MehBeer OS- Meelon Ka Jaise Tha Faasla - Page 3

Originally posted by: chair1992

First one to review 🥳

This was the first story where I could really connect with Abheer, the way you described his pain and hope, i felt really bad for him

tell me about it. he is a cutie baby and all but there are so many times i just want to give him three four more kicks and maybe a smack to the head to get it working right 🤣 you can analyse his actions...but show-wise they havent given much to validate our analysis that he is doing all this for love.

Sometimes its hard for me to feel for Abheer because first he is a guy, second I can't connect with the way it's described

You did it 😊

I am glad i was able to help you connect to abeer. That feels like a huge accomplishment 😆 considering i've been struggling to do the same. so only couldnt help myself with this piece 😆

I love the way you write 👏 thank you so much . Sadism brings out the best in me 🤣

Originally posted by: heart321

Awesome story dear!!

Really loved it..

Kudos!!

I really enjoy these kind of heartbroken stories😆😆

Originally posted by: zaya-firdose

Wowww

Superb Ari

Well written and the way you depicted abeer's emotions fabulous girl

Ps: by the way I was expecting something like this from and u did it... Because abeer se zyaada tum sad thi abeer ke liye 🤣

Originally posted by: madhufx9...

Yeh Khushi ka Asoon ,

You spoke mind of every Abeers fan u know , from the first day I have same feelings about his behaviour . I try to understand every character and here u r !!

Aakhir em badtameez insaan ka dil doosra badtameez insaan hi samaj Sakthi 😆 hahaha ek tent mei rehte haina...pheelings bhi ek hi hongi 🤣🤣

Okay now come serious comment

Sadisim zinadabad !!!

Early morning you made me cry dear , every time i make someone cry i feel mere story likhne ka maksad pura ho gaya 🤣 so yayyy 🥳

Perfect framing of every single emotion of Abeer .⭐️

Could really feel the pain of Abeer , man Is seriously locking every feeling of him . Not letting even his dear friends too know them. ( ab mujhe uska heart ka Chintha hori 😆) even i feel bad for the poor baby. suddenly i realise there is no one to stand for him. people are around him but no one really understands him or his pain.

Arey u brought this pink gown into picture , I'm glad they didn't use it in show , it looks like kids frock😆

Abeer u r still childish , doesn't mean u bring kid jaisi frock to Meher 😆

arre gowns are gorgeous...especially for ball room dances kind of scenes...it would be nice if in future...meher wears that gown and abeer just ends up staring at her without blinking his eyes 😆

Every word , every line, every emotion is perfectly placed . Love u for writing this . Hope whoever not able to connect to Abeer , could be able to connect him after reading this 😳 it just takes alot of mehnat to peel under his immaturity and see his reasons...i wanted to justify him...since he is slowly redeeming himself now...hope he doesnt go back now and remains our sweet childish hero. i have had enough of him torturing her un-necessarily.

Aja behen gale lagane ki Mann Kari , after reading this , keep it my girl ... haha thank you behna... your shabhashi is equivalent to a oscar to me 🤣 🤗

Keep writing , thank u so much for pm .

Originally posted by: neetha

Hey Ari

Baby wat an OS !!

Each n every emotion of abeer from yesterday epi u captured it soo well...u know we all here almost all understands meher pain and all tat she is going thru..very rarely do we consider the pain of abeer..m glad u wrote this coz he is equally going thru an emotional turmoil as meher is..loved this is.. thank you so much. i am glad i was able to put abeers side of the story even a lil bit through this OS. its not like we dont understand his pain...its that he masks it so well underneath his immaturity and rudeness that its hard to see his pain and love. one day he will break down and it will be the most epic scene ever.!!!

Thanks fr the pm. thank you for reading. 😆

Originally posted by: coolhi1988

simply superb

Originally posted by: desire_nikki

wow...
so emotional os...
really loved it..
u r a good writer...
plz pm me all ur works..will love to read..

Originally posted by: florine_20

amazing

Originally posted by: dv19

Bfully penned

Originally posted by: IttiSiKriti

RES i think i am little too late in replying to this [=))[ but oh well better late than never. kriti i think this was one of my first things you read. and it made me so happy to your comment on my os. so thank you so much for that 🤗

*Unres*

Um. Well.

Ari that was so depressing yet perfect.

You really get to dive into Abeer's emotional state

through this OS and woman it was bang on. exactly what i was aiming for 🤣 and abeer is like an endless ocean of inspiration. i love writing him ❤️ thank you 😳

I'm not crying! Hey, who put this bowl of onions here?

Dukhi OS's zindabad 😆 *passes tissue* sadism any day everyday 🤣

Keep writing, you're doing an amazing job! thank you so much. this really means alot :) 😳

Kriti 😃