(I m urs HAMESHA) srry note for mistake

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey guys this is a new ff on manan. I hope u guys will like this story, its my first work I knw I m not perfect in my English but plz plz prdon me. plz suggest me guys u find something wrong without hesitation I need ur support from all of u guyz.

Prologue
They hug tightly and their tears continuously falls from their corner of eyes but they cannot break their hug. They look like they meet after the ages no one want to leave from each others they hold tight each other if grip is loose then they walked far from each other. They stood for sometime, forgetting all thing, just hug tightly to feel each other presence. Slowly Manik loose his grip n broke their hug , look into each other's eyes. Manik cupped her face kiss her eyes a lone tear falls from her eyes, he clean it with his thumb n say no from his eyes n she do the same. Manik slowly bent down his face n she closes her eyes n he was about to kiss her,she open her eyes with a jerk, while, reality hit her head . she push him n rushed outsides leaving him stunned with her actions .Tears not stopping from her eyes but she didnot stop n after the some time opened the terrace door and stood there looking into the mobile and open the file jaan , flash the picture while her thoughts lingered on what just happened a time ago
Her mind replayed all those time when they spent with each other n murmur to herself
I love u soo much mani but I canot be urs n I walked far from u. Main chaha ki bhi tumahare karib nahi aashkti, main chakar bhi apni beti ko pyar nahi kar sakti( she touch mobile screen where there is pic a boy holding doll n a small girl sit his lap with big smile)I love u both HAMESHA.

Manik: I knw u love me aaj bhi .U think u walked far from me but u never apart u knw why I m ur soul n u r my soul. U say u marry someone but why u don't stop ur body to feel from my touch .I tried to hate u for what u did to me but I never hate u, first time I love u before anything how can I hate u my princess. We miss u soo much last years .we love u soo much HAMESHA.


So this is the prologue ...now comment fast ur views, suggestions and criticism.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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woah...its interesting! keep working hard, u have the ability to portray emotions in a very soothing way..Waiting for next part.. <3
Thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thank u soo much
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Originally posted by: Dawi

woah...its interesting! keep working hard, u have the ability to portray emotions in a very soothing way..Waiting for next part.. <3

Thanks for the pm.

thank u dear ..i will
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Posted: 9 years ago
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srry guys i m new na so by mistake i upload my chapter on new thread
sryy sryy i m silly i knw so plz my chapi on

URL= www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4491650

plz read n give me ur feedback
Edited by sabi_anamika - 9 years ago

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