Entwined to Eternity;Update on page 74 (3rd Dec) - Page 37

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Posted: 10 years ago

Thank u dear


Thanks Foram


Thanks buddy

Originally posted by: premap

Hmmm! As enchanting as ever. Looking forward for next update. Their feelings are like 'telepathy '. Enjoying myself ,immensely! Tks.


Thank u for liking it.. Will try to update soon.


Originally posted by: niru04

Nice update.prem nd kalpi frndship lovely.wen wil romi knw rachu nd rani are same.waiting update soon


Thank u dear.. Romi will take some time to know about it as i want him to fall for Rach first.

Originally posted by: Cinderella81

Lovely update and beautiful thoughts expressed in poetic way it so nice.


Thank u dear.. The poem credit goes to Priya aka Priya_Remix.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: shonali164


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amazing update vishu,\\sad to see kalpi is getting emotional. but still she is fighting with her fate n ready to be died with her frnds hand for giving ppl justice frm drugs.

here romi is attracted to rach very badly that is total hesitate to even speak about har death or his motive to kjill her.
when he comes to kinw about rach is his rani his childhood frnd then it he cant even iamagine to kill her.

both are talking to moon is so touching like that moon is passing their message to each other.
evn most of tym i talk to moon n i really feel moon pass my msg to respective person.

premna as usual awsm convo. both are understand each other very keenly. both are respecting their frndship n not thinking other than this. premna knw wat kamla want still they are understanding n accepting their frndship hw thay want.

rach finally understand her feeling for romi, she accepted she attracting towards him n i thing thats first step of love.

romi want to call her nut he also nt able to understand to whom he will listen mind or brain. he too stuck in btwn them.
hope he will call her.

as usual u r fabulous vishu.


Thank u Shona... Rach is the type of person who doesn't share her pain with anyone n alone trying to fight all the odds. She has realized her attraction for Romi but she knows that it's not love n just infatuation.

Romi on the other side is still in denial mode and is going to have tough time in accepting it. First he has to accept that he has heart.

Glad u like PremNa..I want to show the true fshp thru them n how he falling in love with criminal affets the relationship they have for each other.

Thanks once again swtheart.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: chahat4u

Kalpi understanding her feelings for her friend whom she didn't even remember a few days back; and then trying to coming to terms, trying to believe that her once best friend can actually kill her was fabulous. Truly a tough time for her. I am Prem a lot, I guess he is the perfect friend anyone would want, who can wait for two years and remember his friend's wish for her desired gift.

Excited and happy that Rachana has finally accepted her feelings for Romi, whereas Romi is still fighting them. Also the way you showed both Romi & Rachana remembering their childhood friend simultaneously was superb. 😃👏 Romi and rachu both want to talk to each other, and Romi is once again successful in over ruling his heart. Waiting for Romi to realise that Rachana is his same childhood friend Rani, and the tattoo girl. 😃 Superb update once again. Loving it very much. n dear Poem was superb...I loved it. 😃❤️😊


Thank u dear.. M glad u liked it.. i too love Prem a lot n m happy tht u r liking him here.
Romi believes that he doesn't have heart and only attached to one person in whole world i.e. Rani... so first he needs to accept that he has heart n Rach is coming closer to him than only he will be able to accept his feelings for her.

Gonna reveal that tattoo thing soon.

Poem credit to Priya_Remix. Thanks from her behalf. N thank u once again for making me super happy by ur comments.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: ...Natasha...

Kalpi trying to understand her long lost friend was nice
I like that she is still concern about him on how he will feel when he come to know who she really is...
Both staring at the moon and questioning it as if they are speaking to each other was awesome. It's like they have a telepathy :)
Prem and Rachu connection is amazing, anyone will be lucky to have a friend like them
Oh gosh! Romi debating on whether to call Rachu or not is kinda funny lol
Especially the battle between his brain and heart lol
Fanstatic update, beautifully written chapter


Thanks Natasha... m glad u liked it. Rach and Romi have a real telepathy.😉

Happy that u liked PremNa.

