PraJa FF Lovebirds Note on Pg-3

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello ppl! This is Srushti! I read many beautiful FFs on IF n decided 2 write my own! Well...it's my first tym 2 write a story...so..bear with it... !
It is my version of a praja story! If u find any resemblance with any other stories, den dat will b a mere coincedence
Appreciation as well as constructive criticism is welcomed.😊
It will start with the post leap incidents and then I'll proceed with my own version.
So...umm...shall I start writing d ff...??
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So here I come, with the prologue for this FF. Do read it and tell me if I should continue this or not.
Prologue
And in one fluid motion, Badshah Khan's head was sliced off from his body. It fell at HER feet, it's rightful place. One moment, there was complete silence...
And then, the whole area erupted in cheers of 'JAY EKLINGJI!' 'JAY MEWAD!' 'JAY MATRUBHOOMI!'

An unknown smile crept on HER beautiful face as SHE looked at her praja (citizens) and HIM...
The old lady on the stairs had tears in her eyes and also had the proud smile. As soon as HE looked at the old lady, his sword fell on the ground with a jangling sound. People stopped cheering as they saw HIM approaching the old lady. HE reached where the old lady was, looked in her eyes and smiled.HE immediately bent to touch her feet, but before he could do that, the lady caught him by his shoulders and shook her head in negation. She was about to hug him, but then realised something and quickly wiped the tears off and said, "Aisa karke hame lajjit na karein...hum toh bas aapke ek samant ki patni aur ek samant ki maa hai...aise humare pair chhu kar hame lajjit na karein kunwarsa..."
Everybody was silently listening...
HE could see the pain in the old lady's eyes, who was once his mother figure...
HE didn't know how to react on this. Should he be angry? Should he be sad? Should he be happy to see that his efforts of maintaining distance in Bijolia and him have been successful...?
But before he could say anything, SHE ordered some soldiers to cremate Badshah khan's body in proper way and went inside the palace with the old lady, again giving instructions to the das-dasis to help HIM and to show HIM his kaksh.All went to their houses to rejoice the recent triumph.
HE was standing ALONE in front of the palace he once loved to come and stay at, beyond anything...
Noone was there anymore...except for the white faithful horse...HIS CHETAK...

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you so much! I'll surely continue this.😊😊😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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NYC
Continue soon
And plz PM me
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Posted: 10 years ago
#5

Originally posted by: syndeyshine00

NYC

Continue soon
And plz PM me

Thank you so much😊 I'll pm you when I update. Maybe I'll update the 1st chapter on sunday.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#6
I'm really very sorry for the late update..
My exams were there..so I couldn't update the first part..but now that the exams are over, I bring you 2 chapters!! Read them and do leave me your comments and likes!😊 So here you gooo..😃

CHAPTER 1

He was totally irritated, frustrated and what not! He was pacing in his room restlessly. He was constantly reminding himself that he stayed only because Chakrapani insisted. Yeah...he was staying ONLY because Chakrapani requested him to. How could he deny his friend's request? His friend was meeting his wife Saubhagyawati after a very long time...How could he say 'no' to that..? And yes, he had to make Bijolia's army stronger. What if next time, any other foreigner invaded Bijolia?! No! He must make the Bijolian army stronger! Yes, that's the reason he stayed! Uhhh...that's so complicated! If RaniMa would have been here, she would definitely have removed him from this emotional turmoil. And his anger returned in full measure! She was the reason, his RaniMa was no more with him. She was the reason for his every pain. And he will never forgive her! Ever!
Finally he decided decided to go to the Dangal Sthal to vent out his anger. He quickly took his sword and went to the DS.
He heard the clashing of swords as he started nearing DS. He saw from a distance that two figures were fighting with each other with swords. One was of a boy & the other one. ..well..He knew she would be here...
He went and stood at the edge of the arena & watched their fight. It was as if to watch a ferocious lioness fighting! And the next second, Ajabde hit Patta's sword so hard that it fell from his hands some feet away. Patta stood there, totally helpless, with his Jija whose sword was currently threatening to tear his chest apart...
"Bas bas Jija, aapse toh hum kabhibhi jeet nahi payenge..!" Said Patta
Ajabde finally lowered her sword & said,"Aap ko aur sachet rehna hoga Patta! Shatru kisi bhi disha se waar kar sakta hai!"
And they both turned to go back to the mehel, but found Pratap standing at the edge.
"Dekha aapne Kunwar Pratap, humari Jija kitni shaktishaali hai! Virangna hai we! Ek sacchi shoor kshatrani! Kshama kijiye, kintu aap bhi inse nahi jeet sakte!" Said Patta.
"Achha! Toh thik hai! Hum bhi toh dekhe jara ki aapki Jija hume kaise harati hai!" replied Pratap, looking sidewards at Ajab.
Ajabde sensed the taunt and came forward, saying,"Haan haan, kyun nahi!"
"Dekh lijiye, firse soch lijiye. Waise bhi aap hi haarne wali hai." said Pratap
"Ladai ka nirnay ladai ke pashchaat samajh aata hai Kunwarsa, isliye ladai se pahlehi ladaai ka parinam ghoshit na karein." said Ajabde calmly.
"Thik hai. Toh fir shuru karte hai."
Saying this, both went & stood facing each other in the middle of the arena.
Both looked in each other's eyes & drew their swords out of the scabbard and threw the scabbards aside.
Edited by SwarSrushti - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#7
Here we go with the 2nd chapter!
CHAPTER 2

