SwaSan FF: A Bet Gone Wrong/Chap 4-Pg 24 (1st Nov) - Page 10

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Posted: 10 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: TRPS

nice start dear. :) Swara is deprived of parents despite having them, that's really cruel from them and Sanskaar's side couldn't understand... well, your story's Sanskaar is under charges for harassing juniors. 🤣 and are we getting Swara in the form of avenger??? 😃 hope so!!! tashan between Swasan... :))
PS- you didn't send me a pm.😈 well no need as you see, I got my hands on the story already!!! 😎

Haha this really makes me wonder why everyone is thinking story will be this & that You guys just give me new new ideas 😆 Swara is form of avenger let's see 😈
Haha I think you didn't sended me buddy request then otherwise I did sended to most of the people 😆 But I am glad you came without even PM..This makes me feel good that peeps are Interested in this story..Thanks tosh 😳🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
#92

Originally posted by: Smilelicious

What a trailer 👏
Awesome job Upama and Nityah 😳🤗 Coming to the update i loved the fact that Laksh was Swara's bhai 😳🤣 Bhai-behen ka pyaar sounds so cute .
Poor Swara, she had to suffer a lot because of her parents But thank god her mausi is nice with her 😳
OhGod Sanskar kitna rude lagta hai 😲 Can't wait to see their first meeting 😎
Update soon Upama 😳

Preetoo thank you so much sweety..Tune comment kar diya nah dil khush ho gaya 🤣
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Posted: 10 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: SONAL30

Hey uppu🤗

Loved the introduction😃
Swara had a troubled childhood her parents were so busy in their fighting sessions but still she is so humble n nice😃
On the other side...Sanskaar's parents r so loving still he is a brat n rude toward others
So nicely written👏
Continue soon
Thanks for the pm

Sonu thanks re 🤗 Well swasan are poles apart so 😆 Welcome for the PM 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: patralekha24

trailer is awesome and loved the introduction chapter, seems like story will be intense😃

will love to read a college romance, pm when you update😊

Thanks dear. Yes I will 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: princess_tara

awesome start\

thanks for pm

Thanks & you're welcome 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#96

Originally posted by: Forum.Maniac

Uppu what a kickass start! 👍🏼

I was hooked right from the words "laksh bhai" and "dead" 😆
Kya mast twist daala hai!
I also love the twist in the tale abt our good girl having family problems, but not to worry our bad boy will make her forget all about it and will also help her deal with it, while Swara will crush his attitude problem 🤣
Sarla mausi is super sweet!
Cnt wait for SwaSan's first meet. Update soon ❤️

Thanks sana ki bachi dil ki sachhi 😆 Well swara will break his attitude yeh sahi socha tune 😎 😆🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chapter Two

Swara:

I step into my dorm with a frown. It was messy..beyond messy. Papers and food rappers were scattered everywhere. I headed inside the room, dumping my bag by the door. I sighed, running my hands through my hair and fell down on the bed. I stared at the ceiling and things which happened before coming here came to haunt me again in my mind.

Flashback

- "Shonu, Aapna khayal rakhna. Mein tumhe bohot miss karungi. " Sarla mausi cried in my arms as it was my time to go.

- "Aap ne mujhe kaha tha nah ki rote nahi hai aur ab aap khud mujhe emotional kar rahi ho mausi."I tried not to cry because this time it was me who need to be strong.

- Pata hai...She couldn't complete her sentence when the person I thought will never come to say me even a good bye came, shocking myself.

- Swara, I wish you all the best for your new Journey." She said Mrs. bose opps my mother actually.

- "Thanks but your wish was really not required. Anyways, I am getting late for my flight. Excuse me." I speak in hurry so that I don't have more conversation with her.

-Swara, I know I don't deserve to be saying sorry but please try to understand, the situation was such that I couldn't...

-Just stop it mom Just stop it. After treating me like a dustbin all these years you want me to listen you. No please. I am going from here for better.

As soon as I said this I hugged my Mausi tightly one last time and went towards the taxi which was supposed to take me towards the airport.

Back to reality.

Loneliness is already creeping its way into me and it doesn't help that my roommate is no Where to be found. I wonder how will she be, I hope she is friendly enough. And I really hope she is someone who loved to stay in and read or study like me. While thinking all this the door opens bringing me out of my thoughts.

The girl who entered had a bright brown hairs, eyes lined with black liner and dressed up in really short dress revealing many things all together. Okay, she looks total opposite of me.

"Hey", the stranger says, offering a smile. "I'm Jenny," She says sitting on the bed.

"h..Hey..I'm swara," I choke, as I am not really good talking with new people.

"So you are my new roommate, cool. Where are you from"? She asks me raising her eyebrows.

"Yes, I'm. I am from India" I speak trying to be polite.

"Oh wow you are from India. You now even sanky is an Indian" She speak while being really happy. I wonder why she was suddenly happy after mentioning sanky.

"ermm..sanky, who?" I ask her being confused.

"Oh, He is a friend and I'm sure you will know him soon as there's no one in the university who doesn't know him. In fact why don't you come with me today, you will see him. You are new here and I'm sure you will make new friends too."

Okay That was really sweet of her to offer me to go with her but I was not sure If I should. I mean We just met and she looks complete opposite of me in dressing, in talking and maybe even in thinking too. I should not judge her as we just met but still something feels wrong. Something...

"Common. Don't think much, you should come. What will you do here alone? Tomorrow is Sunday and college opens only from Monday so you will be bored here alone." She urges me, which seems right too as I know I will be bored so not giving much thoughts I accept it.

