Originally posted by: Sam_15
Awesome chapter once again!! First of all let me say I was so lost while reading this chapter that I didn't realise when the chapter ended, which rarely happens with me. That in itself says so much abt how interesting this chapter I found. Even though the story is very simple and the events taking place in ur story very closely relates to anyone's day to day life, but the way u write makes it a very interesting read. I cud almost imagine myself in falak's place (walking alongside zaroon ) 😆😆
That happens to Suri when she is reading your updates... i am so happy i could do the same to you! yippie...feel like dancing...par roza hai!😆
You know what...its not even my writing ...its just Zaroon...i swear Fawad does this to people...he is a magician...😆 I imagine myslef too🤣
Haha...I loved the shareef bachcha line. That was cute. And omg Fawad's pic on billboard! Ironic 😆😆 When I laid my eyes on his pic that u posted, I stopped dead in my tracks. In this case I was scrolling down the page and my hands froze on that point with this expression 😲 and then later Lol..I couldn't help drooling over him. He looks WOW!! ☺️ So I can totally imagine ur state when u saw his pic on the billboard. Wow!!
That part just crashed me and i felt like including my feelings when it happened to me😆
Daikha...hai na breathtakingly handsme...drool drool drool!
Ok coming back to ur story. I liked that u skipped ahead two years and made Zaroon and Falak older. And Falak stopped calling him bhai. Good Haha...even Zaroon wanted her to call him by his name minus the bhai 😆😆😆
I want to keep it short and hence the skipping but yeh tu chalta hi chala ja raha hai!😆
She has grown up...😆 Fawad bbhi tum logon ke tarha hai...hopeless!
I liked their bonding. Loved the way u showed subtle development in their relationship and their feelings for each other. They clearly admire each other with a hint of slight attraction.
The last part is the clear indication that they are falling for each other. But most of all I loved ur last line that some of her gloom was his and some of his gloom was hers. This line is so deep and meaningful. U nailed it perfectly ⭐️
This wasnt supposed to be the end of the update but the line was so good for an end i decided i will end it here😆
Now u r making me want to see Karachi too 😳
Only one more chapter left? Main samjhi thode aur chapters honge. Why don't u make it an SS?
Yeah i have that magic of making people like my cities...and about converting it to a ss... i dont have any idea..if i can drag it more...but lets see.
P.s. U know I can cross seven seas to read ur stuff...Fawad ka to sirf ek bahana hai 😉 Ok thoda zyada hi filmi ho gaya na.. 😳😆
I like the filmy you!😳
P.s.s. Omg look at the length of it 😲 Why can't I keep my comments short and sweet *bangs head on the wall in frustration*
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