Here, in ChakraVati's room:

Chakrapani entered their room to find his wife sitting at the edge of the bed; and from the look on her face, she was thinking something really serious. And he thought he knew exactly what that serious thing was.
"Hum jaante hai Saubhagyawati, ki aap kis baat ko lekar itni chintit hai.." said Chakri
"Panditji, hume kuch na kuch toh karna hoga..ab hum, ab hum aur nahi dekh sakte ye sab..." said Saubhagyawati
"Haan, hum jaante hai..Aur hum ye bhi jaante hai ki hume kiski madat leni hai..kintu..."said Chakri
Hearing the worried voice of her husband, Saubhagyawati asked, "kya hua? Kintu kya Panditji?"
"Kintu hum ye nahi jaante ki wo vyakti humari sahayata karne ke liye tayyar hongi bhi ya nahi." Chakrapani completed his sentence.
"Kintu hum prayaas toh kar sakte hai na? Aur ab hum wo har sambhav prayaas karna chahte hai, jisse un dono ki peeda ka nash ho.." said Saubhagyawati.
Chakrapani nodded in agreement and both started making plan.

Here Chakrapani & Saubhagyawati were trying to bring the estranged lovebirds together, but there they were, standing in front of each other holding their swords, ready to strike, ready to fight.

Ajabde made the first move. But Pratap expertly blockec her sword with his. He pushed his sword on hers so hard, that she staggered backwards. Pratap started attacking her fast. She was blocking his every strike, but at the same time, she was going on moving backwards. Pratap quickly bent on his knees to hit on her legs, but she jumped at the last moment, to prevent her legs from getting hurt & hit him from above. He slowly started getting up pushing her sword upwards. Finally he stood up & pushed her again. She again staggered backwards. But the next thing which happened was unexpected for Pratap. She quickly recovered from his push & came to him spinning and hit her sword so hard on his, that it fell on the ground; and she stood their, her sword pointing at her husband's left side of the chest; exactly at his HEART...

So here ends my 2nd chapter! Do leave me your precious comments! And don't forget to hit the like button!😉😊😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey shrushti
Both chapters are awesome
Kya vo insaan Jo chakri aur bhago ki madad karne wala hai vo patta hai??
Continue soon
Vaise really, mai ajab nai pratap ka dil to cheer hi rakha hai
A symbol of the love
Bas dono jaldi SE thik ho jaaye
Continue soon
And plz pm me
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Posted: 10 years ago
#9

Originally posted by: syndeyshine00

Hey shrushti

Both chapters are awesome
Kya vo insaan Jo chakri aur bhago ki madad karne wala hai vo patta hai??
Continue soon
Vaise really, mai ajab nai pratap ka dil to cheer hi rakha hai
A symbol of the love
Bas dono jaldi SE thik ho jaaye
Continue soon
And plz pm me


Thank you!! No..woh insaan patta nhi hai..keep guessing! 😉 I'm really sorry for not sending you pm..but next tym..I'll definitely tell u wen I update!😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Swara I just loved the way u have explained the fight
it was awesome
and yes I am waiting for the next part
and waiting to know who the person is who is gonna help tje love bords unite
I ama waiting
do update soon and do continue

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