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Posted: 11 years ago
mindblowing update
loved it.
dont want to comment anything about Panchali.
but loved the description U gave about Karna's raging look towards Draupadi & Uruvi scared to see her husband's eyes.
then the insecurity part.
U brillaintly handled everything.
I can feel Uruvi as well as Karna's pain.He loves her & his family.
but he was bound to make friendship his first priority.
Uruvi expressed her insecurities, but Karna cant do it.He cant expressed his fellings infront of his family naa, thats somehow makes him weak.
Brillaint update Dhivya, again U created magic.
waiting for ur next update, The Dyut Sabha.

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Posted: 11 years ago
thanks a lot my dear readers..
@ madhu!!! u exactly understood the commitments of mitr karn and aaryaputr karn.thanks dear

@ Angarani !! J love ur comments..u notice each and every words I use..thanks..
@ sansi !! darlu ..thanks for ur sweeet comments..I to wonder what made panchali to say those words..she literally taunted dury but i don't want to state it here..even I didn't mentioned what she said in her swayamvar too..u need to wait for two more episodes for dice game..
@ aartii !! thanks aartii darling..yeah uruvi is unsecured ofcourse na..

@ mou baby..ur hug is not enough..
friends!! pls don't expect much for dice game..because uruvi is not present there..so she cannot explain in detail about the game.
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Posted: 11 years ago
I dont want too much details of Dyut Sabha. I just want Karna Uruvi confrontation.
I just want to read a wife reaction who loves & respect her husband so much.

Posted: 11 years ago
Yup no dyut saba for me
Not my cup of tea
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Posted: 11 years ago
PART XX

I felt extremely ticklish.His mild mustache is playing with my neck and his sharp nose is drawing something on my back often.

" arya!! I feel ticklish..enough please stop it"

"what? What was I am doing? I am just riding my horse"

" no!! I know my mischievous husband.What is your plan? You asked me to join you.I thought we were going to some temple.but you stopped all your men outside the woods..you unlocked the cart and took this single horse for both of us.We are travelling travelling n deep ..deeper inside the woods.where are you abducting me arya?"

He chortled gleefully..oh how long I yearned to see this laughter.

"oh my impatient lovely wife.you are made of questions insted of bones and fleshes..Don't you trust your arya?"

" no ! not this suspicious man"

He embraced me from behind entirely inside his arms.He closed hie eyes and whispered." Don't worry I would send you back safely to your home without any damage" He nuzzled my cheeks.

" I don't think so..I am already started destroying..but I was yearning for this arya"

" me too devi!! It's been a hell of time .each and every parts of body is longing for this isolated heavenly time."

I remember the hardest days after Indraprasth visit.I myself created a barrier between me and him.It was the time I took myself to accept the realities.He was also isolated by counting his words spoken to me.Often those messages from hastinapur..his travel to hastinapur.It was very hard days to move with a dense unusual minutes passed by in silence between us.Now his friend seems to be little happy and it is reflecting in his life also.

If my happiness relies on my husband's happiness then it implies my life depends on yuraj's well being.I shook my head and tried to get rid of those thoughts.No this is not the time to give room for bitterness.This is the sweetest moments for which I am craving for.

"Devi! Do you remember our first horse ride in hastinapur"

I closed my eyes and reminisced those days.years rolled back and those beautiful days fell on my heart one by one.How can I forget his first clutch..how he lifted me like a doll..his hot breath..warm embrace..he took me to the gates of heaven but the gates of hastinapur dragged me back .now, after so many years I am travelling to the gates of heaven again.How safe I feel inside his arms.

Suddenly this useless horse stopped moving.He tried to move it but it seemed to be scared and hesitated to step forward.He jumped down and caressed his nose.

"what happened arya?"

" a mud water stream is interrupting our way.my horse is not confident enough to carry us through the stream.so he is hesitating to move.he stretched his arms and asked me to jump down.He grasped my waist and landed me safely.

" this animal is more brilliant than his master" I chuckled

"No doubt! This horse got the brilliancy of his master but the master lost his brilliancy because of his master." He tweaked my ears by biting his teeth.

