MANAN FF-FRIENDSHIP:A CONFUSION? ch 35/Page 130(25/05)

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Hi everyone!

I am new to India forums! I am not that great of a writer! An idea came to my mind. Here are the character sketches

CHARACTER SKETCHES

MANIK- 19 year old , handsome and tall guy. He loves his friends. After his family, if there is anyone he can die for, its gotta be his friends. He prioritizes friendship over everything including any relationships. He has feelings for Nandini, his best friend, but he is ignoring them( or say he is not sure if it is actually more than friendship).

NANDINI-18 year old girl, has passion for studies and music. She loves her best friends more than anything. There is some traumatic event that happened in her childhood, which has affected her a lot, but she acts like a strong girl. Everyone thinks of her as an independent, brave, not-so-emotional and strict girl. However, Manik knows her real side, he knows how soft and emotional she really is. She has some feelings for Manik as well, but she has made the decision to hide them because one, she knows about ALYA's feelings for Manik and therefore, does not want to hurt her best friend. Secondly, she comes from a conservative family and does not want to hurt his parents by dating a guy.

MUKTI- same as she is in the show. She is in relationship with Abhi. She is best friends with Manik, Nandini, Aliya and NAVYA.

ALYA- She is a fashion diva , exactly how she is in the show. She loves her best friends, and has feelings for Manik.

NAVYA- She is the power-house of their group. She is a bindass girl who does not believe in serious relationships. Her relationship with Manik, is like brother-sister.

ABHI- Mukti's boyfriend. A nice guy who really cares for Mukti and her friends.

CABIR- He works at the same restaurant where Navya works. He is a funny guy. He thinks boys are the best and girls are emotional fools. It usually results in arguments with Navya.

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So that is it for now. Please let me know if you guys want me to continue.

