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Arshi67

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Posted: 9 years ago

#881

Originally posted by: albmum14
Nachos are ready, when is Kabir coming?

I have the guacamole and salsa ready G 😆

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Jignasha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#882

Originally posted by: Arshi67

I have the guacamole and salsa ready G 😆

Oh I want some... 😆

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Jignasha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#883

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Arshi67

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Posted: 9 years ago

#884

The first shoots of spring is exactly what this chapter felt of. As your befitting epigraph says, turning the page, to rejoice in the beauty lying beyond. Embracing it and allowing the sunlight peering out from behind the clouds to warm your pallid, winter ravaged skin.

You could feel the "spring in Khushi's step" as she walked towards her office. Her eagerness to rush through her day so that she can go home to her Arnav. I loved how you put it here, "connect her to him in a matter of seconds". That's just how their relationship feels now. Their happy teasing banter was so adorable. The impatience, the need, to be with the other leaping out in every word.

Lavanya and Aman are simply the best. The way they understand and support Arnav and Khushi is exemplary. It's what true friendship should always be about. An honest love, a genuine desire to want the best for your friend. And Arnav opening up with Kabir was wonderful for Khushi.

Arnav's "I miss you..." to Khushi, just hits you coming as it did straight from the heart. It resounded with the remnants of all that they had been through.

I loved the way you showed both Arnav and Khushi think again of wanting a child of their own. It's when you're happy in your own skin and in your relationship with your spouse that you can start thinking of bringing someone in your world. That tear in Arnav's eye just makes you want to weep ...

The adorable Akhil and Aakash tug at your heartstrings with their sheer cuteness. You capture their mischievousness so well. Worthy recipients of the love their Chachu and Masi shower on them!

And your mischievousness is no less! Totally giving us heart attacks with Khushi and Arnav's mock seriousness at being angry with the other when he got home. You most certainly "Gotcha" us! Waise, was the earlier rediscovering of flat surfaces around the house as interesting as this reunion ... just asking ... cause as a fully signed up member of the revealazzi I need to know ;)

But them speaking about a child of their own at the end was the most moving part for me. It was the poignancy of both of their feelings as they voiced them that touched me. The boundless love that they have to offer will never be limited only to a child borne of them. And you have shown this time and again in this story.

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albmum14

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Posted: 9 years ago

#885

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I read Ruchi's and Mirabell's comments before writing mine and what a great decision it was! I loved both of your comments: Ruchi I cannot fathom (still!) how beautiful, thoughtful and astounding your comments are! Mirabell, you have "stolen" what I wanted to say, but I cannot be upset, you have expressed in such a wondrous way, that I am glad not to write about it now. I could have never been able to express myself like you. Thank you for doing justice to those parts of Jig's update!

I have always found the start of a book or story the most exciting part: being at the foot of the mountain, trying to glimpse the top through the clouds surrounding it, is such an exhilarating experience. The writer takes you through different paths to climb it, sometimes you stumble and the suffering makes you forget your target. Other times, you think it will not be worth it and need a lot of coaxing from the writer to get your gear on and continue. Once or twice, you think you've had enough...that's where the writer takes you by the hand to make you see the reason why you started.

As we get closer to the summit, the pain is all forgotten, you want to reach there and see the view you have been promised at each stage. You are impatient and think you can do it all at once.

But that's why I find you a great writer Jigs, - it is at this stage of "almost there" that you excel. Your writing presents us with so many little interesting things in the path to keep our attention intact. We know we are getting there, but the way is filled with so many beautiful surprises to enjoy this last few metres. At the start you had a brilliant and original idea, a wonderful voice to express it in, great main characters, but what made all this better is your motivation. You will develop and look into the reasons of why your characters act in a certain way, you make us understand that they are not doing or saying so because you want them to solve a problem into the story, but because they are woven into the story and kept there. That's why for me this motivation works, your plot is developed from your wonderfully detailed characterisation and not the other way around. I don't want another Murakami, I need you...

It's difficult to write about normalcy, there are no great emotions to describe and to draw the readers with. But normalcy means that you don't need to have it all figured out to move forward, it means overlooking minor things, it means trust and hope. Normalcy also brings the return of humour and laughter and as Ruchi said mischievousness - yours (almost died at their jokes!) and theirs (Thank God I am away from home, I would be too shy to look at my dining table in the same way! ☺️😳. Come on ladies what is that shock I see in your faces 😲😉...I refuse to believe that I am the only one who tried the "sturdiness" of some flat furniture or surfaces in my home...)

