The Raging Storm (ARVI) - Chpt 22 - Page 98 - Page 10

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Posted: 13 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: nalonynnej

Such vivacious writing! I can imagine each scene clearly. 😊 Can't wait for Arjun and Purvi to reconcile. You should become a CV for PR Laurie. You would bring a breath of fresh air to their banal, overused tracks. 👍🏼


Thank you Nalonynne for the awesome compliment 😃

I would love to write for them - although at this rate I might be called upon once every three months and four days 🤣

Enjoy! 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#92

Originally posted by: sashashyam

I quite agree, about her becoming a CV for PR, but the unfortunate fact is that she would not survive more than a week in that chaotic mess! They would find her far too logical and lucid, and she would be eased out pretty soon.

Shyamala B.Cowsik


🤣 So true
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Come on Laurie, 👏you have to remember REW- the quote you quoted in this forum- it has stuck to my mind as your image, that is who i see you as- just dishing out happiness and humor, and making lives better one at a time...and not having to make much effort since it is second nature to you...in terms of making a difference...am sure this writing has taken effort and penning down ur thoughts, although i don't believe too many iterations, again here i think it comes naturally to you so u write like how you picture and how you feel..(no pressure...😉)
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Please, how can you even think like that. Writing like this- what appears to me from the outside looking in- this comes to you naturally and that is best. Like Krishna ji said in the Gita that don't worry about the results, so for you...don't worry about the bar being so high...you can never come close to stooping to the level of the PR CVs 😉 (no offense meant to the CVs and their creative abilities)...
Shyamala pointed out you would be kicked out anyways and cld not be part of the PR CVs given your flair for writing...she really complimented you there...am sure you saw it...
We love it and...and are waiting with baited breath for the next part, given NO ARVI at all these days😭
Yup...on second thought... perhaps i should change my character 180 degrees and sadly have to agree with you that if you don't deliver your TRPs may fall too...🤣

🤣 Abhi - You are too good!

Thank you for the pep talk 😆 Very wise words and I will do my best 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: Inkpen4877

This was wonderful! It's too bad the show isn't using this idea for their track...


Thank you for reading 😃

I think my version is a little to tame for PR - needs more tamasha! 🤣

Maybe I need to go live in Savita's chawl for a while to soak up some masala 🤣

Enjoy! 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: Axiom123



I've re-written part four about seven times now trying to get it just right. The thoughts are a bit jumbled at the moment but I will try to have the next installment out soon.


Let me know if I can be of any help, Laurie. No kidding.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#96

Originally posted by: Axiom123

Not sure about the upcoming ARVI - I think the CVs are trying to give us something spectacular but like me maybe they are not quite sure how to set it up? Just my guess 😆


Same here..., Laurie.
I too have noticed several times that we do appear to be in the same wave length 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks Bee - I might be using that phone a friend soon :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: Axiom123

Thanks Bee - I might be using that phone a friend soon :)


LOL .. so getting reading for the next season of KBC, huh? 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Axiom123

Chapter 2 ' Contention [Purvi]

Karma Group of Companies ' Mumbai - Saturday 12:00 am

Purvi struggled to tamp down the frantic feelings that were bubbling up from inside but within seconds she was assaulted by all the beautiful and painful memories she shared with Arjun. She barely had time to think about what was happening and before she knew it she was bolting to her private bathroom to empty the contents of her stomach.

She retched and heaved until there was nothing left. Hot, salty tears splashed down her cheeks as Arjun's face kept flashing before her eyes. Purvi squeezed her eyes shut again, placed her hands upon her ears and screamed, "Stop doing this to me! Stop it! Please."

She took a couple deep breaths to calm herself and walked over to the sink. After cleaning up, Purvi dragged herself out of the bathroom and out on to the little balcony at the corner of her office. She had nothing left inside. Her torrid emotions had left her all wrung out and she was physically tired from it all. She was the shell of the person she used to be.

Purvi stared out into the night sky. A beautiful, inky night with a bashful moon and canopy of stars sprinkled with careless abandon. A nights sky full of hope, full of dreams. All her dreams had been brutally trampled on by the one she loved more than her own life but yet she could not bring herself to hate him.

She knew in her heart of hearts that they had shared a true love. She thought 'A love that people wait a lifetime to find was in my hands for the taking'. Then in a small voice, Purvi spoke into the night, "Only that love first belonged to Ovi. I had no right to snatch it away from her. What would that have done my family? We just sorted out the problems between aai and her daughters and they have finally accepted her. I could not have been so selfish."

Purvi looked up to the heavens and sent up a silent prayer, "Arjun, I pray that you are happy and that you get all your heart's desires. I wish the best for you always, even if it's not with me. I love you Arjun'. My Arjun."

She wrapped her arms around herself as she stood there for some time as if to purge the unwanted feelings from her soul. After a while, she turned to go inside and briefly glanced at the clock. Almost 1:00 am! Two hours had just slipped away.

As she was about to step inside, she felt the temperature around her dip ever so slightly. She turned back towards the night's sky. A subtle breeze, a gentle as a lover's caress, slowly wound its way around her. The velvet current carried on it the promise of a new beginning and she closed her eyes relishing the feel of its touch on her skin.

The wicked wind picked up and playfully tossed her hair about her face. She smiled at the touch and just as she was about to move the hair from her eyes, she heard it. A voice; a voice that she could never forget. Right behind her.

"I love you Purvi".

Amazing Laurie!! I watching every single scene that you have described in your post in front of my eyes. I know I have long way to go here, slowly but surely I will make it...
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Posted: 13 years ago
Laurie,

There is NO way you can be like the PR CVs. And don't you dare go into a depression thinking about bars and hurdles. Your spirit soars effortlessly - as I said earlier, Parts 1 and 2 were very good too, but still a tad tentative, for you were still finding your voice, so to speak. but by Part 3, you were all there, confident and convincing.

It will only get better from now on, and in any case, do NOT fall into the habit of comparing one chapter with another. No author does that; it is the whole book that counts. And I am sure that it is going to be a real treat.

Shyamala

Originally posted by: Axiom123


Thanks Abhi 😃 That's how I see him in my head 😍

I needed for them to get past the hurt but in order to do that they needed to move through it first.

I think I set the bar too high for myself 😕 What if the other parts aren't as good? Then I'll be just like those PR CVs 😆

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