FF - Love me forever - Chapter 1 Pg 4

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi Folks,
A regular watcher of the show and a silent reader on this forum. What a lovely place this, filled with so much of warmth and camaraderie. Made an account just so I could occasionally interact with you all and share my thoughts on the show too. What a beautiful concept and what a travesty it has been turned into it.

Anyway, hope the much talked about twist brings some cheer to all of us. A germ of an idea has taken root in my head and I'd like to share it with you if it interests you. Just putting out a teaser, tell me if I should take it forward.

Thanks

Bertie


TEASER

She should be feeling triumphant. On top of the world! It was a strange emptiness and an indescribable sadness that filled her though instead!

She looked at Aarav, sprawled on the cot in his bedroom. He had a vacant expression on his face as he stared blindly at the ceiling fan. What was he thinking? How was she going to break through that facade? Get through to the little boy that she had somehow managed to lose along the way? What if this was not what he wanted? Should she have thought of that?

"Maa ji, now that Aarav is back, I think we should get started with the wedding plans in right earnest!"

Aman Sir's words registered in some part of her mind, setting off warning bells clanging. She was up against a wall, one that she had no way of scaling and there was no exit door in sight either.

"Ragini, what do you think? Would August 25th suit you or maybe September 1st? Left to me, I'd love to get married tomorrow of course!"

Aman's awkward words and the blush made her feel pity. Not the euphoria that a bride to be should be feeling!

Just then, her mobile rang. A proverbial 'saved by the bell' situation!

"Ragini...what..?"

She ignored Aman's question as she picked up the phone.

It was from Agam. Was he calling to say goodbye? Her brow furrowed and her eyes felt the sting of tears as she took the call.

"Beta...?"

"Mom...Dad...!"

Why did he sound so panic stricken? What had Nachiket done now?

"Yes beta..?"

"Dad's been in a car crash...the doctors ...the doctors are saying he may not survive...!"

The mobile slipped from her suddenly nerveless fingers even as his last words echoed faintly in her ears.

"Maa...we are at Kokilaben...!"


P.S - Lol...I think the teaser has practically become a chapter...let me know what you think though...!
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loveleen3 thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I think its brilliant. Write the next part soon. Just breakoff the engagement.
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Welcome here! ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi Bertie, welcome to the Forum. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ Feels so nice to see new members joining.
As for the Teaser, it's Wow! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ Am sure we are all excited to read the update, so please do not keep us waiting.


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Hello @BertieWooster .. Jeeves ?

Welcome to the Forums .. Glad you decided to join the Forums .. I hope you'll have a great time here, interacting with the other members ..
Since.. you've been a silent reader .. you will be quite familiar with a lot of people here ..
Stay active .. and be part of the discussions ..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: loveleen3

I think its brilliant. Write the next part soon. Just breakoff the engagement.
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Welcome here! ๐Ÿ˜Š


Hello Loveleen...thank you so much for the warm welcome...and truly glad you liked the teaser...break off the engagement...lol...isn't that what we all want?!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: poetic

Hi Bertie, welcome to the Forum. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ Feels so nice to see new members joining.

As for the Teaser, it's Wow! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ Am sure we are all excited to read the update, so please do not keep us waiting.



Hi Rachna,

Thanks so much for the warm welcome...and thanks for liking the teaser...will update soon hopefully... ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: BlueMoon8

Hello @BertieWooster .. Jeeves ?


Welcome to the Forums .. Glad you decided to join the Forums .. I hope you'll have a great time here, interacting with the other members ..
Since.. you've been a silent reader .. you will be quite familiar with a lot of people here ..
Stay active .. and be part of the discussions ..


Hello BlueMoon...yes of course... Jeeves..๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Yes, am indeed quite familiar with quite a few people...at least by name...hope to interact more in future ๐Ÿ˜Š...thanks for the warm welcome!


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello Bertie!

Finally you decided to join the forum ๐Ÿ˜ƒ It's good to see new members here. Please stay active and feel free to take part in our discussions ๐Ÿ˜†

As for the teaser..it's brilliant. Finally the engagement break off..๐Ÿ˜‰ Please update soon. We're waiting.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi Bertie!

Good to see you here and welcome to the forum. Hope you will have a great time here. We will for sure if you promise to keep us entertained with such good work of yours.

Love the teaser! Now we want you to update the soonest ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Bertie!!
Welcome to the forum.. that's so sweet, the fact that you made an account to be a part of all the conversations.. and the better part still is that you first post is a chapter/teaser of something you're writing! <3

So much goodness!
Loving the teaser.. and everything that lies ahead I'm sure will be equally gripping.. please write the next bit soon.. and welcome again!

:D

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