On a quiet Monday morning

Mrs. Joe Cheng

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Dotty dot dot jii, I couldn't stop reading once i started. I already told you you are the next JKR. This was really well written and as others' mentioned the sudden turn of events made the story totally real. It was as if I could hear the sudden shot...Awesome awesome work, Tanaz!! I can't wait to read more of your work. If you could write so good in so little time, I can't even begin to imagine how good you can be!! 👏

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Morgoth

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Posted: 18 years ago

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I already thanked both of you, Nainu and Khair...but thanks again! 😳

And Khair, I still have a long long way to go before I come close to JKR. 😆

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Vaishnavi (YSH)

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Posted: 18 years ago

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well i keep on writing reviews and keep on becoming disconnected...
i wanted to tell you that this was brilliant...

it just goes to show how much difference one second makes.. if she had stayed on for a minute or if george had stalled a minute god knows and their fate would have been so different

i mean it just goes to show how victims have no idea what is gonna happen till it happens cos the most ordinary day can turn to be so disastrous...

love you writing 🤗 and hope to hear more...

may the souls rest in peace

luv

-❤️Ysh❤️-

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MNMS

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Originally posted by: T.
I already thanked both of you, Nainu and Khair...but thanks again! 😳

And Khair, I still have a long long way to go before I come close to JKR. 😆

😆accept it Tanaz!! I second what Khair said......You are the next JK😛

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Minnie

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Tanaz, I always get awed by your story telling skills....this too has been beautifully done......

To be honest, I do think that there could have been a little more meat in it, it did look as if you hurried through it. But you caught the essence........and the irony of the girl missing her spot and getting saved is sometimes so true in real life.....

It's been a while, so please write more...... 😳

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Morgoth

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Thank you, Ysh! You write very well too. I haven't had a chance to read your current story, but will do so soon and review. 😊

Thankoo Minnie! I completely agree, it needs to be fleshed out more. I am not satisfied with the emotional depth of this piece.

Will definitely continue writing, now that I've started again. 😃

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Vaishnavi (YSH)

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Posted: 18 years ago

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[quote=T.]Thank you, Ysh! You write very well too. I haven't had a chance to read your current story, but will do so soon and review[/quote]

well thank you so much 😳 saw that u reviewd and appriciate it 🤗
Thanks a load and hope to see more of ur works... 😳

-❤️Ysh❤️-

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