's See where it leads..! Look at this yarr tum logon short update deni ho tou kitna quickly day skti hoon me..! So tell me short updates kar doon har story k? Silent readers please speak up..! I am very much disappointed..! Please..! If i can spend my whole day in writing and writing then you all can write choto sa comment na? Please guys do comment I am loving this story alot plz u too tell me how much you all are liking it?

Love,Mawara

Edited by Mawara_Ejaz - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
RES ..

YAAY !! i came 4rst on ur update ..

sry 4 unres'ing late !!

UNRES ..

4rst i thought cmmnt at d end al2gthr ,, whn u complete d TS ..

bt parah 2 dkha ye TS ... FS me turn ho gaya hai .. 😕

its okk .. ur update worth all d waiting nd satisfied me totally ..

u depict every emotion in between MaNan n ds update ..

their Love ..Fake Hatred .. Pain .. Emotion .. 2gthrness .. Anger .. Roothna-Manana .. Dooriyaan .. Judaai ..

every single emotion highlighted n ds part ..

oops mamma !!.. why did she do ds ??

Lets see wht u store 4 d End ..

its immense pleasure 2 read ds update f d Story !! it ws awsum .. 😳

Edited by bluelake99 - 10 years ago

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