And what a fitting ending to the update Jigs! That's how your characterisation has given us this sub-plot: possible adoption. The change in Khushi and the way she bridges her belief with Arnav's yearning is magnetising. "Family isn't always blood. It's the people in your life who want you in theirs, the ones who accept you for who you are. The ones who would do anything to see you smile, and who love you no matter what".

Let's see their dream of having their child/ren being fulfilled, rather than focus on the hows. At the end, regardless how they will have these children, they will always be theirs.

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Mirabell

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Posted: 9 years ago

#886

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Dearest Writerji

The winds have turned, seasons are changing and this chapter is the harbinger of all things to come - things that this Arnav and Khushi want, need and deserve. It is so gratifying to arrive at this juncture with them. Sigh..

First - Italian Stallion... Italian Stallion!! ☢️ Bas, nothing else.

What I loved about this update is that you have taken everyday ordinary and made them extraordinary - couple traveling, making phone calls, arranging to meet up - something that these two had lost for so long. You showed how they seem to make it work for them, and work well. That is the process of healing... Yes, vacations are wonderful events, but what I have come to know and understand is that life happens in between those events. You showed us their life that was unfolding so beautifully in those in-between spaces. Like any two couple - they bickered, they teased, they fought and kidded with each other. If this is not life, then what else could it be?

And... you gave me what I was hoping for, secretly, for so long, with my breath abated... for Khushi to realize the lacuna in her life - a child to smother with her love. Because she has all that love locked up inside her. And I love, love ... JUST FRIGGIN love the idea of adoption for these two! I have always heard from parents who adopted that they received more than they gave - the love that they gave the child was nothing in comparison to the love they received from the child! That while the world perceived them rescuing a child, in reality, they were rescued by the child! That is what I got from that exchange! And it made my day (actually night 'cos I was up and read it before I went to bed).

What else is there to say except that I loved it. And I cannot wait to see more of this lovely couple, and your writing. ❤️

Bas.

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Manasa

@ManKiBaath

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Posted: 9 years ago

#887

Res

Turning this page...or should I say, reading this chapter was the best feeling ever for this story. My favorite part was the return of the yearning that they have displayed for each other. If just a gap of three days and a thousand miles could make his heart thud again on seeing her, I think they have achieved timelessness they have yearned for.

How can I not be happy especially knowing that two stubborn individuals have reached the stage of healthy discussions ( his "difference of opinion", her "topics for debate"). How can I not be happy knowing that meetha...err "Dessert" as you call it now, is back😉. How can I not be happy knowing that Arnav is fighting against getting the "Shame on me" tag with his always ready to "fool me twice" work. And how can I not be happy, knowing that more than "Wi-Fi", Arnav is looking for "Wi-Fe" now. I know, I know, bad joke but I could not resist😃.

I knew something was cooking with all those baby/kid interactions of the lead pair. Arnav was always onboard, but you have taken happy meter to new levels by convincing Khushi on having a kid. There is no doubt on what kind of parents they will be.

I personally believe that a child does not becomes yours by pregnancy or birth. They become yours on the day when you set your heart to giving unconditional love and take full responsibility of them. Pregnancy may just give you a head start over adoption but the end result of fulfillment and completeness is the same for both. Thank you for conveying the simple message of utmost importance in the lightest and nicest vein.

And finally, this chapter is one reason on why we miss the Mathur's, Kabir's settled, family is moving the right direction, they have become family and are going to extend it soon. Bliss it is...or "serenity" as you would have called it😃.

Beautiful as ever.

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BlueMystique

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Posted: 9 years ago

#888

As spring blooms in the air, our favorite couple are starting a new season of their own. I loved A & K throughout the story, hurt when they hurt, and cried when they cried, but I admire them more now than I have ever done before, for letting what happened be something that strengthened their bond instead of allowing it to break it.

It was heartwarming, and heart-wrenching at the same time, to watch Khushi & Arnav with the kids. The longing, the wistfulness was beautifully conveyed.

Arnav's acceptance of Kabir, and realizing that Khushi's friend holds a special place in her heart, and rebuilding the bridges he had burned was truly admirable of Arnav (Same can't be said for you! That teaser, my god!).