" oh it's hurting arya"

"my god!! The stream seems to be quite slippery and mess..How can I walk through this ." I puled.

"hold me for support"

Yawkk!! " wont step into this mud"I shrunk my face repulsively.."lift me arya" I cried

"what?? Lifting you"??

"why ?haven't you lifted be before"

" yes! But it was years ago..you was like a creeper on those days..but now.." he giggled at me.

" What now?" I punched on his chest.He stopped my hands and kissed on it

"My beautiful wife I cannot lift you because I need to clutch something for grip"

" What to do now..I will not step into it"I pouted

"well! Come in front of me and face me.Just stand on my feet and grasp me.I would walk your steps but remember you have to grasp me properly"

I became excited.!!I landed my feet on his feet and crossed my arms around his neck like a garland.He slowly stepped into the stream by clutching the tree trunks.I saw him into his eyes.His very close presence..his warm body..his intense ogle..intentionally or unintentionally the rubbing of his nose or lips on my face..The oscillating body which dashes each other for each and every step..The larger he steps with a jerk which makes my bosom to stick to his chest..

"aarya!!what is your plan?? To make me mad"

I asked softly with a husky voice..

"now.you are driving me crazy" he murmured.

"i think we crossed the stream" I chortled and released him from my knot.

"look at there" he pointed out in a direction.I saw a beautiful wooden house on the shores of ganges.The house is very clean and well designed.He hugged me from behind." An isolated house only for you and me.Today is our day.forget everything.now you are the first woman and I am the first man ..we are the onlu human beings in this world now."He dragged me to the backside of the house where the river is caressing the wooden ghats of the house.

"matha Ganga is looking very calm and gracious here.She is walking beautifully with free hands to embrace us"

" oh my husband became a poet now"

"I am going to embrace her" he removed his jewels and uttariya and stepped inside the river.I sat on the ghats and started ogling my most handsome husband.He sunk inside the river and came out with a splash.The water sprinkled from his body drenched me.My husband is smiling at me romantically..His wet hair...his shining armors..the water droplets rolling from his golden body..oh!!uruvi..this is the toughest time for you..he is extremely seductive.

"come on join me my love"

" what ?? me!! No"

Before I refuse..he clutched my arms and pulled me inside the water.I was choked first but soon started floating on his huge and strong arms.He is rejoicing like a child as if it was the first time to take bath in a river.He dipped me..he pulled me..he lifted me..he dropped me..he bounced me..he rotated me..he grasped me..he spread me..he folded me..he stretched me..he bent me..I wonder how I withstood with his enormous exuberance.The ice cold water became hot when it passes through our body.Even the cold Ganga is failed to put down our body fire..He clutched my shoulders and ogled my wet sticky clothes from top to bottom.He lifted me suddenly and rushed into the wooden house.He kicked opened the doors of heaven for me.My femininity got blossomed and started dissolving inside his masculinity.We consumed some hours and some hours consumed us.

The sun is running behind the mountains leaving his delicate rays which was gleaming on his refection inside the water.I sat beside him holding his arms.He pressed a pure kiss of love on my forehead.I rested my head on his shoulders and stuck to him even closer.

"this place is so divine arya"

"Thank you My dear wife"

"for what?? What is this peculiar habit of thanking a wife for being a wife"I showed a fake scowl.

"do you know what makes a man more exhilarated"

I gazed at him

"Ruling and wining his beautiful wife makes him more happy and contended rather than ruling the kingdom and wining the territories." He hit his head on my forehead.

"so this territory is feeling proud to be always under your rule your highness"i said

This magical moments are passing slowly by enjoying some fresh fruits brought by my husband.now I wore his clothes and he mine..I took the role of my husband .I impersonated him and dragged him close as he do with me.I inhaled his neck ans said " aww my sweet wife"

He shied like me.The sounds of our laughter echoed through out the forest.I wish my world to freeze here in this moment.We returned unwillingly from that awesome world.As we reach the place where we left our cart I felt that everything in my life came to an end.I felt like I left all my happiness and peace in that wooden house.Why such feelings are scorching my heart.??why should I feel this is the last happiest moments with my husband?? What a horrible intuition.No ! he is with me right now and will be with be always.I clutched his arms.

