DEEPS must say that this is one of the best chapters till date of sbh...u have written it out of this world...simply beautiful ..
starting from the first line of chap ..things forbidden often becomes ineffably desirable...how true to core the words r ...u took me to eve and adam ...how the forbidden fruit became desirable for them and how they lost it in front of desires ...
abhey and gayatri proved to be different yet being protective parents...u have portrayed so well the shaky confidence of parents there though they giving preference to their son desires...but same time they r shown so selfless...there was only one demand from their end and that is the smiles for their only asset...only pride and reason of living ,Arnav ...it felt so good to read abhey pov on khushi,indeed she is innocence...and her smile the most beautiful essence of her soul...but still she having very truly whole baggage to herself...very apt discussion that a person who herself is struggling for survival how she is going to become anchor for their son's life ...but still they r keeping their finger cross for best and not only for arnav but i guess for khushi also ...they both though worried but at the same time not said anything bad about her...thats beautiful...it was just concern and care ...the line which is breaking point for me in this whole discussion was...which i guess did the positive trick for abhey even and that is..."u don't want him to struggle without the support of parents like we did..."...i guess this line took the show :)...i was having this feeling that as abhey gayatri themselves loved each other under all the storms and hurricanes...they for sure going to understand the word LOVE and the uncontrollable emotions attached to it :)...
deeps how beautiful writing skills u r having yaar...i am proud of u :)...if there were abhey and gayatri worried for their son...other end u have shown shashi extremely observant and in concern for his daughter...understanding how much she went through whole day...worried about whether people said outside something bad to her...and then best thing which is so good to see in shashi today...he gave her breathing space...parents parents parents...kiya hain ...inn keh bas mien ho tou kabhi aik ansoon bhee na anay dain ap ki ankhon mien :)...poor or rich doesn't matter...cause emotions r from heart and heart only understand one language and that is of LOVE
khushi painful journey of past...this time its more from a wife pov whose soul is stabbed with the bitterness of fake love ...fake concern ...fake care...fake trust ...her whole 6 years of marriage throwing venom on her existance...burning not only her heart but her soul melting too by lava of betrayal here...her introspection ,her search for a moment of purity in those 6 years ...pushing her into dilemma of to be or not to be ...constant fight with inner...its killing to even read ,but wt she is experiencing thats beyond imagination..i can use these words of mine for khushi lonely state here
yet another night with darkness around..yet another sky being moonless tonight...yet another blackness with no luminous stars
searching for them carefully and only clutching worries and pain...hurt and fears
hanging right there instead of bringing grin getting grim in return...
yet another night have to shed tears for every prick around
strange had put myself exhausted to sleep yet some voice hit the elusion with a bang
waking me up from deep slumber...have searched from here to there for peace
again but no sign of moon there...yet again have to stay up rest of the time sorting
answers for uncertainty...yet again have to pluck one by one all worries from there...
from dusk to dawn ...but in the end they hanging again on dim black slate...
out of hold but not out of mind ...tired of its appearance yet again
consoling myself with anticipation...again hoping the next night coming up there
changing this darkness to rich lucent bright...with shining stars ...with happy moon around...
yet still have to discover wt was that voice which put me off from deep trance yet again tonight...
loved the way u have written arnav entry at his place...with charlie being around...lol...he feeling suffocated as her tears and sobs making it difficult for him to breath...and then the next min...that bus ticket which brought the smile back...with the flash back of her words of care and concern for him...haha...she taught pretty cool to dr r how to have bus journey with lil pushes ...lol..
and then came the famous question and its so sweet and awesome reply...deeps its hatkey for me cause the approach is simple yet very deep in meaning :)...absoluelty dr r answer for the innocent khushi there :)...no tarry torch keh lana and being all poetic...excellent writing...👏
wt is love?
love means khushi :)...happiness...in happy times and in sadness and in tears :)...wow...
laugh and world will laugh with u but cry and that one shoulder u having there in that weak moment of urs ,i guess thats for sure is shoulder of special one :)
after understanding fully wt love is from arnav...her words "he never loved me"..that realisation was killing...and after that the past u opened up in front of eyes...that is simply brilliant writing of urs deeps...very painful...karan was brutal criminal...he killed the dreams of a young girl of 19 years...he had stolen all the stars of happiness from her eyes...very painful
deeps i think i am short of words in ur praise here seriously...its awesome to see khushi totally opening up in front of arnav...the way she shared her past...ufff...and the way he heard her all without judging or stopping her...infact he was there throughout...i guess thats the difference in friendship i found between arnav and lavanaya...:)
i loved the way she finally felt light ...and gathered herself from darkness and i found her tigress ready to fight with karan and deshmukh once again :)..her discussion on deshmukh and her trust towards arnav...simply wow...
loved the way u have balanced out the scene with little light moments too...the f**king retard was mind blowing rhyme ...hehehe... it feels to me like a rhyme to ears...lol
that discussion on bus and ticket...stupid and weird...haha... and the end my my u took the heart baby with hug and smile...🤗 and 😊...loved it loved it and simply loved it
after seeing the way she opened up in front of her friend ...the way arnav was there for her ...the sms and smiles exchange ...i am feeling better
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