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Posted: 11 years ago

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shruti

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Posted: 11 years ago

ahem ahem finally madam is here...

1.5 hour late

UNRES

Finally my spo has became a writer .

o. s on such a beautiful topic, i always wonder how people get idea of writng something while listening any songs.

and pooja my dear friend you have done really gud job..

about JI ...it looked cute first ,then in middle it became irrtating then in last line it looked most beautiful line in world.

u choose a sensitive topic and dealt it very well.

tu itni serious kab se ho gyi?? zarur xams ka asar hoga..

but i thought arnav's confession was little early, but i was happy with khushi thoughts , she loves him or not she didnt knew but she also needs him .

arnav thoguht she is more dangeruous than drugs and alcohol , coz she was his medicine..

P.S- about 2nd part...hmm tujhe toh pata hi h kya sochti hoon main!!!

dubara likhna parega kya?😈

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tanu3579

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Posted: 11 years ago

let me read it a few more times n thn get bak...

fr nw... serious topic, handled very well :) n quite a different way to see thgs too :)

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Hetal

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Posted: 11 years ago

Long RES. Ji.

Edited ji.

Lovely OS,
An innocent soul who never spoke Jhooth started to speak to save him,
Loved the way she talked to him and she also shouted on him...
So it was natural for him to fall in love with this PARI who smelled like his mother,
The first kiss and then she was ready to sacrifice her life to help him...

Very beautifully written JI,
I loved it JI,
With these JIes...it has a unique color Ji.

WANT SECOND PART OF THIS OS JI.
I HOPE YOU WILL FULFILL MY WISH ...BY CONVERTING THIS OS IN TO TS.

LOTS OF LOVE MY SPHOO.
TAKE CARE.

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-Zesty-

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Posted: 11 years ago

Will unres tomorrow :)

----Edited-----

Wow, Pooja!! That was too good..

I really really liked this OS. You know I like OS where a whole story is told and needless to say I loved this one..

Using Ji at the end of every sentence😆 Yes! That sounds really sweet and cute. I also have my relatives which use this accent and I love how sweet it sounds.. Na bhi bolte hai to aisa lagta hai ki ha bol rahe hai ...

I loved this sweet and kind hearted Khushi. It was so sweet of her to help a completed stranger, whom she doesnt know but she knows that he needs her help and she is ready to help him..

I loved their conversation..Yes it looked liked Khushi was consoling a 5 year old not ASR.

Arnav's emotions was so beautifully portrayed. I loved how he took the hand extended towards him. Its easy to throw yourself were Arnav has thrown out it's really hard to come out of that.

But as he himself said, Khushi is more dangerous that those intoxicating things..Now he can leave without everything but not without that dangerous thing.

I really loved Khushi here...I loved everything about her, her curiosity about the car, her disgust at seeing a druggie, her consoling the broken son who had lost his mother, her shouting at him for breaking the promise.

And the most important, her saying yes to him even when she is not sure of her feelings, just because he needs her. She knows he cant do without her now, she knows he loves her, and she is ready to marry him for that...

Though I think, this concept needs more detail, like SS or even FF but will still say you have done a superb job, its not easy to capture everything in One shot but you did it well. But a small SS wont hurt, right??😉

Shivi...

Edited by shona_arhilover - 11 years ago

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thiyamappy

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Posted: 11 years ago

awww thats really sweet and heartfelt OS... seriously why can't you write this story eith as SS or FF...it will be awesome. The story line is really good and I really wish to read it in longer version.

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tanu3579

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Posted: 11 years ago

pooja... i hv a doubt...

wht happens next??? 😉

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-Zesty-

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Posted: 11 years ago

Unresed on page 1 :)

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sphobic

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: shona_arhilover
R.

Will unres tomorrow :)

----Edited-----

Wow, Pooja!! That was too good..
I really really liked this OS. You know I like OS where a whole story is told and needless to say I loved this one..

Using Ji at the end of every sentence😆 Yes! That sounds really sweet and cute. I also have my relatives which use this accent and I love how sweet it sounds.. Na bhi bolte hai to aisa lagta hai ki ha bol rahe hai ...

I loved this sweet and kind hearted Khushi. It was so sweet of her to help a completed stranger, whom she doesnt know but she knows that he needs her help and she is ready to help him..

I loved their conversation..Yes it looked liked Khushi was consoling a 5 year old not ASR.

Arnav's emotions was so beautifully portrayed. I loved how he took the hand extended towards him. Its easy to throw yourself were Arnav has thrown out it's really hard to come out of that.

But as he himself said, Khushi is more dangerous that those intoxicating things..Now he can leave without everything but not without that dangerous thing.

I really loved Khushi here...I loved everything about her, her curiosity about the car, her disgust at seeing a druggie, her consoling the broken son who had lost his mother, her shouting at him for breaking the promise.

And the most important, her saying yes to him even when she is not sure of her feelings, just because he needs her. She knows he cant do without her now, she knows he loves her, and she is ready to marry him for that...

Though I think, this concept needs more detail, like SS or even FF but will still say you have done a superb job, its not easy to capture everything in One shot but you did it well. But a small SS wont hurt, right??😉

Shivi...

I was revising but after reading your sweet comment I HAD to reply..😳

@at bold, yes its really hard to come out but love can do wonders you know, a small affectionate smile, a small gesture, a small sweet talk , this all small things has great power...its more dangerous than those things as Arnav told..

Let me share a small incident...You know my mum and dad are away to attend a marriage, and its just me and my brother...and you also know what a awesome cook I am..😆

I will not tell you what I make😆 but what I want to tell is...when mum and dad are at home , my brother doesnt bothers to see if I had my lunch or dinner or tea or whatever...but now as they are not here, he asks me if I had my meal...ist a very small thing...but the feeling it evokes it great...to see my brother, who is 4 years younger to me, care for me gives a really good feeling...situation like this and small incidents like this tells us how much we matter to our loved ones or family...not when we argue or fight with each other..

Thanks for the beautiful comment, shivi... :)