Thank u so much once again.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Sorry ya vish I replied so late..was busy in off work n my kids were also sick... Ne ways commin back to d story it's as usual too good... Update soon dear.
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Originally posted by: Rubz1234

Sorry ya vish I replied so late..was busy in off work n my kids were also sick... Ne ways commin back to d story it's as usual too good... Update soon dear.


No need to say sorry sweetheart.. Thank u for liking it.

Hope ur kids are well now. May god blesses them.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Fabulous update n beautiful poem written by u n priya...I m fan of ur poems dear👏
Loved d way to portrayed both rachu n romi's emotion while rembering der childhood...It was really painful for rachu to believe dat her best frnd can kill her
Romi trying to sketch rani's pic but managed to draw her eyes...guess he will soon cum to knw abt rani n rachu r same from sketches
Both talking to moon was really touching ...loved d way u shw der telepathy in dis ff
premna convo was nice...glad they share a platonic frndship
Romi debating where to call or not was funny
Eager to read ragna convo in next part
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Originally posted by: rani214

Fabulous update n beautiful poem written by u n priya...I m fan of ur poems dear👏

Loved d way to portrayed both rachu n romi's emotion while rembering der childhood...It was really painful for rachu to believe dat her best frnd can kill her
Romi trying to sketch rani's pic but managed to draw her eyes...guess he will soon cum to knw abt rani n rachu r same from sketches
Both talking to moon was really touching ...loved d way u shw der telepathy in dis ff
premna convo was nice...glad they share a platonic frndship
Romi debating where to call or not was funny
Eager to read ragna convo in next part


Thanks Rani.. This time the poem was solely written by Priya.. n thank u for liking my poems as well but Priya gave me a reality check.. i need to improve a lot.😉

Thank u for liking it. I will try to update soon.. Though I know i am already late but due to some issues I was not able to update yesterday.. hope i will be able to update it either tonight or tomorrow.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
Hello guys.. M almost habitual of saying sorry for the late updates.. but u know the reason very well.
I ma having severe headache today which has affected my update n to be true I do not know what I have written. Even the poem i have wrote in less than 5 minutes.. so do not have high hopes from it.
Sorry for all the mistakes but i do not have strength to proof read it. I am not sending pm to anyone as I am planning to update my other story as well and will pm after that.

Rach is fretting on herself for not taking Romi's mobile number.. She is confuse whether she should call at Rehab for him or not.. She stops herself from calling as she doesn't want to overburden herself with superfluous questions of receptionist and the rehab members. "Enough Rachana... Just now u accepted that u r attracted to him but no need to behave like a love struck teenager... It's just a infatuation n u need to control urself till u know his details." She scolded herself.

Romi is still fiddling with his mobile.. his heart has convinced him to dial the number but he is not able to muster the courage.. Finally he dials the number.. it starts connecting.. in haste he disconnects it again, unknown of the fact that it got connected and the anxious Rach has already noticed the smallest miss call of the world. "Enough of this stupidity Romi.. ur one wrong step might be a failure to ur mission. She might not like this gesture of urs and can feel angry on u." He too scolded himself.

Rach looks at the number and unknowingly mumbles, "Romi". "Why will he call me?? N how can I say that this is Romi's number?? I am a reporter and gets numerous calls from unknown numbers.. this can be one of my informer." She tried to argue.. "No.. it's Romi's number.. he might be thinking about me.. May be he is also attracted towards me the way I m.. No.. he can't!! But what if he is..Whatever!! It's Romi number only." Finally she rested the argument with the conclusion that this is Romi's number.

Romi looks at her number once again with the helplessness.. "Ok, don't call but u can msg her, I am sure she won't mind it." His heart tried for one last time.. Without giving the second thought to it.. he starts typing the message.. "Hello Rachana.. how r u.. I hope every thing is fine...Romi this side."

"No.. this sounds very formal" he deletes the msg and retypes..

"Hi.. Romi here" But what if she doesn't reply.. He thought and deletes the message once again and retypes.. "Hi" and sends it thinking "if she won't reply than I will change the sim and won't let her know that it was me other side."

Rach who was about to dial his number receives his msg.. she reads "Hi" and wonders, "Just a hi.. no mention of the identity.. I am sure it's Mr. Shy Romi only. He speaks so less that it's visible in his text as well."

