RAK MAK MAK ( a ashlok&zaya TALE)

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Sypnosis

A journey of four teenagers Aastha Aaliya Shlok and zayn

Aastha kirloskara very lovely and extremely chirpy girl..!!

If you love her she will be an angel to you

And if you hurt her she won't mind cutting you into small pieces and feeding you to the sharks in the pacific ocean...!

well totally clumsy yet ambitious...though she actes as if she is one big carefree girl her life was never rainbows and ponies...but now when she is free she don't know what to expect from life...she is happy to meet her Dad and brother once again...and as silly it is to say she is eager to meet her childhood enemy...welcome to aastha's new life...a total roller coaster of fun liveliness romance and friendship

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INDEX

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Edited by chaichil - 11 years ago
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CHARACTER SKETCH

{well the character sketch is given in a intro scene style so hope you all like it}

"ZAYN ZAYN ZAYN ZAYN"

There was this chorus in the DE ELITE university skate area...and every one was surrounded around the mega ramp...a guy with a blue sleeveless hoodie his back towards his excited audience was standing on the top of the vert ramp...with a steady grip on his sleek black skateboard he very confidently took his first slide with a perfect skid and one leap and he was in the air...everyone in the skate area was quite...anxious what will happen but the the guy reached the other end of the mega ramp he very smoothly landed on the ground before everyone with one movement of his leg his skateboard was right in his hand and he looked up to his anxious audience who started hooting and cheering him

"ZAYYYNNN"

The guy gave one of his most charming smile and waved to the crowd

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Zany POV

"dud3 u need to attend this call i guess...its the 27th time the caller is calling"

"wooahh that desperate huh...now who is the chick" i said taking up my mob and giving my 2nd best friend a look well my 2nd best friend is BECK

well i took my i phone from and an unknown number flashing on my screen

"hw do u know it is a chick broda" Beck asked while wiggling his eyebrows at me

"who else stalks THE ZAYN " i said smirking and answered my mob

"ZAYN KIRLOSKAR"a loud voice shouted from the other end i bit my tongue and my eyes widen in surprise

"WOAAHH cupcake this can't be u" i really could not form a sentence properly

"YOU ARE IN TROUBLE MR ZAYN KIRLOSKAR BIG TROUBLE"the person from the other end shouted and then she hung on me

"wow" i said staring at my mob

"what happened did someone like dump u " beck asked me

"you wish" I teased him but still confused why has cupcake reacted that way...i was really worried because it is not every day that your lil sister calls you from india and shouts at you like you have murdered her favourite hamster...eahh my sister loved hamsters she had two of them when she used to live with us that is before our parents divorced and her custody was handed over to my mother and she went to india while i was here with my father in Bloomington

"ZAYNNN" here came another irritating voice i looked up towards the door

"JADE" i mumbled looking up at the small framed pretty blackhead standing before me wow for a place like Bloomington i have got many friends here and jade was one of them was one of them minus her irritating high pitched girly voice and her high school queen bee attitude and her illness to be rude 24 hrs yeahh she was fine...and even if she was not fine i had to bear her cause she was my best friends girlfriend yeaah deal with that now

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JADE POV

"stop checking me out...will you" i said glaring at beck well i am happy i am hot and i am very aware of it but that does not means that boys go ogling on me well thats me JADE

My eyes landed on zayn and well he seemed a bit worried which is very unusual when we are talking about zayn because he is always the chilled out cool dude of the university

"what is with that look" i finally asked him

Nuthng he merely mumbles

"well u knw were is shlok?" i asked him expectantly

"i am not your boyfriend's personal bodyguard...well u mst knw it is Monday anyways" he hisses and walks away

Ouch no one talks to JADE like THAT

"YOU HAVE ISSUES" i shouted at his retreating back stomped my foot and walked away

"but still where the hell is shlok...ohh ya MONDAY"??

