Ashlok FF:**~The Passionate Revenge..~**,Chapter-7 ,page-38... - Page 12

Originally posted by: TehsinaJFJ

Hello dear!😛Thank u for speaking out ur mind and wat u found offensive..😊First of all I wud lyk to say I appreciate da criticisms nd yk forward to more,wenever u feel m goin wrong..😊Dt helps me get better wn I follow a wrong track,but here I dnt think I am following a wrong track..😊
I can see u hav a very strong issue on dis and I respect it,but rape is a very strong word.
In no way m I supportn rape..Nd Shlok isnt raping her..
But as u so strongly say,a s**t wudnt have sexual feelings,I'd lyk to say dere r feelings in dis world called physical attraction.
Believing it or not is upto each of us separately,but it does exist..
Astha is wid a kidnapper to whom she feels physically attracted..Why,what,and logic dusnt work in some cases..
Nd if u cud explain love or attraction away wid logic I dnt think its called love anymore..😊My POV.
Okay cumn to dis story,da name itself implies something I guess..Yes I know Astha shudnt be succumbing to these feelings,and she shud be afraid and disgusted to be close to her kidnapper..But strangely she does not..Dtz wat da story is about in da 1st place..
Nd if I tell u evrything right now I dnt think dere is any point in ur reading it or my writing it,right dear?😊
M sorry u find her worse dan a s**t..Yes dis word also sounded too strong since I just started and da story is yet to be told.
I know where I am going,and I hope u do read on,and kip givn m ur feedbacks..Nd if u still dnt lyk it,dn I'd hv to say m sorry!Plz no hard feelings!Hope I md myslf clear!🤗

Originally posted by: lachii

i did not find it offensive..y would i ...i am not in her place 😊...i found it absurd and unnatural that is why i commented. no personal feelings hurt or etc...😊

yes it is your story and you can write it in any way and make your characters respond to a situation in whatever way you want, but you see, fiction is also somewhere related to reality and at least for me it is interesting only when at least the characters are behaving as they naturally should...in a given condition...

second, i did not call this aastha a s**t, on the other hand i meant that if there was a s**t being kidnapped and sexually threatened like this, she would not have felt any kind of desires...so why is this aastha so attracted to a person whom she should be disgusted at least if not afraid...

of course you as a writer have all the answers , i just wrote what i felt..hope no hard feelings🤗

CHAPTER-3.

Astha tried to control her reeling emotions and tried to move away,but his hand curved round her waist and would not let her move away.

She helplessly squirmed to be set free,that only gained her a husky scolding from him..

"If you want to be set free,stop squirming like that!!!That will only make things worse for you!Stay still!"He warned her,his face a ravaged mask of intense passion,and something else..

Some different emotion other than passion crossed his feature for a second,that even in her gone haywire condition Astha did not fail to notice..

He had moved his hand away from inside her shirt,and was now breathing heavily with closed eyes,clearly trying to calm himself.

Astha stared up at his face,some of his ravaged state seemed to be reaching out to her..She did not know why but she could actually feel his fight for control..As if she had a telepathic connection with him,and could tell what was going on in his mind..Or almost tell,as she still did not know why he had kidnapped her..And she also did not know why she did not get terrified of him as she should be..

Astha tried to move again,and again his harsh warning stopped her.

"Wait!Just.. wait ..a second.."He said through gritted teeth,and Astha waited staring confused up at his face..He was fighting something..And seemed to be in pain..

She wanted answers to many questions,and most of them were vital for her..

But suddenly she did not know why,she just wanted the answer to why he was suffering so much..?What was the cause of his pain..?That she could see him fighting to hide and drown under his mask of blankness..

Astha could actually pinpoint the exact time he won over his emotions,and that was also when he moved her away,and made her stand up again.

Without looking at her,he turned his back to her and pointed the bathroom door to her..

"Leave..Just leave..Now.."He said in a clipped but firm tone..

Astha knew she should be doing just that,but something made her hesitate,and stand where she was.Something made her keep looking at his back..

His hands were now at the waist of his trouser,clearly getting ready to pull them down..

"What are you waiting for?An invitation?Or maybe you just want to join me for my bath..?I would be glad to share the bathroom with you.."He said the last part in such a soft husky sensual voice,that her heart beat tripled just at the sound of it..

And without a single hesitation she ran out of the bathroom ,and banged the door shut behind her..

Breathing heavily she leant back against the closed bathroom door,with eyes closed,and her heart racing from the close encounter..She heard the rustle of cloth,that indicated him removing his trouser,and a blush covered her face..

And just after that the sound of the shower,made her move away back towards the bed..

Confused and lost at her own odd reaction to her kidnapper,whom she did not know,yet she felt she had known him all her life..

Astha's kidnapper cursed himself loudly,as he turned on the shower to full speed,not even bothering to adjust theheat,as he stood under it with his head bowed down..

The chilling cold water,cooled his arused body,but did little did it help to cool the rage in his mind..

Memories..Long suppressed painful yet tender memories flashed through his mind..

"Astha!Wait where are you taking me to?!!"He called out in vain,but the unpredictable girl he had met three days ago,was not ready to stop or listen,as she dragged him down a narrow path in a secluded park,at the corner of the city..

She just laughed,shaking her head as she indicated she was not opening her mouth,and just led on,and he followed..

Finally she stopped and turned to face him,an angelic smile on her beautiful face,and Shlok stared at her mesmerized once again..

"Just look at this place!!!Isn't it so beautiful?!!! "

"Most beautiful.."He whispered huskily,not able to look away from her face at all..

And then suddenly she seemed to realize he had not looked at all at what she had been showing him,so she instantly stepped closer,and pulled his head down,close to her level,pulling him by the collar..

Shlok took a steadying breath as she looked into her eyes and face,so close to his now..He could feel her warm breath on his face,and his body started reacting to her proximity once again..

"Did you even look at what I showed you?"She pouted her soft rosy lips angrily,making him look at them too.

His hot eyes looked at the perfect rosy lips,he so wanted to..

When he dragged his eyes from her lips and looked into her eyes again,he could see that she was also moved by their closeness..

"I looked at what I wanted to see..Always want to see.."He said meaningfully in his husky voice,as he studied her beautiful face feature by feature,and then studied her soft full lips..

He noticed she had inhaled a steadying breath,and his heart rejoiced at the thought that she was also moved by him..That something was truly up between them..

Astha suddenly let go of his collar,and blushing red tried to move away,when Shlok grabbed her hand and pulled her back into his arms..

Breathing heavily now,she atared up into his deep dark hot eyes,her eyes reflecting his need..

And suddenly Shlok could not take it anymore,and claimed her lips as his,and she after a slight hesitation let him kiss her..

The whole world seemed to color up in their newly discovered blooming feelings for each other,as his lips moved passionately over her soft ones,making her melt into his arms..

Shlok felt his body harden even now at the memory of their first heated kiss..

And he also knew she does not remember that or anything about him..And he should forget too..

He tried to remember that he had brought her here for someone else,and not to fulfill his suppressed desire for her..

He had to remember he could not let her play with him and his emotions once again..

He had to keep his distance from her,while he had to keep her locked up in here..

He had to stay away,and keep his hands off her..Only then would his revenge be complete..

He could not succumb to this fatal attraction he always felt for her..That was all in the past..And now it is a new day,a new time..And time to complete an all new revenge..

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