"Hi Romi.. how r u??" She replied..

"How she got my number, Is she keeping an eye on me?? Does she knows the purpose of my stay in this rehab...No.. she can't!! I am the most secretive member of baba's gang n no one knows about me... I have to stop suspecting every little thing." He tried to convince himself and starts typing whatever comes to his mind.

"How do u know it's me?? Btw m fine."

"I just knew it.. don't ask how!!"

"How r u??"

"Don't know... M confuse!!"

"Why?? What happened?"

"Don't know how to explain... U will laugh on me"

"No.. I won't."

"Sometimes I find it difficult to express my feeling in words.. I am falling short of words."

"Don't think just say those words which comes to ur mind.."

"There is someone whom I feel akin to me.. but actually he is a stranger.. I do not know anything about him... Not even his face or name... just a photo!! Still I feel as if he is my best frn who can never harm me.. have u ever feel connected to someone like this??"

He remembers Rani on reading this.. how he just has her memories of childhood but doesn't know her current look or name..

"No.. I do not feel connected to a complete stranger but ya too an extent, to some old memories." He replied.

"N what If u come to know that the old memory which was a pleasant past can be a dangerous future? What if the dearest person of past becomes ur present enemy??"

Romi doesn't know what to reply.. the thought of Rani not remembering him has shivered him so many times n here she is asking what if she becomes his enemy.

"No idea.. I might not be able to take it. But still I have full trust on her that she won't hurt me in any way. " He replies.

"The same trust I have on someone" She replied.

"😊" He just sends a smiley as reply as he doesn't know wht to say more.. he himself is confuse about the chat happening between them as till now he has not chatted with anyone like this.. It's Rachana's effect that he has managed to switch off his brain and replying honestly.

"So u know what smile means... I thought I had to teach u smiling as well." She replied on getting the smiley from the person who had never passed a single smile to her.

He dint reply.. as he can't tell her that his smile is being adopted by someone in the childhood only. On not getting reply, she realizes that she asked something which she should not have said and sends another msg, "How was the day?? Missed someone special??" She wanted to write "me" instead of "special" but dint had courage to ask it directly.

Romi types.. "yes" but deletes it as he doesn't want to face the next question who is someone special.. He typed "No" but again deleted it saying it might give an impression that he dint miss her.. He stares at the screen while thinking how to give an ambiguous answer.

Rach is looking at her mobile screen impatiently.. Prem who has arrived there with a tab in his hand notices the endearing smile on her face and enters the room without making noise and stands beside her.. She is constantly checking her message box for reply.. he tickles her and she drops her mobile on the bed while giggling... Unknowingly it dials Romi's number... and it starts ringing.. He receives the call and says "Hello" but instead of reply all he can hear is Rach's giggles and few words like.. "Stop it Prem.. I won't leave u... Stop it now",mixed with her giggles. Romi feels uneasiness on hearing such voices.. unable to understand what is happening at other end.. Finally agitated he disconnects the call and switches of the cell saying, "Why do I care... Let her do whatever she is doing."

Prem finally stops tickling her and tired both lies on the bed while their legs hanging down from the bed and eyes staring at roof.

"So chatting with ur Romi." Prem asked her.

"Yes... but u disturbed me... Let me check his reply." She checked her phone but gets disappointed on not getting reply. "I guess he slept while chatting...Neways why u came here??" She asked.

Prem shows her the their childhood photograph with Adi and her parents.. She is overwhelmed on seeing this gesture of hers... he tells her how he got them in old family album and scanned all to show her.. She transfers the images in her mobile and they reminisces their childhood memories till late.

Romi on the other hand is having sleepless night after hearing the camaraderie of Rach with the guy whom she was calling Prem.. innumerous times he has tried to convince himself that she is free to do anything in her life but still his anger was flaring with each passing second.. "Who he the guy was... Was he her boyfriend?? He can be just a good friend.. but look at the time...It's too late to hang out with guys.. Are they staying together?? But in her poem she has written that she is waiting for someone special.. I might be an old poem.." He argued with himself and starts going through the photocopy of her diary and reads the poem one poem..