Our sudden unexpected entry into the town made our citizens to exhilarate.They stood aside and paid obeisance.but who is there a little girl running with a pot full of milk on her head .She neither bothered about the king nor about others.She was in a hurry but all the milk from her pot was draining out through a small hole.

We both were allured by the behavior of the girl.He stopped the chariot and got down from it.He stopped the little girl and asked where she is rushing to.She said that she is taking milk to his father and he would scold her if she comes late.

" oh my dear child but all your milk has been poured out into the soil" he said

Now, she looked at the pot with a fear and started to weep immediately.

" Alright! Don't cry my child..I would give you another pot full of milk"

" no!! I want my milk back otherwise my father would beat me" she started screaming.

My husband is fond of a daughter.he lifted her and wiped her tears out.

" alright! Now see I would bring your milk back"

He collected the soil in his fist where she poured the milk and started squeezing it.Drop by drop the milk got separated from the soil ..I was awestruck to see my husband's power.but all of a sudden we heard a squeal of a lady which was very loud like a thunder.The wind started blowing heavy..the earth got crackled and a deep voice came out of it

" now listen you rude king!! You squeezed me mercilessly which gave me a hell of pain.I the holy goddess of earth..curse you now.I would open my mouth and engulf your most essential material in the most crucial moments of your life which would lead to your destruction" the thunder voice echoed horribly.i closed my ears and astonished and panicked.my husband's face turned pale.He prostrated immediately on the ground crying " matha!! Matha!! Please forgive me"

But everything got vanished suddenly and a horrible silence prevailed there.

My husband is rushing to his chamber.i cannot cop up with him.I am running behind him.He entered the chambers with a shaky legs and knelt down in front of the orange colored sky at the attic.He downed his head and his face was exhibiting a deep agony.My heart melted for him.I cannot tolerate his pain.What an unexpected bitter ending of this beautiful day!!!I ran to him and took him into my arms.He grasped me tightly and burst into tears.His body is shuddering.I even held him tight to calm down him.

"arya" calm down please"

" how could I calm down ? what was my fault Devi?? I helped a poor girl??What sin I did to get a curse from Bhoomi Devi?He shook me madly.

"you don't know Devi!! I am a cursed human.Why should I born in this world?? Why ?"

Nobody yearned for me! I was an uninvited baby abandoned by my mother .Why didn't I die in the floods of water? Why should I reach a suta house? Why should I longed for my education? Why should i reach Bagwan Parashuram after the rejection by drone?why should I lie to him?Why should i get a curse from my beloved Guru?"

What is he saying ?? a curse from parashuram!!

" why should I lend my lap to guru on that day? Why should that creature bite me? Why shouldn't I move my thighs? Why should I tolerate the hell of pain which broke my identity?"

He lost all his words and raped on the ground with a roar

"arya!! What are you saying?? Did you lied to your Guru??"

"yes I did!! What do you expect from an adolescent boy who's passion was going on suppressed by all"

"Arya" I cupid his face.."devi"

" I loved my guru more than my father.I earned his love and affection but but ..he would have cursed me to death instead of cursing me that i would forget what I learnt from him.All my efforts and hard works were futile.and and i lost my guru's faith on me."He slapped on his face by his both the hands.I stopped him.The words broke its barrier and came out with a force.

"It was he who identified me as a ksatriya that day.If it is true then why should he curse me? Being a guru of bheeshma how could he curse me.What was my fault alone? And today ..today..what harm I did to Bhoomi devi?? What made her to curse me? I hate myself to the core..What kind of human being I am?"