Thanks a lot <3


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Interesting start dea. ...
Continue soonnn
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nice concept!!
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Continue please😊
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First of all, thank you so much guyz! Love u all a lot <3
Chapter 1
It was 5 am in the morning. A girl, with milky white skin, long beautiful hair was sleeping while hugging her teddy bear. She heard her phone ringing, but she was too sleepy to pick any calls now. So she decided to sleep. Phone stopped ringing. After a few seconds, she woke up and was sitting on her bed in a split second. First word that came out of her mouth was "Alya". She cursed herself for not picking up her phone, cuz of her sleep. She was thinking how could she be so selfish. She saw the phone and she was right, it was Alya's call that she missed. Now she was really worried, remembering what happened yesterday.
FLASHBACK
Nandini was watching TV with her younger brother, Rishabh. Then she got a call. Phone was in the kitchen, she forgot it there when she was cooking. She asked her brother to go get it, cuz she didn't want to miss even one second of her favourite show. She asked Rishabh a lot of times, but he also did not want to miss the show. In the end, Nandini had to go see herself. She saw the caller id. It was MANIK. An instant smile came to her beautiful face. She was thinking "is he missing me?"...even though they have been best friends for about 4 years now, his every call made Nandini feel so special. She went to her room and called MANIK. He picked up the phone within 2 seconds or even less. That was shocking to Nandini because usually u have to call him at least twice for him to pick ur call.
Manik : "Hi"
Nandini: "Hi Manik. I am sorry I missed your call. "
Manik: "oh.ok"
Nandini knew something is wrong. Because his answer can neva be just "oh.ok"..he should have shown some fake anger, cuz that's what he does all the times when she misses his calls.
Nandini: "hmm.. Toh... kya huya?"
Manik: "Alya needs us"
Nandini (was confused): " what do you mean?"
Manik : " Her mother and her mother's boyfriend met with an accident. He passed away. And her mother is struggling for life in hospital."
He was almost at the verge of crying. He is a strong guy, but I know how he loves his best friends and can not see them in pain. Also, the day since his parents took the decision to get divorced, he becomes emotional whenever any topic related to parents shows up. I was thinking about Alya. She must be broken. Even though her parents got divorced when she was young, and she was living with her dad and grandparents, but still mother is a mother. She still loved her mom a lot.
Nandini: " how did that happen?"
Manik : " I will tell u everyhng . can you get ready in 10 mins? I will come pick u up and then we can go see Alya?"
Nandini: " yeah. Ok."
Manik : " I will be there in 10 mins. Bye"
Nandini got ready in 5 mins. She grabbed some random top n jeans from her closet.
She came downstairs and told Rishabh that there is some serious problem at Alya's place, so she has to go. She didn't have time to explain all the details to him. Rishabh said ok and Nandini went outside.
Within 2 mins, Manik's car stopped in front of her house. She got in the car and said "hi" . Manik gave her a smile. Nandini could clearly see how tensed and worried he was. She said " Manik! Don't worry. Alya will be fine. We need to act strong in order to control her." Manik looked at Nandini. Her eyes gave him the assurance that things are going to be fine. He said " ok! We will smile cuz only then, she will smile. "
Within 10 minutes, we were at Alya's place.
Her grandma opened the door. Nandini and Manik greeted her.She had tears in her eyes, Manik hugged her and said " Alya is going to be fine. We are here na." Grandma kissed him on forehead . Manik n Nandini walked towards Alya's room. Manik opened the door. What they saw in front of their eyes, was ...they didn't even have words to describe it. Room was a mess . Vases and picture frames, everything was broken and pieces of broken stuff were lying on the floor. She saw Alya sitting in a corner close to her closet. They both carefully walked towards her, avoiding all the broken stuff. Manik put his hand on Alya's shoulder and said "Alya" . she looked up in his eyes and hugged him tightly. Manik sat there beside Alya . he took her in his arms , as close as anyone possibly can, he knew that first he needed to make her feel that she has not lost everything . He needed to make her feel that he was always there for her. Manik could see how his parents got divorced and how his mom left him, it was rotating in front of his eyes. He could feel Alya's pain because he had been through the same pain. After sometime, Alya saw Nandini standing there. She broke the hug with Manik and hugged Nandini tightly. Nandini was more like a mother to her, she always taught her how to choose right people, how to control emotions etc. Nandini consoled her. Nandini herself was crying. Manik was still sitting on the floor. Alya was still hugging Nandini and Nandini was facing Manik. He could clearly see the tears brimming in her eyes. For some reason, they were hurting him more than anything. He stood up and went close to Nandini while Alya was still hugging her. He touched Nandini on her cheek and through eyes, told her not to cry. His touch sent shivers down her spine. He went even close to her . Nandini also told him to stop crying, through her eyes. Their eyes were enough to do all the talks. Alya finally broke the hug.
She said "guyz my mom will be fine na?"
Both Manik and Nandini side hugged her and said " she will be. Have trust in God. "
Alya's grandma knocked on the door. She came inside with some food in a plate. Nandini waljed to her. Gradma said "Alya hasn't eaten anything since morning. " Nandini took the plate. Grandma left the room. Manik and Nandini tried their best so that Alya eats something but Alya was not ready. After a few minutes, Manik said to Nandjnk " ok! Let's not force her. What is going to happen at max?..we will also not eat anything. " Alya looked at both and gave "why" look. Finally, she started eating the food cuz she couldn't afford having her friends not eating anything because of her. Seeing her, both Manik and Nandini looked at each other and gave a smile. Alya was finally acting a little better.after sometime, all three shared a group hug . Manik and Nandini left from Alya's place. Now they were in his car.
Manik: "thank god..she agreed to eat something. She cannot act all happy because obviously, her mom is in such a situation. M just happy that she isn't hiring herself."
Nandini: " you are right. Don't worry. We are always with her. We won't let her hurt herself."
Manik gave her a smile. He started driving. He was ok with Alya's situation now, but he could not wash away the pictures of his family's split. He was feeling uneasy. Nandini could feel something was wrong. To some extent, she knew it was about his family. She decided not to talk about it, because it would hurt him more.
She put her hand over his hand and said "Manik, don't wory. Everything happens for a reason"
He gave her a fake smile.
Now they were back to Nandini's place.
She gave him a side hug and went inside her house.
Then after having some snacks, she went to her bed and fell asleep.
FLASHBACK ENDED
Nandjnk realized how 15 mins passed when she was thinking about what happened yesterday. Right away, she called Alya. Alya picked up within seconds.
Alya : " heyy baby"
Nandini felt a sigh of relief. Alya sounded all happy . she was thanking God
Nandini: " yes baby. Everyhtng ok na?"
Alya : " yeah. Guess what. Mom is out of danger now. U were right. God does everything for a reason. "
Nandini was really happy listening to that.
Nandini: " Thank God! I couldn't see my baby in pain yesterday. Finally...ahh...accha, Multi and Navya don't know anything. They will be mad but Manik refused to tell them yesterday because he didn't want to disturb Multi as she is with her family on a vacation , so she is out of town and Navya, you know she was on work and considering how impulsive she is, we decided to tell her later."
Alya " I know . u guyz did the right thing. Don't worry. They will be fine "
Nandini: " hmm! So did u talk to Manik?"
Alya :" not yet. I mean he doesn't know that my mom is fine . I didn't want to disturb his sleep. He was talking to me till 4 in morning. So that's uy"
Nandini was happy to see how much Manik loved his friends., but she was feeling jealous. Something was hurting her, she was feeling like aa if she was losing something.
Alya : " Baby..r u there? "
Nandini : " yeah baby. Sorry , were you saying something? "
Alya : " no..don't worry..nothing important. Accha I will call u later. I am going to temple to thank God for his grace."
Nandini : " aww my baby. Temple and all. Gud job. "
Alya : " aha..ok..bye..for now..love ya."
Nandini: " bye. Love u too "
Nandini disconnected the call. She had mixed emotions. She was finding it so hard to understand her own emotions. On one side, she was happy for Alya. But y Manik's care for Alya was irking her?.. She decided to go take shower . after shower, she made some coffee. She went back to her room. She tried her best to study, but she couldn't concentrate. After that, she was lost in her own thoughts. What did she feel for Manik? Was it more than friend ship? Or was she overthinking? Does Manik also have feelings for Alya? All the scenes of Manik hugging Alya, their closeness, was flashing in Nandini's mind.
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So here z the chapter guyz. I know its probably really bad, u guyz r such good writers. A humble request to u guyz"please let me know what can I do to make it better. I know I need a lot of improvement, please help me with that.
Thanks!