"Berang thi yeh zindgani meri

Wo mile toh rang her pal mein bhar gaye

Socha na tha naseeb mein hai khushi apne

Par sang unke adhure sapne pure ho gaye

Aye wo meri zindagi mein khuda banke

Pata na chala kab wo begane se apane ho gaye

Pyarr itna mila mujhe is jahaan mein

ke tanhai ke wo din ab puraane ho gaye."


A tear rolled down his eyes.. he wiped it harshly in anger and throws the paper in the dustbin.. Finally pulls the sheet and closes his eyes thinking Kalpi has written that poem for her boyfriend.. unknown to the fact that she had written it while remembering her parents and imagining her life in orphanage.

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Two days later

Prem and Rach has arrived Mumbai in his car.. Kalpi requests prem to take her directly to the hospital as she is missing Adi a lot. Prem complies and takes her to the hospital.. Kalpi rushes to meet Adi and enters his room. He hugs her and tells all the good things that happened in last 2 days.. She chatted with him for long while Prem observes them from far.. A tears escaped his eye on remembering the moments he spent with Adi.. Adi was like a brother to him.. N Adi too used to admire him and his Prem bhaiya was his ideal.. Prem meets doctor to discuss something with her and comes back to tell Kalpi happily. Kalpi looks at happy Prem and teases.. "Look Adi.. I think ur Prem bhaiya liked ur doctor very much."

"yeah.. she is pretty but married... Anyways, I have a birthday gift for Adi." He said happily.

"What" She asked.

"We are taking him home.. on his birthday which is after 2 days.. I have taken doctor's permission n u r not saying no this time." He said.

"But u know.. I can't keep him at home..it's about his safety else I would have taken him back last year only.. The people who want to harm me can harm him as well." She said worriedly.

"Don't worry.. SP of mumbai is with u. his security is now my responsibility and u all are shifting to SP bunglow for few days.. " he ordered.

"I think u r correct... My life is on stake already but I can't take risk with their life.. Granny n Adi will shift to ur house but I will stay at mine with Bruno. I will come to stay at ur place on weekends but this time I really need to stay at my place to find the details of this drug racket asap. "

"U r still worried about that drug racket.. What about ur life??"

"U know Prem.. it is important for me. This is for Adi. Please do not stop me. I promise I will take all safety measures and will follow all ur instructions but don't force me."

"Ok.. as u wish. Now let's go and meet Granny. I am dying to eat her allu parathas. And Adi dude... I will eat ur share as well." Prem said while tracing fingers in Adi's long hairs which has become longer than usual.

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Instead of going home, Kalpi stops Prem at rehab and tells him to go home while she will reach in half hour. Prem smiles on realizing that Kalpi wants to meet Romi.. kalpi blushes on seeing the teasing smile on his face.. But it's true that she is missing Romi and more than that she is worried about him as he has not msged him after that sms convo n neither replied to her msgs... She dint call him coz of presence Kamla/Vitthal around her almost all the time. They come out of the car... Prem tells her that he might not be able to meet her today as he has to arrange his house.. Though it's not new for him as his father only left it but still it was used by some other SP for last one month and they are handing him it today only. Kalpi hugs him and says good bye to him.. he whispers in her ears.. "So u r in so hurry to shoo me away. " She hits him in the stomach and he leaves the place.. Romi who was watching all this from the window was visibly jealous... The whispering looked like a kiss to his eyes which was ablaze with anger... He scans Kalpi from top to bottom.. The white tank top which was hardly covering her shoulders n showing her navel.. The denim shorts which was giving her the sexy look. and the jacket wrapped around her waist.. On any other day he would have mesmerized by her bombshell look but today he was disgusted on her. "See the clothes she is wearing and the way she was hugging and kissing him... he is boyfriend for sure. Even Maya and Sammy doesn't behave like this in public.. Though they have feelings for each other.. " He said in anger and closed the window.

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P.s. : Once again ignore the mistakes.. as i am not reading it again.

Regards
Vish
Edited by fairylover - 10 years ago
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me first...
wonderful update...so romi is jealous...

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