He beat himself on his chest.I grasped him completely.He dug his head in my chest and started weeping like a baby.I am speechless and couldn't realize how to console him.My hands are patting his head..Two big curses..that too from Parasuram and bhoomadevi..how cruel!! I definitely get some reasons for my bad intuitions today.my body is shivering in fear.A huge monster of fear opened it's wide mouth and engulfed me completely.Bagwan parashuram is said to be the incarnation of lord Vishnu.and I heard the voice of Bhoomi devi.Why should these two Gods curse my husband without a meaning? What would be the reason? Why they choose my husband as a prey? Prey for what? What is that crucial moment?? Destruction?? My God!! Matha Gowri !!! what else you are having for me??his sobbing is definitely contagious which made me to sob.Surya dev hide himself completely leaving the darkness to all over the world watching the terrible sobbing of a husband and wife.

The very next day we received the invitation of grand inauguration ceremony for samrat yudishtir and pandavas along with their wife organized by kauravas.

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Edited by dhivyakrish31 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
So an update on curses... What a tough time after such blissfull moments!😭
He did nt deserve this!!!!
Posted: 11 years ago
Oh my firstly I thought that it's totally a romantic piece no agony no curses i literally thought a few times that why did dhivya di put a picture of weeping karn at all this is a merry piece husband wife romancing only for a tad bit... Only to discover that happiness can nevertheless stay with him just like...me.

I want to quote the first line itself it's beauty of the moment I can readily imagine it ... felt extremely ticklish.His mild mustache is playing with my neck and his sharp nose is drawing something on my back often.


My feminity got blossomed and started dissolving inside his masculinity...
How did you got the inspiration to write this ... Hmm... Extremely beautiful di...

Then the heel over heel dance
His very close presence..his warm body..his intense ogle..intentionally or unintentionally the rubbing of his nose or lips on my face..The oscillating body which dashes each other for each and every step..The larger he steps with a jerk which makes my bosom to stick to his chest..

Love in the air ...

Then the way karn says urivi ur made of questions rather than of flesh and bones lol

Then the way he teases her you are not the tender creeper before the marriage .i can't hold ya...and she slaps him hard on his chest
This reallyreminds of my mom and dad ... Haha how dad used to tease mom the same way sorry posting my weirdo prsnl life here but i couldn't help but remember :'(

Back to my view... Then the tranquility of joyous moments of their lives

I read that bhoomi debi folklore of south at wikipedia... Really nice installation of this at right time

But why does everyone curse him for noble deeds i mean he was just helping the child from her parents wrath i mean for no reason whatsoever he is punished again and again...

Then this karn is a lityle emotional please don't make him cry again and again as i really imagine aham and also get drift away by tears no no let him be like this cute and sensitive

As my karn the one in my ff is all mr. Say his mind angrt young man in the dyut sabha pls dont let him use that word as the real karn nvr used that stupid word for draupdi
But its ur ff so you do what you like di
sometimes My bro says that what's going up u r crying out while seeing ur mobile you alright ... I say just reading karn ...

Lovely as always this time it was more romantic then ever since their honeymoon lol

Nice work btw di do me a favor di i left that grup for now due to exams i ll rejoin later and i deactivated my accnt for 10 days so i d be back by 12 so tell ruhi and others if they ask...:)

Well I am so greedy i ignored the rest of pms to read after exams it's ur pm i cud nvr ignore i failed to res it and comment first sorry ...

Love ya
Jyotsna
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Posted: 11 years ago
thanku sansi darlu..jyo darling and mou dear..
jyo what u r crying by seeing ur mobile..?? ur bro may suspect u then lol
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wonderful KaDu update Dhivii dear 👏⭐️ 🤗

You wonderfully described the anger of Karn & esp. Dury when Panchali spoke the insulting words She just poured more fuel to the raging fire. Liked the way Uruvi handled her composure when she faced Panchali again.

Brilliant plot of telling the back story through Karn's words. Uruvi could feel the depth of Karn's emotions and his friendship with Dury.
And you mentioned Karn's oath of not washing his feet by any other person...I almost forgot that one...You have nicely blended this part & also Karn-Bhanu-Dury incident 😃
Uruvi was bound to feel jealous from her husband's devotion towards his bestie 😆

Very Nice Dhivii Darlu... 😳

Edited by ...Hemangi - 11 years ago

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