Edited by Dawi - 9 years ago
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Thank you to everyone who took time to reply to my post. I would love to pm u guyz. Unfortunately, I can't figure out how exactly I can do that. I am sorry for not being able to pm u chapter 1. Please read it here. And it would be really helpful, if you could tell me how to pm updates. :) thnks once again
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Beautiful start.
Nd lovely story.
Cont soon...looking forward for more twist md turns...
Love...mini
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That was a wonderful start...The pain is really immense wn it comes to parents...n u hv penned it properly...Nandini already jealous...its a nice start...but if pocbl for give long updates na😊
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just amazing... beautifully described ...luv it...
plzz plzz continue...
update fast ..
n yaa amazing writing skills
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I am overwhelmed with all your love and support. Honestly, thank you guyz for encouraging me. I will keep trying my best to make the chapters as interesting as possible.

Here is the chapter two. Hope You enjoy! :)

A few days passed , and all the best friends did not get a chance to meet. Alya was busy looking after her mother. Mukti was on vacation with her family and Navya was also busy with her job.

It was a friday afternoon. Nandini was extremely happy, why should she be, it was the last exam day for her. She was done with all her exams. She was loving how her city Calgary was looking beautiful. Spring brought new energy to the city after almost 6-7 months of winter. She decided to go home and call her friends. Finally, she had all the time to have fun with her buddies.

She reached home. Had some snacks, and went straight to her bedroom. She called Manik, and to her surprise, he picked up first time.

MANIK : "Tum hi ho, ab tum hi ho, Zindagi ab tum hi ho..."

Those words brought a big smile to her face. She realized how her cheeks turned pink, when she looked in the huge mirror in her room. She mentally slapped herself for overthinking about every thing. She very well knew that he is not singing for her. She thought he must be driving, because the only time he sings song so loudly, that even such romantic songs, when he is driving. So she asked him.

NANDINI: " HI ! u r driving. Aren't you?"

MANIK : " aha..like always, you are right."

NANDINI : " Oh yeah? ..cool I will call you later then. Focus on driving."

MANIK: "No. I can drive while talking to you. And please dont give me ur traffic rules lecture. No one follows those many rules except for you."

NANDINI: "Accha. Lets leave that. You know I am so happy. Finally done with exams. Last few days were so stressful."

MANIK: " Come on MS.PERFECT . You love taking stress. You know if I was as smart as you are, I wouldnt have touched notebooks."

She loved when he called her Ms.Perfect. He always told her how she is the perfect girl there can possibly be.

NANDINI: " Aha..sure! And I am not perfect. "

MANIK : " Oh please. You are PERFECTTT. You are sucha perfect person ...that... I would love to marry you and have you as my wife."

Nandini felt as if the whole world stopped right there. She felt butterflies in her stomach. She knew it is just his nature to flirt with every girl , but for some reason she could not She was blushing so much. She did not know what to say next. She felt like she was out of words.

