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Nice to see you back Tanaz! Very realistic story. I love your descriptions and how you wrote it from the perspective of the little girl. Kids can be so mean sometimes!

I just wish it were a little longer because it seemed to end too fast, but I do realize that it was actually the perfect length for what you were trying to say. Nicely written. 😃
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Thanks for the feedback, Suhana! 😊

Any areas for improvement?

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