They picked up the pieces, mended each others hearts and are ready to take the next step to realize their dream together. It is such a beautiful feeling, Jigs, reading about how much these two have overcome and feeling as if you've been a witness to a flower's blooming, watching their new beginnings and realizing that no matter how bad things might get, there's always a tomorrow, and that tomorrow always brings new hopes with it.

I can't wait for the next chapter, Jigs. Loved it as always!

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bhavis

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Posted: 9 years ago

#889

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I loved the starting. I would say that is the best part of it. The way you have compared their relation to the harsh winters followed by the spring👏 👏 I could actually picture the tulips that would have been out of the ground ready to bloom despite Siberian weather that the ground may have been subjected to and that is what has happened to these two.

ACCEPTANCE:

That was the essence of this update. Both have accepted each other with all their shortcomings and strengths while accepting and fighting their own demons. Arnav accepted Krabs and his role in Khushi's life without being jealous. Khushi has accepted her husband and his business and the fact that they can not be parents. A big step for her however that acceptance allowed her to think rationally and find solution. The one that will lead to adoption and many times its seen that after adopting a child couples do conceive. A tiny hope on my side that this is what the author has in the mind.

Even Khushi's family has accepted the shortcomings of their older son in law and daughter along with Payal and her hubby and finally things are shaping up the way it should be.

Entry of Aman and Lavanya as always was like the spring showers in the lives of these two. I envy their friendship at all level and then we had kids all over the place to lighten up the mood. The frustration was so visible in Arnav and was a welcoming change. Their longing for each other was more like the longing of the newly wed😳 which to me is a great tool since the love and belonging will lead a way to the esteem and finally to self realization. (Cr: Maslows Hierarchy of needs)

We have Arnav accepting Krabs but I want Khushi to accept that thorn Anita(I hope i did not forget the name) 😆 and finally saying Kanto ki saza phoolon ko kyu de😃

Beautiful update. I have to acknowledge one thing and that is despite the story heading toward the end you writer is still able to grip the reader to your writing and that to me is the success of your writing👏

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cherrybloom1

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Posted: 9 years ago

#890

Hi. Sorry I'm late. I've turned into this lazy bum who doesn't want to do anything. You know how people get a few days before vacations begin?! I've read the chapter thrice but I've been too lazy to unreserve my comment. I've literally pulled myself up from being a couch potato this evening and forced myself to comment. So please exuse me!

I have honestly loved every bit of this chapter. Not everyone can get friends like Aman and Lavanya and I can say without a doubt that Arnav and Khushi are extremely lucky to have them.

One of the major highlights of this chapter for me include the numerous "I missed you" that had been exchanged through this chapter. The pain of being pulled apart after literally shadowing each other all through a whole month is hellish difficult. Arnav's fear of leaving Khushi alone in the house is justified yet a little over the top. It must be difficult to leave her alone in the house after everything that has transpired in the past year but it is time he moves on from that. It will take time, I agree. A few more trips and things would slowly come back to normal.

I loved that little talk they had about their "hot" dinner and even hotter dessert. I wish they could go for it. But I feel their "stay at home" night was even better. The emotional connection they had shared in the past seems to be slowly coming back.

You definitely did "gotcha" us today, Jigs! I honestly felt like there was some big fight awaiting us on the doorstep today. I guess the "sexually frustrated" brosipping did get to me. You never know, which of the women would actually end up making their husbands sleep in the guest room, or even worse, the couch! That would be fun to watch though!

THEY'RE ADOPTING A BABY. IS THIS CUTE OR IS THIS CUTE!!! I AM SO EXCITED. A BABY. FINALLY. THIS IS WHAT WE WERE WAITING FOR SINCE FOREVER AND IT FINALLY HAPPENED. That was such an unexpected yet welcomed surprise, Jigs! Thank You so much for this little treat you had in store for us.

Arnav had been waiting to hear this from Khushi for so long. He waited and then ended up being heartbroken when she decided she didn't want a baby. But FINALLY, she can see that it's time for them to have the cries of a little baby in their house. A tiny bundle of joy. Oh god. I love babies so much that I honestly feel like the little thing is coming to my own house! Jigs, you need to take this plot forward soon. Please. I want to see them have a baby in their house. A baby who completes their family. A baby they have been dreaming about for ages now.

Give us an update soon, Jigs! Surprise us with an early update, maybe? 😳

P.S. YOU'RE ABSOLUTELY AMAZING, BRILLIANT, OUT OF THIS WORLD.

Edited by cherrybloom1 - 9 years ago