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Posted: 11 years ago
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This is my first OS.. So plz bear...
OS: Counting Stars

Jodha goes to Jalal's khwabgah for asking permission for sleeping on the terrace as it was very hot due to summer...
Jodha: Pranam Shehenshah
Jalal: adab jodha begum.. aap yaha
Jodha: ha shehenshan.. Vo baat yeh hai ki hum ratri mai terrace pe sona chahte hai.. is vajah se apki anumati lene aaye hai..
Jalal: (faking anger) jodha begum aap begum hai.. aap aise terace ppar nahi so sakti.. hum apko ijazt nahi dengay..
Jodha: Lekin shehnshah.. Hum aaj ratri vahi sona chahte hai...
Jalal: Nahi Jodha begum aap nahi jaa sakti.. Aapne suna nahi..
Jodha: thik nai ... Pranam..
As she was leaving... Jalal comin close: aaj hum apn hojre mai sona chahte hai..
Jodha: aap ko kon rok sakta hai.. aap shehnshah hai..Aur apka kaksh hai.. apne kaksh mai sona chahte hai to hume kyu keh rahe hai..
Jalal holding jodha by waist : Shayad jodha begum aapko pata nahi hai ki aapka hojra humara hai jo humne apko diya hai.. Hum uski baat kar rahe hai...
Jodha pushing him and leaving(in lower tone) Hum apke saath nahi sone vale.. Hum aapke saath tabhi soyengay jab aap hume terrace pe sone ki anumati dengay..
Jalal: Kuch kaha apne jodha begum
Jodha turning around and leaving : Nahi shenshah.. Pranam
Jalal: Khuda Hafis..
after jodha left jalal ordered something to his servants..
At night,
Accouncement for jalal,s entry was made..
Jodha took her bandis who had her blanket and was abt to leave when jalal interupted her
Jalal: App kaha jaa rahi hai jodha begum.. Hum yaha sone aaye hai
Jodha : Ha to soiyee ... Hum ammi jaan ke saath sone jaa rahe hai
Jalal: takliya.. Holding her hand ... Hum yaha sone aaye hai jodha begum aur app jaa rahi hai..
Jodha : Aap yaha sone aaye hai.. aap soo sakte hai.. aap humare saath nahi sone aaye..
and she left before jalal could catch hold of her
Jodha enters Hamidas hojra
Hamida: Jodha aap.. Is waqt yaha? Kya hu?
Jodha: Agar apko kedna ho.. to kya hum apke saath soo sakte hai ammi jaan.. sirf aaj raat.. hume aamer ki yaad aa rahi hai..
at the same time jalal enters
Jalal : Jodha begum aap yaha.. Ammi jaan hum apke saath aaj sona chahte hai..
Hamida understood now what was going on..
Hamida: Aap dono yaha soo sakte hai.. Hum abhi taiyaar karvate hai..
Jodha: Nahi ammijaan ... Aap aur shehnshah yaha soo sakte hai.. Hum kal aa jayengay and she left before hamida could insist
Jalal: Ammijaan hum b chalte hai.. Hum to sirf jodha begum ko pareshan kar rahe hai.. chaliye .. shabba kher
Jodha went to salima,s nd there too jalal came nd same thing happend..
Now jodha went to ruqaiyaas room ... nd jalal didnt enter d room bcoz he knw if he went inside he wouldnt be able to come back.. Hence, he stood outside her hojra
Jodha wasnt allowed to sleep so as soon as she came outside.. He lifted her in his arms..
Jodha: Hume chodiye sehenshah.. ame niche utariyee..
bt Jalal dint listen to her.. He carried her in his arms to the TERRACE..
There was a bed around which small lanterns were lit nd rose petels were spread..
Jalal carried her to d bed.. nd laid besides her and circled his arms around her waist.. She in utter shyness stood up and started undoing her braid.. Jalal also sat nd kissed her neck from behind ( d same which he did in serial).. sooner jodha flung open her hair backward and said: Shenshah hum bahar hai na apke aur na humare kaksh mai..
Jalal came on her side and saw her nd smirked..
Jalal: Jodha begum yeh hunar b apka kamal hai.. Kab bi hume apke paas bulaliye aur jataya b nahi...
Jodha turning her face towards him nd says: Hum ne apko amantrit nahi kiya.. Hum apko sirf yaad dila rahe hai
and she lies again..
Jalal leans down on her and plants a kiss on her forehead, eyes, nose, cheeks nd finally abt to kiss her lips when she laced a finger on his lips nd nooded.. bt jalal in no mood to listen bits her finger.. she in reflexes moved her finger said aah shehnsah ... Humari... before she could complet her sentance he kissed her juicy red lucious lips.. nd deepend with seconds flying.. she responded too.. after somthine they parted.. she again remindes him that they werent in room.. So he needed control himself.. She turned around so jalal could get full view of her back.. He opeaned the dori... nd she turned around to stop him from going further.. She stood up and took d cusions and placed between them..
Jalal: Yeh kaisi saza hai jodha begum? Hum apko apne agosh mai b nahi le sakte..
Jodha: Shehnshah apne jazbaat ko kaboo mai rakhiye.. Hum apke ya humare kamre mai nahi hai...
Jalal: Accha to hum apko chuyengay nahi.. ab to yeh cusions hata dijiye..
Jodha: Shehnshah app hume sparsh kar sakte hai... Par uske age kuch nahi.. Aur kaise purush hai aap.. itne halke cusions b nahi utha sakte..
Jalal: Hum apko utha sakte hai to phir yeh cusions kya cheez hai.. Is baat ka saboot humne apko dee diya hai... aur meri mardangi ke bare mai aap kisi b begum se pooch sakti hai.. report acchi milegi.. nd winked at her..
Jodha shyed away and turnd her back towards jalal... Jalal within no tym removed d cusions nd hugged her.. frm back.. planted a kiss on her neck.. she turned around nd gave a peck on his lips.. nd turned around.. jalal circled his arm around her waist.. they both dozed off to sleep while counting stars and talking..
Let me know how you find it.. Thank you.. Its my fist OS as mentioned earlier nd m a begineer.. thnk u once again.. Do hit d lyk button

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Posted: 11 years ago
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LOVELY LOVELY LOVELY AND LOVELY😳😳... CONTINUE WITH IT OR ANOTHER OS...LOVE UR WRITING.. EXCELLENT SUPERSTAR⭐️⭐️... I LOVED THE RAMLEELA DIALOUGUE.. AND HIS TEASING... AWESOME...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: jaskaran.kaur08

LOVELY LOVELY LOVELY AND LOVELY😳😳... CONTINUE WITH IT OR ANOTHER OS...LOVE UR WRITING.. EXCELLENT SUPERSTAR⭐️⭐️... I LOVED THE RAMLEELA DIALOUGUE.. AND HIS TEASING... AWESOME...




Thnk u😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It was very nice and sweet and cute...
I loved it...
Good work yaar...👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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sorry my like button is not working. A very cute and naughty os. u should write more,
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ashpat

sorry my like button is not working. A very cute and naughty os. u should write more,



Its ok... Thnk u 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thnk u... 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: princess_saumya

It was very nice and sweet and cute...

I loved it...
Good work yaar...👏



Thnk u... 😆 😃 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice and romantic os...
loved it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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