Zalak OS~ Because I Really Like You~ part 3(Last) page 17 - Page 9

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Posted: 11 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: asyaarshilover



yeah no doubt that they r perfect and i have full faith in ur story too... lol i guess i imagined a lot more thn 6 years... nups i want tell u what i thought 😳 don't say thank u... there is no thank u and sorry in friends 😡

yeah i visited 2 years back...
hmm m from karachi..

don't say thanks ywr... Ur story on my fav couple i m going to suggest to some other friends too..
Fifi too had ressed... I will ask her to unres soon
🤗


Yes a graduate seems to be older while a sixteen years old quite younger...not your fault!

Sure i'll br waiting for more people then😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
#82
Awesome update dear
Shreef is really cute
Zaroon wants her to call him by his name only without adding bhai
Something is there b/w them..
Really enjoyed reading the update...
Update soon...
Thanks for pm..
And yeahits the first time I m seeing Fawad and let me say he is handome and dashing
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Posted: 11 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: Gilrin

Res

Can't wait for update Suri 😆 Booking pehlay say hi karwa li hai.

Unres

Oh My Goodness!!! Suri I loved every single line of this beautiful piece of writing. That billboard part...ironical 😲. Falak is still the bubbly one even if she is grown up now. You managed to keep that side of her personality intact, well done! 😃 You describe everything so well I can almost imagine every scene in my mind, wish I can visit Karachi sometimes. Zaroon wants her to call him without addition of bhai just like us 😛 By the ending lines I gather that unconsciously they are falling for each other slowly. Update soon.😉


😆 Bohat khushi hui ap ki affection daikh kar😆

Yeah i just felt like includiing that billboard part since i was a victom of Fawad's exceptional looks😆

yep she had to stop calling him Bhai warna...tu pata hi hai na!

Glad you liked it!😃

Will update soon!

Love,

Suri!❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: Sam_15

Awesome chapter once again!! First of all let me say I was so lost while reading this chapter that I didn't realise when the chapter ended, which rarely happens with me. That in itself says so much abt how interesting this chapter I found. Even though the story is very simple and the events taking place in ur story very closely relates to anyone's day to day life, but the way u write makes it a very interesting read. I cud almost imagine myself in falak's place (walking alongside zaroon ) 😆😆

That happens to Suri when she is reading your updates... i am so happy i could do the same to you! yippie...feel like dancing...par roza hai!😆
You know what...its not even my writing ...its just Zaroon...i swear Fawad does this to people...he is a magician...😆 I imagine myslef too🤣

Haha...I loved the shareef bachcha line. That was cute. And omg Fawad's pic on billboard! Ironic 😆😆 When I laid my eyes on his pic that u posted, I stopped dead in my tracks. In this case I was scrolling down the page and my hands froze on that point with this expression 😲 and then later Lol..I couldn't help drooling over him. He looks WOW!! ☺️ So I can totally imagine ur state when u saw his pic on the billboard. Wow!!

That part just crashed me and i felt like including my feelings when it happened to me😆
Daikha...hai na breathtakingly handsme...drool drool drool!

Ok coming back to ur story. I liked that u skipped ahead two years and made Zaroon and Falak older. And Falak stopped calling him bhai. Good Haha...even Zaroon wanted her to call him by his name minus the bhai 😆😆😆

I want to keep it short and hence the skipping but yeh tu chalta hi chala ja raha hai!😆
She has grown up...😆 Fawad bbhi tum logon ke tarha hai...hopeless!

I liked their bonding. Loved the way u showed subtle development in their relationship and their feelings for each other. They clearly admire each other with a hint of slight attraction.
The last part is the clear indication that they are falling for each other. But most of all I loved ur last line that some of her gloom was his and some of his gloom was hers. This line is so deep and meaningful. U nailed it perfectly ⭐️

This wasnt supposed to be the end of the update but the line was so good for an end i decided i will end it here😆


Now u r making me want to see Karachi too 😳
Only one more chapter left? Main samjhi thode aur chapters honge. Why don't u make it an SS?


Yeah i have that magic of making people like my cities...
and about converting it to a ss... i dont have any idea..if i can drag it more...but lets see.


P.s. U know I can cross seven seas to read ur stuff...Fawad ka to sirf ek bahana hai 😉 Ok thoda zyada hi filmi ho gaya na.. 😳😆

I like the filmy you!😳

P.s.s. Omg look at the length of it 😲 Why can't I keep my comments short and sweet *bangs head on the wall in frustration*

I love you for this length

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Posted: 11 years ago
#85
wonderfull n amazing...
fabulous...
totally luv it...
beautifully written...
thx fr the pm...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: Sam_15


Fawad Fawad all the way 😉😆

Haw haye😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#88

Originally posted by: Gilrin


Many reasons.
Fawad...😛
You
Your beautiful piece of writing
Wanting to read something before sleeping
Out of sheer boredom

😳 did it suffice?
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Posted: 11 years ago
#89
Omg.. res 😆
Lemme read this wonderful update again and settle down. Cant control my happinesss. 😛
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This was such an outstanding update. Karachi walon ka dil khush kar diya. Itni tareef tou hum bhi apnay beach ki nahi kartay 😆 Wese it isn't that neat and clean at night 😛 I think it's been months and i haven't been to beach because it remains so dirty.. yuck -,- ! though i live defence phase six, it's not too far from my place! But Suri you changed the whole beach.😉

LMAAO! Zaroon on diet 😛

ROFL! Water in dowryy 🤣
Yeap yeap! I noticed she didn't call him Zaroon Bhai 😉

The last paragraph was so beautifully written ❤️

Suri, this was an amazing update. ⭐️ I didn't know i'd enjoy reading it so much. You pen down everything so beautifully 👏 WOW! Arey ek kya, 2-3 aur parts karlo, no problem 😉😛

That billboard scene.. omg! that happens with me! once I was in my car with my family and there i saw Pyarey Afzal's board. I told my dad to stop the car , so that i could look at it properly and he was like... 'Hermain I'm not going to stop the car for your Hamzas and Fawads' 🤣

Uhmm. yes Burger Bachas. My school is filled with these burger bachas 😛 But i ain't one 😆😉Convent school ke saray bachay are like this 😛
Edited by -ZaYalicious- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#90

Originally posted by: mary78613

Oh wow! This is fab! 👏

Thank YOu so much!😳

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