Entwined to Eternity;Update on page 74 (3rd Dec) - Page 8

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Posted: 11 years ago
#71

Originally posted by: vasishna


Yeahhh I'm stalkng u to comment first..🤣😉


O.o Stalker caught.. But this is harmless n sweet stalker. 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#72

Originally posted by: rani214

Interesting concept n amazing update

Really happy u named her rachana instead of kalpi
Raghav already mesmerized by beauty of unknown girl n feel for her
Eager to read more ...update soon n pm m too 😃



Thank u dear... I wrote it while imagining Rach n so thought to use her name instead of Kalpi.😊

Will try to update soon n will pm for sure.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#73

Originally posted by: chahat4u

wow...this is different. loved it so much! 😃👏😃 do update soon please. ⭐️


Thanks Charu.. M glad u liked it. Will try to update as soon as possible.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#74

Originally posted by: Mihika

new story ...marvellous 👏 sammy bura anyways koi baat nahi change toh banta hi hai 😆


Ohh Mihi darling... Welcome back after a week.. missed u.🤗

Thank u btw. I thought to give Sammy something interesting than just standing with Raghav as friend and being love guru.😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: fairylover


O.o Stalker caught.. But this is harmless n sweet stalker. 😆


Heheheh.. I am..😳😳😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
#76
Omg I'm in love with this story !!!!!!
Plz udate soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: prishna_fan

Omg I'm in love with this story !!!!!!

Plz udate soon


Thank u dear.

Will try to update today.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#78
Holla guys.. Finally completed 2nd chapter. Though I have written it yesterday but was doubtful about it coz I tried to insert some poem in it n I know I suck at poems but this idea came from NBT where they included Mohan's nazm and I liked it very well. So plz tell me whether I should include such lines or stop torturing u with it. Sorry for the mistakes. Enjoy the update.

Romi is in deep sleep and dreaming of two little kids playing together...The younger girl is of 4 years while boy of 7 years.. They tells best friend to each other and smiles sweetly when suddenly someone holds the hand of girl and drags her from there.. Boy screams "No.. plz do not take her.. She is my best friend" and runs after them but the girl disappears in the car. The boy yells "Rani". Romi gets up sweaty and looks at the old photograph he always keep in his pocket.. His cell rings.. It's his informer on the other side.


Informer : Romi bhai.. I have got the information about that girl Rachana... Sending u her address by sms.. Her room is in the 2nd balcony.. but beware.. She has a dog in her house..


Romi hangs the call and gets ready to go to Rachana's house.. Though John has some other plans for Rachana but something inside Romi is forcing him to go to her house.. He wears his blue jeans with checked shirt and a monkey cap to hide his face.. His mobiles beeps and he leaves the place to reach her house... On the way he takes some biscuits for her dog and spreads some sleeping powder on them... He reaches the place and looks at the guard of society.. He somehow manages to enter without getting notice.. He climbs first balcony.. Her dog comes out barking.. He throws biscuit towards him... dog eats it and sleeps within seconds.. he than goes to 2nd balcony and looks at the closed glass door.. he takes out a big magnet and open the bolt using it.. Slowly he enters the room.. All room is blue due to the blue night bulb.. Rachu is sleeping wearing a sleeveless night suit.. Mickey's print on her top.. he looks at her tiny body lying on the big bed.. Some unknown force attracts him towards her.. Her face was glowing in light... hair bangs coming on her face is causing trouble in his view.. He removes them softly...She smiles in the sleep and says "Bruno stop it.. Let me sleep.."..He takes his hand back and Rachu again sleeps with a smile. He is mesmerized by her beauty.. He wonders does he smiles too while sleeping and looks at the mirror placed in the room.. He tries to smile but fails and realizes that he has never smiled in his life.. He looks around the room.. The walls were full of Tendulkar's photos... He goes to her computer table where she has pasted her bucket list.. he doesn't care to read it but a map catches his attraction.. She has marked various places in it.. he wonders why they are marked like this but than avoids it thinking he is not here to know about this girl but to take some information.. He flips her few notebooks but finds nothing.. He thinks to start her computer but thinks otherwise at it's sound may wake her up and their mission will fail.. He was about to leave when one diary catches his attraction.. It was fully colorful and decorated with various stars.. He opens it but till than Rachu moves a bit.. he leaves her room with the diary.. Once his mind scolds him for stealing it but he convinces himself saying "I am not taking it for some personal interest.. We may get some important information from it". He takes bigger steps towards his home.. He doesn't know whether it's the fear of getting caught or eagerness to read the diary that are responsible for his speed.


He was about to open the door when he sees maya sitting outside his home.. Maya is Sammy's best friend and Romi's partner in crime.. She is hacker and helps Romi in retrieving data from computers.. Romi and Maya doesn't share any cordial relationship.. The only feelings Romi has in his heart is hate for the world and gratitude for John and Sammy. He is bearing Maya just coz of them. Maya has taught him some hacking but he is still not expert in it. She looks at Romi and asks him where he was.. Romi hides the diary and replies, "that's none of ur business... Tell me what detail u got about our next target.. That girl.. what her name is..". He clearly remembers her name but pretends as if he doesn't care about her..


Maya : "Rachana... Her name is rachana.. but how will u remember her name..If u had heart u would have fallen for her eyes but I know how heartless u r.."


Romi : "Right.. I am heartless... so u better stay away from me else I won't mind cutting u into pieces.. now cut the crap and tell me what u got.."


Maya : "Nothing much.. He pc is highly protected, I tried accessing it but failed. Any ways I have accessed her email id and facebook profile.. Nothing much important... Few pics of her with her granny n one more thing I got from her FB messages... She is a part of some rehab center named "Zindagi". I think that will be helpful for u.. Neways I have given all information to John sir and he has called u to meet him tomorrow. He will tell u the plan to kill her."


Romi nods in yes.. Maya leaves from there after giving her lappy to him. Romi looks at her FB pics with some uneasiness. It's not the first time he is going to kill someone.. But something is different this time.. He is not understanding his emotions but than justifies himself saying till now he has only killed goons and he not feeling good for killing any innocent person.He wishes to take out information without killing her but he knows that he has to kill her.


He shuts the laptop and looks at the diary which he had hid under his shirt.. He reads first page..


"Dil ko kisi ki aas hai

Har lamha koi pass hai

Kabhi hoton pe hasi ban kar

kabhi ankho mein nami ban kar

Kon hai wo nahi janti mein

par uske hone ka ehsas hai

wo jo chahega mujhe chahat se jyda

Aur manega mujhe rab se jyda

Pata nahi wo kaha hai..

Par hai yakin k usey bhi mera intezaar hai"


Romis shuts the diary on realizing that she has written her feelings inside it. He wishes she gets her love before he kills her. He feels guilty on stealing this diary which she uses to jot down her feelings and decides to keep it back tomorrow when she will go out.


Regards
Vish
Edited by fairylover - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#79
Yaar u always mesmerise me by ur imagination and story loved reading it.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wonderful. Will give detailed comment later
Edited by ragna_luv - 11 years ago

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