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The aroma of cooked steak and brewing coffee was wandering all around a small cottage covered with beautiful orchids and pansy and it was obvious because behind the cottage was a small cafe which was in its full swing as morning in here was very busy

"wow mommy cookie look divicious" said a small girl who was seated on the small kitchen counter inside the cottage watching her mother taking out a tray full of cookies and turned towards her giving her a beautiful smile

Handing over a cookie to her lil girl she asked her how is it

"its tasty mom" she replied munching on to the cookie

"Well now go and wake your brother up...as usual the lazy fellow missed his classes...he never wakes up at Mondays" said anjali nodding her hed in disapproval

But the lil girl was already on her way to her brother's room she moved to the right and stood before a black door she looked up and saw the yellow board stuck on it which read

"DOGS AND BABY SISTER NOT ALLOWED"

She gave huffed on reading the sign but anyways enters the room with a mischievous grin moves towards the bed were his brother was sleeping a blanket over him and his one leg sticking out of the bed she slowly goes behind him and kicks him hard on the butt and dummm he lands on the floor

"KAVVVYYYAAA"

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Shlok's POV

"kavyyyaaa" i shouted as if fell on my butt on the ground i got up and winced in pain my blanket still covering my face from which i turned and peeked at the prankster for a sister standing at the door smirking at me

Slowly getting up my blanket still covering my face i sat on the bed still groaning nd glaring at kavya oh i am so gona wipe that stupid smirk out of that devil's face...i always have the urge to kill people who thought or said that my sister was too cute bullshit she was a devil in disguise

When i again looked at her she simply stuck her tongue out and ran away from me

Ohh really little sister two can play this game i thought get up the blanket still covering me and i chased around our small cottage...yeahh this is small and we had to move here after our father's death and mom now looked after our family and she also owned a small cafe near to our cottage business was good so mom can at least send as to the best school and university in the town and even i help mom in earning as i tutor kids of my age and below for mine and kavya's pocket money in short though we are not rich but we live a cosy life expect for the little wars that break out btwn me and my sister well where is the little prankster hiding anyways i was thoroughly scanning the living room when i heard footstep behind me as i turned someone pulled the blanket away from me

"SHLOK NIRANJAN AGNIHOTRI"

Du'uh full name?? crap...mother is angry i could sense it and i slowly looked at her well she was in a furry

"MOM" i was just about to tell her something but she beat me to it

"don't you dare MOM me shlok...this is not good you missed your class and then sleeping till noon what kind of attitude is this...

Well there comes another lecture my sweet mom always just loves to lecture me around and she would never let go a chance of lecturing me but unfortunately as she opens her mouth my brain goes to automatic switch off mode and i just look at her as if she is the main clown in a circus which irritates her more

"are you listening to me shlok": i heard her asking me after some minutes

"well han yeah sorry what" i replied careless playing with my blanket

"you need to go to cafe and tell mr baker to shop everything according to aaliya's need k" commanded my mother

"ohh yeah k su...wait a sec aaliya?why aaliya" i asked her wrinkling my nose as if mom just that i was going to have mums well i can't help it this aaliya girl is even worse than that

"did u not hear me shlok your cousin is coming over" said my mom

"WHY MOM? It's not even summer it's not even any vacations here how can she be here" i asked her my eyes wide yeah u see how much i love my cousin...note the sarcasm please

"yeaah that is because she is not coming here for any vacations but to live with us"

When mom said those words to me i felt like i was run over by a tractor, no this is not happening

"please mom tell me you are joking " i asked her looking at her expectantly hoping that at any moment she will burst of laughing saying hey APRIL FOOL...oki i knw its not april it September but still may u know like a belated april fool

"NO beta and she will be joining your university" she said and walked towards the kitchen without sparing me a glance...wow great wasn't kavya enough tht now even aaliya is being bombarded to my life well ugghh i simply groan and make my way to mom's caf but before that I spot kavya I pick her up and throw her on my shoulders tickling her

"hey shlokkiieee"

"Mr bakers" i smiled searching for him and i looked down the billing counter yeaah there he was

"Mr bakers can u believe it mom is getting aaliya here" i whined to him yeaahh i almost tell everything about my life to Mr baker hes a bro with his short height and funny nature he is a perfect person to hang out well he works at mom's blace and is specialises in baking and yeahh his name is bakers too funny much...nd he also was my father's left hand and even after his death he did not leave the family