Sanskaar:

I walk through the crowded party, pushing my way through a group of wasted people. When I get to the crowded hallway, I spot Caleb sitting with a blond girl. He is again with another girl, shit he is being faster than me. I was making my way towards him when I saw Jenny entering with some new chick.

She looks decent enough that's what I can only feel because the girl is wearing clothes that are about two times her size. Her skirt is literally touching the floor. What kind of 90's dress up is that. College is not at all going to be fun for her, I can tell that just by looking at her. As soon as they entered, Jenny went to some corner leaving behind that girl alone. The girl looks clueless, completely out of place. A drink is pushed into her hand and she smiles politely and rejects the drink.

"Hellooo, Back to earth sanky." Jenny speaks way to loudly which makes me look at her.

"What were you staring at?" She ask while looking at the direction which I was looking few moments back.

"Oh shit, Swara. Damn I totally forgot that she was with me. I had brought her." She says with worry and runs to get that girl.

After few minutes of their talk, which I didn't heard of course Jenny brought that girl towards my direction.

"ermm sanky, This is swara. My new roommate." Jenny says while pointing her fingers towards that girl and looking at me.

"So?" I say as I was not really interested on who is whose roommate.

"Actually she is from India so thought..." I cut her as I was Highly offended. Just because someone is Indian or from India I need to have an Introduction with that person? Hello no.

"Listen Jenny, I don't care who is from where and have you seen her clothes, She looks like she just came from church. She doesn't has any class and literally not my type. So please excuse me." I say as rudely as I can and try to make my way towards Caleb when someone spoke.

"Aap ki himmat kaise hui humhe Classless bolne ki?" I turn back again to see that girl speaking like an Alien. I know she is speaking Hindi as My mom too speaks Hindi but I clearly didn't understood as what she was trying to say because I never went to India & never tried to learnt that language, for better. But right now I am regretting as It's me who looks like an Alien as It's me who is not understanding what this girl wants to say.

"Hello, what are you saying? I'm not getting it." I speak politely..For the first time to any stranger.

"What not getting it? You are an Indian and don't understand Hindi?" She sounds shocked.

"Yes. What's the big deal? I hate that country & I hate People from there." I know what I am speaking is true because I truly hate everything about that country as it makes me remember those things which I am still trying to forget.

"Toh sun khoteya, Tu bohot bada nikamba hai. Halkat vede yede khasmanu khane, tarak ke peepe, khoon chusne wale, Saand kahin ke. Mere Bharat k baarein mein aisa bol kar tujhe Thakur ji kabhi maaf nahi karenge" She spoke so fast that I thought I will faint right away.

Jenny and me both exchanged glares and tried to understand What the fcuk swara said right now, And we both knew we are trapped by one of the most weirdest person alive in this earth.

-x-

Sneak peak of next chapter:

"Where are you trying to go this late, you know it's not safe. It's 1 am." He said as if he cares but I know he is just pretending.

"I am going. I can't stay here with all the shameless people." I try to stay calm as I can.

"Shameless? Oh god that's not called shameless, it's called enjoyment miss.Bharatiya naari" He says with that smirk on his face. I try hard not to be irritated and angry but I know I am already.

-x-

They finally Meet..I hope it was good 🤔

-That last gaali of swara is for this stupid Site..You know I type all this in afternoon & when I was about to post It freaking said Spamming Error..Damn I can't explain how irritated I am & I used those gaali's for this site 🤣 Horrible feeling. I will just give all this galli to the owner of this site too 😭 That's inspired by Manyata from DEK tho 🤣 Those galli's are special, don't ask for meaning 😳😆

-Ignore typos & errors because I had to type all this again & I was angry 🥺

-I got complains on update being short? Haww try to understand I will try to update it regularly so update will be small This one is still long on Mish's request 😳

Okay bye. 🤣

Edited by Breezy- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#98
Unres...
Uppu ki bachi, things are getting spicier.😉😆
Swara's roommate seems nice engh in this chap but I dnt knw I feel like she might create problem for SwaSan later. Does she have a crush on Sanky or am i just imagining it? 😆

How rude is Sanskaar? I can't believe I'm saying this but he totally deserved those gallis Swara gave him. Btw i do remember those from DEK 😆

Hmm, so Sanky has a past too...some things he'd rather forget! I hope u delve further into this soon, my curiousity is rising! 😳

Oh and yes, I just loved how Swara gave it back to her mom! 👏😆

Now stick to ur update schedule and give us the next update tmrw! 😃
Edited by Forum.Maniac - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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superb uppu!!! last part of update literally made me ROFL.🤣 🤣 that's called mauke pe chaukaa. ;) Swara rocks and Sanskaar ishhh Sanky shocks. :)) keep it up! :)

and I forgot in rofling that there is something about Sanskaar's past. waiting for it to open up! we see , Sanskaar is in dire need of learning Hindi. :P and hope, goes well with Swara's life too. is there something her mother wanted to tell!!! I think no matter what that would be less in front of Swara's craving for their love. well, her mausi is so sweet. :) hope, Swara gets good friends here.:)
eagerly waiting for next part. :)
Edited by TRPS - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Uppu what a dhaasu update 🤣🤣
those gaalis oh god i use to watch dat manyata wala show 🤣🤣
Sanskaar ka kya hoga when he ll get to knw what gaalis he got 🤣🤣

Jenny seems sweet bt aage ka pata nahi kaisi niklehi 😛

Sanky show off k liye rude banta hai 😛

u gave me laalach wid sneak peak 😊
hope u update by tomorrow 😳

aww mere liye u tried updating Lil longer Thanku 😳
isi baat pe ek jhappi 🤗

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