Thank God, Alya came to her rescue. Before she had to say anything, Manik said.

MANIK : " Ms. Perfect! Our kiddo is calling. Wait lemme put it on conference call."

Yes, Alya was our kiddo. She was the youngest in our group. We all loved to pamper her all the time.

ALYA : "Hellooo"

NANDINI : " Baby..whay are you so excited?"

ALYA: " What do you mean by why? Are not you excited?"

NANDINI: " Excited for what?"

ALYA: " Wait! Manik didnt tell you anything?"

MANIK: " Oh yeah. Nandini. I forgot to tell you. We are all going to Toronto. "

NANDINI: " Toronto? When? Why? "

ALYA: " Baby,,you ask so many questions. Ok! so plan is to go today in eve. We will have some fun. I am so excited YAYYY.WOHOOO."

MANIK: "Alya. You are seriosuly a kid. Kiddo is the perfect name for you."

NANDINI(stressed) :" Guyz..listen to me. You know my parents na. They wont agree. Let say even if they do, I havnt done any packing and what about the tickets?"

ALYA: " Tickets? Ohhh.. no baby. We are not going by plane. We are driving to Toronto."

NANDINI : " What? are you guyz serious? Its 30 hours of driving at least. "

MANIK: " NANDU . It wiill be fun by car. Come on. "

ALYA: " and yeah.. as far as packing is concerned. Your baby has done it all."

NANADINI: " Alya. What do u mean? Where did you get my clothes from?"

ALYA : " Come on baby. I am not letting you wear your boring clothes. I bought all new trendy dresses and stuff. "

Nandini knew how Alya's choice of dresses are going to be. She never wore short dresses. She was already scared to death.

NANDINI: " Alya. see baby I love you but you know na, I cant wear those."

Nandini almost pleaded.

MANIK : " Guyz guyz guyz. You can have your 'baby-baby' talk afterwards. Nandini, listen to me first. I know your parents wont be ready. So I have a plan."

NANDINI was excited.

NANDINI: "What plan? Tell me . Tell me"

MANIK: " I was jsut texting Abhi. Abhi is also coming with us. When Abhi is coming, you can come too. You know what I mean right."

Nandini understood his plan. Actually, Abhi's family and Nandini's family were very close. Thats why, Abhi and Nandini were friends since childhood. In fact , they were really close friends. Mukti met Abhi through Nandini, and thats how They started dating each other.

Their parents loved to see Nandini and Abhi together. In fact, they were planning to get them married once they turn 22. Abhi and Nandini dont know about that plan. Also, both families dont know about Mukti and Abhi. Coming back to the plan, Manik decided to send Abhi to Nandini's place to ask her parents if they could allow her. Nandini's family trusted Abhi a lot. They all knew that her family will definitely agree if Abhi goes to ask.

NANDINI: " Wow. PLan is good. When is Abhi coming?"

MANIK: " He said he will be there in an hour or so. So get ready . Trust me, this is going to be best trip ever.

NANDINI: "hmm. I hope everyhting works out great. Accha. Manik? Hvae you talked to Navya and Mukti?"

MANIK : " yeah. I did. They were kinda mad at me for not letting them know about our kiddo's mom. But u know Manik the genius knows how to handle such situations"

NANDINI: " Thank God! I was actually really worried."

MANIK: " Ok my lovely ladies. I need to pack my stuff. Will be coming to pick u up with Abhi around 5 .So be ready by that time. And Ms. Perfect, Abhi will be coming soon. "

NANDINI: " Ok! sure! Fingers crossed! Hopefully, Abhi can convince my parents."

ALYA: " Bye ! Love u guyz! see ya at 5 then."

All three : "BYE"

Even though Nandini was excited, she was still doubtful about her parents' reaction. She knew Abhi will be able to convince them, but what if that doesnt happen.

She decided to leave everyhting to God, and started packing small things that she needed because her baby Alya had instructed her to not pack any clothing.

An hour passed, she was waiting for Abhi. She was extremely nervous. She did not know how many rounds of her whole house she took. She was praying to God constantly, because she really wanted to go with her friends. Then, the moment came. Door bell rang and she ran to the door. Abhi was there.

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So here is the chapter 2! I know its not that interesting. I wanted to explain the relationships a bit more. A lot of interesting stuff is coming up , though.

I will post the next chapter very soon.

Lemme know what you guyz think of this update. Your feedback matters a lot. :) <3

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