Drabbles: 30. Episode XXXI- Return of the Jallad (Pg 95) [Note Pg 98] - Page 63

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Posted: 11 years ago
I have read upto 14 and this series is really good. Like REALLY GOOD. Leaving a comment now so that I remember to come back later and leave a longer note.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: SherryGS

Omg!! Intense. I am salivating for the next piece of this.

I can feel Paro's stunned silence and probably silent tears running down her face. Rudra must be too angry to even think straight. He will come back to her calmly... I hope. Loving this. ⭐️


Originally posted by: chotidesi

Wow- that was not what I was expecting, at all. But this is good. This is not a bad expectation kind of thing- you surprised me, and I'm thrilled you did.

What I like most about your writing is your ability to convey so much in such a short chapter- they're not particularly long. But you get so much into it- like this one line: Even the neighbourhood children wouldn't come and take sweets from her. They peered out from behind curtains and doors, smiling and shaking their heads bashfully when she held out the brightly coloured plastic bags.

It's such a simple line- the idea of children running out to get sweets from her. But it holds so much about her, about who she is- it's almost as if she's hidden behind her husband's image.

Wonderful job!


Originally posted by: ujwala444

Aww... poor paro.. 😭


Originally posted by: ujwala444

Please make her happy again.. 🤔


Originally posted by: LyssaPie

Damn he did not just say that


Originally posted by: Sofna

Good to see you back. Hope everything is well.

I'm in shock like Paro over Rudra's reaction.

Please write YOUR story ... I LOVE IT!


Thank you all! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sparikh

oh god - did he came back from bad mission; seems like he is under a lot of pressure.

poor Paro, getting end of the stick.

-Sona


Originally posted by: dreamwinner

Nothing new bw husband wife


Originally posted by: What_the

Well definitely cracks started to appear in Rudra's demeanour, revealing the unforgivingly cold beast within..

The conversation with mr.singh has definitely riled him up. Hopefully it was just a heat of the moment thing, so either he is going to apologise for being obtuse this way or she is going to try and win his heart, by being understanding about his outburst..

See, how much you conveyed in those few words...has all of us speculating crazily as to what will come next...
👏

Love
Maya


Originally posted by: custodian75

Such situations do arise at home. Very well presented.



Originally posted by: ddFan2012

Awesome...Rudra and his mood swings...


Thanks, you guys! 😊 I'm glad you appreciate what I'm trying to say.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

Awesome update

I an guessing that Rudra is going to learn another and important lesson of marital life soon that never to take out office problems frustrations and tensions in home, not especially on ones wife.
His reaction was very upsetting.
Their relationship is still void of balance and comprehension for each other.
Can't wait for read next part.


Originally posted by: automaticstart

u updated it but my lbadluck i did not read it . i used to read it but when u stoped i used to stalk it n when u really updated i did not come here .but i read both parts together n they both r amazing. i hope we r going to see some roothna manana like the show but the matter is serious here


Originally posted by: rangprab

Omg... Did Rudra get worse than before in an instant...

Loved d last bit though he stormed out instead of her...



Originally posted by: lourel24

wow it was wonderful.I already started waiting for its next part.


Originally posted by: shreya_rc

this drabble form a very wonderful and crucial turning point of the storyline...i so much desire for parvati to get out of the cocoon she wove around herself and sat contently in it.because her husband is not an ordinary random guy, I wish her to see the greater picture, to feel his anguishes for losing fellow soldiers, to respect the patriot soul dedicated to his motherland and to be his sahadharmini in itz true meaning.and to make it happen the pink tinted glass wall needs to be shattered and that could be done only by Rudr himself.What I expect from the next update is not how paro would be upset and how rudr would say sorry to her...i feel this drabble has much higher potentiality than a mere honey sweetened roothna-maanana charade, I expect paro to grow a little more mature and aware of her importance as the wife of an Army Major.


Originally posted by: mriganayanika

I have read upto 14 and this series is really good. Like REALLY GOOD. Leaving a comment now so that I remember to come back later and leave a longer note.


Thank you! 😊 It is indeed time to explore more of Rudra-Paro's relationship and see just how deep it goes.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Unraveled

The distant roar of the engine made Parvati force her frozen limbs into motion. She carefully shut the door behind her. Had anyone else heard the sound of his bike? Would they ask her why he had gone out so soon again after coming home from work? Would they believe her if she made up an excuse about an emergency meeting?

She pulled out the black kurta she had painstakingly been working on over the last week and threaded her needle again. The needle wove in and out of the silk in a nimble dance, leaving a trail of tiny stitches in its wake.

Parvati was no stranger to anger-- and definitely not her husband's. She would always pick anger over the absence of anger though. In the first month of their acquaintance (the one neither liked talking about) Parvati had found out first hand just what her husband was capable of. She hadn't suffered much physical deprivation after he had brought her to live at the Haveli. No, it was the slow, soft menace in his manner, his lovingly whispered threats, and the stone-cold eyes that glinted with the promise of unimaginable terrors that had haunted her day and night. His eyes would linger on her-- the curious blankness in his gaze disconcerting her while she served dinner in the cheerfully lit dining room. The deliberate brush of his fingers on her waist when she handed him his tea would not let her forget for a second that he was in control, that he could do as he pleased with her. It was the very uncertainty of the situation that had almost broken Parvati. Sick with fear, worry, and dread, she had come frighteningly close to begging him to kill her and get it over with, more times than she cared to remember.

And that is why Parvati wasn't as worried as she would have been had he kept the bitterness locked within. His words had hurt, oh yes. They had stung like a whip-- quick, deliberate, and deep. And in the aftermath, they'd left a throbbing laceration that ached desperately when she tried to poke and analyze the situation.

Now that Parvati had finally begun to acknowledge herself as Rudra's wife, there was very little that she valued more than her relationship and her man. She knew that she had disappointed him, but she didn't know how to fix it. Helplessness and a certain sense of justice made her angry too; anger at herself for failing to understand what he needed even after trying so hard, and anger at him for not letting her in, for making this so difficult for her.

She tugged at a stubborn little knot in the thread that marred her beautiful embroidery. The thread snapped, and the last half dozen stitches unraveled, ruining the paisley that she'd been creating. Swiping at the thick, salty drops that dampened the fabric, she fervently prayed that she be able to mend the tear.

_______

The worst of my AD is over for a little while at least. Not sure how long it'll last, but I'll make hay while the sun shines. Thank you for being so patient with me.

-TT.

Edited by tattle-tale - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Paro is trying so hard and yet at times there are settbacks. But she has the patience and courage to come through.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Loved this drabble. I was wondeing where you would take us after the last one! Parvati is more perceptive than most of us gave credit for after last update!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Beautifully done. The metaphor was well done, the unravelling stitching and the unravelling relationship. She does understand him. She understands his anger, extremely well. I am so heartily impressed with you wonderful words. Thank you. Looking forward to more and I hope you are keeping well. ⭐️
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Posted: 11 years ago
That was good!
Let's see what Paro does now
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hello!!
Firstly, not sure if I saw you here...
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4010255

You absolutely have to be a part of this...no excuses!!!

Coming to this wonderful new drabble..
My heart almost breaks for Paro...she really has come quote far in this relationship, has gained the emotional maturity to grasp that this display of anger is preferred over cold silence...
Yet, she is unsure and anxious...and a little angry 👏 That he would not tell her what is wrong..

Loved the parallel you drew between the embroidery and their relationship...
As always, i just cant stop marvelling at how you convey so much in such few words...

Waiting for the next drabble...

Do nor forget to visit the thread that i have mentioned above...

Love
What_the (maya)

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