"who aaliya?" he asked looking a bit lost

"my cousin" i said

"more disastrous than your girlfriend?" he asked chuckling

"yeahh raise to infinity " i replied chuckling

"because i am sure even now that girl must be shouting her lungs out at someone and scaring the life out of thm" i said almost cringing when certain memories of hers passed through my mind

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"ONE THOUSAND AND FIFTY BUCKS...I AM NOT BUYING YOUR TAXI GOT IT I AM ONLY ASKING U THE PRICE FOR MY FARE"

"AALIYA MADAM...THT"a guy seemed to reason with the young lady who was going all ninja over the poor taxi driver

"NAI MISHRA JI U STAY OUT OF THIS"

"AND YOU NO ONE MESSES WITH AALIYA MALHOTRA"

the girl shouts at the taxi driver pointing her perfectly manicured fingers at him

the taxi driver was almost shivering due to fright he did not look right nor left jst started his vehical and zoomed off

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Aaliya's POV

What the hell the taxi driver left without taking his fare...now why would he do that i was just making him understand that his fare was insanely high now i even did not shout at him well i pout totally confused ughh forget it

"mishra ji please give me the flight tickets" i said looking at my dad's assistant well being the only daughter of a well known businessman do have some benefits now...yeahh but still i am the girl next door types who usually avoids showcasing my parents wealth and yeah hi am an awesome bargainer too u see for example the taxi driver...yeahh that was too much for a bargain though

Well i get into the building before me and start climbing up the stair and there is room n0 304 and i gently knock

"OHHH AASTHA KIRLOSKAR"

I tease looking at my totally adorable friend who is in ryt now holding a pile of clothes and iis wearing a shorts...its a rare sight to see aastha wearing shorts you know...well with a pervert step father what could the poor girl do well now i am happy finally she is going back to her own dad and brother leaving behind her stupid pretty head mother and yucky stepfather

"someone is getting ready to woo boys in the college" i further tease her pushing past her and entering my flat...yaa another HI-FI gift which dad brought me

"VRY funny" i hear aastha mumbling

K i understand her situation she is quite tensed, life was never easy for her but still at least now the girl should take a break

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Aastha's POV

I am really tensed damn i have never been on an aeroplane and now this 22 hrs journey that too all alone gosh

Well after hours of packing i have it all and i am ready for my early morning flight

FLIGHT NOOO

"why that tensed look"

I hear aaliya asking me...what will i tell her that i aastha kirloskar a 18 year old adult is afraid to sit in a flight

"nuthng" i mumbled and take the envelope placed on my desk

"Finally" i heard aaliya saying

I ignored her and tore the envelope and fished in for my ticket and to my surprise came out two tickets i studied them one was for aastha kirloskar and the other one was...wait ...WHAATTt

"AALIYA MALHOTRA" i shout in glee and go flung myself on her i just can't belive it

My best friend is gona come along with me...WOW u really dnt know how much i love her and i was dreading on the fact of leaving her but now this

"SOO" aaliya ask me raising her eyebrows and wiggling them

I turn her towards the balcony and we see the beautiful moon out there

"USA BEWARE WE ARE COMMMIIINNNGGG"

We bouth shout like lunatics raising our fist in the air and doing a superman pose

Edited by chaichil - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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NOTE

Hey everyone this is Tanya here and well I am with my story which is basically a college drama...and I have written this story for my two very favourite couple shlok-aastha and zayn-aaliya
and I promise you will get equal shares of both the couple and actually I am trying to create a stress busting situation a slow humours and over dramatic story here so please do support
THANK YOU
Edited by chaichil - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Sounds nice 😊
Looking forward to it
Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thaaannnkkk you...I am really glad that u liked it :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hi buddy😳
such a cute start😃
character sketch was lovely😊
so cute banners & pictures of ashlok & zaya😳
keep continue friends..👍🏼
surely I'll support u🤗

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Posted: 11 years ago
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hey dear...
very nice and different concept.. nd I totally loved it 😛
thanks for the pm... do update soon ...m waiting eagerly 😳
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awesome concept.love to read more.thanks for pm.
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A lovely unique and intriguing storyline
All the best :-) xx

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