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Posted: 10 years ago
#71
Hi all well finger cross i write first part hell nervous hope u all like it
This is pooja concept n i write this if she get time she also write on this story
Waiting for your response please comment n like
Well every one know my english so don't mind n avoid grammar mistake
Advance sorry

Part 1



After nikaah Geet mother came n remove her veil from her face n now everyone can meet her (well in my house) before nikaah no one allowed met with dulhan so I took this here too
Maan is all the time silent wanting to run from there as he can't bear the site his eyes searching one person only who hide herself from crowd as she didn't want some-one saw her n mock her
After some time Maan mother came to Geet mother n said her about raksati aka vidai
Geet's mother: ji
She went near Geet, caress her head all her family came n hug her she also crying for leaving them... Geet's bro tied sehra around her head (yeh ritual mere ghar hota hai vidai k time dulhan ko rose made sehra wear karte hai jo bhut heavy hota hai)
Geet came from her house n sat in car beside Maan she crying continuously
Maan also sat beside her his mother sat in front seat n they leave for km
Only one person is silently watching everything... It is Horam!!! Her life changed tonight she have to share her love now will she able to see all that with her eyes...?? Some-one came n held her hand she saw the person n smile a little...
They move from there too...
Here in car...
Maan closed his eyes as don't want to go km... he wants to go some other place where no one force him, his life changed and he hated the fact that he force to do this marriage which he didn't want to do... he love his wife no matter what... he felt pain ,anger and frustration.
They reached km Maan came out from car n stormed inside leaving Geet n his mother
His mother shook her head n help Geet to came out from car n went inside (no gerhaperwash in us so direct inside)
She made Geet to sit on sofa remove her shera n ordered some-one to bring juice or water for her
Geet is fearing to her new life new surroundings she is like a scared kitten
Maan's chachi: Geet beta hum aap ko kha nahi jayenge jo aap itna dari hoi hai
Geet: ji
She confuse scared
Maan's mother: rehne do sultana new place hai toh nervous toh hogi. Annie take her to Maan's room
Annie: but mom...
She try to refuse
But her mom glare her she unwillingly took Geet to Maan room
Here Horam who came inside from back door went straight to her room but when she open get shock whole room decorated she stun and slowly understands that now this room is not hers...
She came inside slowly n glance the room sadly... in this room she lived with her Maan, her each n every happiness in this room now belong to some-one else..!!!
She came close to bed star the decorated bed sadly ...
Maan also came to room, he too got shock... first the decorated room and second Horam standing there.
He saw her n came close to her she feel him n compose herself turn his side n give him smile which did not reach her eyes
Maan: what happen Horam?
Horam: nothing Maan
She pretends to be normal
Maan: hmmm you here in this room he asked
Horam stared him did not say any thing
Maan: ohh i mean you left the room so how you came here he taunt at her
Horam: hmmm i came to take something which left
She said with sadness in her voice
Maan: ohh did you take it
Horom: hmmm
Maan: so are you happy today i complete your wish and today i got married again n this room is again decorate for my newly-wed wife so now you happy na...??
He said in mocking tone
Horam: yap i am so happy Maan now my wish will soon come true...
She answer him to control herself n smile
Maan: yaa i can see how much you happy
Again mocking her
Horam: Maan i should leave now your wife will come soon
She said n try to leave but Maan stop her
Maan: then who u are Horam?
Horam: Maan please don't do this i can't take it any more please...
Maan: what i did hor I was just asking who are you to me..? Did i say anything wrong..?
Horam push him n run from there to her new room Maan also follow her
She came to her n ley down cried hard her head is hide in pillow Maan came to her saw her crying he also felt pain but she was the one who force him to marry again now both in pain and another person will suffer too...
Maan: why Horam... why you came here...? You don't want to meet my new wife...?? You did not meet her yet... i must say she is beautiful... And I should introduce you both after all both are my wife
He said in gritting teeth
Horam: Maan please jao yaha say i can't take nahi hoga mujse please...
Maan sat on bed n said
Maan: Horam you are the one who want this now you are crying
Horam at once get up n hug him cried hard Maan also hug her back
Horam: mujhse nahi hoga Maan i can't share you... I love u a lot... i can't Maan...
She said n cried in his arms
Maan: then why did you force me hor... I will... I...
He left his sentence in mid close his eyes
Horam in hug Maan: aaj mat jao... mere pas ruk jao please...
She plead him
Both lay down n hug each other try to console each other

To be continued...😉


Ouch ouch ouch yar sandles toh mat maro och i just want to show Horam side yar ouch
No wife can bare her hubby with other na so just want to describe it ab if you are maried will you accept this opsss galat line boli sorry all married reader your hubby remain your always so chill
Character skech bad mein le lena woh kiya hai na yeh mujko chain nahi lena de raha hai
This is part which only my imagination sorry for any msitake
Me chali warna you all give me round of sandlas again but pleade give match wali it will use full na


NOTE
part 1 by Fariya...
Posted and Proof-read by Pooja
do leave ur feedbacks plz...😊

IMP: we are not able decide on the title... please suggest if you have something in your mind... Thank you😊


Edited by PariMeet- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#72
first comment mera...😛

yaar fariya i loved it...

just perfect...

i wanted something like this only... complicated sa,...

kahi tu mere dil ki baat toh nahi sunn leti na🤔


just loved the way u did part 1.. way to go gal... proud of u meri behna😛


abb first like tu de de 😆
Edited by PariMeet- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#73
kya baat hai..fariya and pooja ka combination toh..solid hai..!!!

okay..maan is married...and geet is his 2nd wife...ummm..interesting...great..!!!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#74
👍🏼 done now me going sure khao gi chapal from all is liya byee
koi mare na mare pie or vani di zaror mare gye 🤢
haq banta hai unka after all mein ani phir sr roka
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Posted: 10 years ago
#75
Awesome update, Dil khush hua, update padke, Maan married geet because of horam,
How maaneet love will proceed??? me started getting ideas😆

Kya sauthan ki war hogi.. geet vs horam , just thinking.🤔

Continue soon 👏👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
#76
Yaar I cried for horam ... yaa I am not typical fan who can't tzke a story as story so no Sandlas from me for sure ...
Horam or Geet ... today my eye turned wet for a woman
Who lost her everything just for other happiness
Might be this is story and Geet is als innocent
Now all 3 is going to suffer ...
I don't know what u both planned for further
But today I feel for horam
And surely I can't able to hate her in future too
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Posted: 10 years ago
#77
dear interesting prologue but nameless name kya hai ff ka
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Posted: 10 years ago
#78
For title maybe ...

Do phool

Kurbaani


This is only come into my mind
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Posted: 10 years ago
#79
Nice start
Maan is already married n geet is his second wife..
What's the reason for second marriage?..maan is not happy with this marriage...
interesting
continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
#80
Asum prologue & lvd the first part.
Update soon

Waiting.

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